Unanswered [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback [29604] - page 471 of 494

Writing Feedback

Research advice on TOEFL, SAT, IELTS, GRE and other academic essays (page 471)

Replies | Threads
Topic: Children engaging in paid work can have both negative and positive effects

5 - I can see how the prompt -- which itself blurs the distinction between child labor and youth employment --...

Writing Feedbackstranger1130 - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 21, 2009
TOEFL essay: Has easily-prepared-food improved the way people live?

7 - You don't need to address counterarguments in a TOEFL essay. In fact, you probably don't want to. You certainly...

Writing FeedbackLiwen - Aug 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 21, 2009
Criminal records, British and Australia laws - IELTS Essay

9 - Passive constructions use the object of an action as the sentence's grammatical subject, as oppose to the active voice,...

Writing Feedbackstealthreaction - Aug 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 21, 2009
IELTS Essay: Main purpose for Universities

4 - I agree with Simone. Especially the last sentence. It's confusing....

Writing Feedbackcxfcxh - Aug 18, 2009 / jyxff - Aug 21, 2009
Music helps people both personally and maintains the culture values of country

5 - Hi EF_Sean, GeneK, EF_Simone thank you much for your comments. I will incorporate your comments in my next essay....

Writing Feedbackprabudhakshin - Aug 20, 2009 / prabudhakshin - Aug 20, 2009
"Wise people appreciate the little things in life" - narrative essay

5 - Hi, I add some feeling here. please proofreading for my essay. Thank you!:)...

Writing Feedbackbal0601 - Aug 11, 2009 / bal0601 - Aug 20, 2009
"Actions speak louder than words" (do you agree or disagree with the statement)

8 - I'm not sure how I feel about that advice. I'd have to see the writing that provoked it...

Writing FeedbackJanie Tine - Jul 29, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
compare and contrast what conflicts the heroes have and how they face them

6 - Your task is to discover what they have to do with one another. Sean has offered a...

Writing Feedbackhollyn91 - Aug 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
Vice-President of Phi Theta Kappa; SERVE the underserved/Experiences

2 - No, the question is not the same. The second question is both more general and more specific, asking for...

Writing Feedbacksad_an6el - Aug 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
TOEFL; Television Versus Friends and family

13 - I would leave out some touchy subjects on terrorism...

Writing Feedbackdhanh90 - Aug 14, 2009 / sad_an6el - Aug 20, 2009
The proper use of public resource--GRE ISSUE Appreciate your advice

4 - I notice that you work implicitly within Maslow's hierarchy of needs, which asserts that people will not care about...

Writing FeedbackSuperkid - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
The benefit of a global university-- GRE topic, need help

6 - If you are worried about having enough time to say what you want to say in this...

Writing FeedbackSuperkid - Aug 18, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 19, 2009
English Aboriginal feature article.

3 - Even an editorial should probably be a bit more comprehensive and tightly reasoned. The Australian government should make it...

Writing FeedbackBillmc - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 19, 2009
"Memom, how did you draw this?" Topic of Choice Essay -- opinions and critiques

5 - As others have pointed out, you point isn't really clear here. You decided that you were interested in art...

Writing FeedbackMichelleHob - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 19, 2009
Formal educational credentials and hiring employees - GRE essay

5 - To improve your sentence by noticing that DON'T MISS WORDS, I believe your essay will be more attractive and...

Writing Feedbackwonglofu - Aug 11, 2009 / Superkid - Aug 19, 2009
Concept and story line good; I need help with correcting the grammar in my essay

4 - We patiently waited alongsideof many other excited spouses and parents. As the buses pulled up, everyone started cheering...

Writing Feedbackjenni929 - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 19, 2009
"pet proposes man disposes" - TOEFL: Should pets be treated as family members?

4 - I mean that pet is appealing and human like it. From what you said, I know I use wrong...

Writing Feedbackalwaysholly - Aug 12, 2009 / alwaysholly - Aug 18, 2009
What do you want most in a friend TOEFL

7 - got it. thank you so much! your examples are easy to understand ,and i learned not only the grammar...

Writing Feedbacktoefl7 - Aug 16, 2009 / sugarzhi - Aug 18, 2009
The Next Patient

7 - The air dances violently in the space between our stare. wow, definitely gave me goosebumps :o Awesome essay!...

Writing Feedbackjdharake - Aug 14, 2009 / CalLover - Aug 17, 2009
toefl: We live in a world of music - Why is it important to so many people?

13 - Thank you very much, sad_an6el. It sounds more detailed....

Writing FeedbackLiwen - Aug 16, 2009 / Liwen - Aug 17, 2009
parents and relatives make the decisions

3 - Whereas parents and relatives never do this? No parent has ever pressured his or her child to be,...

Writing Feedbacktoefl7 - Aug 17, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
GRE Essay on "skepticism in student's learning"

6 - Your essay mainly seems to be arguing in favor of the idea, rather than against it as your introduction...

Writing Feedbacknatz - Aug 9, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
"Questioning authority" - GRE topic.

4 - You need to elaborate more on your examples. At the moment, you are not using them to actually prove...

Writing FeedbackKahollavan81 - Aug 16, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
Travel Versus Saving Money (IELTS test prep essay)

4 - Thanks guys for the corrections....

Writing Feedbackorlando - Aug 16, 2009 / orlando - Aug 16, 2009
"Justice can only exist when people obey laws that are not to their liking."

3 - Simone is right -- you need to start by defining what you mean by "justice". Virtually any definition you...

Writing FeedbackKahollavan81 - Aug 12, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 16, 2009
We are blessed with modern tools; Modern technology

8 - I have checked : be aware of is correct :)...

Writing Feedbackrosamond00 - Aug 7, 2009 / arsdtbk - Aug 16, 2009
Frankenstein Essay: Critiques?

3 - A thesis needs to be debatable. Your isn't. Say something about the message of the book, preferably something that...

Writing Feedbackkenziii - Aug 14, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 15, 2009
Essay about important characteristics of a co-worker.

5 - ok, right, when I compare with the past, this characteristic is as vital as now. thanks...

Writing Feedbackarsdtbk - Aug 13, 2009 / arsdtbk - Aug 14, 2009
"Running away"; "I'm sorry for all that is happening, but..." - rate my essay

7 - You need to clarify much more. The entire work is interesting but makes very little sense and threatens to...

Writing Feedbackkennethfatty - Jul 29, 2009 / kenziii - Aug 14, 2009
Our lives abound with examples of the importance of remaining creative

4 - Give the reader some examples about creativity in the modern world.....

Writing FeedbackDiddy - Aug 3, 2009 / kenziii - Aug 14, 2009
"the personal consumption of butter" - IELTS task 1 Homework 1

2 - This graph shows the personal consumption (in grams) of butter, margarine and low-fat or reduced-fat spreads per week [omit...

Writing FeedbackAnne25 - Aug 12, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 12, 2009
Gay Marriage: Is It Right?

13 - Note: I deleted John6503's comment to which Llamapoop123 is responding, because it ran afoul of our guidelines prohibiting postings...

Writing Feedbackladiired3 - Aug 4, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 12, 2009
"Goods And Service Tax At All India Level"- how 2 improve this article

5 - Yeah, this is really a good idea. Thnx Simone...

Writing Feedbackescritor - Aug 10, 2009 / escritor - Aug 12, 2009
"About a time when you thought an experience would take place in certain way"

3 - This is essay drags on a little. The lesson learned not really something that would effect your character or...

Writing Feedbackpresario32 - Aug 11, 2009 / Llamapoop123 - Aug 11, 2009
"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value"

3 - What confuses me is why your friend agreed to have YOU post HIS essay. Why could he not do...

Writing Feedbackmathsam - Aug 10, 2009 / Llamapoop123 - Aug 10, 2009
Results of publicly funded scientific studies for free -help for GRE issue essay

4 - Ah, sorry I missed that. Well, then, I'd say that the essay is OK but not spectacular. For...

Writing FeedbackUlribe - Aug 10, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 10, 2009
Personal Essay - Travels; I have inherited my mother's wanderlust

4 - I love experiencing the magic and draw of various cultures, each with their own flavor and distinctions which seizes...

Writing Feedbacksarahstu - Aug 9, 2009 / Liebe - Aug 10, 2009
Summary-Response Essay - Celebrating Nerdiness by Tom rogers

5 - Your summary is okay. Your thesis should probably include a summary of the reasons why you agree with...

Writing Feedbackkingdomcome - Aug 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 9, 2009
"hard work leads you to success in your life" - need help in correcting my essay

5 - Your logic here isn't very tight. Overwhelming evidence suggests that hard work is in fact the key to...

Writing Feedbackpelaru - Aug 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 9, 2009
"Saying Goodbye"

4 - Thanks a lot for the help. I always have a problem with tenses. I'll try to take note of...

Writing FeedbackFearlessDare - Aug 2, 2009 / FearlessDare - Aug 8, 2009
Classification and Divison Essay on different "sources of energy."

6 - Natural fossil fuels, yes. Biofuels are universally considered renewable, as you point out. So, if petroleum becomes a biofuel...

Writing FeedbackReborn - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 8, 2009
Causes and Solutions for increasing traffic congestion

6 - I'm sorry, but we cannot tell you what your score might be as we are not trained IELTS scorers....

Writing Feedbackrosamond00 - Jul 30, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
For Eng 121 class: Use of critical thinking using Mary Postgate and Yellow Wall

5 - Also take out all of the "I assumes" and other I statements....

Writing Feedbackbiggestv - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
Looking for a review of My Philosophy Paper

12 - I agree with that advice in general. Good writers say what they have to say rather than telling...

Writing FeedbackAli MacLennan - Aug 2, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
Getting up early and starting day's work in the morning should always be preferred by people

4 - You need to attend to basics. For example, you must place a space after punctuation marks, as I have...

Writing Feedbackmansten - Aug 7, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
Originality and thinking - GRE Issue No:2.

5 - You disagree with the notion of originality? How so?...

Writing Feedbackdesigningsally - Aug 1, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
Archie isn't just a typical guy I've encountered in my life! - Unforgettable person

4 - Every one of us has met someone in our lives who may or may not have impacted our lives...

Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 1, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
Dangerous sports and activities - for fun, money, or for nothing

11 - It's not so much that it sounds weird as that nobody knows it. This is a dictionary word that...

Writing Feedbacksugarzhi - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
Saving money for future is more useful than spending on travel.

2 - Is that true? How do you know? Students often start essays with an assertion that whatever they are...

Writing Feedbackgh52km42 - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
Essay on Urbanisation

2 - For what purpose did you write this essay? I see you've got it posted under undergraduate admissions essays, but...

Writing Feedbackkillerwind - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
Colleges for gain knowledge, new experience & prepare for future career - TOEFL

11 - Indeed. And, in literature as opposed to workaday prose, ornate sentences are still acceptable. (David Foster Wallace, anyone?)...

Writing Feedbackstardust - Jul 31, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
To be elected as the country's president gives prestige and honor.

2 - Do you know Corazon Aquino? If so, you must say how you know her. If not, then you have...

Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 4, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
Cbest - Back to Basics

2 - One strength of this essay is your use of supporting evidence. However, you will need to work on your...

Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
'Harmful effects on our environment' - Benefits and Drawbacks of Urbanisation

10 - Thank you Notoman, Sean, it definitely quenched my curiousity^^ I'll practice hard, and thanks for the website !!...

Writing FeedbackHarryK - Aug 2, 2009 / HarryK - Aug 4, 2009
Bringing emotion - television has destroyed communication among close people?

3 - Overall, quite good just little things i noticed. "According to the survey" -I think it would sound...

Writing Feedbackmomotou007 - Jul 30, 2009 / et_350 - Aug 4, 2009
"A government's role" - academic writing test IELTS to be correct

8 - You should always say what you are going to talk about in your introduction. That's what makes it...

Writing FeedbackPinklemon - Jul 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 4, 2009
"Who made history"--A difficult GRE Issue topic

9 - Private Joseph Martin kept a diary during the Revolutionary War. His detailed writings prove to be an invaluable...

Writing Feedbackmathsam - Jul 31, 2009 / Notoman - Aug 3, 2009
I closed my eyes and started the chanting!; The moment of the Lords.

11 - How does the speaker know how s/he sounded to others?...

Writing Feedbackmbjaya999 - Jul 31, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 3, 2009
Not eveything that is learned is contained in the books

20 - Very practical of you to give yourself another month. But, since your problem, in particular, has been thinking of...

Writing Feedbackorlando - Jul 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 3, 2009
If people want to have a good future they should have a careful plan

2 - I understand the reason for the meditation on religion with which you preface this essay, but I feel that...

Writing Feedbacktimmytos - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 3, 2009

Home / Writing Feedback

ⓘ Need academic writing help? 100% custom and human!
✖
Fill out one of these forms for professional help:

Best Writing Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳