Writing Feedback / 'avoiding sorrow' Happiness is considered very important in life. [4]

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Life is designed with happiness and sorrow that everyone feels in mind. Happiness especially depends on the structure of life. It is a kind of feeling connected with psychology . Narurelly, human likes to desire happiness to achieve. On the contrary, try avoiding sorrow. However, it is often difficult to define how to achieve happiness but true to say that has the existence in temporary life. People might agree to say, love, health and money are the source of happiness.

There are some who prefer love as a subject of happiness. Because love makes them feel happy. For example, ancient history witnesses that many couples became happy getting their favorite partner. On the other hand, many of them committed suicide only for not getting their preferred partner. In the case of health , someone refers health as the greatest wealth of life. If we look at a fat man or woman, they will describe the definition of happiness in different view. Usually who are the lack of good health, health is key of happiness to them. One of the most crucial points in achieving happiness is money. In addition, some classes try to be richer as for that they work hard all day long to gain money. They feel money is only the thing that can make him happy.

However, there are some more arguments of obtaining happiness. Some people search happiness in existing way. As a result, when they find nothing , they answer the word happiness doesn't mean anything in the world.

To sum up, I believe that happiness is an opposite word of sorrow, so it comes when sorrow releases from the mind. Happiness is the kind of mood of feeling whenever our success with something , it comes automatically .

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Writing Feedback / Creative artists should be given the freedom to express - 'range of limitation' [6]

Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own idea (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish.

In the progress of thought, many people embark on varieties of fields. It is nowadays well known subject to create pictures, music or film but how much freedom is entitled by the government ? The issue in my writing for free-express idea in the field of creative arts. However, in my opinion freely express should have a range of limitation.

It is a fact, when freeness comes around that everyone selects the way of disuse. Manually, an artist innovates whatever he or she wishes that is called freedom of expression. Moreover, different people have different choices , artists are not exceptional. They can sometimes create art which may affect in society or culture even to the young star. For example, teenagers are naturally influenced by the bad film or picture, so such type of film creation can be harmful for the country. A legal action rather than free voice is the best approach for a government.

In addition, listening music is most interesting habit to all classes of people. Apart from the negative side, artists can keep traditional culture by making attractive music on native culture. Is this sense, they are the wealth of a nation. Many historical books are taught as an academic lesson in school or college. If artists have more freedom in terms of writing may be encouraged of their creativity in art fields.

In conclusion, due to the increase of excessive freely art may cause a dangerous impact on every spare of the country. I strongly believe that creative artists are to be valued and will have free voice in crucial writing.

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Writing Feedback / Last few years, authority as well as government is highly concerned about the school atmosphere. [6]

In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviour.
What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Last few years, authority as well as government is highly concerned about the school atmosphere. Students' behavior deteriorates a good environment in school. A large number of students as a result are disturbed due to the cause of student's manner. However, there are many compelling reasons behind the cause.

Schools which are mainly the purpose of learning and teaching to the students, have several problems around which may madden students like lacking of air conditioning, inadequate sports ground, over-crowded number of students and so on. In fact, these will be the primary reasons of student's bad behavior. Adult students are always aware of legal demand when something is missing suddenly they grow annoyed. For example, if a teacher failed to conduct class, rough behavior grows instantly towards him. Moreover, when no teacher in the class, students speak out with each other and make noise. On the other hand, many of them are naturally impatient which occurs various disorders in a teaching environment.

The solution should not merely come out from authority but students have to be given parental care properly. Students are influenced by his or her partner. They will have to provide proper guideline as well as teaching of good behaviour. For instance, mother/father will teach his or her child how to adapt with the school environment, how to behave with teachers. They should be encouraged in terms of having bad results.

In conclusion, in my view, due to the lack of proper instruction in the field of school environment students creates worse nature towards teachers as well as next to the partners. Authority should take punitive measures to those of bad manner students.

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Writing Feedback / Male & female equal in universities; Different subjects according to the gender [4]

University should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

From the evidence of developing countries, the number of students with various subjects in the university are far higher but the major factor is equal demand in the field of different subjects. It is difficult to keep parity of every subject for the administration in university. However, In my view, students both male and female should have entitled to access in every subject rather than being an equal number of genders in every subject.

It is undoubtedly true universities are now full of crowded in order for the need of their preferable subject. Therefore, most of the students often prefer most demanding subject like medicine course, psychology course and so on. In that case, administration assesses the quality of the students, which is good judgement in order to empower equally both male and female. Female or male will be the candidate for a course by the selection procedure. If maintained parity, brighten male or female students may go out of estimate.

On the other hand, there are a good number of subjects which are always dominated by the females, art and design course and nursing course are the example. If the administration wants to fill up these fields by the males but remains vacant at the last. Different subjects have sundry demand according to the gender allocation. But every student gets provided the same opportunities.

In conclusion, I believe that students should not be deferred only by looking gender, if a diligent student can exhibit his or her quality, it would be wrong to deprive someone even with good experience.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS; GAP YEAR is helpful for students to gain experience through work or travel [5]

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

It is general around the countries , students are influenced to have jobs or trips during a break year. Poor students after graduating high school engage in different types of job in search of money. On the contrary, rich students visit various places in order to broaden knowledge. I fully endorse with everything the university's plan.

There are several reasons, students are actually dependent on parents due to the financial support. When students get an opportunity to take part in job during his or her one year break, it may lead him or her into selt-support. Likewise, there are some companies or organization needs to have experienced for years. Therefore, during the break if students can engage some fields will be easier to get instant job after completing graduation. For example, the company such as garments industry and marketing often claim prior experience.

On the other hand, rich students can visit different types of places and acquire different experience which is more effective in their research fields. By contrast, students will be more able to complete tasks in favour of practical experience than others. Not only traveling broadens knowledge but helps in creativity.

To sum up, I believe that a break during the education period is very helpful for the students if they properly utilize time. It will be a store of experience in both job and research field.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS; Competition instills confidence into the child's mind. [5]

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Competition instills confidence into the child's mind (hook?). Someone's attention, children are stimulated in the school to compete with each other is better off. While, others support, cooperating is helpful to bring them up to useful adults(background?) A sense of competition means the speed of study and success to goal. However, I agree with the idea mentioned first in the given statement(thesis?)

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(Reason + example) It is useful to grow a sense of motivation in the children's study rather than cooperation among them. It is undoubtedly trusted when a child failed in exam or received less mark than the others, he weeps a lot as well as parents chide him. Subsequently, he struggles hard with his lesson which helps him to be a useful adult in future. For example, a student first boy in the class if he goes in the second or down place, he seriously studes to compete against his/her counterparts. If I say about co-operation is also for learning practical skills. Children follow parents or their beside partners in the study fields where co-operating lessons with others assists them in brightening knowledge.

(Identify the topic and controlling idea.) Some people believe that competition and cooperation in the field of study are obligatory for students to reflect a spirit on the mind. Because, contesting is the challenge against rival parties, that's why, it reaches children to their aspect of destination.

In conclusion, students should highly influence to compete each other, in the same way, they will have co-operation to become a more useful adult. The student would not be intelligent until help and race among them

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Writing Feedback / IELTS; characteristics motivate to our goals and provoke to develop our self-identity [12]

Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.

It can be said, attitude of every person is an innate ability which deals with life. The issue of characteristics more than experience can motivate on our development and Individuality in life. A person whether he/she is good or bad, is assessed people by behaviour. However, in my own view, self-trails can't solely have a sense of influence on personality and development but must need experience in the way of life.

Identity is a kind of inner quality which puts on character a great familiarity. When we are born parents helps us to move and have food, similarly, we learn different activities that act in future life. Moreover , the progress in childhood makes us understanding everything around as a motivation on character. For example, children learn ancient history and their culture, which encourage them to conserve. Likewise, they like playing games, sport and integrate with different environment to experience various activities.

In addition, Some people agree with both the influence of charaterics and experiences. Self-individuality is a part of natural life even can recognize the self-esteem and self-honour. We can't live without the help of others , a good character assists to exchange everything with each other, for this reason, it is very important in life.

In conclusion, characteristics motivate to our goals and provoke to develop our self-identity. Experience to novelty keeps a good learning of knowledge.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Popular advertisement makes people to buy various goods [4]

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of the advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, technology has switched our life in many aspects like popular goods exhibition by terrestrial media. Advertising is a very convenient way for both customers and producers because it deals a way of purchasing and selling between them. In order to introduce a lunched consumer product, advertisement tempts consumers to purchase it as well. However, in my opinion, the way of advertising mentioned seems to true while not having the real needs.

Producers sell the high sales of goods focusing on the television screen, they often select popular and famous singers or actors as for their advertisements. Generally, people who like them emotionally, buy even though unnecessary needs. They are lured using a technique of tricked method. As products are highlighted with gorgeous and good quality on the TV screen but reality sometimes may be negative. Although, Not all but many products are consumed every day life while they are advertising. But the objective of advertising goods is to make products popular in the field.

People have own thought whether they will buy or not depending on their eyes-views. On the other hand, there are various aspects among the people. Some people buy impulsively after the advertisements showcase. They hardly assess the quality. It prompts among the elite classes of households. they need to be judged of measured commodities from their own parts.

In conclusion, it can be said that various goods people consume only by the popular advertisement. Every one has their own thinking on what to buy or which thinks will be better in the sense of assessment.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS; The famous sports professionals profit a lot of money in the field of sport profession [4]

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Since few years, due to the increase of popularity of sports, sports profession has prompted an emotional response among the fans. Today, undoubtedly, professionalists income is likely to be greater than before. Especially, first-class professional sports athlete is to be more earning than any other profession like teachers, doctors, lawyers and social workers. However, the argument in which I agree with the statement mentioned, will be discussed below.

The famous sports professionals profit a lot of money in the field of sport profession. Their earning may be greater in the comparison of distinguished people like a minister, lower and so on. An athlete is famous and popular in both native country as well as worldwide. They are often offered in order of their outstanding contribution in the sports area. They are valued and awarded a huge sum of money when they show excellent performance in the field. The highest paid salary in each sport is much higher, beside of official salary, they have endorsements, appearance fees, sponsorship money and other sources of extra income. For example, in my country, the national cricketer captain Shakib Al Hasan is called to create an advertisement for, which lies in on caleldar, TV screen.

There are a number of players in the sports professional enjoy a lot of facilities . In many areas they are allowed in free of cost. For example, a national athlete often are given free cars and accomodation by the government. Some companies allow them free-facilities. Due to the technology they are being more and more popular. They are well-known to the people and saluted. In contrast, other professionals are bound under their locality.

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Writing Feedback / host country ought to support cultural difference; local customs and behaviour [5]

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Advance technology has enhanced the growth of tourist around the world. It is certainly true that different nation for separated customs, culture and the way of life. Record number of people conjecture, Visitors travel the countries should be entitled to perform self-customs, while others contradict the argument. However, I believe that host country should allow visitors to practice self customs.

Millions of visitors visiting all over the world in where they are sometimes either allowed or disallowed themselves to practice their own culture. People are in different religion whose customs are different. If they are compelled to follow local customs and behaviour by the authority, it means the trigger for conflict among the racial minority. Undoubtedly, visitors sojourn in the country for one to three months for the purpose of entertainment or looking for historical ecology landscape around. Moreover, they are the temporary guest in the country.

Interim travelling to other countries is a source of earning for the government. The host country should let them free to perform their own customs. Facilities will be created for tourists according to their customs and behaviour. For example, masques should be built for Muslims, temple for Christian, as visitors get a new lease of life in the host country. Otherwise, they might create a clash. Some people express views that visitors will practice the local customs, which is often difficult to focus.

In conclusion, I believe that host country ought to support cultural difference. As a result, the number of tourists will inspire to visit the country. They should not be confined under local cultures.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS; people prefer to repeat the same things and avoid changes [4]

Topic: Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes . Others , however think that change is always a good thing . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Life is a period of dynamic force that imply the changes inevitably. In terrestrial life, people are fond of changing the lifestyle. Notwithstanding others expose the reverse, thinking unchanged in life. People view natural propensity in accordance of culture or tradition. However, the argument has been a controversial debate as to whether to prevent or embrace the change. Before going the my opinion, both points should have examined.

In the last few years, an influx of advanced technology people has encountered novelty where change has been an indispensable part in life. A large number of people think of change due to the rapid change of society and culture. Relentlessly, everything is changing in the environment. For example, a small planted tree grows up flourishing into big. A child is never child but adult to old. Once people used to depend on nature for their daily diet while today, food is exchanged through money or people grow them in cultivating in the soil. Ancient era turns into modern, it is a kind of change. So the circle is under change is vital in everywhere.

Apart from the above there are still some of the people who prefer not to change. They express that change is based on dying out the existing culture. Everything around keeps them healthier and comfortable instead of changing into advance. Moreover, changing is difficult and uncertain for them. For example, using motor car is highly risky to climb in.

In conclusion, both sides seem to have own merits. I personally believe that as life moves fast, changes in life is the change in the period. We cannot remain constant but should march through the changing times.

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Writing Feedback / ielts; gender segregation; Women should be allowed to join the armed forces [2]

Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men.

Now-a-days, women are in good position for their various professions. They are entitled to freedom, dignity and proper right due to their outstanding skill. As women are segregated from men for gender but they can bring a great improvement for society. Therefore, it would be better to give chance in joining the army, the navy and the air force as men have.

Women are the part of nation to enhance the progress of its future civilization. If they are allowed to be army according to the justified quality, the country will go ahead further rapidly in development. Because, many of whom are brilliant female students could serve more than the male does. They are like men to be given right in every field. When they would be engaged on as an army or navy, they will encourage to be educated. For example, if they are allowed in these posts, parents will give education their children to have changed in the army or navy.

The army, the navy and air force all are top range governmental profession. It is also true that someone needs to have excellent qualifications to obtain these posts. Moreover, he or she needs energy and physical fitness. Some people think women are weaker they are not deserve this kind of professions. Likewise, they will foster children and do household work. I believe, confining them under domestic chore doesn't display the empowerment. If men as well as women are similar in right as citizens, women should not have deprived in their right profession.

In conclusion, women are the member of society, however like men, have liberty in joining the army, the navy and air force. If a country evaluates equally men and women, it will reach in goal like developed countries within a short time.

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Writing Feedback / Global world changes rapidly with the influx of technology but cultural heritage never changes [3]

As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon known as globalization. Some people fear that globalisation will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity.

Globalization is the process of dealing connectivity with the international environment on culture, trade and commerce. The global society is now like a round village due to the communication and transport worldwide. The statement in the argument points out the globalization may indispensably cause losing of cultural heritage. However, I don't support in the favour of globalization will attribute the cultural identity to fade away.

There is no doubt that we live in an age of technology where globalization keeps us in touch with world communication. We consume heaps of convenience in the way of our life. We watch television programs, many of the channels assist us to deal with a better society which might influence on native culture. Foreign cultural activities can encourage local people to conserve its own culture. For example, people in India celebrate their own marriage ceremony, looking the ceremony local similar religious people will follow them and learn more about cultural activities. It makes a strong community among the people in similar ways by the help of globalization.

We lead our life following the other's culture but it doesn't indicate we forget the native cultural heritage. For example, in my country national sport is cricket, people play cricket and become more enthusiastic during the world cup. Not only exchanging trade, communication and transport network but globalization may also enhance the development of cultural identity. Some people tend to feel that when the novelty flows to the young people, foreign culture motivates them which might sometimes cause triggering of detrimental impact on local traditional culture.

Finally, it is evident that the global word changes rapidly with the influx of technology but cultural heritage never changes. People make them more standard living and may alter lifestyle due to the globalization. The tradition of a country remains alive for centuries.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18 [4]

Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

Nowadays, violent crime is on the increase very faster rate among teens. The cause of rising uncontrolled crime crops up due to the lack of preferential treatment among the children. Parents and teachers both are responsible because of adequate care in their particular position. Parental care is first step of children to learn a sense of good behaviour. Psychologists blames parents and teachers who failed to provide social and emotional learning to them. I believe rapid violent crime triggers for inadequate teaching of etiquette during childhood.

It does seem to be true that teens aged under eighteen feel potency in mind and easily can execute anything forcefully which might be cause of spead of violence. Kids imitate what they see doing others without judgement. For example, a child when goes to shool , others may motivate him/her to steal something. In this case, he needs to be tought social and emotional learning by teachers. Which child involves in illicit activities and behave with angry manner, teachers can teach them particularly.

Even teenagers are often out of control of parents. They keep themselve in touch with bad friends and create evil deeds in society. For instance, many girls fall harassment by teenagers as a result stop learning.

In addition, many children are lack of poverty therefore this forces them to involve in crime. They neither get parental care nor teachers' characteristic voice. Violent crime rises violently in order to fullfill the demand of those adult.

In conclusion, i tend to think that not only lack of social and emotional learing contribute neumorous problem but environment around youngsters motivate them to occur violent crime in society. Besides parents and teachers are primary learning centre for children. So they should first be aware of children to cut violent crime.