Writing Feedback / SAT Essay : Strive to better themselves or accept who they are and what they have ? [4]

I believe that constantly, People need to strive for a better life. A life will be meaningless if no one
strives harshly to prove that it is worth living in his life . History also shows that a
man who is always not satisfied with what he possesses and keeps trying to rise often tends to be an
influential man. This type of people probably flabbergasts others by spectacular
actions.
Second paragraph is superb.
...They quickly accepted their failures in WWII, stood up and
started from scratch. They do endeavourcontinue to develop their universalized
education, consolidate their diplomatic relationship to alternative countries...
...His over-confidence
indeed killed him.
Good job, just clarify your closing statement a bit. :)

Graduate / 'to develop my knowledge' - statement of purpose for MSc in Telecommunication [3]

..This is why it did not take too long for me to realize that I want to be; an Engineer, so that I can also enter into the world of innovation to use my creativity for the society. finally During my graduation in EEE, I found out Telecommunication could be the right place for me.

It is exciting to learn to new engineering science and its practical feasibility.
Throughout my graduation, I felt charged up (nice:)...
...participate in different inter-departmental tournaments such as cricket and table tennis.
Despite being detached from formal education for quite some time butI am confident and hopeful that I am able to proceed successfully.
Everyone has a certain potential intelligence, but not everyone lives up to that potential. The important matter is nature-nurture; how much of us were born, and how much are we is influenced by our environment.you lost me a little bit there in the previous sentence. But the following one is a good closing statement.

Good luck :)

Writing Feedback / Some people think that politicians have the greatest influence on the world. [3]

Both politicians and scientists play a pivotal role for prosperity of a nation. (Nice opening statement) Both of these roles have a significant impact in the lives of the people about the decisions and the reforms they make. Your paragraph about politicians is great!

Secondly, the credit for the advancement of science and technology, naturally, goes to scientists.
It's their passion and sheer knowledge, thatcan help billions of people to live with peace and harmony.
In conclusion, I would say, politicians and scientists are the two distinct professions, who can appeal and influence the people in vast number by their works and reforms. I like the fact that you didn't feel the need to choose one or the other and I respect your opinion and your closing statement. As you will surely note, I have only included the sentences which needed revision. Everything else should stay.

Good job.

Graduate / benefit from studying in the public health program- conveying a solid point in my MPH [3]

For starters, I definitely think it's alright to mention your completion a year ahead. That's something to be very proud of and bears repeating...Your opening statement is great. If this is only your rough draft then you are on the right track because with just a little more structure and just organizing your thoughts a bit more clearly, you will have here a terrific essay. In addition, I think you could shorten and strengthen your closing statement a bit, in a manner such as: "I am proud to call this place my home and would be honored to continue my grad. studies here". I hope this has been helpful! Good luck :)

Writing Feedback / IELTS: In certain cultures old age is considered to be more important [12]

No problem!! My pleasure :)

Writing Feedback / My opnion is that smoking should be banned in public places [3]

I have carefully studied your outline and think it looks really good. In my opinion, so long as you have a clear and concise opening statement, followed by effective and well structured facts and opinions, you're all set. And naturally, you must complete the essay with a solid conclusion, especially, (as it seems you may have done a bit) if you have objectively supported both sides of the argument. Be sure to conclude with your feelings on one side or the other.

Writing Feedback / Is playing computer games by youngsters a good or a bad thing? [2]

The twenty first century brings a gradual shift away... This first sentence makes sense but in my opinion, is a bit overstated in terms of an introductory statement.

From the one perspective, it is of a great benefit for young people to get involved with computer gaming considering it under the enhancing one's cognitive ability considerations. (no need for this word after saying "consideration" prior)

Playing particular games requires a strong combination of different abilities... This sentence is too long and needs to be broken into several.
...Consequently, when not surveiled appropriately, a child's extreme immersion in computer gaming could have deep-rooted consequences of and may be of no positive value. (end sentence) as for children so for their milieu.

All things considered, I think that playing computer games has a lot to offer children in terms of skill promotion but only when watched over pertinently, while neglectionNeglect of this measure may lead to eventual degradation of children and their full segregation from society.

Great job, just be mindful of excessively long or "run-on" sentences. Otherwise, very intelligent and interesting

Writing Feedback / Flipping Useless Land into a Parking Lot [3]

Flipping Useless Land into a Parking Lot
Have you ever made an deliberate (did you mean to say "impulsive" decision? Erecting a parking lot in Dearborn near downtown will benefit us, Dearborn Residents, and Dearborn visitors as well.

You could benefit from condensing just a bit, but otherwise this looks great.
:)

Undergraduate / Does my high school record accurately represent your academic abilities. MSU essay [2]

When I first came to United States, I didn't understand any English, but, I still have to go to school with the was immersed with different language-speaking students.

Well, your English seems to be coming along smoothly! As I'm sure you are aware, it isn't entirely correct, grammatically speaking. However, I feel you answered the question which was the basis for this essay in a very effective and passionate way. The portrayal of your struggle and desire to do better absolutely cuts right through the language barrier in my opinion. In addition, in structural terms, you have absolutely created an organized and well-stated essay.

Good luck!

Writing Feedback / Gambling assessment tool [4]

I ruled out using Jacob's 5 Dissociation Questions on Howard. In this assessment tool in order to prove if someone is at risk. These previous sentences don't quite mesh correctly; maybe you put a period where it didn't belong?

It needs only one out five answers to determines that the person is in dissociation while gambling.
However, all the five questions are concerning of mental health issues.
Since every individual has different feeling, it is difficult to define questions regarding "memory blackout" and "trance" while gambling, if a lack of understanding of a question that could produce a false result. Problem gambling is a complex social issue and I feel, quite frankly, the use of five questions is not thorough enough for assessment.

..One main reason is that it is the instrument that has received the most validity and reliability in terms of testing (Shaffer et al., 1997).
Your third paragraph is VERY interesting and thought provoking; nice work.
Interpersonal matters play a major role on how an individual interacting s with others in the society or the reasons of engaging in a risky behaviour.

Very good.

Writing Feedback / Informative essay on How to improve writing skill? [2]

... Because of this, I improved my writing skill by exercising some of the following steps.
...I also know the way how to express my opinion with my audiencesreader
. Therefore, the firstnext step is to try reading newspapers, magazines, novels or books...
As a consequence,the varier?? sentence tructures we use, the more interesting the writing is.
Next step is the most important step, because is consumecombination
I made a few grammatical revisions, but more importantly I feel you should try to condense some of these particulars a bit to, ironically, make it flow a little more smoothly in the eyes of the reader.

Good job and good luck!

Essays / Need help with thesis for Common app (indicating an influential person in my life) [2]

Alright. Well, naturally, your opening statement should be an introductory one which could be something as simple as :"The most influential people in my life are...". Point blank. If it were me, I would start with something like "My mother is my hero." and let that first paragraph or two explain why, followed by "My father is (also) my hero", etc. There are many ways you could start..."The most profound sources of inspiration in my life are my mother and father. They, as a team have been so positively influential to me and I would like to tell you (the reader) why"...

As long as you get in there with a nice opening statement followed by clear and structured sentiments to support this intro, you should be all set. Good Luck!

Writing Feedback / If you were in contention to be the new Minister of Education, what would you say. [2]

...But we have too many problems with it. I will now mention some of them.some of which are as follows...
Wow. I only made one correction and would have to say that this is amazing. You have demonstrated your thoughts, feelings and motivation quite clearly and very effectively. I hope you consider this helpful, despite the fact that I hardly changed a thing. I did, however revise it quite a bit and I think it is superb. Best of luck to you!

Essays / Help me to write paragraph about myself [6]

The key is effectively summarizing, as I'm sure you know. Also, to use "encompassing" words and phrases is helpful such as "One ofthe (or) ..The greatest passion in my life is..." Now is this interest you speak of a hobby? Or is it the interest in attending a particular school or place of employment? If you provide me with a bit more material I would be happy to help. Otherwise, just be honest, clear and try to stick with the facts, and details to support them without drifting too far off into side notes. (if it is, after all, a short essay) I hope this is helpful!!

Undergraduate / 'respect and self motivation' - My biggest challenge I have to overcome essay [2]

OnAt the breakfast table I told my mom that I was going to be an honor graduate, knowing that it would be easier for me to get into an university;

she gave me a pat on the back and responded frowning "but you won't be able to because our legal status". This first sentence is a bit too long and needs revision

Many challenges I have faced in my life like learning a new language and assimilating a new culture, making new friends and adapting to a new environment, but by far the most difficult task is to accept the factnotion that I won't be able to succeed once I finish school.

There are a few grammatical errors here and there; understandably so considering English is your second language! Otherwise, it is clear and thorough and I think with just a bit of revision for clarification, you will have here a terrific essay. Good job!

Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Will letter writing replaced by technology completely? [2]

With the advent"surge" or "rush" might fit better here... of personal phones and computer in recent decades,..
Personally speaking, this is not the case as the paper correspondences still play a valuable role in today's society for me/in my life.

In contrast, sending the invitations by emails or even an electronic message are unable to deliverdetracts from the respect and courtesy to the attendants. Secondly, communicating with the receivers through the letter writing also demonstrates the importance of the information.

However, in regarding ofwith regard to formality and confidentiality,...
I only highlighted areas which I felt needed revision.
Good Luck!!

Scholarship / Hypocrisy Essay / Civil Disobedience [4]

The first paragraph is not entirely "correct" grammatically but is very well stated nonetheless.
On the contrary, lots people are hypocritical merely for the social conventions' demands. They allow the rules to master them, oppress them; to control every second of their life. They don't want to seem bad, so they are striving to make friends with everyone, even if they detest him, just because it is normal. In my view, this is the most stupid form of hypocrisy that has ever existed, although it has some benefits in a way people see you. But is it worth being someone else? Not for me...I have to say, this is BRILLIANT.

I think this is excellent. As I said, the grammar is a bit choppy in spots but your English in general is impressive. Structurally, it flows nicely and all in all it is very well put together. Great job and good luck.

:)

Speeches / I need help writing a monologue as a character from Romeo and Juliet. [2]

This is interesting! What a great assignment! Well, just off the top of my head, you could tell the story of Juliet's "nurse-maid" (I forget her name) and describe what it is like to be in the shadows of such power, greed, lust, corruption, etc. Or, you could tell the story of Juliet as a child including all of your girlish, innocent, heroic hopes and dreams. This, since we already know her fate would be quite compelling, I'd say. Or you could be a mystery girl who is in love with Romeo and very jealous of his adoration for Juliet. The possibilities are endless!! If you'd like, you could send me what you come up with and I'd be happy to check it out/help.

Good luck and HAVE FUN!!

Book Reports / 'ow Willy causes suffering' - Essay on Death of a salesman [2]

I would start off with more of an "introductory" opening statement.
Willy in 'Death of a Salesman,' by Arthur Miller loses sense of reality as he nears the end of his downfall. His breakdown affects himself, but Biff and Linda are negatively affected by Willy's illusions as well. Biff suffers from his father's unwillingness to liberate Biffhim from his expectation that has been continuous since high school. Ok, this sentence could be revised for clarity with the him and his; maybe re-word it so it's easier to follow.

In conclusion, both Biff and Linda suffer greatly due to Willy's delusions, however the effect is distinct between Biff and Linda. Biff has been limited of his choices in life wherein that what his father wants is seems to always be the right choice, whereas Linda suffers internally of Willy's dishonesty as the author suggest that one's negativity affects its surroundings.

Graduate / Writing an essay for an Executive MPH Program! [6]

I think this first statement is unnecessary, following the NIDA statement. It appears redundant. I would advise a more original opening statement.
Good job. I think you ought to revise just a bit for clarity and make sure you are not over using the same words and phrases too often. However, your message is clear and inspiring :)

Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: advanced fertilisers and machine for farmers, good or bad? [4]

...While some appear to believe that advanced plant foods incorporated with newly developed devices significantly reduce the cost of producing farm products, others argue that this collaboration exerts a series of negative effects to people's health condition and the society.

Consequently, the production and labour cost of each kilogram of the agriculture products are dramatically decreased..
However, high-tech fertilisers pose a potential threat to individuals' health and well-being. Unlike the organic plant foods, industrialised fertilisers are made of unusual chemicals, which are not only varying the gene of crops into those unknown substances but also remaining inside of plants permanently. In this case, consumers who intakeconsume those fertilised products on a regular basebasis tend to suffer a series of disease in the future.

I have only highlighted areas which need revision; the rest is great. I think you answered the question quite effectively. You could shorten your sentences a bit, maybe break them into more so it is easier to read. Otherwise,,, nice!!!

Good luck!

Undergraduate / Cultural Exchange and Quality of Education; "Global UGRAD Prog"- Why study in the US? [2]

...However, there was a day when my Mom was packing my travelling staffstuff? luggage? to USA. Since then, I have been assured what he really meant and was trying to explain us in his classes.

Frankly, the trip to states was short and fleeting, but full of explorations and excitement. Currently, I really miss the days spent in US, because they were a real challenge for me to feel myself being independent and mature.

..Facing many different speaking interactions, listening to lectures and tutorials and having many hours of conversations with my future mates at school are all seductive messages to me, stuck on my island of English in the sea that is my home... this last sentence is poetic and beautiful.

Very good. Your grammar isn't perfect but your English is excellent. I think you have structured this nicely and clearly illustrated your passions, hopes and dreams. I hope my revisions have been helpful.

Good luck!

Undergraduate / Young Family Caregiver - Transfer Essay [2]

Just in this first paragraph, which is wonderful, I would already have to disagree with whomever has said it "lacks passion".
With the maturity, knowledge, and absolute certainnesscertainty...
At Fordham I believe I will be laying the foundation for a life of learning, and a deeply rewarding career which I am extremely passionate about fulfilling. ...I thought adding that might strengthen your purpose just a bit:)

Great job. This looks very passionate, shows drive and determination and is well organized and nicely written.
Good luck!

Writing Feedback / WHY SHOULD RECKLESS DRIVERS BE PUNISHED SEVERELY [2]

Some teenagers like speeding. Although they know that it is dangerous, they like speeding without thinking of the consequences;( being things like destruction, terrible injury and death) Therefore, reckless drivers should be punished severely. There are some reasons why reckless drivers should be punished severely.this is repetitive and unnecessary

Strengthening (I corrected this word) the law must be effectivemaintained, so that drivers will be more careful.
Secondly, it is owing to driving recklessly might claim people's lives. It would not only take the victim's lives, but also affect the victim's relatives. Thus, the reckless driver should be punished severely

I only highlighted areas which need improvement. The parts of your essay that you don't see here should stay. You may also mention that with harsh and severe penalties given to people who do commit this act, this can hopefully serve as an example not to follow for people who are tempted.

Good job!

Graduate / 'Mechatronics Engineering' Statement of Purpose for Robotics Graduate Program [2]

"Discovery consists of seeing what everybody has seen and thinking what nobody has thought", as said by Albert Szent-Gyrgyi. Beautiful opening statement!
This first paragraph is brilliant.
In order to peruse my passion for robotics, I joined Mechatronics Engineering at NUST, so that I could increase the horizon of my technical imagination.

This project is aimed as a Rescue and Surveillance Vehicle, for people stranded in a remote area...That is excellent.

Alright, my job is to correct grammar and structure and give helpful feedback. However, all I can really say about this is that you have hit a home run and it looks absolutely superb. Just one correction! (spellcheck... pursue)

Nice work!
Good job and good luck.

Book Reports / Elvis Costello Concert Report for Voice Class [2]

I would begin with a statement such as "singing is (one of) my greatest passion/devotion" and the rest of this paragraph is great!! Did you eat diary today? All those quested go through a singer's head when they walk towards the stage. And don't forget to be relaxed .

In places like "don't forget to be relaxed", that statement seems like it should be placed elsewhere. However, you are an artist so I still think you can make things like that work. Don't forget about things like parenthesis and italics to splice in these impulsive yet appropriate thoughts...and one-sentence paragraphs for dramatic effect. :)

The way he was dressed did grab my attention, but only in a "how cute, that old man is dressed like a hipster" kind of way. LOL AWESOME!!!

Alright my friend, I don't know what your panic was all about, this is TERRIFIC! I have provided just a bit of feedback but just as singing doesn't need to follow all the rules, so long as there is some sense of structure and soul, so is the art of essay writing. You have that nailed :)

Good job and good luck

Scholarship / Career in investment banking - my MBA Fellowship short essays [2]

I am not certain that one can ever fully prepare themselves for a career in investment banking. While this may very well be true, my advice would be: SOUND SURE, especially in your opening statement :) The rest of that paragraph is definitely on point.

financial junkie does not sound very professional, though I admire your candor.
- How have you demonstrated a commitment to diversity (either in the workplace, at academic institutions you have attended, or in your community)?
A commitment to diversity does not have to translate to specific participation in an organized multicultural, diversity initiative. A commitment to diversity happens with every encounter, meeting, decision, conversation, and action we take as individuals. If I were you, I would focus less on defining the question and just keep the answer, as you have quite brilliantly done.

Nice work, overall :)
Good luck!!

Undergraduate / 'picked the wrong school for the wrong reasons' - Boulder Essay: Transferring [4]

Alright. Let me start by saying that this is very well written and in no way does it come forth as a pity party or anything like that. It is blunt and honest and I respect that you did not sugar-coat the sad realities that are sadly still so prevalent in Middle America. I could elaborate on the topic of ignorance but instead, lets focus on your essay. I would have a slightly less harsh opening statement. I greatly admire your strength and openness, however I'd suggest that you consider condensing the negative effects just a bit; for example "my sleeping, eating, and functioning in general suffered due to the depression and ignorance that my life had become squashed by.." or something to that affect. Not to downplay your suffering and/or experience, but to leave room to conclude with the things you (hopefully) still have passion and inspiration towards. Keep the raw emotional truth, just illustrate how you are attempting to, and how a transfer will help pick up the pieces in your life, motivation, and education. I hope this helps. Chin up!

Good job and good luck :)

Writing Feedback / Effects of Working and Studying at the Same Time [4]

...AbsolutelyIn most instances, the answer is no. Taking classes full-time while working a full-time job is daunting...
...so many people try it, but for many they cannot because it ruins their lives...
...They will not have time for themselves either...

I have made a few revisions and as I understand, English is your second language? That being said, you have done considerably well. I would only advise that, while much of what you're saying is true for most people, I would emphasize statements such as "in my experience..." or "what I find/has been my reality..." rather than stating all of these troubles as plain facts for everyone like "...it will ruin your life". Some people, and a lucky few they are, manage to pull it off. So just try and incorporate some "personal opinion" type language.

I hope this has been helpful.
:)

Graduate / 'well-rounded diverse individual' - statement of purpose fashion Grad school at SCAD [3]

Quite frankly, this is SHEER BRILLIANCE. In all honesty, it is my job in this forum to write at least 5 or 6 constructive sentences as well as any grammatical/structural revisions. I have to tell you, this is beautiful, inspiring and perfect. I can not find any flaws or weaknesses. Great job!!! This is uplifting, and it makes me want to know you!!! Any school would be lucky to have you as a student and I wish you the best of luck Sister!!! :)

Peace, love and luck!!

Writing Feedback / 'A Scholarship to China, I cannot forget that day' - essay [2]

Nice job. Your grammar and sentence structure could be brushed up a bit. I would also advise you to enhance and strengthen your opening and closing statements. Your passion and determination shine through quite nicely. You just need to organize your thoughts a bit more clearly. I would be happy to help you with any more specifics or revisions. Thanks and Good Luck!!!!! :)

Writing Feedback / Aadvantages of negative criticism clearly outweigh the positive criticism [2]

Although I do not necessarily agree that this is a topic than can realistically go just one way or the other, you have illustrated your feelings quite well. I would grade it as a five and since it has become open for discussion anyway, I would add that although you don't have to agree with the statement that "the best way to teach is to praise positive...", it would help round out and strengthen your essay just to differentiate a little bit such as "in terms of students or companies, constructive criticism has a powerful and positive outcome in general..." also "when it comes to young children and pets, placing an emphasis on positive reinforcement has been shown to have wonderful results." In this way you can still lean towards your personal beliefs while still objectively stating the proven facts to support parts of the latter.

I hope this has been helpful... yes, a strong 5
:)

Writing Feedback / The most difficult thing for us is to live in peace and harmony with people [3]

The most difficult thing for us is to live in peace and harmony with other people... Why is living with people a problem?
IT is a noted fact that with the evolution of human being, man has inculcated many characteristics which have both pros and cons.
One such characteristic is "being unable to live in peace and harmony with other people"
Firstly, ego is one of the attribute of a human being, due to which a person always views himself to be superior to others.
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I have only left the sentences which I made revisions to. The rest looks good. I just wanted to suggest that in your closing statements you make mention of how animals in the wild (even without a master) are able to co-exist peacefully without ego or murder, etc

:) Good luck

Writing Feedback / A discussion about two views toward talent [3]

One group of people think that all individuals can succeed in different facets if they work hard at it .

However, with regard to the issue concerning talent, many studies and researches have been conducted to prove that people have special abilities when they are born.

For instance, the possibility of being a scientists in mathematics for people growing up in families with talented parents in this field is higher than that for individuals who have ordinary parents.

An investigations revealed that talented people can read musical pitches with no training.

These results show that (natural?) talent plays a vital role to a person be an excellent musician, scientists, or a sports professional.

Some say that people can obtain any kinds of successes regardless of their abilities, while others think that talent is a fact that is hard to ignore.

Nevertheless, none of these opinions guarantee prosperity. What is more important in this respect, is that both these ideas ought to viewed together for a person to reach his/her aims.

:)

Graduate / 'well-rounded diverse individual' - statement of purpose fashion Grad school at SCAD [3]

For as long as I can remember, I have always been interested in art and culture and have always been fortunate enough to be able to experience and explore different places.

Not only has she given me opportunities to travel, but at age 11 she recognized my artistic talent and placed me in a private art class outside of school.

She taught me to cook, clean, and when she saw I was interested in making my own clothes at a young age, she taught me to sew.

The connection involved with the goods they have to offer is so evoking that it stuck in my consciousness and as I went through life I wanted to make things too.

After school I continued making things, drawings, paintings, handmade paper and books, and on my own time I decided to work with children.

One child in particular, I became very close to, and have learned that most people take for granted some of the simplest things in life and since then have always tried to go at a slow pace and gather in everything along the way.

:)

Graduate / 'the essential features of the subjects I liked' PHD Economics - Statement of Purpose [2]

My passion for Economics flourished during the High School final year, as soon as I realized its ability (?) to embody the essential features of the subjects I liked most.

It was like both constraining Social Philosophy to prove consistent towards empirical word, in such a way similar to Astronomy, and providing History with the stringent causal relations I appreciated in Physics.

. Although subtle, I tend to recognize a cogent tie which encloses the top marks I achieved in Ancient Greek classes attended during High School, and the focus on mathematical...

Methods notwithstanding, I became an avid reader of economic newspapers: as an Italian citizen, articles in value theory, international trade policy and welfare were especially attractive, apparently because of the very dramatic changes occurring in national economy, with the consequent and progressive wearing of the country's social layer.

Obviously, the financial crisis backlashes strengthened this passion and drove me to attend a course in History of Economic Thought , (?) whose formal introduction to the main works of economic thinkers, hinted a wealth of perspective on economic issues.

... hence, due to its reinforced leading authority among national institutions, we are allowed to innovate national economic policy, putting under hard demand both economic theory and methods.

:)

Essays / Topic ideas for a customer service paper? [2]

Oh, if this was my assignment, I'd write about my experiences at the Registry of Motor Vehicles! I took a number, waited an hour and forty minutes, spoke with a woman wearing a bee-hive hairdo, bright blue eye shadow, who smacked her gum with her mouth open wide, was very sarcastic, sent me all the way home for something, then realized I didn't need it...grrr

I used to work at a toy store, and one problem was people leaving there kids there while they shopped elsewhere, leaving me to basically babysit and clean up after the little monsters.

Your assignment sounds like it can be a lot of fun, good luck with it!

:)

Essays / How to start an essay comparing and deciding which was a worse disaster? [5]

What exactly are you looking for? We don't write the essay for you, but do you need suggestions for the prompt?

overcrowding, sanitation issues, overflowing classrooms, public transportation, pollution...

Undergraduate / Essay: My Grandpa has had a significant influence on me [2]

...and garden in the back of his farm, and he would point out the newest additions of growth, which often included colorful, exotic flowers.

... whether I was encountering difficulty in school, developing a new interest, or just needing guidance, he has never been too busy to help me out or to lend me his advice.

He has continuously been so interested in everything I have undertaken, and has constantly encouraged me with everything I have developed a fascination for .

He lives through each day with a list of what he is no longer able to do, and knows that if something happens, the doctors may not know what to do.---This is so sad!

He has been out in his garden every day since then, with the doctors' consent, showing that he has what it takes to overcome obstacles.

What a sweet tribute to your grandfather, I hope he sees this! Good luck with school and have fun!

:)

Writing Feedback / Songs and chants are useful learning materials for teaching listening ad speaking. [3]

I use this song because it is familiar to students, s ince from kindergarten age this song is always played.

By reason, students are exposed to this songs lyrics.

It is a song that's easy to understand.

The song "Old McDonald Had a Farm" is also very fun to sing andbe heardlisten to, and increases the students' vocabulary.

Besides that, this song will capture the attention of the students beginning the learning process and continue until the end of the lesson. Through this song also students can perform a variety of movements of animals found in the song.

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