eddies [Contributor]
Mar 3, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS;More & more people are relying on private cars as their major means of transport [4]
You write well. However, it is nicer if you could construct the concluding paragraph with this following structure:
This is the pattern for the concluding paragraph. Hopefully, this works well.
THE CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH
This has three parts:
1. a 'conclusion' signal: In conclusion, ....etc,
2. a summary of the main points or a restatement of the thesis (in different words!)
3. a final comment, based on the information in the essay
The final comment can be:
3.1 a warning or prediction (often using the first conditional: If ..., ... will ...)
3.2. a suggestion or recommendation (often using should or must)
In the conclusion, i would like to highlight the importance of public transport and walking for substitution of car. It creates healthy environment and has good impact on our health.
You write well. However, it is nicer if you could construct the concluding paragraph with this following structure:
This is the pattern for the concluding paragraph. Hopefully, this works well.
THE CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH
This has three parts:
1. a 'conclusion' signal: In conclusion, ....etc,
2. a summary of the main points or a restatement of the thesis (in different words!)
3. a final comment, based on the information in the essay
The final comment can be:
3.1 a warning or prediction (often using the first conditional: If ..., ... will ...)
3.2. a suggestion or recommendation (often using should or must)