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devabe2005   
Jan 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / iELTS Spending a lot on holding wedding celebrations are waste others are oppose [5]

Question:
Spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

Ansswer:

Celebration bring people together and help to forget our worries. Some people think that celebrating public or private provides happiness, others think that it is unnecessary. In this essay I will discuss both the views in detail.

Apparently, celebrations help to show love and affection to family members, friends and relatives. Boots bond between each other. It opens away to new contact which is obligatory for everyday business. Confers way for community links like Diwali, Christmas and New year. For example, In India, Diwali is celebrated by all communities, religions and various age groups with excitement and greet each other and share their brotherhood. It teach traditional skills and maintain different cultural identities.

On the other hand, spending lavishly to show their rich status and respect. Throwing large amount for decoration, clothes and vehicles, so forth are unnecessary. It should be under budget and they have to use it for investing and saving. For example, the report says savings help many business keep moving.

In a nutshell, though it provides some amount but it gives cheerfulness and get-together with loved ones. Spending for celebration with limited amount and saving it for future. It gives enjoyment in both celebration and investment.
devabe2005   
Jan 21, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-Some think that giving a weekly allowance to children face less problems [5]

IELTS QUESTION
Some think that giving a weekly allowance to children will help them to face less problems when they are adults. Do you agree or disagree?

ANSWER:
Allowance gives motivation for children to do their work and it is less difficulty when they became adults. To accord this statement, I completely agree it will be useful for children to manage money at young age with proper guidance.

Some of the benefits of allowance for children are ability to learn about finance, responsibility about money, consequence of decision making. For emergency period, pocket money helps them if they miss their bus pass. Children will learn about money management skills. It gives them to satisfy their needs. For instance, it allows them to buy their own necessary item like books. It motivates kids to get their chores done.

On the other hand, if children given weekly allowance they think less about money. Paying kids for doing chores make them to think working for money isn't fun. They demand for complete each activity in the home to pay for it. Sweets are very cheap; they use allowance to buy them plenty. If they get money freely they will use it lavishly. They use it for bad activity like smoking, drug, and so forth. For example, the report says that children are spending money for smoking and also illegal activity.

In a nutshell, though giving an allowance to children by weekly helps to know about benefit about money but it will destroy their lives without any supervision. So parents should be high alert on giving allowance to children, they will spend amount on unessential activity. Parent should take care about all the expenses which relax children to focus only on studies.
devabe2005   
Jan 20, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS -children play computer games than traditional games; good or a bad way? [2]

Question:
Nowadays, children play computer games for long hours and they do not play old traditional games. What do you think is the reason? Do you think this influences children in a good or a bad way?

Answer:
Technology revolution result in daily new computer games is introduced in the market. Playing computer games is very interesting for child and makes them to play for long hours than historical games. In my point of view though it has some benefit but continuous playing leads to a bad way of life.

Apparently, computer games is better leisure activity which motivates and gives self confidence for children to achieve their goals. It improves creativity among children. It enables children to dedicate their valuable time. It makes children to be adventurous and make them to be courageous to face any problem in their life. It improves their concentration. Playing games help children who are ill divert them from their pain and discomfort.

On the other hand, children are addicted towards the computer games which distract their studies. Playing for many hours make children to be obese. Due to its attractiveness make children to avoid their traditional games. Continuous playing results in psychological problem among children. Some games influence violence in the children. For example, a report says that children who playing shooting games influence them to test it in real time situation and many cases are reported around the world. Due to attractiveness of computer games produce traditional games are diminishing.

In a nutshell, though playing computer games have some advantages it affects children. It diverts children to forget their traditional games. Let's motivates children to play their traditional games to make them to be fit and respect their culture and tradition.
devabe2005   
Jan 19, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-Many shops work for 24 hours a day 7 days a week; Compare customer, shop keeper [4]

Question
Many shops work for 24 hours a day 7 days a week; some people see it as a good idea, while others don't. Compare different views of customers, shop workers and the whole society of this subject and give your opinion about it.

Answer
Nowadays, shops work for twenty four hours and seven days a week to get more profit. Some people think that is a good notion and others discord with it. In this essay, I will explore the statement based on customers, shop workers and whole society.

According to customers view, it is immense advantage for customers if shop opens for twenty four hours a week. In emergency, they can buy medicines at the midnight. For example, recently my cousin infected with wheezing problem and he struggle for breathing at night and prescribed medicine is over at home. On that time his father went to medical shop and buy medicines for him. It is an enormous advantage in emergency period.

On the other hand, according to shop workers view, it is a great disadvantage for shop workers if they work for more hours that result in stress and anxiety. Moreover there will not be much customers result in more use of man power electricity and it lead to loss of the company. For example, my neighbor shop works all twenty four hours due to greediness and there is no profit at night time result in close of shop due to insufficient fund.

In addition, based on whole society it is useless to open shops at midnight there will be less or no customers for the shopkeeper. People will sleep at night so no one comes for shopping.

In a nutshell, by comparing customers, shop workers and whole society view it is unnecessary to open a shop at night it will be a significant loss to the shop keeper. Only at emergency time need a shop but if people should buy their items in advance at the day time itself which result in wealthy and prosperous world.
devabe2005   
Jan 19, 2013
Writing Feedback / (IELTS essay) inborn talents vs trained talents. [7]

legengs in their -- spelling mistake i think typing mistake ===> legends in their

As far as i am concerned , eventhough some talents can be learned by c evere training ---> concerned means worried --> wrong usage--> better vocabulary needed in last para. cevere is spelling mistake i think typing mistake that is severe

last para will better if you start with like To conclude, In a nutshell,
In nutshell, by analyzing both the views, my opinion is that some talents can be learned by severe training or practice
devabe2005   
Jan 19, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS- Television makes the biggest impact on our daily life. [5]

Television has a great impact on our daily life. It helps to get latest information in the entire field. In this essay according to the statement, I will completely agree that television has an enormous affect on our day today life.

Television is an entertainment activity which distracted students from their studies. It influences psychological problem for everyone towards violence and drug abuse. Children are observing films and take it has real life situation and acting as the film personality. People are addicted towards films which results in various family relationship problems. For example, there is report says that most divorcee case based on continuous watching television result in conflict between husband and wife.

On the other hand, nowadays, television contains twenty four hour news channels which update current happenings around the world and helps to gain profound knowledge. Advertisement about new and existing products and their discounts helps people to awareness about the latest product in the markets. It provides various entertainment programs which relaxes mind from the hectic pace of daily activities. Discussion and debate program in the television alleviates to acquire knowledge about various topics. Moreover updated weather forecast helps to be alert on storms and cyclones. For example, Due to updating about latest weather forecast on cyclones helps parents to prevent sending their children to school and also get updating about school holiday for cyclones.

In a nutshell, despite television has some disadvantages, it is very useful for people to gain adequate knowledge and wisdom. People spend limited time on television and concentrate on their activities will is a great informer and knowledge machine to human beings.
devabe2005   
Jan 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY: prison could prevent them from becoming criminals [4]

IELTS QUESTION:
In most countries prison is the most common solution when people commit a crime. However, if they were to receive better education, it could prevent them from becoming criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

ANSWER:
In most countries prison is the most common solution when people commit a crime. However, if they were to receive better education, it could prevent them from becoming criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Prison is the best place where dangerous criminals and terrorist where jailed. In accord with the statement that if proper education given to criminal they will not commit crime in the future. I completely disagree with the statement that the education only will not prevent again to become criminals.

Apparently, education can change their mind if moral; ethics and disciplinary subject are taught to the criminal. Government should take arrangement for the criminal to study in jail so that they can earn a degree in the jail. For example, in Indian jail criminals are motivated to study in their desired and receive certificate for their graduation. Though, it changes the criminal to be a normal person but not completely for some extent.

On the other hand, mental and psychological treatment is necessary for their treatment. They must be given training in their field of interest to acquire job and other benefits which make them more responsible to prevent them to becoming criminals. Moreover, yoga and meditation make them fit for both mentally and physically. They have to be monitored and given psychological treatment according to their mental disability. They have to teach about well being, health, dynamism, self-respect and prosperity.

In a nutshell, criminals also a human being they have to treated for their mental and physical illness. Education only not averts to become criminal they have to be steadily monitored and treated for psychological and other illness. Altogether, education and treatment will help to stop some extent of criminals.

Prison is the best place where dangerous criminals and terrorist where jailed. In accord with the statement that if proper education given to criminal they will not commit crime in the future. I completely disagree with the statement that the education only will not prevent again to become criminals.

Apparently, education can change their mind if moral; ethics and disciplinary subject are taught to the criminal. Government should take arrangement for the criminal to study in jail so that they can earn a degree in the jail. For example, in Indian jail criminals are motivated to study in their desired and receive certificate for their graduation. Though, it changes the criminal to be a normal person but not completely for some extent.

On the other hand, mental and psychological treatment is necessary for their treatment. They must be given training in their field of interest to acquire job and other benefits which make them more responsible to prevent them to becoming criminals. Moreover, yoga and meditation make them fit for both mentally and physically. They have to be monitored and given psychological treatment according to their mental disability. They have to teach about well being, health, dynamism, self-respect and prosperity.

In a nutshell, criminals also a human being they have to treated for their mental and physical illness. Education only not averts to become criminal they have to be steadily monitored and treated for psychological and other illness. Altogether, education and treatment will help to stop some extent of criminals.
devabe2005   
Jan 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: university students live their families while others live away from home [3]

Education is vital for all the students. It is mandatory for outstation students to take room or hostel near to their university and some students live in same city so they will live at home. In this essay, I will explore both the situation and explain each criteria advantages and disadvantages in detail.

Student who stay at home have full support from their family and relatives. They are disciplined and under control of parents. Students get full financial support for their tuition fees and materials. For example, I stayed at home when I was studying college, I received full financial support, and I received pocket money for my travelling and also money for buying reference books and materials. It helped a great support for my engineering studies. Though staying at home has advantages it has some disadvantages. They are unable to concentrate on studies due to disturbance from family members and relatives. Due to daily pocket money result in bad habits. They have very less knowledge in financial management. No freedom for making decision as they have to obey their parents

On the other hand, travel time will reduce if they stay room near to university. Share books and materials with inmates of the room. Exchange ideas and acquire profound knowledge from peers. They are independent in taking decision according to their interest. Able to learn different culture and religion as their associates are different religion. Improve communication skills as they have to talk and live with the strangers. Staying in a room has some disadvantages. Due to bad company students are addicted to smoking and alcohols. Students feel home-sickness due to staying away from home and friends. He will face financial burden to manage hostel fees, food and materials.

In a nutshell, by analyzing both the situation, have advantages and disadvantages. If aim of the student to study well whatever situation he will study and get excellent marks in his examination. Let's motivate the student community to aim higher for their examination.
devabe2005   
Jan 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / (IELTS) factors affecting job satisfaction in adulthood [3]

job satisfaction is highly necessary in an individuals working age--> not meaning full better if go this--> job satisfaction is highly necessary for all working individuals.

Unsatisfied job environment leaves result in muchenormous trouble for both physically and psychologically. --> is very simple go for vocabulary like enormous

generation in the comming future. --> future is always going to come no need extra word "comming" before future
devabe2005   
Jan 15, 2013
Writing Feedback / People want to be attractive so that everyone will have to look on their costumes and accessories [3]

IELTS TASK2 ESSAY
QUESTION:
Nowadays, many people go shopping in their free time. Shopping has replaced many other activities that people choose as their hobby. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

ANSWER:
Shopping is unavoidable to everyone in this modern world. There are various reason people visiting retail as their leisure activity than other activities. In this essay, I will explain reason for buying as hobby and its positive and negative improvements.

There are various reasons behind shopping as their free time activity. People want to be attractive so that everyone will have to look on their costumes and accessories. Moreover, they want to try different clothes, food, cosmetic products etc. The other reason is to search for missing piece of their wardrobe. Many buy gifts for deer ones on their birthday and anniversary. Most of the family on weekends visit restaurant to dine. Youngsters are passionate to change their mobiles to new upgraded features. It gives happiness and best pass time.

Some of positive progress of shopping is people aware about new products and prices in the market. It boosts their negotiation skills. Helps acquire profound knowledge about the each product. It improves communication skills with the strangers. It is best fitness activity moving one shop to another searching for specific product. On the other hand, people become negative growth of shopping are addiction results more expense and time. Psychological problem arises due to not satisfactory of the product.

In a nutshell, there is strong reason behind for people frequent shopping as their hobby. By analyzing both positive and negative advancement of shopping advantages outweigh the disadvantages of shopping. People are more enjoying their shopping in their spare time.
devabe2005   
Jan 15, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Shopping is an unavoidable worrying necessity for many people [7]

show their effluence --> flowing out vocabulary usage is not matching
corrected one as follows
show their status

shops also are also supposed to spent their time

wasting the time and energy of themselves --> seems to be detailed explanation change it to short
better usage as follows
wasting their time and energy

fetal to the peace and prosperity of the society. ---> I think fetal spelling mistake

overall good essay. require more vocabulary.
devabe2005   
Jan 14, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY - people are forgetting national celebrations and enjoying on other days. [4]

IELTS TASK2 ESSAY:
QUESTION:

Nowadays people are forgetting national celebrations and enjoying themselves on other days that are important to them personally. Discuss and give your opinion.

ANSWER:
In this modern life, people are giving more preference to other day celebrations than the national celebrations. As they are enjoying other days as it give more happiness and socialism. There are various reasons people are disdain their national celebration. In this essay I will explain more detail about the various causes behind it.

Undeniably, other day celebrations like Valentine's day, Friendship day, Holy, Deepavali, Christmas etc., are celebrated imperative all over the world. The essence is they are sharing love, affection and gifts. Due to financial crisis, government education policy makes younger generation losing their national spirit. For example, in Britain most of the youth protest due to increase of tuition fees, unemployment and education funding cuts.

Moreover, due to increase in tax payment, higher competition in job, which force people to concentrate on their ambition rather than on their nation. School children are forced to study for long hours to get good marks instead of knowing values, culture of their country. Due to international trade policy, some countries burden on their people. For example, In India, people are fury on the government decision on hiking petrol and diesel prices steadily make people to focus on money instead of their nation.

In addition, due to corruption of the government servants who make people are against the nation. It results in financial crisis force people to migrate to other richer countries to enrich lifestyle. For example, In India, due to poverty and unemployment, people are migrating to wealthy nations like United States of America, United Kingdom, Australia, Canada, etc.

In a nutshell, patriotism in all over the world fading gradually due to various reasons and forces them to celebrate on other days instead of their national day celebrations. Children should be taught national values, integrity, brotherhood and discipline. Government employees are protector of the nation they should be honest in their work and well being of their nation which will result in prosperity and integrity in their nation.
devabe2005   
Jan 14, 2013
Writing Feedback / Why Many undergraduates and postgraduates face many difficulties? IELTS [5]

Finally the classroom where the student is studying is different such as at university different class with different student in different ages at the same years but at school same ages in the same class.

Hope following following line will be better
Finally, In school the same age students are studying but in college different age group of students are studying.
devabe2005   
Jan 13, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY; job for lifetime or multiple career which is best. Give opinion [3]

Question:
Some say that people should continue to work in the same job for a lifetime; others say they should change the job at least once in their career. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and support it with examples.

Answer:
Nowadays, Job market is very competitive requires more knowledge and skilled professionals to cope up with technology revolution. Some people believe that sticking with one job for permanent in their career is best while others think that changing alternative career is the great. In this essay, I will explain both views in detail.

Apparently, some people assume that continuing same career in lifetime acquires rigorous knowledge in their field. They gain more experience and specialist in tackle all the issues in their work. In addition, they have accurate decision making ability, management skills and strategies to handle their field work. If there is recession in their field they are laid off and cannot postulate in any other job result in stress and anxiety leads to suicide in some cases.

On the other hand, people knowing two careers help them in difficult situation. For example, if an employee has experience or knowledge in both Information technology and hotel management, in recession if he lay off in Information technology field, he can switch over to Hotel Management field. Though it as advantage but have some disadvantage. We know the proverb, "Jack in all but master in none"; according to the proverb they won't have exhaustive skill in their field. They are not a specialist to solve critical problem in their profession.

In a nutshell, by analyzing both the views, my opinion is though having multiple career has some disadvantage it is useful in than a lifetime career which is always risk in this rising machinery world. Moreover, life time career have more disadvantage then advantage.
devabe2005   
Jan 12, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY; animal species become extinct because of natural processes [5]

IELTS TASK2 ESSAY:
Question:

Some animal species such as dinosaurs and dodos become extinct because of natural processes. So, it is not necessary to try and prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

Answer:
We know the proverb, "Nature is the art of God", natural disaster like earthquake, tsunami, flood, tornadoes, volcanic eruptions, droughts, hailstorms, heat waves, avalanches, blizzards, cyclonic storms, wildfires etc., are volatile cannot prevent from the world. In this essay, I completely agree that we cannot forbid animal species destruction from the globe due to natural disaster.

Nowadays, development in technology advancement, scientist can predict earth quake occur in particular area or forecast bad weather for future months. Scientist deployed tsunami alert system connected from sea to satellite through which they can monitor and alert tsunami occurrence in all over the earth. This can help enormously only to the human kind not for wild animals living in the forest.

Although, zoo and zoological parks across the world, protects different variety of rare animals. It breeds to prohibit its extinction. Currently, occurrence of global warming, sea water level rising deeply and submerge most of the land area all over the world. It will result in great disaster to living beings in the earth. Scientist are started their research on living condition in moon or on other planets in order to live to protect from natural calamity. Due to cannibalism, scarce species are obliterating around the continent.

In nutshell, like the proverb "Time and tide wait for none", natural disaster can appear anytime in any place and we cannot proscribe or anticipate because it is by innate process. Beyond human intelligence natural disaster is something unpredictable, all living being cannot escape from it.
devabe2005   
Jan 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / Who are more important? Older people or children (IELTS) [3]

Question:
In certain cultures old age is considered to be more important while in others it's the opposite, children are thought to be more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Answer:
Old age and children are both filled with happiness. Some people believe that older age is significant while others think that children are more crucial stage in a life period. In this essay, I will explain both the views in detail.

Undeniably, older people are experience, matured, intelligent, in all the aspects of life. They show path to youngsters. They play major role in family decision. For example, in India elders are imperious decision authority in a family, they are important factor in all the actions in the family. Moreover, they have imperative qualities such as good morals and ethics, truthfulness, sincerity and respect and inheriting such quality to the young people. They can tackle any problems with their profound knowledge and wisdom.

On the other side of the coin, children are energetic, smart, optimistic, enthusiastic, dedicative to their goals and future of our world. Their activities always are fun and grasp abstract concepts and apply logic in various scenarios. They need appreciation, availability and acceptance from others and extra-ordinary care from parents. Government supports free education for children as they are the prospect citizens. Youngsters are assertive, innovative, updated with technological skills. They are buttress to the society.

To conclude, by analyzing both the view, in my opinion older and younger age are valuable to the society. They contribute most of the happiness, love, affection, compassion to the society. It is difficult to differentiate old and young age both play vital role in the community.
devabe2005   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / First letter to my pen pal; IELTS TASK 1 [6]

Hi,

Overall good letter.

Some problem in this i think "To" should not come first
To let you know about me

correct,
Let you know about me
Let give detailed description about me

All the best!
devabe2005   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / EILTS task 2 - causes and solutions for overweight [3]

Hi,

overall good essay.

Include more vocabulary.
better usage of words is required.
potatoes on the sofa ----> sedentary lifestyle

You can add additional issues like stress and anxiety, over-eating, working for long hours in office
solutions like proper food diet, yoga and meditation.
devabe2005   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY, Private companies spending more than government in scientific research [5]

Private companies that support and carry out scientific research are spending more than governments in these days. Do the advantage of this development outweigh Its disadvantage..? Explain and give your reasons.

Answer:
Private companies provide significant contribution in scientific research. Government are insufficient to provide resource to all scientific research because it has to allocate budgets for the entire field. IN this essay, I will explore both advantages and disadvantages about private company contribution in scientific research.

Private companies contributes larger amount to discover medicines for new diseases. For example, medicines for AIDS, polio, chicken box vaccinations, etc., are very useful to mankind. Moreover, scientific research in test tube baby by private organization is a great revolution in medical field. It helps parents who are infertile enables to get baby from their genes.

On the other hand of the coin, separate companies can sell copyrights and procedures of the medical scientific research like cloning, genetics, etc., to terrorist groups which would be a great disaster. Furthermore, private companies may involve in anti-human scientific research for great profit. For example, anthrax, highly infectious disease which Americans are feared to attack by bio-terrorist in last decades. In addition, private companies research and develop in different new types of nuclear weapons, chemical bombs which can be sold to terrorist.

For instance, a report claimed that Pakistan terrorist used chemical bombs in karkil war on Indian military which is illegally mad by the private research company sold to the terrorist.

By analysing both advantages and disadvantage about wealth contribution by private research organization was, helpful for both human and anti-human researches. Government should take necessary action to prevent anti-human scientific research by the private companies. So that future scientific research would be substantial assistance to human race.
devabe2005   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Brain drain: wealthy nations should compensate poor countries? [5]

overall good essay. keep it up.

comma should not come after who in the folllowing sentence
There are others who, invest a portion of their income in their own countries.

correct line as follows
There are others who invest a portion of their income in their own countries.

Regards,
Devaraj

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