Writing Feedback / Fairmont Island Travel - attractive and boring places (IELTS) [2]

The two distinct pie charts illustrate the most common benefits and backwards of Fairmont Island based on a survey of tourists and are measured in percentage. Overall, it can be obviously seen that most of the visitors consider high cost of living as the highest disadvantage. However, they also think that its locals become the predominantly reason why Fairmont Island is truly attractive.

To begin, about 40% travelers agree that Fairmont Island inhabitants are the most impressive feature that this island has. The other plus point offered in this place is its scenery, in which almost two-fifths tourists, only has a gap by 3% lower than the first feature, choose it as the second most incredible benefit. Then, with the fairly similar percentage -12% and 11% respectively- visitors prefer the good accommodation and the culture as the other advantages which are obtained by visiting Fairmont.

However, virtually visitors feel that the cost of living there is extremely high, therefore roughly 45% visitors categorized it as the most common problems that they have to deal with if they go to Fairmont. While less than a third of the total tourists claim that they do not really enjoy the entertainment, the weather is what 20% of traveler thought to dislike about. The last, roughly one in twenty visitors say that the drawback actually lay on the quality of food.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 - Process of changing sea water to drinking water [NEW]

The diagram presents the making process of drinking water from sea using conventional tools. Although the process takes a long time as it relies on the sunlight, it can be obviously seen that it is an extremely simple and cheapest way to make drinkable water.

The equipment consists of roughly a meter of clear dome-shaped plastic, a floating rim, which has been hollowed before, a rubber tube and a drinking water collector. First, the hollowed floating rim is placed on the surface of the sea and ensures that the sun exposes it. In the above this rim, there is the plastic that is tightly bound with it. Then, the rubber tube is set in the bottom corner of the plastic. This tube is actually the connector between drinking water collector and the plastic.

The process begins when sea water goes inside plastic through the hollowed rim. After the puddle can be seen in this rim, the sun evaporates it and change the water into condenses. The much time passes, the more condenses will be formed in the plastic surface. Then, this water condenses flows into the rim and enters to the rubber tube. As a result, there will be lots of water in the collector and eventually, drinking water is ready to be served.

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Writing Feedback / Percentage of diverse leisure activities chosen by Australian boys and girls aging from 5 to 14 [2]

IELTS TASK 1 - Preferred leisure activities of Australian children

The given bar chart shows information about the percentage of diverse leisure activities chosen by Australian boys and girls with the interval age from 5 to 14 years old. Overall, despite of their similarity, it seems that some challenging activities are dominated by boys while girls prefer doing an activity relating with art and craft.

Apparently, Australian children have a same interest in order to spend their time as about 100% of both sexes choose watching TV or videos as their most favorite activity. Then, electronic or computer games become the second most preferable activity with the proportion of 80% boys and 60% girls. Surprisingly, at fairly similar percentage, roughly 58%, girls prefer riding bike as well as doing art and craft activity when they have leisure time. While three-quarters boys confirm that they are happier to ride a bike, only the lowest proportion of them, at approximately 38%, who choose art and craft activity as their favorite. Having a gap around 15% lower than boys, girls enjoy skateboarding or rollerblading, although, 38% boys actually prefer to do it during their spare-time.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - Percentage of online shopping for retail sectors in New Zealand [2]

The pie charts give information about the percentage of online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand and are measured in 2003 and 2013. Overall, it can be seen that 2013 saw a gradual increase in the proportion of books and film/music, while others were in reverse.

A closer look at the charts reveals that not all of the articles experienced an increase. Books and film/music, for instance, in 2013, their percentage rose gradually. Where books increased by 3%, film/music had a gap by 12% more than that of in 2003. By far, the percentage of film/music in 2013 is the highest. On the other hand, there were a fell in the percentage of other retail sectors in 2013, such as travel and clothes. Travel, which was the highest online shopping of retail sector in 2003, had a proportion at 16%, showing a decrease of 8% compared to that of in 2003, whilst clothes' percentage fell by 7%.

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Writing Feedback / Global sale of fuel and electricity-based hybrid vehicles - IELTS TASK 1 [2]

The bar chart illustrates information about the global sale of fuel and electricity-based vehicles -hybrid vehicles- by taking Japan, US and other countries as the objects of observation. In which, this chart provides the information between 2006 and 2009. Overall, it can be obviously seen that US' global sale was always the highest among two other countries, except in 2009.

A closer look at the chart reveals that three preceding years witnessed US as the highest global rate with the average roughly at 300,000. However, in the last period, by having a gap by 60,000 more, Japan successfully beat US' global rate and became the highest. The development of Japan's global rate can be said that it was very surprising since it had an average at 70,000 from 2006 to 2008, but in 2009, there was an extremely sharp rise, at around 340,000 -having a difference by 245,000 with the previous year. While Japan showed an immense development, the other seems did not have a dramatical growth in its hybrid vehicles' global rate, where 2006 saw the fairly similar state with Japan, at approximately 55,000. Then, it continuously increased regularly in each year and finally reached 110,000 in 2009.

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Writing Feedback / Effectiveness through divided assignments in a group study vs comfort of learning alone at home [3]

Task demand : Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in groups, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are many distinct ways in teaching learning process that are usually used by most teachers. However, it seems that not all teachers know which methods are the best for their students. While some people believe that students are likely more understanding when they study in groups, others think that they are better to study by themselves.

According to the pros, by having a group of study , students tend to have more encourage in studying. This is because through this method, aside from their discussion that they may have during study, they feel that they are not alone and can prevent them to fall asleep while studying. Moreover, they also feel more comfortable to give their opinion, in which they usually do not have a power to speak up when they are in a class. Above all, study in groups is more effective since they can divide their assignments with their friends and this will give them a space to rest or to do other activities. Hence, study in a group is the best method for students.

On the other hand, the opponents claim that study alone is better because in their opinion, not all students can study in a group. Some students must have a study pattern that is different with the others. For example, for studying math, physic or other counting subjects, virtually students will feel more comfortable and feel easy to understand it if they study while listening to music. In contrast, other students perhaps have other strategies to make them comfortable in learning that kinds of subjects. Therefore, it is better for them to study alone based on their behavior and habit.

In conclusion, it is no doubt that these two different methods have same purpose which is to make students become smarter and I think that it depends on each of them. Teachers and parents should let them to choose it in a freedom way as they are the one who will do that.

Writing Feedback / HEALTHY LIFESTYLE IN THE MODERN WORLD TODAY - IELTS WRITING TASK 2 [NEW]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Being healthy is a matter of option. This notion turns to be difficult for some modern-day people. Yet, the opponents argue that it is easy to maintain health if people are willing to do so. It is suggested that people should start to change their lifestyles by finding the most enjoyable steps so as to feel ease and relax.

Apparently in this contemporary era, having a healthy lifestyle is easier said than done. This trend is likely to be caused mainly by a change in the dietary habit of most people. Take United State as the example, since the ever-growing of the fast food restaurants, such food has long been a staple of Americans' diets. A 2013 survey held by statista.com revealed that there were at least 232,616 fast food establishments in U.S. Dr. Travis Stork, an American physician, says that two out of three Americans are overweight and have a difficulty to stop their sedentary lifestyles due to the widespread of these restaurants. Therefore, virtually people claim it is terribly difficult to live healthily in this developed era.

Apart from the previous discussion, others believe that being healthy starts from themselves. If people have a strong commitment and motivation to stay healthy, then everything will seem easy. Recently, Jillian Michaels, a retired fitness expert and wellness coach, has just finished publishing her book about five simple steps to be healthy. She cited in her book that living healthily is easy and do not require an extra effort to do so, since they only have to make up their mind and set some attainable goals for short and long term. After that, they can just start to work out and willing to do it continuously. Hence, it is proven that being healthy is easy to achieve.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although living healthily in the advanced era is not at all easy for some people, others think conversely. As it comes from ourselves, people should have a great motivation and a willingness to maintain it. Moreover, they need to find a healthy lifestyle in their own versions in order to enjoy its process. It is imperative that staying healthy is another way to be happy, therefore it is better to start as early as possible.

Writing Feedback / Electric-based media affect negatively on interpersonal relationships if not used wisely [2]

The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Since the revival of the advanced technology, electronic media have being produced massively. More and more people are using such media today. Apparently, not everyone agrees that these kinds of media give a good value in their lives. While virtually people argue that they have a dire effect on personal relationships with others, the opponents believe that electronic media are the best solution so as to cope with a problem of social relationships they face. However, in my opinion, those media enable people to communicate more easily and efficiently.

Electronic media influence people's lifestyles in different ways, particularly in human relationships. Some people claim that their relationships towards each other turn to get worse since they use those media. Dr. Alex Lickerman, an American internist and psychologist, said that electronic-relating engenders a sense of social isolation. This is because people tend to spend much more time cuddling with their gadgets than socializing inter-personally. As for internet-connected media, he cites that they are a poor form of communication device since they do not offer sensitive or satisfying emotional connections among their users. Hence, the use of electric-based media changes personal relationships between people.

On the other hand, others think that such media have given a rise to make them keeping in touch with their relatives and friends. According to these people, electronic media, especially the internet-based ones, provide them a limitless communication and have successfully helped them to overcome some relationship problems due to a busy tight schedule. Paul Booth, an assistant professor of media and cinema studies in the American College of Communication, concludes that people actually are becoming more social and more interactive thanks to those types of media since they do not need to go and see their friends in person when they want to communicate each other. Therefore, the notion of electronic media use gives a drawback on the human relationships is unjustifiable.

In conclusion, it is clearly stated that electric-based media affect negatively on interpersonal relationships. However, I personally stand on the other people's side who feel that their relationships become closer as they can communicate and socialize each other wherever and whenever they are. Yet, I suggest that people should be wiser in using such media, including where, when and whom with they can communicate using those devices.

Writing Feedback / Do clothes and styles people wear can define their characters? [2]

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Fashion has become a part of people's lives. Therefore, it is believed that fashion can tell someone's personality. Yet, others argue that clothes do not represent who the wearer really is. As for me, I think that the notion of judging people by their clothes is totally unjustifiable.

In some cases, outfits and styles people wear define their characters. Although some people remain to deny this issue, the status quo has proven it. Pink color, for instance, tends to be identical with women in general. Ben Holcomb, an American fashion enthusiast, says that one of the most fundamental reasons why men avoid wearing pink-colored clothes is because they are insecure wearing the color and feel it reflects their sexual orientation or degree of masculinity. According to his online survey, about 87% of women agree that they are not so keen on watching their couples in the pink as they do not want their boys labeled as effeminate. This common fact has explained briefly that, consciously or not, clothes-based stereotyping is subtle in society.

On the other hand, the opponents claim that dress does not dictate individual character. In order to tell someone's character or personality, people should go further rather than solely examine the way that they dress. A study in physiognomy - the idea that people can tell someone's character from their facial appearance - carried by Anthony Little and David Perrett, British psychology students, proved that there was a link between facial appearance and personality, even though this can be only applied to some extreme personalities, such as extroversion, conscientiousness and openness. Interestingly, Little and Perrett's study used mugshots instead of live subjects as their objects. This has successfully revealed that clothes have nothing to do with personality. Hence, the issue of judging people from their fashion and styles is utterly unacceptable.

In conclusion, while fashion-based stereotyping is likely to be common in society, in fact, personality people have cannot be defined by their looks. However, I think that rapid judgment is a kind of inappropriate behavior which people should avoid as appearance sometimes can betray a personality.

Writing Feedback / Should business executives focus on making money? - IELTS WRITING TASK 2 [2]

The purpose of business is to make money and they should concentrate only on this.
Do you agree or disagree?

Carrying on a business is another way to earn a living. While some people believe that business is just a matter of making money and that is why business executives should narrowly focus on this, others argue that gaining money solely represents as a small part of the whole purposes most business officers have. Therefore, I would personally claim that they need to concentrate on expanding their business skills rather than earning much more money.

Business executives are likely to have different intentions when they do a business. However, statistic has shown that 76% of start-ups tend to have a strong desire to make as much money as they could, since they believe that money can make the most important things in life, such as health, family relationships and friendships, so much better. Besides, according to them, money plays a vital role as well in dealing with their business requirements. Some business activities, namely marketing, advertisement and production, have a tendency to use money as the resource. Hence, it is suggested that business people should concentrate on getting much money.

The opponents, however, think that the prime aim of starting a business is to figure out how to make their business able to compete with competitors. Taking Japanese restaurant business in London as the example, there are approximately a hundred of Japanese restaurants in this megacity. As a result, the owners have to find the best way to survive and thrive. Thus, well-organized strategy and the ability to meet market's demand are far more important than making a profit.

In conclusion, although focusing on earning much money is utterly acceptable in term of business, people believe that in fact the main purpose is to prepare their business so as to compete with their rivals. Yet, in this issue I would argue that getting money is a bonus, while business executives should focus on honing their business capabilities in managing strategy and reading opportunities in the market.

Writing Feedback / The bar chart presents... TASK 1 - INTERNATIONAL GRAGUATES FROM CANADIAN UNIVERSITIES, 2001-2006 [2]

A breakdown of the proportion of international students graduating from universities located in different Canadian provinces from 2001 to 2006 is presented in the bar chart. Overall, by far the majority of foreign students graduated from universities in New Brunswick. However, in comparison with the number of graduates in 2001, the 2006 figure rose considerably in almost all provinces, but this was not likely to happen in Alberta.

Initially, the percentage of international graduates in New Brunswick stood at 7%. But then by 2006, it had increased by just over 4%. This had been represented as the greatest foreign graduates number in Canada. The lowest, however, had been seen in Ontario. Although the cohort of international students graduating from this province in 2006 showed twofold more than the 2001 figure, this had not sufficiently made it surpassing the proportion in the other provinces.

A more detailed look at the graph reveals that almost all provinces experienced an upward in the bracket of non-Canadian graduates. These differences were varies, yet a significant change was seen in British Columbia, when the figure rose from 4.8% to 10.2%. Meanwhile, the number of international students graduating from universities in Manitoba and Newfoundland & Labrador were stagnant for the first and second year, 3.8% and 6.8% respectively. Interestingly, Alberta witnessed a converse trend. At first, it stood at 5.8% and then decreased by 1.6% in 2006.

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Writing Feedback / A breakdown of the population rate in three different counties of Oregon from 1940 to 2000 [2]

A breakdown of the population rate in three different counties of Oregon from 1940 to 2000 is presented in the line graph. Overall, Washington was an ideal place to live for most people. Meanwhile, Columbia and Yamhill always presented the same population growth.

Initially, more people preferred to live in Washington. Its population reached at 75 thousand and was by far the highest. For the other countries, the population numbers stood at a very similar level, around 30 thousand. However, by 2000, there had been a significant change. A gap between the figure for Washington and other countries widened out from 45 to over 150 thousand. Interestingly, Columbia's population rate had fallen back to the 1940 Washington figure. This was accounted for 75 thousand.

During the timeline, all figures experienced an upward trend. The most noticeable change was seen in the population rate of Washington. It rose significantly to just over 120 thousand in 1970 and continuously jumped over 240 in the end of the period. For Columbia and Yamhill, the population growths always had a same pattern with a less marked gap (15 thousand in 2000).

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Writing Feedback / A breakdown of the percentage of people going to the cinema in UK according to different age groups [3]

A breakdown of the percentage of the people going to the cinema in UK according to different age groups between 1990 and 2010 is presented in the line graph. Overall, UK cinema was dominated by people aged 44-54. Despite of the fluctuation, almost all figures showed nearly same patterns.

In 1990, the middle age people (34-44) and the oldest one stood at fairly similar proportion. This accounted for around 35%, while other age groups were fewer than 30%. By 2010, however, there had been some significant changes. The most noticeable one had been presented in the gap between the age group of 34-44 and the elderly people. It had widened out from 1% to about 8%. Meanwhile, the other figures had showed a less marked difference.

A closer look at the 2000, virtually all categories hit a low. The youngest group was by far the fewest, accounted for more or less 12%. Then, all of them rose significantly until the end of period. But the figure of people aged 24-34 stagnated at roughly 32%.

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Writing Feedback / TASK 1 - HOURS OF EXERCISE AND LEVEL OF ABSENTEEISM (based on a 2012 survey) [2]

A breakdown of the information about time spent for exercising and the level of absenteeism in two different departments of large company based on a 2012 survey are presented in the bar chart and table. Overall, employees in both departments showed the same most preferable hours of working out. Additionally, the quantity of absenteeism in these distinct departments was unsteady.

By far most employees exercised between 5 and 10 hours in both departments. Having a gap by around 2%, the Birmingham department was higher than London one. However, rest of the categories showed some differences. Thirty-five percent of the employees in London department spent less than 5 hours in a gym, while other figure only halved. For two other figures, the Birmingham employees led the trend, but the most noticeable gap was seen in the third one, accounted for 15%.

Twice as many people in Birmingham department went to work than in London one, with 380 per thousand employees. But the quantity of absenteeism between 1-5 days a year in the London department was immensely higher than the other as it accounted for about 594 / 1000 workers. Surprisingly, the over 5-day time off work in former department was not quite as high as in the latter one.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - DOES COLOUR AFFECT ON PRODUCTIVITY AND PEOPLE'S HEALTH? [2]

Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals

How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people's health and capacity for work?

Colours have been part of people's lives since they were at a young age. Although some psychologists found that it can affect on the way human feel, this finding, however, is not utterly acceptable. It is suggested that other measurements should be taken into consideration as it seems more important compared to colours.

Colour does not seem affect on workers' productivity. Some people claim it distracts them instead since they tend to get headache when working in a bright-coloured office room. A 2013 survey result about the impact of colour on the journalists of New York Times showed that they preferred working in a plain-coloured room as they are able to perform better in such place. According to them, bright colours have a tendency to make a reflection. Sometimes, this makes them get headache easily. However, I would argue that a high productivity can be achieved if all employees work in a harmonious way.

Similarly, either medical personnel or patients say that colours are less important as patients' recovery does not depend on the decoration of hospital. dr. Agung Nugroho, an Indonesian doctor working in my local hospital, state that patients are more likely to concentrate on their medical treatment rather than enjoying the room decoration where they stay. Besides, colours and decoration have nothing to do with their recovery. It aims only on creating a comfortable atmosphere. Apart from this fact, I personally argue that hygiene and highly sophisticated hospital equipment are what patients more concern about.

The aforementioned evidences show that colours do not play an important role in some cases. As far as I am concerned, employers should be able to create a friendly environment in a workplace and encourage their workers to have a good sense of community so as to boost company's productivity. Meanwhile, some people believe that their recovery depends on hospital hygiene and its well-advanced equipment.

Writing Feedback / Colour in Ads. Manufacturers and retail companies know how to make people purchase their products. [2]

Colour is a powerful tool that is used to great effect by manufacturers and retail companies when they try to sell us something. In fact, many of the purchasing decisions we make are partly or largely influenced by colour.

How true is this statement? How much does colour influence us when we buy something?

Manufacturers and retail companies always find a way to make people purchase their products. While according to them colours can be used to attract more potential customers, I believe that a purchasing decision is made as a result of customers' view about the quality a product has instead of its appearance.

Colours are represented as one of the factors influencing people to purchase something. Arguably, people tend to have their own favourite colours. It seems they are more likely to buy an article coloured in their preferred one. Research carried out by business students concerning this issue proves that colours seem have a huge power to attract customers' eyes. This is followed by the decision of purchasing if they can find an item with their favourite colour. In this case, the use of colours so as to boost the sales rate is sufficiently promising.

The general view has been that quality is what matters. Some people have a tendency not willing to suffer from loss. For this reason, they will more concern in quality. In my local city, potential customers are bound to ask either the performance or the guarantee a certain electronic device has when it comes to shop. This has proven that other factors are equally important.

In conclusion, colour only takes a small proportion in determining customers' decision. As far as I am concerned, people are more likely to buy a product because of its quality rather than its colour. As a result, certain measurements should be taken into consideration in order to meet customers' expectations.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 : IS JOB INTERVIEW THE BEST METHOD OF HIRING NEW WORKER? [2]

Most employers interview candidates before hiring them. Do you think this is the best way to do it? In your opinion, what is the best method for choosing employees?

Hiring a new worker is one of the most important decisions a business owner will make. This process involves many possibilities which sometimes it can end up as a regret. Although most employers believe an interview is the best solution for this major anxiety, I would argue that another method should be taken into account.

Interview represents as the appropriate method of examining job applicants. Normally, employers are able to predict the psychology state as well as the work performance of their potential workers in the light of interview. The wikipedia.org reported in January 2016 that job interview is considered one of the most useful tools for evaluating potential employees for almost a century. Moreover, an interview tends to benefit the two parties involving since it also allows the candidate to assess the corporate culture and demands of the job. Indeed, this method is utterly justifiable so as to determine the right man for a right job.

Some other specified job opportunities require more specific competence, such as an accountant or an operator of certain machine. For this reason, employers should consider another method of hiring new workers. Ted Karkus, the CEO of Cold-EEZE manufacturer Prophase Labs, in the businessnewsdaily.com noted that employers frequently view candidates in terms of the first impressions, as opposed to matching their strengths with the responsibilities of the position. Therefore, I suggest that an interview should be accompanied by another job test in order to make it worth doing.

As far as I am concerned, finding a candidate who meets the job requirements is the same as finding a needle in a haystack. This means it is incredibly difficult. However, everything will be possible if employers are able to find the best method. Hence, it is suggested that a job interview and a competency test are the perfect combination for tackling this issue.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 : MONEY is an essential motivation at work but not the only one. [2]

Do you agree that money is the only motivation at work why people prefer working in the same company for many years?

Money seems have a power to control how people behave. The status quo believes that money is the only motivation people have to stay working in a company for many years. However, I would argue that there comes a point where other factors, such as work atmosphere and passion, override the importance of money in this term.

It is generally believed that people tend to find a job relating to their passion. This is because they are more likely to feel happier and more enjoyable when they do something which they like most. Nicoline Patricia, a well-known Indonesian photographer, in a 2013 interview admitted that she did not get sufficient money during her first shot. This did not slowed down her desire to be professional photographer since money was not what she focused on. She realized that her passion was in photography. For this reason, she has always enjoyed her work and started her day with new motivation.

Having a friendly environment is considered as the second reason why people stand on a company for a long time. This can help them to bear with a massive workload or a difficult time at work. Arguably, employees are forced to be able to perform better with many assignments. It is inevitable that this condition will lead some of the employees to suffer stress. Therefore, the role of supportive co-workers is clearly important. Moreover, Tony Robbins, a British psychologist, explains that being cared for and cared about reflect on human natural need. This can be obtained through involvement in teams at work or through close group of friends. Once people fulfilled this need, they tend not to lose it.

Indeed, money is essential but it does not illustrate the general view about what makes people loyal to their current company for several years. In fact, some little factors, namely supportive colleagues and individual interest, become the predominant reasons why people work in a same company.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 : NON ART-SKILLED STUDENTS LEARN HOW TO PAINT AND DRAW [2]

It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative and practical subjects which they may have more aptitude.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Talent is one of the arguable topics. Some people believe that there is no point making less skilled student learn about some art subjects, such as painting and drawing at school. Instead, children should be encouraged to learn other subjects which they may have more aptitude. This essay agrees with this notion because learning art needs much more time and also can make students stress.

Teaching such students about painting and drawing requires much more time and patience. In comparison with academic subjects, artistic is a skill that not any students have. It is more likely to be a natural ability or a descendant from their grandparents. In the bbc.co.uk, Lachlan Goudie , an artist and broadcaster, often says that it takes 10,000 hours of practice to get to be good at painting or drawing. This proves that learning artistic subjects is a matter of time and it seems impossible to introduce these subjects in a school curriculum. Besides, school representative has to find a competent teacher who is able to teach students and deal with them.

Furthermore, involving students who do not have a related competency in art classes will influence their psychological state. They are forced to perform as same as their fellow friends in something that they are not good at. For this reason, they will find it as a burden and fell under pressure which obviously can make them stress. Kasandra Putranto, an Indonesian psychologist, explains that forcing children to do what older people think is better for them can cause some serious problems, such as rebellion and stress. The best way to prevent is by understanding their desires. Just because they are not good at art classes does not mean they do not have competencies in other subjects. It is suggested that parents and teachers should encourage children to do any creative or practical subjects which can be really useful in the future.

In conclusion, it is utterly unjustifiable that non art-skilled students are forced to get involved in art classes since it brings more harm. It is generally believed that learning art needs much more time and sometimes can make students feel depressed. In reverse, it seems better for them to be concentrated on other subjects they are good at.

Writing Feedback / The language barrier. INTERNATIONAL STUDENT EXCHANGE. IS IT GOOD OR BAD? IELTS 2 [2]

Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

The language barrier

School seems always come up with a novel program to facilitate its students. International student exchange, for instance, has become an arguable topic to talk about. Although some teachers claim it brings more merit than demerit, others think otherwise. Personally, I would argue that the benefit students obtain from such program will outweigh the disadvantage one.

The most predominant problem students face during the period of exchange is more likely to be language barrier. This is because people in their country destination speak different language. As far as I am concerned, language comprehension is obviously essential since it helps us to communicate with others, particularly local people. Sean Lords, an American English teacher working in Seoul, says that language represented as a huge problem when it comes to go abroad. According to him, people who cannot speak local language may feel anxious, curious and angry at the same time as they do not understand what local people talk about. This may leads them to feel be alienated from society. However, student exchanges will not experience some problems relate to language if they take a course in order to acquire the language spoken in their country destination prior to going there.

The general view has been that students joining this program will be able to have international networking. In this case, they will take a part in several school programs which clearly involving many novel foreigners. For this reason, they will get an opportunity to communicate and share their ideas together and this is extremely good to built up their networking. For example, Nindya Soewandono, my local public figure, often encourages all young people in my neighborhood to get involved in every local events we have because this is a chance to meet and built a relation with others. Besides, we will never know who and how we get assisted in the future. By having an international networking, I believe that a hundreds opportunities will be obtained by student exchanges, especially those which can benefit them tomorrow.

In conclusion, everything is bound to have good as well as bad impact and I think so does international student exchange program. Language barrier, which is issued to be the drawback, is possibly tackled by taking a language course. Therefore, I would suggest that students should participate in this program as it offers a golden chance to expand their network which may be really helpful in the following days.

Writing Feedback / PLAYING ONLINE GAMES; some people believe it helps to educate children, others argue with it [3]

Some people regard online video games as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the young people who play them. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of computer and give your own opinion.

young gamers at risk

More children are getting used to play online games. Inevitably, this results in prolonged debate. While some people believe it helps to educate children, others argue that video games will only bring a drawback for its users. However, I claim that it does have a negative impact on children and more attention should be paid on restricting children for playing such games.

Online video games seem be able to educate children, particularly in term of language acquisition. Mostly, online game producers are headquartered in foreign countries. This results in the choice of language used. Texas Hold 'Em online game, for instance, is invented by group of researchers mostly from University of Alberta, Canada. It uses English as the language of playing. This will benefit children who play it regularly since they tend to learn English at the same time they are enjoying the game. Moreover, this game offers its users with a communication feature which enables them an opportunity to explore English language further. Personally, I stand on this idea but parents should accompany their children when playing some online games as sometimes, they cannot filter which word is more appropriate to use in real life.

Uncontrollable playing online games is more likely to increase a risk of suffering some vision problems, such as: nearsightedness (myopia) or hypermetropia. It is generally believed that computers or smartphones emit electromagnetic radiation through its screen. Sadly, such radiation can impair the performance of children's eyes. Now that computers and smartphones are generally commercialized, many children have started to use it for certain purposes, especially playing online games. This leads them to have some eyes problems. In comparison with children's condition in the past, modern-day children are mostly using glasses. I do agree with this notion and therefore, some measurements should be taken into consideration, perhaps, fixing a schedule when and where children can play online games.

In conclusion, although online games offer a chance for children to acquire foreign language, young people can also be contaminated by inappropriate word used when they talk to foreigners. Besides, young gamers are believed to have a higher risk of vision problems compared to their non-gamer peers. For this reason, parents should minimalize the time children spent for playing games.

Writing Feedback / The idea of using information technology to work remotely is partly or totally unjustifiable [2]

Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

The advanced technology has changed people's lifestyle. Obviously, this change can be beneficial or disadvantageous. While some people believe that information technology enables many of them to work everywhere but in their workplace, such as home, others argue that this will be pointless or, if possible, a trigger to provoke new problems.

Apparently, parents are the one who will get the most profit from this trend as they are able to take a better care of their children without having to leave their professional job. Recently, about 65% of Japanese, especially those who live in Tokyo, have confirmed that they were overwhelmed by their massive workload and deadline. For this reason, some of their children were lack of attention, hence they turned out to be uncontrollable. Since the introduction of the teleconference-based working trend, Japanese parents claim that they have had much more opportunities to look after their children and witness every single development of them. In this case, I do agree that information technology has simplified people's lives in several ways. However, it seems that such simplicity will result in the revival of some other problems, such as less satisfactory work performance.

Working outside a workplace tends to end up with bad performance. When it comes to work at home, people tend to do it while they do another thing, or this is called multitasking. In fact, it is generally believed that people have a tendency to concentrate only on one thing in particular. Clearly, there comes to some point when their work result will be not as perfect as previously. Psychologists studying the effect of performing more than one task simultaneously on humans' cognition (mental processes) have found that the mind and brain were not designed for heavy-duty multitasking. They add that mental overload can result in catastrophe. As far as I am concerned, people will not able to give their best if they are allowed to work outside their workplace. This will possibly cause an adverse impact on their company.

Although such technology can save people's time in some cases, the idea of using it to work remotely is partly or totally unjustifiable because I believe that people will be not focus on their tasks if they work in a place where there are a lot of distractions. Therefore, its drawback overrides the benefit one.