Writing Feedback / The proportion of government's money used for roads and transport in Italy, Portugal, UK and USA [2]


The examiner will be looking for the specific chart name/ identifier that will differentiate it from the other types. Familiarize yourself with the image types used to help you better meet the task summary requirements.

Please use at least 2 sentences in the summary overview. Seperate the image identifier and short form data from the inclusive year reference. Avoid single sentence presentations that will result in a GRA deduction.


The data is not a trending statement but a report paragraph. The tend should only report on the highest and lowest points, without any measurement reference.

The writer is prone to compressed data presentations. The reporting paragraphs are difficult to follow due to the run-on presentations. The paragraphs lack clear analysis points because of the improper sentence formats.

Writing Feedback / Peers have more of an impact on students than teachers do? [2]

The essay is only 202 words long. This would normally be an automatic failing score but since the scoring consideration changes new implemented, TA percentage deductions will apply instead. Regardless, the preliminary deductions applied will cause a failing score. That is, even after scores are awarded for the remaining criteria.



These are conjunctions used to connect ideas within a sentence. It can only be used after an idea has been presented. This is the main reason why you cannot use it to start a sentence. The grammar structure becomes incorrect. The sentence structure would have gotten a better score if you had started with "I" instead.

Writing Feedback / An alarming deficiency of basic life skills among high school students. To what extent do you agree [2]


This is not orginally stated as an assumption. This is a statement of fact. Do not alter the original point of view as it changes the overall prompt meaning or discussion target.


The thesis statement must be accompanied by the presentation of 2 topic anchors for the reasoning paragraphs. The restatement f opinion presentation is incomplete/ only partly complete.


This is an improperly structured phrase. A more appropriate presentation would be, " want to study at university". Word exaggerations such as "virtually", when improperly referenced causes confusion for the reader.


The presentation does not connect to either reasons presented. As this is being presented as an example , it must be merged into one of thez discussion points. Right now, it will just lower your score because it is an underdeveloped paragraph presentation.

The conclusion will not recieve a passing score as it is less than 10 words and does not sum up the discussion in the required format.

Writing Feedback / In some cities, the government try to reduce traffic by imposing congestion tax during rush hours [3]


There is no need to add this memorized please to the sentence. It makes the sentence definitely sound ESL and kind of weakens the grammar range in terms of sentence structure and writing control. Avoid memorized please use in your essays going forward. Those are definitely score lowering references.


You cannot suppose. When you suppose, you ask the reader to consider (something) as a possibility suggested or an idea or plan proposed. while you might refer to this as a point of arguement, the score you recieve in a task 2 essay is based on the validity and clarity of your opinion. The use of this word instead indicates uncertainty thus negating your originally stated opinion.


The instruction does not include the presentation of a possible solution. Adding unnecessary discussion points, specially in the concluding summary will cause additional deductions to the score. By the way, you forgot to include the topic replacement before the reasoning summary.

Writing Feedback / Petrol and Oil - Writing task 1 : Line Graph. [2]


This is not a proper English word. It does not exist in any English dictionary version. Believe me, I checked. The word that does exist, is predictions. I believe that is the word you wanted to use. Do not makeup terms if you do not know what the actual term is. That will result in a double score deduction for you.


You cannot use a present tense time reference for 2030. That has yet to happen. The appropriate time reference would be connected to future tense usage.

The writer must improve in 2 scoring aspects, wordusage and grammar range. Both can be improved by -exposure to more and varied English reading materials, sentence, and word choice exercises.

Writing Feedback / The proportion of three types of businesses access to social media for commerce benefit [2]


Refer to the business types directly as a part of the short form report. You have to do that because a specific business type in the trending reference.


There are several types of charts for task 1. This is why a general chart reference cannot be used. The specific image type is necessary for task accuracy.

The first analytical paragraph is well executed. it perfectly compares the first 2 businesses. That is, as far as I can tell since you did not upload an image for my reference. I am going to have to take your word for it.

The last paragraph is too brief. The analysis has expansion oom that would have helped further strengthen the analysis to the point of the previous paragraph.

Writing Feedback / The map illustrates the process of producing chocolate (there are ten steps) [2]



This is an incorrect image reference. A map is not used in this presentation. An illustrative diagram or diagram would be the most appropriate reference. A map refers to a representation, usually on a flat surface, as of the features of an area of the earth or a portion of the heavens, showing them in their respective forms, sizes, and relationships according to some convention of representation. Based on the definition, you can see why markdowns will apply to specific aspects of your score.


Incorrect word usage again. The trees are planted . Not plan. A plan refers to a scheme or method of acting, doing, proceeding, making, etc., developed in advance.


Crushes? This does not sound right. The procedure indicates that the beans are crushed. This incorrect reference will be marked down for confusing the reader.

Basically, the essay will fail lbased on LR and GRA mistakes that are prevalent in the presentation.

Writing Feedback / Essay about sharing information in my sectors [2]


This makes the original topic vague in your restatement. Such a general reference will be marked as an inaccurate representation as synonyms, as relevant to the LR and GRA scores were not used.


This comes across more as a personal opinion than a general discussion Remember to use third person pronouns next time to meet the response format guidelines.


This is an example of a uniquely worded third person reference. Good job. It clearly indicates this is not your opinion but rather, a public one.


This is more of a conclusion paragraph reference. It would be better if you do not use it as a personal opinion starter. Simply say" my opinion" or a variation thereof to start it.

Scholarship / I want to embrace my potential - my Chevening Essay (Leadership and Influence) [4]

This is not a national leadership and influencing essay. This qualifies more as a personal statement of the most basic kind instead. It fails to provide an emerging leadership discussion even though you gave an acceptable definition of a leader. The keyword here is "emerging national leader". Now, while this information may work for a basic MA application, it does not meet the exacting standards of chevening due to the obvious lack of national or professional leadership experience.

These traits cannot be seen from these basic representations as your efforts lack the proper impact within your profession. I am sad to say that you do not qualify for the program based on what you have written here.

Scholarship / Chevening - Study in the UK - three university choices; LSE, QMUL, and Goldsmiths [4]


A total waste of word count. There is no need to discuss the governmental score, ranking, or anything else of the UK as there are not unknown to the reviewer. Rather than lecturing the reviewer, discuss your motivation or purpose for wishing to study in the UK instead.



Do not make demands that you know the reviewer cannot assure you of. This is a form of personal will dictation that will not be well accepted by the reviewer. You take what Chevening and the university, if you are accepted, provides you with. Either rephrase there to soundless like demands or delete these references.


Refer to specifics of this program as lack university discussion is made to create the future application.

Writing Feedback / The percentages of residents for various ways of drinking coffee and tea in five Australian cities [3]


Yes, there are 5 Australian cities in the chart. Why was no listing for these indicated? The cities were individually listed in the chart, therofere the list must be included to indicate the comparison source points. The summary information is incomplete without it. The trending statement makes little sense without the prior listing.

The overall report is pretty much straight forward and simply delivers the data provided. The comparison point analysis is what was skipped. Next time look for equal lines in the image. Use these to follow the bar graph. This will allow you to see where equal points the such as for people who went to Melbourne and Hobart for coffee during the month.

Writing Feedback / Ielts - The chart gives information about water use by sector in Brazil and Congo [3]

The summary is not a complete overview of the image. Only one of the 2 image types has been described. While only water consumption in 2 countries was given a short form statement. The second image representation is not touched on at all. It was not even part of the trending paragraph. Yet, It is included as a reference in the discussion paragraphs.

The writer has confused the image presentations in the whole essay. This creates a confusing and improper report. Due to the lack of analysis seperation, the essay does not deliver an accurate assessment of the data.

The 2 reporting paragraphs must represent one image each . The individual report is what creates an understandable analysis. The lack of which will lead this essay to fail.

Scholarship / I need help for my essay for scholarship in accounting qualification - ACCA FIA (max 400 words) [3]

As you did not include the discussion requirements, I am not sure if this essay is presented in the correct structure or not. The discussion about your character in relation to your interest in accounting should have some sort of connection and /or reflection. There should be a seamless blending of the 2 discussion points.This essay is rather abrupt without any topic transition present.

Both discussion points are generic in structure. There is no reference to any stand out personal background or choice of ACCA. Depending on the allowable word count, the student should either increase the developmentof the presentation or, write a new, more interesting and informative statement. Right now, there is no reason for the receiver to be interested in your application or in you as a candidate.

Writing Feedback / A punishment is believed to be the best way to help children to distinguish right from wrong [3]


To what extent? Never provide the reason for your opinion without the appropriate response format. The correct response format comes before the reason.


How can the parents and teachers do this? The question was "What sort of punishment." Provide the example focus a part of the response for discussion outline clarity.

The reasoning paragraph as to why you agree with punishment is well thought out and developed. However, the same cannot be said for the type of punishment paragraph. It contradicts your agreement with punishment as a way of disciplining a child.

You said that a way of making a child disciplined is by making them take responsibility for their actions. That is not a punishment but it is a form of discipline. A punishment is: a penalty inflicted for an offense, fault. Your presentation does not inflict a penalty but rather explains the offense to the child. A punishment would be:

no cellphone for a month
No Netflix for 6 mos.
No videogames for a week
No dessert after a meal
Spanking
A time- out

or something similar. These would have been better punishment methods to support your " responsibility lesson. It would show that doing the wrong thing has repercussions.

Graduate / Review My SOP for PhD in Nuclear thermal hydraulics [2]


How and why? How does this relate to your interest in CFD ? Every exposure needs to relate to your current interest. Your professional background and previous master's reference needs strong details that will lend support to the current career path you want to take. The essay is taking too long to get to your main focus. That is different from the motivational paragraph at the start, introduction.


relate this discovery tothe purpose of your study. Do you believe this will have a real world relevance /application? What sort?


Will you be continuing this research? Why? How?


Reposition this to relate to your previous thesis. Bring it up to the related paragraph.

Undergraduate / Personal Statement about suitability of being part of Glocal:Erasmus Mundus Global Political Economy [2]


Before discussing your career path, consider your academic background first. There is no connection between your Social Work degree and the program you have chosen. Relate your previous education as it applies to this course qualifications for its students first. A simple interest is not enough. You have to show an Economics background or political science course, even an international relations degree to qualify your academic foundation.


True, but how does it relate to the course choice? Your foundation ranges from weak to non-existent.


This is the part of the scholarship consideration that automatically disqualifies you. There is no reference to this due to your unrelated course background.I do not see how you can make this connection based solely on aspirations and ambitions. None of your academic and professional background apply. Change your track to one that relates to your actual foundation.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task2 Two Views discussion about talents and hard work (250 words) [3]


This is a clear misrepresentation and misunderstanding of the prompt. The belief is that it is wither an inborn or developed talent. Neither discussion has been correctly restated in this presentation. It is a failed interpretation of the topic and reasoning presentation. Markdown #1.


Unsuitable opinion response due to a mistaken understanding of the original topic. It is nota discussion about talent suitability but rather how one acquires the talent. Markdown #2.

While the task interpretation is incorrect, the reasoning discussions are applicable to the original concept. This leads me to wonder how the restatement aspect happened to be incorrect? The 2 discussion paragraphs are well developed on the public opinion front. Well developed and explained. The problem, is the lack of personal opinion development. Missing from this essay is the personal opinion paragraph. Markdown # 3.

The concluding paragraph fails to meet the 40 word, 2 sentence minimum requirement. Markdown #4.

The essay might recieve a very low passing score due to the significant errors presented. Incorrect interpretations and missing paragraphs are its main issues.

Scholarship / Study in UK - I decided to take three different courses in business; essay for Chevening [2]

One of the major requirements of this essay is the undergraduate degree explanation. There must bean explanation of how your educational foundation lends itself to your course choices. How did the previous courses you studied relate to the cause you have chosen.so, this discussion comes in 2 parts . The general paragraph reference and the individual course references. The individual aspect should accompany the university and masters course choices.

After the academic discussion, your work preparation as it relates should also be discussed as qualifiers. That means, relevant work exposure as it applies to the course choice should help show educational progression. Present it per university and course as well. Do that prior to explaining the future course application within your workplace.

Writing Feedback / Ads lead people to make unnecessary purchases or they just introduce new products to customers [3]

The writer has not even made an effort to understand the discussion topics as these relate to the prompt question. Hence, he failed to provide an appropriate prompt restatement and opinion response. What happened was he created his own topic and discussion method based solely on a poor understanding of the prompt topic. The discussion instruction was not considered at all. The question was, "which viewpoint do you agree with?". A clear single opinion essay based on a clear opinion choice.

His interpretation response was,


A response that is reserved only for extent essays. Therefore, the prompt deviation that will result in an unrelated response is clear to the examiner. The task accuracy score will be failing.

The student will not pass the test due to the incorrect response presentation, regardless of the minor scores that will be awarded to other sections. The score will not be zero, but it won't be passing either.

Honestly, the writer's English comprehension skills need to be properly developed. At this point that most important scoring aspect is his biggest problem. Rather than Task 2 essays, he should write about general essay topics until his understanding skills improve. Only after that should he even try to with task 2 essays. Learn to understand and write as per English instructions first.

Writing Feedback / Education: which subject deserves more attention History or Science & Technology in school? [2]


This is an incorrect reference. The overall opinion will be coming from you, as the writer. Reference yourself as the source of the final opinion next time.That way, the discussion flow will be clearer to the reader.


No. Words that do not offer a solid discussion opinion will score down the essay. Additionally, you are discussing based on your personal , rather than presenting a comparative public opinion presentation. Score markdown # 1 and 2.



This essay does not have a proper summary conclusion. When you refer to a conclusion, you must not include a personal opinion. That is because the concluding paragraph does not allow for a continued discussion presentation. That will never pass for a properly formatted closing statement. Score markdown #3.

Scholarship / To act towards a common goal. Chevening - Leadership Journey Essay [2]

This is a very inferior and non-qualifying leadership essay. Itis weak in the sense that the background does not allow the applicant to be seen as an emerging national leader in the country. This is an entry level presentation. It is nowhere near the leadership qualification representation requirement. It cannot compete with the far more qualified candidates applying for the program. consider your current work title, duties, and responsibilities. Was there ever any actual point where you were placed in a leadership position. Being a management trainee does not count. It isn't even an official office position. There is no chance of revising this essay. The only thing that will work, is to write a true profession related leadership description essay.

Writing Feedback / The number of people who usually travel by underground station in London from 6.00 to 22.00 per day [4]

The writer has done his best to create an understandable report based on the chart presented. Information is accurate for the most part. However, the sentence structures are more often than not, difficult to understand. The problem lies in the inaccurate grammar use of the presentation. The writer tends to deliver the explanations in confusing manners. This is because he lacks the ability to control the way he develops his thought process. There is a disconnection between the thinking in English and writing in English process. The writer should engage in more sentence development exercises. He has the potential to score well. Right now, his errors affect the C + C and GRA sections in a negative way. Keep practicing. You will eventually overcome the current writing problem.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 Some people think people working in creative arts should be financially support [3]


There is no need to repeat the discussion instructions. This was already established in the prompt restatement. Only your personal opinion presentation is needed at this point. This should be a 2 sentence direct representation of the original. However, this presentation is still acceptable and will be awarded points. It is good enough, but could have been better. # Median score


This word does not exist in the English language. Perhaps you meant to say "Vice-versa" meaning in reverse order from the way something has been stated; the other way around ? Regardless, the first word does not exist and the word suggestion would have been an improperly used word. Score markdown #1.


What? The presentation is incomplete. There is no logic or coherence present. Score markdown #2.

Where is the personal opinion paragraph? The 3rd reasoning presentation. That cannot be used as a concluding statement. Score markdown #3.

There is no closing paragraph. The writer will lose more points. There are severe deductions that will adversely affect the score.

Writing Feedback / ielts writing task 2 Should the Government tax fast food heavily [2]


Taxes should be in singular form (tax) since there is only one type being considered.


Before the discussion reason, respond to the question first. Responding to the question is a primary scoring consideration, regardless of the reasoning presentation. Without the direct answer, the response presentation is incomplete.

The discussion format used is not the correct one. Note that you were asked to give a singular direct response to the question. The examiner will assess your ability to follow discussion instructions and properly defend your opinion over 2 paragraphs. It is a singular opinion presentation, not a comparative consideration. So, based on this 4 paragraph presentation, the reviewer will only score 3 out of 4 paragraphs, thereby lessening the chances for a higher scoring presentation. If a paragraph does not support your opinion, it will not be part of the shared scoring credits.

Writing Feedback / Replacing old buildings by new ones. [2]


Your ersonal opinion is not a required part of this discussion and should not be part of the restatement. The only requirement of this discussion is for you, as the writer, to discuss the two points of view. Your opinion should not be presented as an influencing factor of the discussion. Do not present an opinion when not asked to do so. This will result in a prompt alteration that will lower your accuracy score.

You have altered the discussion format from a general comparative presentation to a personal opinion consideration. You have not followed the response format from the very start. J am not confident that this will be a passing score presentation because of the altered task presentation

Writing Feedback / Playing games teach you about life [3]

The writer must remember that there are a number of reference options to the word game. The word could refer to board games, street games, intellectual gamest, to name but a few types. That is why, for clarity purposes, he must attach an identifier to the word game. Refer to it as video, cyber, virtual, or digital These are some alternative identifiers for the video game reference in the ouginal. Such varied references will help the vocabulary score of the writer.


This perfectly sums up the writers opinion. Then, the reasoning problem presents itself.



These are the problem reasons with the essay. It creates a dual supporting discussion where a single supporting discussion is needed. Do not defend both sides. Use 2 reasons to convince the examiner that your opinion is the only correct one. This essay has failed to do that. It also lacks punctuation marks in a few sentences.

Writing Feedback / Ielts essay: In the modern society, children are less reliant on their parents (250 words) [3]


Incorrect topic restatement. The orginal point was that children are less reliant on their parents to learn about the world these days. Score markdown # 1.


Incorrect opinion response. While the belief is an acceptable discussion foundation, it was not formatted as an extent response. Score markdown # 2.


The example is incomplete in terms of discussion development. A few sentences about how children learn to do chores through other channels would have better supported this paragraph. Midline score basis.


This is an unnecessary and unrelated paragraph as it changes the required discussion aspect. Score markdown # 3.


The conclusion lacks the original topic presentation, writer's reasoning, and proper closing sentence. All of these should have been presented starting at a minimum of 40 words. Score markdown # 4.

Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 2: Companies use different way to increase sales. [2]

The student takes on the prompt restatement in a very complex manner. Not to say that it is not effective but, it takes too long toget to the point. The task 2 essay scores better when the discussion is dealt with in a duect, conversational tone.This is not a vocabulary exercise. It isa test of comprehension and logic in the English language. The opinion statement is also a problem as it does not respond to the given questions. Instead, it alters the prompt discussion focus. This makes the restatement + opinion unrelated to the orginal discussion. It is a failure.

Topic Question Guide: What different ways do companies use to increase sales? What is the most effective one?
Response: No matter what sale strategies each company are applying, they are aiming at the similar target, for the increase in revenues.

The discussion just goes downhill to a failing score from therear the writer continued to disregard the discussion questions. The writer shows an inability to follow instructions and respond clearly to the instructions by choosing one most effective marketing method. Though the writer sees the response as correct, it is actually an incorrect discussion deviation.

Writing Feedback / Task 1: The table compares the number of travellers to five different countries and their spendings [2]


This essay will automatically fail. The required and most important paragraph, the summary overview, is missing from the presentation. It went directly to the trending statement. So the essay is incomplete as the presentation development as required was not met. Only a partial, non-passing score can be applied to the topic accuracy/interpretation.

The overall analysis also tends to be incomplete and insufficiently analyzed. There is clear evidence that the writer did not take the time to study, assess, and analyze the data in a manner expected of a Task 1 essay. It will not pass the test.

It is unfortunate that the writer thinks he has the ability to review and advice other students here as if he knows what he is talking about, when he fails to spot and correct errors in his own work. Don't give advice since you will most likely lead other students here to fail their own tests. Give advice only if you do not need any one else's advice anymore.

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2: Many developing countries are currently expanding their tourism industries. [2]

The discussion approach does not meet the prompt requirements. The discussion restatement is unrelated to the orginal topic:

Original: Many developing countries are currently expanding their tourism industries.
Restatement: ...investment in tourism industries plays as a vital role in some developing countries.

The orginal is about tourism expansion. The writer misinterpreted the focus the relevance of tourism investment. This is an automatic failing paragraph as it does not reflect any aspect of the original topic. The writer also does not produce a clear opinion based on the single point of view requirement. The essay has already failed a major part of the test at this point. It is highly possible that the writer cannot garner enough passing scores in the remaining sections to pass the test.

Writing Feedback / Challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well [2]


Try to give direct responses to these questions as these will be the scoring basis for your opinion score. Where a yes or no question does not exist in the original instructions, direct topic responses are required in in place. Not directly answering lowers your task score.


You forgot to insect the keyword "problem" as it relates to the topic sentence focus. The reader needs to know hour this is connected and relevant to the discussion.


Vocabulary error. Either rebuild or rebuilt would have been the proper keyword, depending on the sentence structure.


It is not a big thing but a predicament or dilemma. Word replacements for "problem".

There is no summary conclusion in the presentation. The last paragraph opened a new discussion like instead. Open ended essay presentations normally recieve a negative score.

Undergraduate / I chose Information Engg Course at Ritsumeikan because.. of opportunities [2]

The discussion paragraphs are disconnected. Logical development and connection between paragraph ideas are necessary to properly answer the question. The fish story should be followed by the current last paragraph since the reference points connect the 2 paragraphs. The last paragraph needs to be changed though as it is empty of valid reason on a personal scale. The information is only based on general research, failing to create a convincing motivation paragraph for the university choice reasons. Such reasons should also tie in with the development of the writers interest in computer coding. How will the university support this interest? What social reasons influenced the choice ?

Writing Feedback / Young students are obliged to study overseas languages in most schools [2]

The prompt paraphrase is nowhere near the original discussion topic. The issue is whether students should be pressured or forced to learn a foreign language in school. It is not debating if foreign languages should be studied, which is what your paraphrase implies. There is also the incorrect discussion response being provided. There is no direct answer to the "extent" even as a discussion reason was provided. Answer the question frist then give the reason for it. Presenting your response otherwise will result in a failing task score based on a non-connected or irrelevant response.

A strong focus on vocabulary has made the essay difficult to understand. Rather than having the required everyday conversational tone, the paper has a confusing academic tone to it. The confusion stems from the misuse of advanced English words in the presentation. The focus of the reader goes from the topic to word meaning instead. This distraction is a GRA failure based on undue reader stress.

Undergraduate / Debating challenge - How did it affect you (COMMONAPP) [2]

The discussion should represent both sides of the story. Surely you were told the reason why you were being removed from the team. Provide that reason and then, discuss how the reasons and your removal affected you. At this point, the topic is not completely developed and informative. Youreaction should relate to how you used their observations to better yourself and develop your character. Explain how you turned the negative into a positive. The presentation shows how you dove into new extra-curricular activities without acknowledging how the lessons from your team removal opened these paths. There is a lack of new character development in the story. While your activities opened you to more academic and extra curricular pursuits, you have to prove you learned lessons from the experience of getting removed from the debate team.

Writing Feedback / The statistics regarding purchased tickets for cinema, concert and theatre [3]


This is a topic usrelated to the first image. It must be presented as a seperate sentence so as not to confuse the first image representation. This is a confusing sentence that will recieve grammar deductions due to a confusing statement presentation. This is a severe error that continues in the the trending statement / paragraph. I am afraid this will be a major concern during the actual test and lead to a failing final score.

The writer has made a clear effort to present a professional report. This will not be lost on the examiner. However, the lack of clear reporting style is what will weigh heavily on the final scoring considerations.

Writing Feedback / The causes of teenage drug abuse [2]


You cannot use this phrase when enumerating several other related outcomes. This phrase only applies to single reference points.


Incorrect. Adolescence comes in 2 phases. Early. adolescence is from 10-14 years and middle adolescence is from 15- 17. Young adurhood follows after that. Correct the reference.


Why? The reference must be better developed to bring authority to the writer's claims.


How does this relate to the power and confidence discussion? Relate the paragraphs.


Why? The writer is consistently presenting little to unsupported reasons. Each reason must come with a fully developed explanation.


This is the most undeveloped and senseless paragraph in the whole essay. You know how to fix it.

Writing Feedback / In some countries, celebrities earn higher salaries than senior politicians. What are the reasons? [2]


Word choice error leading to a lowered vocabulary score. The correct term is athletes. An athlete is a person trained or gifted in exercises or contests involving physical agility, stamina, or strength; a participant in a sport, exercise, or game requiring physical skill. While athletics refers to sports, as running, rowing, or boxing, or track and field.


Ellipses, as a punctuation mark is not used in academic writing. Use of this indicates an omission normally present in informal writing. This will lower the grammar accuracy of the presentation.


word use error again. The celebrities recieve donations that add to their income. The student must improve his English language vocabulary with a focus on meaning and proper usage in sentences.


Why are you discussing consequences when the prompt only asks for reasons? Adding non prompt related discussions will result in a failing score due to an improperly developed discussion presentation.

The summary conclusion does not reflect the previous discussion as required. Most of the reduced points will be in the IR section.

Writing Feedback / Ielts writing task2 about environment evaluation [3]


Review the original prompt topic. Nowhere in the presentation are you being asked if the topic is true or false. Do not change the topic presentation by adding a personal . to it. This will be seen as a prompt deviation and will score down the paragraph due to restatement inaccuracy.

Good work on the reasoning paragraphs. These are all sensible and publicly supported opinions. The examples provided are relevant and the connectivity of the discussion paragraphs are clear to the reader.

More work is needed on the concluding summary though. A rvin. on sentence was used in the presentation. The paragraph format requires 3-5 sentences, or at least 40 words in 2 sentences. This requirement is used for proper reverse paraphrasing and clarity of reasoning summary presentation.

Writing Feedback / Taking advantage of the modern technology for the better life [3]


The discussion question is, "To what extent do you agree or disagree?" not, "Is the statement somewhat true and why?" The response you have provided may seem to align with the prompt question but, it actually does not. You have to first, respond to the prompt based on the prescribed format (extent) and second, provide the reason for your opinion (thesis statement). What you provided regarding the far reaching benefits would have been the perfect discussion reason to support the opinion response in a proper format.

The reasoning paragraphs are focused on technological use in terms of the workplace and manufacturing. The discussion was supposed to be directed towards the lifestyle of people. The reasoning was not really on point but will receive scoring marks just the same because it has a bit of relevance to the discussion. The conclusion was a prompt deviation as it suddenly referred to benefits and advantages and disadvantages, which were not part of the original prompt presentation. This is basically, an essay that does not meet the passing score requirements for a task 2 essay

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 - Tourism's influence economy and environment [5]


The prompt provided only indicates a paraphrasing of the 2 original ideas. It is not asking for the willis opinion ora neutral puspective. Without specific instructions asking for this, this sentence should not be included in the presentation. Unless, you provided me with an incomplete writing prompt?


There is no need for research cited information in the presentation. All evidence must be based on personal knowledge. experience or publicly known information. To create a publicly know information from this, the source material should be removed. There will not be time for you to do research during the 40 minute test. Niether will you have internet access at the testing center. Practice without research.


The discussion must be neutral. The essay does not require you to come to a conclusion for the reader. Therefore, topic restatements with reasons are needed for the concluding summary, but not a conclusion. Your job as the writer is only to inform the reader, allowing him to decide for himself.