Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Graduates should be advised to do a second degree [4]

Graduates who cannot find work in their chosen field should be advised to do a second degree, rather than taking a job that does not interest them. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Nowadays, the number of idleness increase significantly in the development and developing countries. Also, many people who leave from university with a degree are quite difficult to get a great job. However, some people think that continuing in the second degree is the best solution, while I tend to assume it depends on our circumstances.

In fact, finance is the first consideration when people want to continue in the second degree. Sadly, most of universities charge high tuition fees for post graduate course. Because of that some students who do not have enough money they cannot take second degree. In my university, students have to spend more than $10,000 for post graduate course, so that is not little money to earn in the sort time with hard work. In my eyes, it is not recommended solution that graduates should continue into second degree, particularly if they do not have any eager to study more.

Furthermore, a second degree with expensive fees is needed for students who have clear main purpose in the future and still have an enthusiasm for studying further. Patients and passions are the second consideration to establish good career. Fresh graduates should start at the bottom and work their way up the career ladder. This is what Chairul Tanjung, a success entrepreneur, did and it gave him experience, and understanding of his chosen field.

Standing in contrast, for some people who have quite likely purpose to get a great profession or to pursue a research based on career need a second degree. If graduates are affordable to pay the course fees without dept, it will be better than they force themselves to occupy a job which does not interest them. Apparently, it will be advisable for graduates to carry on with their studies, especially in the current technology, economic and politic.

In conclusion, a degree will be important it depends on people needs. So, graduates have to realize that a second degree is going to be useful when they involve in the particular job as a requirement.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: advantages and disadvantages of working mother [4]

In some countries, it is common for women to find a job when their children are young. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Throughout the world, working mother is a phenomenon in the several countries. Many women become working mothers when the children are still young. This is occurring, because of growing economical pressure, personal preference and so forth. In this day and age, women are not restricted to be homemaker as compared to the past. There are the merits and the demerits which are being discuss in this essay.

For some people, there are some demerits of mother working which is giving bad impacts for developing children psychology. Firstly, children and their mothers seem to be less close nowadays. It is because mother spends less time with their children and working mother often works full time. As a result, children do not have enough time to share about their problems in school or about themselves. Secondly, children attempt to get affection, so children are more closely with their nannies of babysitters than their mother. Take one example in the dinner time, most of working mothers cannot serve the healthy meals for their children and family, not only meals but also an attention to keep warm the atmosphere at home. In the other way, youngsters spend more time with friends or surfing the internet to get well-being.

While some people critic claim that mother working has disadvantages for children, so I tend to say that working mother has some advantages for children and her family. First of all, there are many reasons why mothers choose to work when their children are still young. The first reason is cost of living which is more expensive in several countries. The second reason, women have the same opportunity to take place at managerial level in global company, because most of women are well-educated and well-qualified people recently. Moreover, mother working can give a contribution to pay basic needs in daily activity and education their children. Also, her salary becomes income to guarantee children living in as a wealthy people and working mother still can keep contact as deep as direct contact with mobile phone.

If we compare the condition in the past and nowadays is quite different. Long time ago the cost of living was cheaper than the cost of living at this time, so in the past only husband who held a responsibility to be breadwinner. However, recently the condition is the reverse where mothers also play an essential role in family to earn much money.

In conclusion, mother working will create advantages and disadvantages effect which will appear if they cannot divide the balance time between working and bring up their children.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: the advantage and disadvantage of media for communicating information [4]

Compare the advantage and disadvantage of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. (Comics, books, radio, television, film, theatre)

Throughout the world, developing technology influences the means of media communicating. Long time ago in the World War 2 era, journal publishing and audio forms of communications were completely medias which were used to deliver information, while audio visual of communication has been mostly favorite choice of people around the world. However, every mean of communicating information media has merit and demerit which affect in the human live.

Journal publishing was the first media for spreading news, fairy tale and encyclopedia. British news was the first newsletter which was giving updateable information in the World War 2 about Hiroshima and Nagasaki, for instance. Moreover, comics and books have been the favorite media communication which contains about the truth stories and knowledge such as science and literature. As a result, journal publishing was the knowledgeable media not only for transmitting information but also as a resource of knowledge. However, creating the journal publishing is needed long time and many raw materials are used such as paper, ink and labor. Sometimes, the journal publications are in failed to catch reader attention.

Audio communicating is the next generation of means media after journal publishing. Radio has been a famous audio media which produces information by voice, so people can hear the information directly from informant. Then, Japan was the first country where succeeded to develop this mean for connecting the air forces in the rural area. For example, jet force used the radio to give information for pilot from the air port about condition in the conflict areas and the main target which got an attack from enemy. As such, the new invention which was very useful utilized the analog signal to carry out the audio. Unfortunately, radio signal is sometimes cannot work well and radio gives people a limitation in seeing the visual.

Further, television is a powerful media communication which provides audio and visual information. Television appeared approximately more than a decade ago and some people called it as the sophisticated innovation. Television is not only bringing educative information but also is providing entertaining program which gives well-being for audience. Standing in contrast, there are some minus effects from television. For example, a very high number of advertisements are taking a big role in changing people's shopping habit and some inappropriate programs are easily accessed by children.

To sum up, there are three classification of media for communicating information; journal publishing, audio and audio-visual media. All of them are developing based on technology evolution and they have some negative and positive impacts in human live. However, those media communications are needed to distribute the information.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: On road transport in a number od European countries [2]

The bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first and second charts reveal the distance per year which is faced by traveler with some kinds of mean transport, while the third chart indicates the time in minute per day.

The overall car is the favorite transport which is used by European to do a travelling. Moreover, the highest amount of distance is held by tourist from Denmark.

First of all, Spain and Germany people spend their leisure time to travel by car per person with distance nearly 10.000 kilometres per year. However, EU Average takes place 10.000 kilometres per year/ per person who does a journey by the same mean of transport. Standing in contrast, Britons, Italians and France people record the amount of distance to travel by car per person over 10.000 kilometres and Denmark reach a peak with approximately 12.500 kilometres per year.

Looking more closely at the second chart illustrates the data of difference form of transport. There are; bus, train, metro and bike which are usually used by travelers in Europe. Britons and France inhabitants occupy the lowest distance of travelling per person just under 1.000 kilometres per year. Nevertheless, each person in Germany, Spain and EU Average gains above 1.000 kilometres per year and Italian person takes place almost doubled than that amount of distance in United Kingdom and France. Finally, Denmark has the highest amount of distance which gets over 3000 kilometres per year and this amount is almost doubled than that Italy.

A more detailed look at the third graph reveals that all modes spend a difference time in minutes per day. All modes in Italy which is used by traveler have the lowest amount of time with 22 minutes per day, while Spain, France, Denmark and EU Average record the total of time more than 30 minutes per day. Moreover, Germany and United Kingdom has the same time which applies per day with nearly 50 minutes.

Clearly, travelers in Denmark need all kinds of vehicles to pick them up in the tourism places but the commuting time in Denmark is not taking more than 40 minutes per day. Moreover, the majority of European countries are still comfort to use car for traveling.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Number of students attending three courses from 2001 to 2004 [3]

The bar chart gives information about the proportion of pupils in three courses during 4 years, over ranging from the early 2001 to the last 2004.

In general, the overall growth in number of students in three courses is not always stable, while only course C which has a dramatic increase of the four year period.

First of all, in 2001, over 4 million students who were presumably enrolled onto courses A, while in 2002 the number of students declined in 2.5 million. By 2003 onwards the numbers continued to grow up so that more than 3 million and in the last period held on above 4 million pupils.

Turning to the data for course B can be seen that in 2001, 2 million students took the course. In 2002, the proportions almost doubled to over 4 million people studying in this course. Nevertheless, only approximately 1.9 million people who attended in course B, was a sharp decline in 2003. Slowly but sure, the number of students rose in 2004 with nearly 3 million.

A more detailed look at the graph reveals that only course C which had the significant grow year-by-year. The situation remained reasonably from 2001 to 2002 with 2 million people. Then, in 2003 the number of people rose steadily throughout and stood at peak in the last period with 5 million students.

In conclusion, there has been an overall rise in the number of pupils studying onto all three courses during a 4-year period, between 2001 and 2004.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1985 and 2005. [3]

The pie charts below show the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1985 and 2005. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisions where appropiate.

The first chart shows the proportion of housing owned and rented in 1985 while the second chart gives information about the percentage of private and rent accommodation in 2005.

In general, most of people prefer to stay at the privately owned housing than live in social housing. Perhaps social housing has limited facilities which make people uncomfortable meanwhile private house is the appropriate place for inhabitants.

As seen, in the 1985, more than 50 percent was occupied by private housing and came to second council rented over than quarter. Moreover, the third and fourth places were privately rented and social housing which had the lower percentage. Interestingly, the number of people who chosen privately owned was the notable incline showed, while the percentage of council rented indicated the significant decline.

A more detailed look at the second graph informs that privately owned had had suitable accommodation which was the highest proportion (three-quarter) than others types housing. Followed by council rented and privately rented which stood in the second and third favorite housing had almost quarter of whole percentage. By doing so, social housing gained the lowest percentage in the 2005.

In conclusion, there was a dramatic grow from 22 to 27 million homes during 20 years, between 1985 and 2005.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : Earning in the City of London and Average annual salaries of executives. [4]

The pie chart below shows the earning of the City of London for the years 1985 and 1995. These earnings are known as invisible earnings and they showed huge increases in the years studied. The graph shows comparisons between earings for male and female executive in the various financial sectors for the same years.

The pie chart informs percentage income of four categories, while the graph gives the data average annual income of man and woman in the City of London during 10 years, from 1985 and 1995.

Overall, the amount of city's income and executives' salaries had a dramatic rise in the each sector from 1985 to 1995.

In the 1985, a consideration which was improving city's income was insurance sector, also executives who worked in insurance company gained the second position. Moreover, trade areas placed in the third higher position which contributed earning in the City of London and brought salaries for managerial levels. However, the overall growth of income between City of London and executive had more doubled amount of income in last period between 1985 and 1995.

Having said that, in the 1995, trading was being the first sector which provided the highest income for London and 3 sectors followed which were banking in the second, insurance in the third and currency dealing in the last position. As such, the reverse ordering categories with annual salaries of male and female executive in London where currency dealing company gave highest salary for their executive followed by insurance sector in the second place, and banking and trade in the third and fourth position. In the 1985, bank gave the highest income for city, while banking paid their executives with the lowest average annual salaries and reversed condition with currency dealing.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : The first car appeared on British roads. [3]

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Throughout the world, when the cars have become the completely means of transport in the daily activity, Britons are difficult to do some activities without private form of transport. Moreover, there is the significant growth of cars in the British main roads and the prediction the proportion of cars would grown slightly in over 1 century since the first time car appeared on British main road in 1888. Obviously, some question rise whether alternative public transport should be encouraged and international regulations should be created to tackle traffic problem. I tend to agree with this statement, although there are some critic claims.

A car was the significant innovation in the early 100 years ago and it was a luxury form of transport. Take one example, when American people attempted to carry out bee colonies, they got many obstacles and one of obstacle was the means of transport. In the first experiment American people used a river to deliver the nests, but it was failure. Moreover, railroad had chosen to transmit the nest, but it spent long time and many nests were damage and bee colonies were dead. On the other hand, when car had used, it succeeded to tackle all of problems to emigrate bee colonies from Egypt to America. Based on this evidence, many people argue that governments should not create laws which prevent Britons using private car, because they believe that cars are needed to be used not only for helping them in the daily routine, but also taking part in their business. So, the regulation should not introduce to manage car ownership and use.

While several people have an opinion that the regulation of car ownership will be a trigger of new case, I really agree that alternative means of transport and international laws of car ownership are to make as the best way to tackle a dramatic increase of vehicles exactly on British main roads and other parts in the world. For instance, in my country, Indonesia, has a crucial problem about traffic congestion and our governments establish a solution to implement alternative public transport such as bus way, monorail and MRT to tackle this problem. Moreover, Singapore governments have a regulation for sharing car for people who drive a private car in the main road have to invite one or two passengers and in America has a no traffic zone which forbidden for cars across this zone. Other is vehicles' fume which has made air pollution and then we have to realize that the means of transport which used in past did not consume fuel as much as cars are today.

In conclusion, the overall growth of means transport will give many bad effect for many countries especially in Britain. So, governments should hold a responsibility to encourage alternative public transport and introduce a law which prevents car ownership and use to resolve traffic jam and to keep economic sector.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Electronic calculators should not be allowed in school [3]

Some people believe that electronic calculators should not be allowed in school until after the pupils have mastered mental arithmetic. Others believe that calculators save pupils time, especially with complicated calculations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Japanese students who become the winner in World Mathematic Olympiad have educated to improve their arithmetic skill from early age without using a tool. The same condition in my country, Indonesia, is not allowing students to use electronic calculators until they have mastered mental arithmetic skill and some people argue that electronic calculators are forbidden to be used by pupils. However, critics claim that this tool can help children to count in the short time. In my view, calculators are needed in the specific lesson, while it will give bad effect for children if they always calculate the little digits with calculators.

Perfect practice makes perfect result which is the best quote to depict that we have to build ability from early. As such, giving reflection if children use calculators to count number in the mathematic lesson will give a bad habit, because they cannot improve their brain, for instance. Moreover, mastered mental arithmetic is to establish for improving logical brain. As a result, if schools allowed to use calculators for counting the short digit number which means that schools give a bad consideration for pupils' mental arithmetic.

However, in the some lessons need electronic calculators to help students saving time when they face the complicated calculations. Accounting lesson which has complicated calculations has more than 7 digits which are impossible for pupils to calculate manually, for instance. So, schools should create a policy when students can use the electronic calculations and when these equipments are not allowed. I can argue that for toddlers who still study in the elementary school are forbidden to use calculators.

A study of scientists conducted that there are differences between students who have mastered mental arithmetic and have not this ability. They will get problem with logical brain because their brain is not getting exercise to give direct respond when they attempt to count little digit numbers.

To sum up, electronic calculators will help students to calculate numbers which consist of many digits, while in the practice it will influence students who still improve mental arithmetic to take a problem in their logical brain. In my view, schools should pay attention to allow electronic calculators can be used only in the few subject, such as physic and accounting.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The chart below shows male and female fitness membership (20 minutes) [3]

The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000

The bar chart reveals the number of fitness club members during 30 years, from 1970 to 2000.

Overall, there are two categories of fitness membership; women and men. Based on the bar chart can be seen that fluctuate number of members between female and male.

First of all, from 1970 to 1975 both categories started from approximately 1000 to over 2000 and the number of members inclined dramatically, with about 2000 women members and doubled number of men members with 4000. Moreover, in the 1980 both categories were a slightly decline and the number of men decreased almost a half of number before, while in the 1985 the number of women who joined the fitness center rose, with over 2500.

As seen, while the number of women fell to 2100 people, the number of men increased to over 2000. In the 1995 the amount of men who attended in the fitness club sat a peak with 5000 people. What is more, in the 2000 there was a slight down over 4 times than period before.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Three decades of the Nathan's Hot Dog Eating Contest, between 1980 and 2010. [4]

The graph below presents the information about Nathan's Hot Dog Eating Contest in Brooklyn's Coney Island, USA.

The bar chart illustrates the winner record of Nathan's Hot Dog Eating Contest which is held every 4th of July in Brooklyn's Coney Island, USA during 3 decades, between 1980 and 2010.

Generally, there are four countries; USA, Japan, Mexico and Germany which were being winner. Moreover, American and Japanese males were dominance as the winners.

First of all, from the first to the third period American males won the contest, with about 9 to 10 hot dogs and buns eaten, while in the 1983 Mexican males succeeded to be the winner, with approximately 19 hot dogs and buns eaten. Between 1985 and 1995, American contestants presenting the overall growth in numbers of hot dogs and buns eaten had rebounded on the podium.

Take closer look, between 1997 and 1998 Japanese males had the golden medal, while in the next year American men hold the medal with 20 hot dogs and buns eaten. From 2000 onward Japanese males had won, with 53.75 hot dogs and buns eaten which was the first peak. From 2007 to 2010 American men became the winner and hold the second peak with 68 hot dogs and buns eaten in 2009.

Interestingly, between 1983 and 1984 a Mexican only ate nearly 20 hot dogs, while Birgit Felden, a German woman, consumed 9 hot dogs. Takeru Kobayashi, Japanese, who reigned Nathan's championship for six years running defeated Prior Chestnut, while an American, who ate 68 hot dogs and buns in 15 minutes held Joey Chestnut in 2009

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Writing Feedback / Advertisement encourages customers to buy the products and to increase high income for company [4]

Today, the high sales of popular customer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Advertisement encourages customers to buy the products and to increase high income for company. Having said and done, it makes people to purchase many products which are not notable in daily life. I think that pros and cons of these views which are discussed in this essay.

Advertising is the best way to introduce a latest product which is still little known in the market. Throughout the world, promoting is a key part of modern business which is using many media promotions such as commercial break, billboard and poster. Samsung Company which has used twitter, online media promotion, tells customers about their products and they have many followers as many as one nation in twitter, for instance. Admittedly, there is a power of advertising to gain popularity of product and to give a dramatic increase of sales, because many people take interested in the products.

However, critics claim that advertising manipulates people to follow the new products which are not really needed in daily activity as the basic needs. Toys companies arrange their commercial breaks in the one stage with children's television programs to persuade children buy their products, for instance. It is a strategy to increase high sales, because children can easily be influenced by advertisement and they will put pressure on parents to buy them things. As a result, many people buy a product which is not notable in their life.

In conclusion, I tend to agree that the products which have high intensity appearing in the means of advertising are being popular. Thus people are easy to recognize and to buy the products. Standing in contrast, advertising will be a consideration to increase expenditure for purchasing unnecessary products for some people.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Introductions; Need correction only for introduction. [5]

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Each country has different customs and behavior, so travelers have to adapt with this diversity like people who do vacation, they have to follow the local culture in this county which is visited. Standing in contrast, critics claim country should accept the cultural differences which are influenced by tourists. I will discuss the two views further.

Today, the high sales of popular customer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Advertisement encourages customer's eager to buy the products and increase high income for company which promotes their product. Having said and done, it makes people to purchase many products which are not important in daily life. I think that pros and cons of these views which are discussed in this essay.

In some countries, it is common for women to find a job when their children are young. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Many women become working mothers. This is occurring, because of growing economical pressure, personal preference and so forth. In this day and age, women are not restricted to be homemaker as compared to the past. There are the merits and the demerits which are being discuss in this essay.

Writing Feedback / University plays a responsibility to deliver knowledge which is useful in the workplace [3]

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

Several people who study in university have main purpose for looking a great job in the future, while others prefer for interest. University plays a responsibility to deliver knowledge which is useful in the workplace and other purpose of students. In my eyes, the main function of university is to educate student to be well-educate and well-qualified people.

There is a dramatic increase for the number of students who continue their study at university, because they want to get a degree for getting a great job. Degree is always mentioned in the job vacancy announcement and the candidates should be eligible with the requirement. For example, managerial level in global company is occupied by people who have master degree. Based on the reality, university should arrange the curriculum which adopts the knowledge to compete in the workplace. It is true that some people believe a degree and knowledge which is learnt at university will give an opportunity to take place in international company and earn much money in the short time.

Having said this, there is the different purpose of minority students who have a plan for interest. Because of that, university should provide knowledge as access to gain their sake which is extremely different among other students. For example, some students have occupation as an employer in the private company, while others prefer to establish a business. Admittedly, the reasons why university should give variety knowledge are to deliver useful knowledge for students with different job. Thus mixing knowledge between skill and intelligent are needed to prepare students for facing the real work environment.

In conclusion, I think that university plays an essential function to develop well-educate and well-qualified people. As a result, university should provide the professional educationalists to establish students' intelligent and skill.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Some educationalists argue about arts-based subject. [5]

Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The sound of art connects with uniqueness which is poured original creativity of art products which depict different soul of art. Some say that art is a must have curriculum for the second-grade school, while I tend to believe that this non-exam subject would not have a notable advancement in students academic progress.

There is a pro claim that art must have to learn in the second-grade school for improving self discipline of pupils who need additional skill to improve their sense and natural ability of art. Every second-grade school in Bali makes a decision that pupils have to take action on dance technique as an additional lesson, for instance. Dancing has a merit for balancing pupils' brain and keeping our culture. Critic claim, however, the budget which spends for buying the instruments on art can be allocated to renovate school facilities, there is the amount of art resources as much as cost to build a new class room. As a result, art is debatable subject which is difficult implemented in the school.

Admittedly, People, who join in art lesson, claim that it is notable to exercise the imagination and working together with. Take one example; musical drama community can enhance the power of imagination of all members who are forced to pour creativity and corporate with team work. Moreover, sense of well-being will appear certainly when people focus on art which will be a hobby. However, students have to realize if they involve in art which will spend much time due to create a masterpiece is needed into a sharp focus on. For example, Leonardo da vinci, who painted legendary masterpiece portrait "Mona Lisa", took more than a year to finish this portrait, but the product has been famous at a particular time in history. Apparently, students who participate on art lesson will not pay attention with other general lessons, get the bed point academic performance.

In conclusion, I tend to agree that art is adopted as a secondary-school curriculum to develop sense of art. However, providing art subject in the school needs high cost to buy art resources. In my eyes, school should consider to make balance between art lesson and other general lesson such as math and physic for enriching students' academic performance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create. [5]

Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while other struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

According to Gordon M. Smith, who is senior economists from Harvard University at The United States, has conducted the reason why artists could lead in gigantic financial matter. It is because they have hard work and spent much hour at work. Not surprisingly, there is different amount of income with other people who have different occupation with low salary. What are the major contributing factors in the success of artists? Could governments make a balance this situation? Without further ado, let's delve into pro and contra of this issue.

The sound of art connects with uniqueness which is poured original creativity by artists and every single masterpiece depicts different soul of art. Because of that, many people are willing to pay for something that they are admire and would like to own. An artist gives something up to create a portrait, not only spent a lot of time, but also fulfill imagination. Leonardo da vinci, who painted legendary masterpiece portrait "Monalisa", took more than a year to finish it, but he got more than 2 billion dollars from selling his product, for instance. Whatever the reason, I would give an argumentation that government cannot prevent artist to earn much money from their products. There is a right of artists to get the worth appreciate from their creation such as money or popularity. However, public should consider what is something worth which is paid with higher amount, even there are many little known artists who find hard to earn income.

In the other case, well-known artists attempt to explore their ability as a business people to collect much money. They are not pay attention with quality, but money expectation is the main purpose. Popularity and reputation are the guarantee to sell a lot of products which give high income. This condition seems unfair to others unknown artists who are beginner to introduce they products with many obstacle to compete with other artists who have excellent reputation. Standing in contrast, popular artists have spent years for developing skills and experiences which are quite expensive things and cannot be bought by money. Every exhibition was improving their ability and skill to be expert and they have learnt from a mistake in the past, for instance. Thus this is fair that famous artists have got high nominal of their product.

Ultimately, the high income is a reflection of artists' effort and loyalty of art. Having said this, government cannot stop artists' creativity, because creativity is a right for all people who can think and show up their sense of art by painting or other art products. In my eyes, popular artists should pay attention of their product's quality to survive and compete with new artists in the future.