gmad06
Nov 25, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-In some countries, the old age is more valued, while in some countries the youth [14]
well here are some of your mistakes:
the old and the young in comaprison
wrong words..
articles...
articles..
the variation of your vocabulary is very minimal,try to go for synonyms like elderly, aged, minors, teens, children
hope this helps...
well here are some of your mistakes:
In comparison with the old and the youth
the old and the young in comaprison
some cultures believesthat the old age
others consider the youth deserve more youth.
wrong words..
Survey made by an financial magazine
articles...
that the multinational companies are likely
articles..
the variation of your vocabulary is very minimal,try to go for synonyms like elderly, aged, minors, teens, children
hope this helps...