Writing Feedback / Global warming is the serious problem in the world : IELTS Task 2 [3]

Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today.
What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

In these recent decades, the most danger threat in the earth is global warming which becomes an environmental catastrophe in a global scale. While there are some causes of this problem which indicate to our carbon footprints as a major problem that are released regularly in the huge amount, I utterly believe that individuals and governments have to work together with some novel solutions to overcome this worrying issue.

With regard to the exponential increase of gases in the atmosphere, those results in the rise of global temperature which trap heat from the sun and then it damages the layer of ozone. Recent research indicates that factories and vehicles produce the largest amount of exhaust fumes which was produced by the number of cars in the street and factory production. Those pose a threat as the root cause which leads to the environmental consequences.

In addition, the increasing world population exerts considerable pressure on natural resources. For instance, rainforest areas store large amount of carbon and enable to prevent the acceleration of climate change. However, in this globalization era, many developers cut down the forests to build up new residential areas. As a result, the more the forest areas are destroyed, the more the gases are released in the atmosphere, and the more the global warming could not be hindered.

On the other hand, governments and individuals have to get involved in the direct and indirect actions which can reduce the primary causes of greenhouses gases. Firstly, governments could introduce the laws to limit emission from the factories and vehicles. Take green taxes as an example, it can be imposed on drivers and airlines companies in order to minimize long journey and flights abroad. Regardless of this solution, individual have to arouse their self awareness to keep the earth, and one of the possible action is taking public transport rather that driving. Finally, inhabitants can be engaged to do small things such as using alternative energy sources and planting some plants in the garden.

In conclusion, it seems to me that global warming will more be serious problem, if there are no preventions to reduce the causes of climate change from government and individuals. Where possible, governments have to encourage all population to pay attention to their environment as a priority.

Writing Feedback / Communication skills within internal and external companies over a 10-year period; IELTS Task 1 [2]

The table illustrates the percentage of crucial aspects that require communication skills in job to maintain effective communication with external and internal companies between 1997 and 2006, over a 10-year period. It is measured in percentage

Overall, what stands out from the table examines that dealing with people in the external affairs and listening to the colleagues held the largest proportion. Although all activities in external group rose considerably, selling a product or service had negatively correlation.

According to the survey, three jobs which required highly skills of communication recorded a significant increase of about 4 percent. First of all, the result showed that dealing with people pointed out the highest proportion of respondents who got involved in this survey. However, a wide gap between 1997 and 2006 was experienced by knowledge of products and services which increased sharply to 41% in 2006. Interestingly, selling a product witnessed a slight decrease from 24% in 1997 to 21% in 2006.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: The invention of mobile phones brings direct and indirect effects. [3]

There are social, medical, and technical problems associated with the use of mobile phones.
What forms do they take?
Do you agree the problems of mobile phones outweigh the benefits?

Cutting-edge technology is part of daily life. One of the most important technologies which engage with people's activity is mobile phones. Some people argue that using cell-phones has dire consequences that result in some social, medical and technical dilemmas. While mobile phones become worse distractions, the benefits of these advanced devices are important to provide convenient lives for users.

There is no doubt that mobile phones change the way people maintain effective communication with colleagues. In this modern era, people are more likely to use mobile phones as the mean of communication rather than doing face-to-face communication. Recent research indicates that the majority of people in cosmopolitan cities are completely isolation because they are bordered in the virtual communication.

In addition, the newly invented technologies, mobile phones, resort people to adopt sedentary lifestyles because they spend the rest of the time to surf internet and play online games. A result shows that in Indonesia, most inhabitants use internet more than 10 hours a day in terms of entertainment as a source of amusement. Obviously, this activity causes some illness such as myopia and obesity.

The innovation of some sophisticated technologies forces the reconstruction of technological infrastructure to support the availability of networking. In some developing countries, signal is the common problem that happens in some remote areas. In fact, the active users who live in radius 10 km from the cell-phone tower are difficult to gain strong signal. Consequently, the telecommunication service providers must concern to solve this problem.

On the other hand, mobile phones are the useful devices to communicate and do some tasks. Many students who study abroad rely on cell-phones to keep in touch with their family and friends in their home countries. In addition, utilizing of mobile phones makes life much more convenient as businessmen can send email anywhere and anytime that only requires internet connection. Moreover, some applications can spoil users in the terrible situation. For instance, in traffic congestion, music is the best companion to release stress so that people will need mobile phone to play some songs which are stored in the internal memory.

In conclusion, there are negative effects of mobile phones that can interrupt humans' lives in social, medical and technical problems. Despite its drawbacks, mobile phones provide the flexibility in term of communication. Where possible, to avoid those problems, people should pay more attention to their circumstances to mitigate problems.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : The village of Stokerford (Map) [2]

The map illustrates the main changes that have occurred in the village of Stokerford between 1930 and 2010, over a 70-year period. The most noticeable change is the replace of cattle farmlands with several major of residential zones.

According to the map in 1930, the housing areas only located in the middle of the village which were 10 houses. However, in 2010, there were urbanized with many houses along the main road. Moreover, the area of large house and garden was situated near by primary school in 1930 while in 2010, that area was modernized as the Retirement home.

A closer look at the picture shows that shops which were located in the beside of post office, in 2010, had been replaced by houses although post office as the public facility had stood at the same position. Meanwhile, primary school was extended with two new buildings in the east of the main building. Interestingly, the main road which was running from the north to the south of village in 1930. 2010 were built some branches of roads which connected to housing areas and retirement house.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Animal testing becomes public debate [2]

Some people think that the use of animal for experimentation is cruel. Other think it is good for the development of science. Discuss the two sides and give your opinion.

Animal testing in some medical tests is debatable for some reasons. This public debate arouses people's interest to come up with their idea that experimentation on animals is unethical because humans have no moral right to do experiment on faunas. However, critics claim that animal testing is necessary to advance medical and scientific knowledge in some important medical discoveries. Therefore, I strongly believe that both arguments have different perspectives in terms of animal testing.

With regard to the experiment of animals, people believe that it is understandable to use animal in important scientific research as scientists need experimentation to test a new drug in order to cope the rare disease. Take scientists in America as an example, they have to find out a drug to cure a danger disease, Ebola in 2015, which kills many people in the South Africa. In this study, scientists use mice to advance the medical research and analyse the product before the drug is taken by the sufferers. As a result, animal testing helps in medical tests on a new medicine in order to combat the bacterial infection of Ebola disease.

On the other hand, others argue that animal testing should be banned for moral reasons. Firstly, experiment on animals is unethical because animals have a same right as humans, and the live of animals should be respected. Regardless of this reason, the use of animal for experimentation cannot be justified by suffering caused as there are some alternative ways that can be used to invent a new drug in medical discoveries. Finally, humans have no right to use animals in some experiments because the more the scientists use animals on medical research, the more the animals lead to extinction.

In the light of the aforementioned facts, I personally believe that the reason of animal testing cannot be accepted because scientist enable to take other means of experiment with using plants which have the similar substances like animals. While using animals as object of experimentation is cruel, in the some crucial medical tests animals are allowed so as to prevent the widespread of danger disease using a new drug. Where possible, animal testing should be restricted with the strict policy which controls the experimentation.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : Air travel should be controlled to save the earth. [2]

Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources. What extent do you agree or disagree?

With the growth in aviation, the majority of people are more likely travelling abroad to spend their leisure time in the special occasions. One of the most tangible influences of this phenomenon is the exponential increase of thousand airlines which provide low-cost carrier, and it is argued as the trigger of environmental catastrophes on a global scale such as air pollution and lack of fossil fuel so that critics claim air travel should be controlled. While it is believed that air travel provides more benefits in terms of time consumed and reasonable prices, people also have to consider the negative side of this transportation on the natural ecology.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : Taxes burden citizens in some countries. [6]

People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Money has been as an essential part of humankind. For this reason, the majority of workers argue that their money should not be spent on tax because they need to fulfill their basic survival needs. While this reason can be understandable for some reasons, I utterly believe that paying tax brings some tangible benefits as it supports the development of the countries.

Some workers that support the argument of not paying tax believe that they are the breadwinners who withstand the financial matters of their families. Result shows that in the cosmopolitan cities such as Melbourne and London, the cost of living is extremely expensive. Averagely, citizens have annual expenditure of $52,000. It can be concluded that if they have to pay tax, they will have no enough money to survive.

In addition, some people who have an occupation take responsibility for paying the children's education cost rather than spending money on the state. A study, conducted by Harvard University, points out that tuition fees are by far the largest proportion of spending money which requires over a half of amount of personal income. By doing so, the more the tax they pay, the more the education becomes neglected.

On the other hand, tax is the main financial resource for governments to develop the country. Firstly, the significant development can be seen in the public facilities. For pragmatic instance, local council of Jakarta spends much money on public transportation, houses, and green areas. Another contribution of taxes is to provide citizen with better health care that can result in prolonging life expectation. Finally, taxes are used to give benefit support for people who live under poverty line.

The aforementioned evidence examines that the tax which citizens have paid helps governments to improve welfare state in the country. While paying tax can burden people linked to living cost and education matters, it fosters the developments in the country. Where possible, all citizens should pay taxes as their responsibilities.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Coffee exports in 3 different nations. [2]

The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012.

The line graph provides the information with regard to the amount of coffee exported from three different countries; Brazil, Colombia, and Costa Rica; from 2002 to 2012, over the 10-year period. It is measured in kilograms of millions.

It is noticeable that what stands up from the graph examines that in general trend, all countries experienced an upward trend in the end of the period. However, the amount of coffee exported in three nations fluctuated in the reminder of the time.

The striking point is that there was a dramatic rise in the coffee exports in Brazil and Colombia. Brazil's exportation of coffee accounted for 60 kilograms of millions in 2002, higher than the other two countries. Standing in contrast, the amount of coffee exports in this country increased dramatically over the next 6 years, while 2008 to 2010 witnessed a moderate drop between 20 million and around 22 million of exported coffee levels in Brazil . However, the amount of coffee exports in Brazil inclined slightly onwards. In terms of coffee exports, Columbia hit a low of amount which was approximately 3 million in 2008, whereas from 2008 to 2012 the amount of coffee exports rose suddenly.

A closer look at the data reveals that Costa Rica pointed out the highest amount of exported coffee in the beginning the period at 15 million, although this figure showed a dramatic fall from 2002 to 2006 between 15 and 12 million, a drop of 3 kilograms of millions. Having said and that, Costa Rica's exportation of coffee recovered significantly towards the next 7 years, representing roughly 20 kilograms of millions.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: An international language is the language of problem solving. [3]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Language is the bridge to a county's culture. For this reason, some proponents argue that children have to be engaged with a second language at formal education as opposed to study at informal school. In my opinion, the beneficial values from this perspective are greater that the further adverse influences.

With regard to the prompting of a foreign language, some experts deliberate that this language gives a potential influence so as to create the golden opportunity for children in the future. Taking Gayatri Wailissa as an example, she is a student at junior high school in Indonesia, and has a mental agility to speak in 11 foreign languages without attending a language course. In 2013, she got involved in Convention on the Right of the Child (CRC) in Thailand as a young speaker. As such, it perfectly exemplifies that a second language widens horizon in the international network.

Furthermore, the primary education is an ideal place to learn about the second language because it holds an essential role to enhance students' ability. In the fact, Oxford University conducted a research that more than 30 percent of students in the universities of Russell group at United Kingdom have been dominated by International students. By doing so, English language is required to be compulsory subject in the primary school around the world to prepare some students securing a place at one of the country's most prestigious seat of learning in the world.

However, there are a number of reasons why studying a second language in formal education has some detrimental effects for children. First of all, learning a second language in primary school intrudes on other lessons, and make schoolchildren lack of curiosity due to the fact that the secondary school is the best option to educate children about this subject. In addition, children normally do not hesitate to practice speaking a foreign language with their friend in the school although they have no concept. This habit will accelerate their spoken skill rapidly, and kids will neglect the native language as an original culture, and cannot evoke a sense of pride for the nation. Lastly, pupils neglect the original language, and it will be endangered because there is a tendency that well-educated person is about ability to speak in some international languages, English and Germany.

In conclusion, whereas there are some drawbacks of implementation a second language in primary school, I personally believe that this subject provides a bright pathway for children to get an access to a whole new world in the future. As a consequence, children should be encouraged to learn about a foreign language from the first grade in school. The earlier the children learn about an international language, the brighter the future is going to be held.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : The influence of advanced technology in people's lives [3]

There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people's lives. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

The newly-invented technology changes people's lives. It is true that the invention of technology improves quality of life for people in today era. While the improvement results in great convenience, I believe that there are some drawbacks of technological development.

Supporters to this statement argue that the major advanced technology provides a positive influence because everyone has easy access to acquire in-depth information. Take the internet as an example, over following 30 years, the development of technology has been spreading in the world, and it has been automation for some process. Long time ago, people went shopping in the conventional store, but these days, some shoppers change their behaviour to buy some basic survival needs in the online shop, surfing in amazon.com or texco.co.uk.

Furthermore, FBI in the United States sets CCTV cameras which are connected to Tripwire, a U.S. system designed to catch terrorists. However, a study shows that video surveillance in Britain has feared the UK, in terms of "sleep-walk into a surveillance society". Having said and that, the implementation of surveillance cameras in public areas can solve some illegal actions as an authentic evidence to impose criminals in the prison sentence. All in all, it is understandable that the latest technology offers many substantial benefits in human lives.

On the other hand, there are some drawbacks of multitasking technology. Firstly, children are easily to go on some dangerous sites in the internet. So, the rate of cohabitation cases experiences a significant increase in the modern era. Moreover, the morality is abandoned due to a sense of sexuality. In addition, some household technologies, washing machine and vacuum cleaner, help people to do chores activities so people do not have enough physical movement and become illness. Lastly, the advances technologies, smart phone and tablet, channels many netizens into an isolated life. As a result, they cannot maintain effective communication with their colleagues in the real life.

In conclusion, technology gives positive influence for some people to accomplish some activities. However, negative effects also engage with the development of technology. I believe the ethic of internet usage should concern to prevent from a cyber crime and children should be under parental surveillance as long as they use the internet.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : The surveillance of closed-circuit television [5]

Many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?

Video cameras are the second security. For this reason, some parts of the world require the surveillance cameras which are situated in some public areas to prevent illegal actions. However, several people argue that these solutions will give restriction for individual privacy. Therefore, I strongly believe that the implementation of closed-circuit televisions has some merits and demerits.

Supporters of this development assume that video cameras give some beneficial values for citizens. Firstly, those devices can secure some potential victims to a serious crime when video cameras spread in bus stations. Those tools can give a sense of fear among the criminals due to they realize that legal authority watches the condition in this location. In addition, local shops can earn much income because the surveillance cameras help them to cut down labours on duty and they can open the shop for long hours. Lastly, CCTV can be authentic evidence to investigate a vicious crime.

However, the development of sophisticated video recorders violates individual privacy because the equipments restrict some activities. Take some shoppers as an example, they seem a criminal when CCTV take them under control in every corner stores. As a consequence, they do not feel to visit these supermarkets and some people point out the fact that their movements are being watched closely every minute and they do not feel relaxed. As a result, few people vote against for the camera systems.

In conclusion, there are some potential drawbacks as the impact from the development of video cameras in public pleases, whereas CCTV can reduce the rate of crimes for some reasons. Having said and that, I strongly believe that the public camera system should be encouraged for a safer tomorrow.

Writing Feedback / [IELTS Task 2] Newly-invented technology VS the role of teacher at schools. [3]

Some people think computer and the internet are important in children's study, but others think can learn effectively in school with teachers. Discuss both side and give your own opinion.

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Education is a valuable investment for a great future. For this reason, several people argue that the newly-invented technologies are the significant aspects in children's study. However, critics claim that the great place to educate young people is at formal education. Therefore, I believe that both points of view have different perspectives.

Thanks to advanced technology, there are some advantages for schoolchildren. Firstly, technological devices in the classroom have undeniable links to academic performance. It is clear that the use of computers is the precursors to improve students' ability in computer science. In addition, computer and the internet arouse children's interest in new lessons. So, they will gain the novelty to operate a smart application such a word processor for writing report which is useful for their future. Lastly, the internet is an ideal place to do research. It provides many online resources which help students to acquire much detailed knowledge quickly.

However, schools engage many professional teachers in order elevating children's intelligence. Schoolteachers play an essential role to teach their pupils and to control children behavior in the classroom. Take William Henry Perkin, inventor synthetic dyes, as an example, he secured a place at one of the country's most prestigious seats of learning to read chemistry. Perkin's teacher identified his as having unusual intelligence and remarkable mental agility and his teacher encourage him to attend a series of lectures. In this opportunity, Perkin presented the impressive speech and made some expert breathtaking. From this reality, there is no doubt that schools are the effective place for children's education.

In conclusion, the development of latest technologies address some parents to channel their children with some sophisticated devices in educational area, whereas it is imperative that teachers' role in school cannot be changed by computers and the internet. Having said and that, I strongly deliberate that schools should concern in the collaboration between technological and traditional approach.