Writing Feedback / The chart shows the employees of men and women in the nine type of jobs in the UK at 2005 [3]

The bar chart below shows the employment of all male and female workers by occupation in the UK, in the year 2005.

The bar chart illustrates about career of the employees by men and women with the nine type of job in the UK at 2005 and counted by percentage. The women had a first rank in the Administrative job. While the men prefer in the skilled trades.

The women was a lead the job at 22% in Administrative and secretarial, although the men more interested in the skilles trades. Subsequently, the women chose the associate professional and technical as the second favorit job at 15%. Followed by the men in manager and senior official at 18%.

The women had small trend to work in the skilled trades and process, plant and machine operatives at 3%. However, the men do not interested in the perrsonal service with similar level. In which the man uncomfortable work in the sales and officer with the figure at 5%.

Writing Feedback / NZ Shopping places such as shops and restaurants which entice customers in the four type of pleasure [2]

The tables and pie chart show in percentage terms of the results of a survey of a new shopping complex in Auckland, New Zealand.

The given table illustrates about the shopping place such as shops and restaurants render the customer in the four type of pleasure in Auckland, New Zealand and the pie charts shows about they more likely design of the complex from the avenue. The figure of the men a rank first of happy in the shops and restaurant than the women. While the both of gender enjoy through design in the locality

The majority of customer male have the big portion sense satisfied with the shops and restaurants than the female. While the men content in the restaurants than shops (55 vs 45). In which the different situation that the female more happy in shops as the choice compare with the restaurants at 34 and 27 repetitively

On the other hand, The pie charts tells that the whole client such as the male and female loving the design complex in the shops and restaurants at 62%. In which they sense more likely with design in the second position at 17%. Moreover, 11% the people do not have comment about the design

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK : Passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5. [2]

The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5.

The line graph illustrates about the majority of people travels with the railways in UK from 1950 to 2004/5 and counted by millions. The National network was a rank first as the favourite transportation. While the London Underground in the second choice for the people.

The National network had the top position in the similar pattern when it comes in 1958 and 2004/5 at 1,100. However, the London Underground reach the high value as the second choice at 900. It was the National rail network decrease since 1958 until 1983 to 600 and followed by London Underground had the lowest user at 500 in 1983.

On the other hand, the figure London Underground had the enhanced user such as 170 in the 2004/05. In which the National rail network change the improve customer around 100. It is since the rail network more populer in the human since 1950 and London Underground exist also more likely in the end year 2004/05.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1: Market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures presented in the table [3]

The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The telephone was a part important for communicating in the life. The given data showed that the produce kind of portable telephone for marketing share in the globally from 2005 to 2006. While Nokia is the highest market share in the two times report, the lower market share by BenQmobile.

The presented data, Nokia had the large portion in the world of market share rose gradually by 2.5% at 2006. In which Nokia had in the top level as the most greater market share both in 2005 and 2006. Subsequently, the small proportion market share such as LG and the least position by BenQmobile 2.4% at 2006.

On the other hand, several type of telephone increase between 2005 and 2006 such as Nokia, Motorola and Sony Ericson. Afterwards, the share market in three other types steadily decrease. Surprisingly, that Nokia more interesting than the whole type in the both of years.

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Writing Feedback / The natural water from rain is important for consuming by the myriad of people. How is it reused? [2]

The diagram presents that a several step connected with occurred recondition nature of water from the rain. Overall, it can be seen that the water from the rainy is important for consuming the myriad people. In addition, the climate as the special part at the moment good water is the resource in there.

A closer look at the process reveals that the water from the cloud is restored by the treatment plant. In the beside home, the process shows that the water for consumption of people saved in a tank. Subsequently, this flows water distribution in the whole resident area to variety functions.

The other stage when the water gets out through wastewater treatment plant and continue to excess treated water by the river. It is since the river as the center waterrain in the end step. Moreover, the environment helping the water to pure again in which it started again by the same process for the human consumption

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: People are just focused on technology and they abolishing the cultural identity [3]

As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon known as globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The trend of globalization become in the modern era since the majority of people supports this phenomenal as the consumptive people in the myriad sector such as technology and private transportation. While it is true that the people realization the individual characteristic to lost the ordinary identity , the several people argue that technology helps people in the myriad problem.

The people live without a care in the other society. It is the situation when they comfort in the individual life and sense happy to use the technology than join in the community. The people usually fulfilling their life with the private stuff so do not need the other people in the several situation. They think that the life is all about them in which they do not understand about socialization in the real life since the globalization influence their life. Moreover, they do not understand as the people of social such as help the other people, friendly and humanity.

There is the different era with efficient time to do anything. The real life after globalization since the technology help the whole people in the several sector. It is such as the smartphone when the majority of people connecting with the other for chit chat and easy to ask about anything without meet in directly time. The human can help many people through the technology since they get information from the internet and transfer the emergency money with the smartphone or faster to help the friend by the private car after communication with the applications. They safe much time to so anything in spite of daily routine

In conclusion, the different condition at the moment when the people just focus on technology and abolish the cultural identity, but the other think it has many functions. I believe that the technology is the best way for better life and good personality.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: Students living in the UK gaining teacher training qualifications in 2005/6 and 2006/7 [3]

The table below shows the number of students living in the UK gaining teacher training qualifications in 2005/6 and 2006/7, and the proportion of male qualifiers.
Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given table data illustrates that the situation when Initial Teacher Training (ITT) qualifications separate two kinds such as women and men when it enhanced since the numerous students living in the UK, include the percentage of male qualifiers at 2005/6 to 2006/7. While the female a first rank in part of total teaching qualification obtained, the male include part of presentation have the smaller portion in Bed & other degress.

The women had the big proportion in total teaching qualification obtained and had increased level between 2005/6 and 2006/7 at 23.865 and 24,335 repetitively although the men had the inverse trend in similar part. Subsequently, the male was the low to realize in part Bed & other degress at 1,125 in 2006/7.

The percentage of men had the highest position at 28,6% in 2005/6 as the part Total teaching qualification since in the next year this part and PGCE drop to be realization. The figure lead in part of total at 31,945 as the total teaching qualification obtained.

Writing Feedback / In the first stage of the black tea manufacture the farmers picking fresh tea leaves from fields [2]

The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature. and make the comparison where relevant.

The diagram illustrates two kind processes to produce of black tea. While the black tea results from a several step in one direction, the firing is the end system to lost the moisture.

In the first stage, the farmers picking fresh tea leaves when the good qualities become from only bud and two top leaves Afterwards, the withering process to leaves the whole on rack by 60% moisture out. The next process separate in traditional method to generate loose tea and modern method to create tea bags.

The traditional technique leaves rolled flat and broken with followed by the release of enzymes from them. To contrast, in the modern technique that leaves cut, torn, and curled to create the smaller granular pieces. Moreover, the both of process will be come in step of oxidation with the rolled leaves on tiles or cement, so that leaves change to copper colour by combining enzymes to air. In the final step, the crucial part in oven and get result by moisture out at 97% and the other side released flavour with aroma from them

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Writing Feedback / Study hard but don't forget to relax, becuase your brain needs rest to function properly at school [4]

In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?

The decrease of rest time for youngsters in the several countries when the children have the competition to study hard. While the youngster want to reach their dream such as the good exam, award from competition, continues study in college, the solution about the young people must be perfect to manage their time

The students have the clearly of purpose in the future. The children usually have the exam so they must prepare the ability to answer and they want to have the best result in the exam. Afterwards, it is the happy moment when the youngsters get the appreciation in which the science competition is difficult to win so they always study. Moreover, they want to continues their study and it is the perfect way to study hard in much time after school. The children consider that study knowledge is pivotal role to get the dream

There is also that the kids must recognize the efficiently in time to study. The crucial time when the students study hard but still have rest time. A 2016, the website UPI.COM tells that The brain's ability to recover from injury is remarkable, but it needs time and rest. The young people decides to keep their health with pleasure time. They separate the time as two part for studying and rest time.

In conclusion, the whole reason is the might to study hard but the young age must be the concern to arrange their time for resting time too. I believe that the children comfort to get pressure and study hard since their purpose in the life

Writing Feedback / While the benefits of media presence in a society is clearly, the failures also exist in technology [4]

It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society.

The modern era emerge the sophisticated technology . The media is one of part by technology which is the extendable to help the people in the life. While the benefits media society is clearly, the lack exist too in this technology

The media society have myriad function. It is the way to get new information in the world in which the society can access media online like newspaper or google and they have myriad science. Afterwards, the connectivity is the crucial of part for the human so that they usually use it without credit and help them to text messages or call telephone. It is the opportunity to use the media as the business online and then the people have ush money from this activites. The whole people decides to utilize the media in every moment

There are also the multimedia as the become more issue between the people. The wrong information widspread in a few website in which the people have wrong knowledge and do not finish their problem. Again, the situation in media will be complicated when they do not understand in the same meaning from the statement information. Moreover, the people addicted for every day to use the media and destroy they body since stay alone in room with the gadget. It is the danger situation for numerous people in the world when they use the media with spending much time.

In conclusion, the media society have many advantage for all activities, but the several moment still bring problem. I believe that the media society is the best technology in the life

Writing Feedback / Types of railway transportation used commonly in four countries in 2007. [3]

The table below gives the information about rail transport in four countries in 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparison where relevant.

The given table illustrates about kind of railway transportation in the four countries by three categorized at 2007. Overall, it was imperative that Japan had the first rank in numerous people used the rail and US is the best in cargoes carried than the other countries.

Initially, the majority of people in Japan was often to use the rail transport at 27% of the population, however 0.3% the society in USA had the small portion to choose this transportation. Subsequently, UK was the second highest position at 5.9% and followed by Italy in the level of 5.5%

Moreover, in the part of passenger kilometres per head, Japan standby was the top at 1,980 and inverse with USA at 80. In which, Italy and UK had the similar trend at 780 and 770 repetitively. Surprisingly, UK was the big proportion in the cargo carried by rail transport at 2,820 billions of tons, the others countries inverse

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Writing Feedback / People take some pictures using photo booths. Below is described how such machines works. [2]

The diagram below shows an automatic photo booth.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the new trend an automatic photo booth. Overall, It is imperative that the process who user use this machine. While the picture can modify by two kinds such as large format and passport-sized.

Firstly, the user enters the room and sit down in adjustable stool and start the machine by insert coin. In the area photo shoot, the mirror is one stuff exist to look face the user before to take a shoot. The crucial part is close the layer before taking the picture and already of all so that the user need to pull the rope in the lamp, wait for light single flash after 3 seconds and then recognized eye level.

Secondly, in the back of the machines is the generate of result the picture. It is available to choose the type a single photo or four passport-sized photos in a layer with colour or black & white. The pictures finish within 60 seconds

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: THE PEOPLE GET GOOD JOB BY EDUCATION [5]

Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work.How far do you agree or disagree with the above views?

In the modern area, the job vacancy having a high require qualification for the job seeker. The quality of education is the crucial part to get the perfect job while a several people argue that it is inverse and history job is the best good point .

The students continue their study after school in secondary high school to University. It shows that they learning the whole knowledge. A 2013, time.com told that the company considerable needs the worker by a fresh graduate from university with the ability the international language and computer skill. They have the high position in the occupation as the expectation with the high wage. They more likely learning in college to reach the dream of perfect job

The pivotal job needs the quality of experience as the professional worker. It is since the hard job as the top position has the detail to finish all of the duty. A 2013, economist.com witnessed that mechanic IT have myriad experience about technology and have lowest education. The young people tend to that work is the choice to get many experiences, they early to start their job . The high position also come by worker with myriad history job

In conclusion, the perfect job can be real if the children finish the study in college however, the background of job story still important. I believe that they get the best job when the people try and do not give up

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - Global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. [2]

The chart below gives the information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart illustrates about waiting people life and the widespread of prosperity in the different international states. It is imperative that the massive population than other countries, the generate as the richer countries in the first ranking is the North America.

It can undeniable, 23% is the top position of China with the large portion than the others in the a lot of society. It has contrast by the North America and Rich Asia-Pacific inverse with the China situation. Subsequently, the similar figures in India and Other Asia Pacific with the same population at the second and third position repetitively.

The kind of richer countries is the lead by North America at 33%. While Europe in the next large proportion and followed by Rich Asia-Pacific as the part of the high figures. Moreover, it has compared with all countries that India and Africa is the most poverty area

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2. The parents work to have the better income but do not support children [7]

In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give the reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The modern era shows the expensive price in any sector. The married people decides to work hard together and get much money. As such, it is true that the children more happy can buy anything whilst a several statement tells that the kids do not obtain the affection since their parents busy.

It is undeniable that the young children usually get numerous wealth. This circumstance occurred since they want to have the myriad stuff and follow the new trend. A 2015, The web site from theatlantic.com tells that the kids by the richer family have the myriad dream to be real. They enjoy to spending much money without to understand to save it.

The one of the advantage their parents render extra money as the rich family in which the way rejoice in the family to continues life. The different conditions of a quality time with family. The parents fulfilling busy with their job so that they do not care the whole about their children. A 2012, Professor Rohner say, the childhood will be the good and consistent effect on personality development since the bad situation. They consider their parents do not support in their life and just control in the several moment. It has been the kids less love from the family.

To sum up, the one of benefit is children enjoy their life with money although they do not share of the part with their parents since the both of them full work in out home. I believe that the married people concern to work however still to focus and keep communication with their sons

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: The rich and poor nations have the gap after that what the cause and solution the case [2]

The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before. What do you think are the main causes of this difference and what do you think can be done to reduce the gap?

Recent day, the high problem in several country is the disproportion poor people and the rich people in which it has been the extended issue. While, the government does not help the whole this situation, the human is the big part for control the different status. I believe the government and the society fulfilling to help the country as the problem solving.

The imbalance this situation between the richer and the poor people still developing until now. It is since the government does not concern in the one problem so that the poverty will be stuck in the life. In my experience that the government focus in the education the poverty but do not help the whole system knowledge the human live in there. The poor people just thinking to get the money. The gap has the big issue since government do not finish the deep problem

The society need to help the other people. It is the circumstance when the poor people do not have money for continues their life. Research by the American Psychological Association that Feeling good about spending money on someone else rather than for personal benefit may be a universal response among people in both impoverished countries and rich nations. The majority of people render a half of stuff or money and give knowledge about survive a life for poor people. Moreover, the live poor people will be better in the future

To sum up, the myriad problem about poverty yet finished all by the government but the human can help as the first way to poor people live with the good by share something.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: The advantages and disadvantages of such flights and the taxed more in the flights [3]

The world has been an enormous increase in flight for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights?. Do you think flights should be taxed more?

The alternative trip shows that air transportation rose gradually to use in the myriad destination of the world. While, the type of transportation airplane more faster to arrive in another place so the rule can change to enhance the tax, the another situation that the facilities not enough good for customer and contrast if the tax expensive. I believe the best situation when the system can improve tax with the great responsibility.

The technology of transportation renders easy way for making an excursion. There is an important part to help the myriad people with their purpose for meet someone or another purpose for working in there with faster. It is the real fact since the airplane flights in the air without traffic jam. In my experience, one year ago that I just need 30 minutes from my city to move to another city to meet my family in there. I prefer to choose this transportation since efficient of time. The best condition if the rule appropriates in the flexibility this transportation

The circumstance that the several stuff air transportation has problem. It has since technology still developed so that the aircraft some time ever crash in the road. In my country ever one of the accident airplane in Makasar city. The airplane lost contact so that the whole people died with destroyed the aircraft. The drawback air transportation needs to concern so that the part of tax more will be good choice for myriad people

The journey is the best to use air transportation when myriad people tend to fast destination so that airplane has many flights in all of the time schedule. I believe that the tax must be cheap for helping many people choose this transportation than the other choice

Writing Feedback / TASK 2 IELTS: The violent crime among youngsters since parents and teachers [3]

Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with this option?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The youth age tends to joint in criminalization by the new data release in which the statement from a psychologist that this impact becomes by parents and teacher do not take care the children. While, the whole activities kids have a connection in the home and school, but their friends more influence the habit in young people.

There is affair when the children every day school in the morning and come back to home. it is just regularity for studying to finish responsibility without the high concern in their attitude from parents and teacher. A 2014, by wesite Time.com that the kids spending much time in school and home so that they get the convention emotionality and sociality people by parents and teacher. The outcome of this is the children have arogan behaviour and often to come in severity activities.

There is also that the children still have myriad friends from neighbourhood and community. This circumstance shows that they follow the evil of trend from their friends. It is the experience from my friends when he have many friends and start coalesce guns group. The young people execute hardness activities with their group. friend is one of part to affect the regularly emotional yung people.

In conclusion, the children obtain caring about comporment from their teacher and parents when they still in activities at school or home but their friend most of the high make the bad behaviour for children following their activities. In my opinion, I think the children need to selectif for choosing the friend and the parents include teacher more attention for affair the children