Writing Feedback / IELTS: Ageing population. What are the advantages and disadvantage [6]

The number of older people is increasing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

The effects of an ageing population are considerate. While I accept that population aging presents the positive effects, I believe that this trend's advantages are outweighed by the disadvantage.

On the one hand, the rise in the number of older people may have positive aspects. Firstly, aging population may propel progress in health technology, which brings benefits to personal-well-being. It will bring medical institutions more funds, as the need for health care is expected to increase. Consequently, advances in medical science will continuously extend human life spans. Furthermore, older population is less prone to violence, which is an important factor to social stability. For instance, compared with the elderly, youngsters tend to have more problems with drug or alcohol abuse. Instead, it is less likely that an old man tend to rob banks.

However, I would argue that the disadvantage of the aging population is vast. To begin with, aging population brings young people larger pressure. We have seen that many young adults in Japan will have to look after elderly people, with spending less time in working. People will grow used to accumulate savings for medical purpose. Apart from that, the older population will result in a greater tax burden on working adults because governments need more money to invest in hospital and nursing schools. From a social perspective, population aging will bankrupt the welfare state. As the population continue to age, the demand for the health care will grow considerably, which may cause the government deficits.

In conclusion, it seems that the potential disadvantages of population aging are more significant than the possible benefits because the older population will put pressure on the young and result in an increase in the government deficits.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: the use of computer can replace many functions of museums and libraries? [2]

Some people believe that museums and libraries are quite unnecessary for individuals and society because the use of computer can replace many functions of them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

With the continuing acceleration in digitization of information, museum has faced a revolutionary development. While I accept that computers have the ability to replace many functions of museums and libraries, I believe that these institutions need to be kept running for the benefit of citizens and society at large.

On the one hand, a few functions of museums and libraries can be replaced by that of computers. Firstly, some computer programs can be entertaining as the museums can be. The increasing capacity of digital information has expanded the function of the traditional museum. For example, people now can enjoy high-resolution image of collections in a virtual museum, which can be highly entertaining. In terms of the library, the digitization of information offers many conveniences to us. We have seen that the difficulties of using a catalogue in the British library can be overcome, especially with an online library that has modern indexing technology. Moreover, the online library makes books available from any place with Internet, meaning that reading can be easily than before.

However, I would argue that the computers cannot be a substitute for the museum and library. Compared with sitting in front of a computer, people can see artifacts in an interactive environment. This is because there are many museums that encourage a more hands-on approach. We can wear replica clothes of the Qing dynasty in China's Palace Museum, which immerse us in a slice of what Chinese ancestors' life may have been. From a social perspective, many libraries are built for protecting ancient books and preserving culture. For instance, the Alexandrian Library is important for people to study the Egyptian. Furthermore, both museums and library have a function of education. For instance, the stories behind the Louvre Museum will by explained in detail by guides if visitors go there, which can enable our next generation to learn from history.

In conclusion, it is true that most functions of museum and library cannot be replaced by the computer because the libraries and museums are still indispensable parts for individuals and society.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase salary [3]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salary.

As education is the core of modern society, people are deeply concern about the quality of education. While I accept that money-incentives can improve teacher's efficiency, I believe that there are many ways better than simply raising tutors' salaries.

On the one hand, increasing wages can attract better teachers and arouse more teachers' enthusiasm. From a pragmatic perspective, financial incentives can attract talented teachers. For example, in remote villages, salaries for teachers are low, which deters good candidates. That is why a talented graduate with a degree in education tend to find a job in big cities where usually promise a high salary. In addition, increasing wages for teachers enable them to focus on preparing lessons and academic researches. The teacher with a well-paid will never have to engage in other part-time job because of the low wage that cannot afford the housing mortgage. Thereby, the quality of teaching can be improved immediately.

However, I would argue that raising the wages is not the best choice. As the schools are always on the tight budget, it is more urgent for them to invest money in training teachers and to introduce modernized teaching equipment. To begin with, training teachers can enable students to receive better education more quickly and economically, compared to offer a huge pay to non-experienced graduates. The teaching quality can be enhanced greatly, if every teacher has got enough tainting. Moreover, investing in facilities, such as purchasing the chemical equipment and building the physics laboratory, would be better measures to improve quality of education, which is what a school really requires.

In conclusion, although providing teachers' with the huge wage is a good method to enhance the quality of education, training tutors and improving the school facilities would be better measures.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS:The most important characteristic of a leader is the good communication skill? [4]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
The most important characteristic of a politician or a leader is the good communication skill.

The leader can be described as a person who has a social influence. While I accept that having a good communication skill is the most important factor for a leader, I believe that there are many characteristics that are more important than communication skill.

On the one hand, as the communication is the art of discourse, having excellent communication ability may be a prerequisite of being a leader. The first reason is that leaders have responsibility of informing, persuading and motivating others. The communication skills play an important role in leadership. That is why people with skills could avoid language barriers and misunderstandings in discussions, meetings. Move over, expressing idea clearly is important for every politician leader because this ability can help a leader to win support for a proposal. For example, if the president Kennedy did not defend the enormous expense of the space program and delivered the excellent speech in Houston, the US would have not implemented the program in 1960s that land men on the moon and help the humankind to solve the mysteries of space.

However, I would argue that there are many people, who are good at communication and even rhetoric, but only some of them are leaders. One can be a leader if one is optimistic and intelligent. Firstly, the foundation of leading others lies in the optimism. On the way to the destination, leaders will often come across lots of obstacles, but they need an optimistic attitude to find ways to overcome difficulties. As a result, their optimism would also inspire others, which is where success lies. From another perspective, intelligence is also important for leaders. Without intelligence, politician leaders could not find the keys to solve all the intricate problems. For instance, in order to speed up economic growth, it is not enough for the eloquent Obama to deliver good speeches. It also requires Obama's intelligence to tackle the fiscal cliff issue and reduce unemployment.

In conclusion, it is hard for a person to become a leader without optimism and intelligence. It seems that there are some characteristics that are more important than the communication skill for being a leader.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:Agree or disagree? Patience is not a good thing;we should take actions at once. [3]

Agree or disagree? Patient is usually not a good thing; we should take actions at once.

Hastiness and anxiety are the psychic disease of this era. While I accept that taking actions at once may be conductive to seize opportunities, I disagree that patience is not a great character of human being.

Taking every action at once is simply unrealistic and may cause many problems. Firstly, taking all actions at once is often linked to impetuous decisions. For example, if we impulsively buy a house without taking the geographical nature and the surrounding facilities into account, we will probably regret what you did. In order to avoid mistakes, we need to make decisions under careful considerations. Moreover, as taking action in a short time usually brings about psychological burden, we may easily make mistakes while working. For example, if we intend to write a 10,000 words academic report in one night, we normally produce a report with many mistakes such as grammatical errors. In reality, it may be hard for us to produce a result at once.

On the other hand, patience is the state of endurance and perseverance which are the character traits that will help us to achieve success. One obvious example is that sportsmen need to be patient in intense exercises on purpose to break a world record. It is impossible if the sportsman does not work hard with patience. In addition, patience is conductive to effective and well-organized thought. For example, Obama administration requires time to address fiscal cliff issue step by step rather than using dramatically measures on the hope of the economy recovering from recession immediately. Lastly, being patient helps us to control our emotions when faced with difficulties, which means that people with patience would less likely be acting in a negative way.

In conclusion, it seems that being patient would be a great trait because it is a state of mind that is prerequisite of success and that enable us to think deeply and help us to control the negative feeling.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:Should company use public recognition to reward hard working, not to use money. [4]

Should company use public recognition to reward hard working, not to use money.

Incentives mechanism is a complex way of motivation, which can determine the success of organizations. While I accept that rewards and recognition can energize workers, I believe that remunerative incentives would be more effective.

On the one hand, recognition can motivate employees. Firstly, all human have a need to feel valued and respected. According to Maslow's hierarchy of needs, if people get respect from others, they will feel a sense of achievement. That is why so many graduates intend to engage in professions such as working in a law firm or being a doctor. For workers, earning great reputation means that their achievements have recognized, which can greatly enhance job satisfaction. In addition, people tend to be confident in working when they receive recognition and appreciation from the outside world. Employees will be certain that what they do is right and that the firm needs their contributions.

However, I would argue that financial incentives would be more popular among employees. From a realistic perspective, money is a tool for maintaining a basic standard of living. Without money, we are unable to buy food, afford the mortgages and pay for health care expenses. Furthermore, we tend to connect material possessions with happiness and success. Most of people aspire to earn more money because they want to own bigger houses and more luxurious automobiles. For example, many bankers like wearing the Armani suit, living in the Manhattan's Upper East Side and driving the BMW car. This is because material wealth are status symbols. Lastly, money provides a unit of account that serves as a standard to measure value. We have seen that the most direct measure of employees' contribution is the money they make for themselves.

In conclusion, it seems that compared with public recognition, the monetary incentive is more effective measure to motivate employees because it is a more realistic method to incentive workers who need more money in exchange for the necessity, to enjoy a better life and measure their contributions to the organization.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:People can learn more from watching television than by reading books. [4]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People can learn more from watching television than by reading books.

Many people enjoy watching television which plays a pivotal role in people's daily life. While I accept that many people tend to watch TV while lying down on the couch, I believe that people can learn more from the traditional materials such as books.

On the one hand, the television programmer has advantages of entertaining and informative. Firstly, television can be entertaining and enjoyable and brings the best teacher into our home. For example, combined with visual and audio effects, English learning programmers create a stimulating learning environment to attract audiences' attention. In addition, TV programmers can be informative and educational. People have a habit of collecting information from TV because the news coverage enables audiences to aware of the up-to-date events around the world. From an educational perspective, the documentaries in television make the learning process more interesting and engaging. For example, we can study astronomy, cosmology and the origin of the universe just by turning on the Discovery channel.

However, reading books is a better method of learning. To begin with, we have seen that books can go right in our pocket and be read anywhere, which bring a huge convenience to learner. We can also easily lend the grammar books to our classmates and borrow the Economist magazines from school library thanks to its small in size. Furthermore, as books are durable, information in them can be accessed over and over again, with no requirement of batteries and electricity. We have seen that we have grasped of plenty of knowledge thanks to those ancient books passed down from our ancestors. Lastly, books are user-friendly and allow readers to set their own pace and flip back and forth between pages on purpose of referencing to useful contents. Life abounds with examples in which we referent a textbook easily with tabs, marks, notes, underlines or highlights.

In conclusion, it seems that, books would be preferable in terms of learning because compared TV, the book is more portable, durable and easy-to-use.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Should Professors research or teach students? [5]

Some people think that a university professor should focus time on doing research; while others think that the main role of a professor is to educate students in university.

Professors play an important role in university and they are the people who manage the teaching and research. While I accept that teaching is the responsibility of the professor, I believe that college professors should spend more time in conducting academic study.

Firstly, as practice is the criterion of testing truth, academic success requires hands-on experiments. For example, if a medical professor does not conduct a blind experiment, it is difficult for the scholar to evaluate the effectiveness of a medical drug which is often forestalled the chance of a placebo effect. Without enough experiment, it would be hard for scholars to test the theories and explore science.

From a pragmatic perspective, conducting on research can be a method to make contributions to the human beings and society. The cutting edge knowledge comes from research. For example, the penicillin, the most widely used antibiotic to date, was discovered by a professor from Imperial College, which is a result of an experiment in a college laboratory. Experiments can help professors to develop science and technology, which can yields the results that benefit the world.

Some people concern that professors should spend more time in cultivating successors. However, I would argue that if professors never do research, can they impart empirical knowledge to students? Can the teaching standard be increased? There are many research universities, such as Harvard and Cambridge, where have high-quality teaching. The main reason is that those schools have professors who have lots of academic achievements that comes from research.

In conclusion, professors should spend more time in conducting research because research is a measure of testing principles, a way of contributing to society and a method of improving teaching quality.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: work on a presentation right away or wait until you have a good idea. [4]

When you are assigned an important presentation for work or school, you prefer to work on it right away so that you can work on it a little bit every day, or wait until you have a good idea about the presentation?

We are all familiar with the procrastination phenomenon which refers to the act of putting off important tasks to a later time. While I accept that both handing off a stressful task of making presentation until a further day may help people to cope with the anxiety, I believe that working on the task little by little would be a better measure.

We have seen that delaying the task until the last day may cause many problems. Form a psychological perspective, procrastination in presentation may result in stress and a sense of guilt. We would always be absent-minded and fearing that we cannot fulfill the task when we delay the task over and over again and these feelings combined may promote further procrastination. Therefore, we may be unable to fulfill the task by the due day. Furthermore, the poor performance is often linked to making presentation with procrastination phenomenon where students begin to apply themselves to a task immediately before deadline, with bad results due to lots of careless mistakes.

On the other hand, a good presentation normally requires plenty of preparation. For example, a MBA candidate would less likely to make an excellent presentation related to the Banking industry, if he or she does not conduct intense research on the Basel Capital Accord. In order to deliver a good outcome, students require lots of time to write a well-organized speech and create effective PowerPoint slides. In addition, True success comes from the gradual accumulation of efforts, including gathering experience and searching for information. We have seen that every tomorrow we may find out mistakes we made yesterday. Thereby, we can summarize problems, continue to improve presentation skills and produce a better result. Most importantly, simply a little bit every day, we are able to fulfill the task without haste and panic because we can establish a balance between making a presentation and hanging out with others.

In conclusion, it seems that presentation should be prepared as soon as possible, and that it would be less trouble to work on it immediately because little by little, we are able to prepare well, to accumulate more experience and make a presentation even easier.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:Extracurricular activity is as important as their academic class? [2]

Do you agree that students taking school organization and activities club is as important as their academic class.

Extracurricular activity is very popular in schools, which play an important role in students' life. While I accept that taking part in school organization may bring about negative effects to teenagers' learning process, I believe that participating in extracurricular activities is as important as what we do in the classroom.

On the one hand, taking part in School activities are usually time-consuming. Some students spend most their spare time in working on an organization. Thereby, students are unable to allot sufficient time to prepare for standardized tests which are prerequisites to attend universities. Furthermore, it may be hard for students to concentrate on studying while engaging activities, which is rooted in the fact that too many works in the organization can distract students' attention on textbook. Compared with the TOELF official Guide, most extracurricular activities can be more engaging and entertaining. That is why adolescents are more likely to spend time in playing in a basketball court rather than staying in a study room.

However, I would argue that these drawbacks are outweighed by the benefits. To begin with, setting up extracurricular activities such as sports or music can help students to maintain a regular schedule, which can develop students' good habits such as to be diligent, punctual, and to rise early on the morning. In addition, we have seen that working in an organization can mould students' characters. For instance, students become accustomed to coordinating with others after experiencing team works in a school activities. Besides, the combination of studying and playing enable a student to have many abilities. After playing a drama, youngsters will benefit from rehearsals because these activities cultivate students' creativity, leaning ability, expressiveness and collaboration. Most importantly, lots of activities is helpful supplements for youths' learning in class. As practice can motivate students to explore sciences, students can develop a deep interest in astronomy by using an astronomical telescope provided by a school organization.

In conclusion, it seems to me that participating in extracurricular activities is as important as attending academic class because these activities can develop students' good habits, mould their characters, help them to foster various abilities and enhance their interest in academic study.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:best way to make new friends?sports, community activities or travelling? [3]

Which way do you think is the best way for a student to make new friends? Joining a sports team, b. participating in community activities, or traveling。

Nowadays, students have various methods to meet new friends. While I accept that students can easily make friends through sports games and travelling, I believe that taking part in community activities is the best way for students to make friends.

On the one hand, sports provides students with opportunities to play with friends who have similar interests. Each player can build a strong relationship with others by playing within a same team, although a student has to be really good at a particular sport. In terms of taking a trip, we have seen that students can meet a wide variety of friends during a long journey. For example, in a tour bus, students can make friends with other passengers ranging from businesspeople to university professors. Although travelling is a good way to meet new friends, it is unaffordable for most students due to its time-consuming and expensive.

However, students have lots of chances to make a wider scope of friends in various community activities, including the Christmas party and community services. For example, by working together in a Christmas party, students are more easily build solid bonds with other participators, compared with in a highly competitive football game. Furthermore, students are more likely to make healthy friends in community activities, which can prevent students from falling into criminal and undesirable activities such as drug-taking and teenager-sex. Lastly, community activities can be both entertaining and engaging, which offer students a better setting to start a conversation with a good friend.

From what has been discussed, it seems that participating in community activities is a best choice for students because these activities provide youths with a wider range of friends, more good friends and a better surrounding.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:The best extra-curriculum activity, sports, community activities or traveling? [5]

Which extra-curriculum activity do you think is the best activity for students? Joining a sports team, b. participating in community activities, or traveling?

The extra-curriculum activity is a regular part of students' life, which can prevent teenagers from falling into criminal or undesirable activities such as teenage-sex or drug-taking. While I accept that students have profited from community activities or travelling, I believe that taking part in a sports team is the best way for students.

On the one hand, community activities and travelling have brought benefits to students. In community life, youngsters participate in a wide range of activities, ranging from the Christmas party to community services, which require students to communicate with neighbors and even organize activities. Thereby, youths obtain lots of opportunities to exercise interpersonal skills while playing and working. Furthermore, it has been proved that travelling can profoundly broaden adolescents' horizon. If a student have traveled to Japan, he or her can have a better understanding of what the Tokyo is like and how to communicate with Japanese, compared with simply studying in textbooks.

However, I would argue that a sport team would bring about more benefits to participators. Firstly, adolescents can improve their physical fitness in sport games. For example, basketball is a physical activities highly require flexibility, response capabilities and coordination of mind and body, all of which are important capabilities outside the sport stadiums. In addition, sport can exercise youths' willpower and endurance. We have seen that students with strong these personalities are more likely to success because they can never be impeded by temporary failures. Lastly, sports can greatly foster youngsters' team spirit which is very importantly beneficial for youths as long as they are in group, no matter in school or society,

In conclusion, it seems that joining in a sport team is the best activities outside class because it can enable students to increase fitness, exercise willpower and understand the importance of team spirit.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:Cash and coins will be replaced by credit cards in the future.Positive/Negative [3]

Nowadays, more and more people use credit cards. It seems that cash and coins will be replaced by credit cards in the future. Is this a positive or negative trend?

With the development of the financial industry, we have entered the consumption era when people are able to use credit cards. While some people argue that the introduction of credit bring about benefits to consumers, I believe that the popularity of relying entirely on credit cards is a negative trend, with causing detriments to society,

On the one hand, the credit cards will result in social problems. Firstly, the rate of personal bankruptcy will be on the rise. The compound interest policy is so complicated that many people may be unaware of having been charged lots of money, which certainly speed up the personal bankruptcy. Secondly, the credit cards is also the culprit of consumerism. The excess consumption, as a result of using credit cards, weaken citizens' self-regulation, stimulating people to spend a fortune for instant gratification, with no regard to their own financial circumstances. Lastly, credit card holders are more likely to lose money because of card thefts. With the computer hackers who make cyber-crime possible, our fortune in the credit cards are more likely to be stolen without any sign, compared with paper money.

However, credit cards also has its merits, including convenience, the reward packages and the function of the cash advance. The chief benefit is convenient because of its small size. Without having to carry a bunch of cash in our pocket, we can pay bills simply by swiping the card. Furthermore, most of credit card offer us benefits packages. For example, we can enjoy discount in the supermarket by using a certain credit card. Another advantage is that we can overdraft in advance when our cash is tight, with credit card enabling us to borrow a large sum of money from banks. Stories abound in which an entrepreneur rises money by using credit card borrowing money in order to make a bigger deal.

From what has been discussed, although there are several benefits for using credit cards, the cards will do more harm than good to people in the future because it will lead to personal bankruptcy, hyper-consumerism and money security problem.