Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2- Control the water usage is good to prevent a world disaster [3]

As water is a valuable resource, governments all over the world should control how much water their citizens use?
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

People cannot live without water as water is an essential for human being. Some people argue governments all over the world should control the volume of citizen's water consumption. I agree this solution can give more advantage to the inhabitant than the demerit.

By controlling the amount of liquid was used by the inhabitants is the best way for the authorities to prevent from the limited of water, because water is difficult to be recovered in all place in this word. An excessive water used can reduce water spare on the earth, it not only affect local but also global and the effect is continuous drought. It can conclude that, all governments in this planet should control the usage of water to prevent world from limited water.

Although it is hard to control the water usage, it is no doubt is important to control the water consumption by everyone, people use water for domestic purpose, agriculture and industrial aims. It is impossible to form a border of water needs especially basic purpose for drink, cooking and hygiene. Therefore government should make a rule to cover this need. It is clear to say that to control the water consumption is hard to do but it is essential.

It can conclude that every government should control inhabitant's usage of water in order to prevent water supply although it is hard to do. Where possible, the authorities should fund the researches how to recovery the water sources all around the worlds, because drought in one region will affects other places.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - Some alteration in Queen Mary Hospital [3]

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the alterations that have occurred at Queen Mary Hospital over a 40-year period beginning in 1960 and ending in 2000. Overall there were most noticeable change is the replacement of shopping center and farmland with the cancer center and pharmacy at the end of the period.

At the beginning, in 1960, there were shopping center and farmland on the left side and there were hospital and car park on the right side. In 1980, to improve the services, the pharmacy has been built next to hospital. There were also a cancer center beside the pharmacy and in front of it a nursing school has been established. The remained unchanged were hospital and car park.

In 2000, there was still a changes from 1980, the cancer center become bigger, it replaced the nursing school, so the shape of the building look like letter L. Therefore a half of the car park has also altered, where nursing school stood in it.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2- Avoid the negative effect of the electronic invention [2]

As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that electronic inventions has improved people's lives in many ways, such as the computer and television. Some people argue that it will impact a negative influence on their health because of less exercise or physical pursuit. I believe that the advantage of cutting age technology outweighs the negative impact, because people do the exercise or not depends on their habitual.

Nowadays, become healthy is not hard to pursuit, because some television programs present how to be fit and strong by exercising, so people do not need to work on gym and they can also watched it on the webs or on the screen. Everyone can be fit and strong if they doing the exercise properly even in their occupants, and it depends someone's habit in sport activities. Therefore, people can get advantage from electronic inventions to keep their health.

However, some people do not care about healthy living, they more pay attention on watching some programs that makes them sit at the same place for hours without any physical movement. And the more convenient the thing, the more people use it. For instance, people who is keen on Korean drama will spend time along day just for watching it, they rare move. As a result of this, they will have problem with their backbone. It conclude that, it affects negative to people's health if they spent much time for unnecessary reason for hours.

It is clear to conclude that the inventions in electronic devices is harmless for people's who has an exercising habit, because they can use it to improve their health by watching some exercise programs. Although, for others it will be harmful if they spent time in front of the screens too much compares to other activities. Where possible, we should choose the program that can help us to protect our health than just leisure programs.

Writing Feedback / The greatest changes of an attractive island by maximize some novel facilities to improve tourism [3]

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map illustrates the changes that have occurred at the island by maximize some novel facilities to improve tourism. Overall, it was totally changed.

From the first picture, it can be seen there was only an island with a beach in the west side and some tree on the land. To enhance the tourism, there were two areas of accommodations, the first was about two hundred meters from the beach with some green area at the middle, and the other was on the center of the island, close to green area. Each building had a footpath and each group had circle-shaped with empty area in the middle.

To equip the amenities of travelers a restaurant and reception were built between these regions of accommodation and there was a vehicle track to connect the restaurant and the reception straight to the new pier, there were some sailing ship alongside it. The others facilities were swimming area close to the beach at the west side of the island and some additional tree.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - People should study what they really immerse in it [3]

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Everyone plans a triumphant future. Some people say student in college should takes their major that mostly enjoyable, others believe they should take the most convenient subject, for instance; science and technology. Although it becomes easy to find job, but they may not delight in their position, therefore I believe they should acquire what they really relish, because they can being immerse in it, so they can give the best result.

In this modern era, many people study in science and technology because they think will find job easily even do not enjoy it, just undertake perforce. For instance parents ask their child to join in Technical College, he will study there and get job, because there are numerous vacancy, but he cannot relish it along his life. As a result, he feels meaningless. It is clear that people cannot performs well in things they do not enjoy, although it is useful in that time for others.

However, people who carry out study what they relish, give the outstanding result. Because he is immerse and waxes enthusiastic about his plan. For instance, someone who is fond of photography will search every attractive object and sacrifice his time, money even energy to discover it. As a result of this, he produces an excellent result and becomes a well-known artist. Everyone appreciate his pictures and it delivered him to be a successful man. People get success in their life if they enjoy their task and depends on their preference and aptitude.

In conclusion, students who study the useful subjects such as science and technology, can find job easily but will be hard to get success in future if they do not enjoy it, yet students who relish the enjoyable studies will get more successful since they always present the outstanding result. Therefore, parents should allow their children to choose studying in preference subjects and which is appropriate to their talent.

Writing Feedback / Global Population Growth from 1800 and Urban Populations Prediction until 2100 - 3 centuries period [2]

The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the increase of global people during 1800 and 2100, and the bar chart shows the number of people who occupy in inner city in developed regions and in developing regions between 2015 and 2040 and were measured in millions of people. Both of these graphs shows an inclining of the total number of people, but in developed regions the amount of urban population remained stable during the period.

From 1800 to 1940 there was a gradual growth in world-wide society from 1000 to 2100, but after these period, the number of population increased dramatically and will reach a peak at 2040, about 8000. And it will decrease slightly to finish the period at around 6100.

The bar chart gives information about the amount of citizen in urban area will increase significantly in developing countries, starts at 2100 to 4000 at the end of period. It will be almost two times from the beginning. In contrast, it will remain stable in developing countries about 1300 over the period.

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Writing Feedback / The most popular transport in Edmonton. Cars represent more than 2/5 of all transportation types. [4]

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of inhabitant's transportation in Edmonton and the table shows the reasons of using car in inner city. It is measured in percent. Overall from the first chart, the most favorite transportation is car, and mostly they utilized it for commuting to work.

Most citizen in Edmonton used car as their transport facilities, representing more than two fifths of all the transportation types. It can be seen, people in this inner city preferred to utilize Light Rail Transit (LRT) than bus or taxi, it is only 10 % lower than using car, about 35%. They also used taxi and bus at only 10 % for each type.

From the table, commute to work is the most reason why people used car as their vehicle, more than half of all people's reason. Secondly was doing business, about 45% and closed to this position was taking children to school, only a 5% difference. From these three reasons, people utilize car for their routine activities along day and other reasons were shopping and for their leisure activities, about 15% each reason.

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Writing Feedback / Australian family's monthly expenditure on food, clothing, transport, electricity and water [3]

The table shows an average monthly family expenses in Australia in 1991 and 2001 and is measured in Australian Dollar. At first glance that, with the exception of clothing and transport, Australian family spent money much more in 2001 than 1991.

In 2001, turning first to electricity and water, it was the highest increase of money usage, at 60%. In contrast of this the Australian's family expense for transportation and clothing decreased significantly about 36% and 33% lower than in 1991.

Both in 1991 and in 2001, the biggest expenditure of every Australian family was for non-essential goods and services about 37% in 1991 and 38% in 2001 and others cost remained the same proportion excepted housing and electricity. The dramatic increase in electricity expenditure caused electricity expense as the third highest money cost, which was the fourth position in 1991, whereas clothing was the lowest cost of the all monthly budget of Australian family.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Traveling to many different places makes you more sophisticated [3]

Some people like to travel to somewhere new and different when they go on holiday, while others prefer familiar places.
Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to visiting new places?

Travelling is a necessity for people nowadays. Many people like holidaying to the different destination, but others choose the same place. I believe travelling to new different tourist destination makes people more sophisticated than just touring to the place that people have been there before, although sometimes traveling to the new place makes someone more stressed.

By travelling people can learn disparate customs. It's one of the advantage when people holidaying. As people can live in and involve in the society's life and imitate their way of live. For instance, Japanese has unique tradition when they give greetings to the elderly people by bowing their head and stooping their elbows, it is a good experience that traveler can see only in Japan. As the effect of this, when they come to another country, they experiences a difference. Although a new habit can make some people more stressed, because it need an effort to adapt and sometimes many situation cannot be predicted. It conclusion, holidaying in new different destination will give new information, although it would be more stressed.

Travelling to the familiar place give secure feeling, people has experienced it before and they already accustomed to local's way of life. When people go back to the same place, they have memorized it, because of being seen, met or heard. Unfortunately, they get less new experiences and knowledge about others customs. It concludes that travelling to the different destination give secure feeling but less knowledge.

In conclusion, holidaying to new different tourist destination give another knowledge about local's custom, although there is a probability to be more stressed than go to the familiar destination. Where possible, it is good to travel to new different place, therefore you will be involved in local's way of life.

Writing Feedback / 'electricity cost increase' - Some alteration in Australian monthly expenditure in 1991 and 2001 [3]

The table below displays the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows an average monthly family expenses in Australia in 1991 and 2001 and is measured in Australian Dollar. At first glance that, with the exception of clothing and transport, Australian family spent money much more in 2001 than 1991.

In 2001, turning first to electricity and water, it was the highest increase of money usage, at 60%. In contrast of this the Australian's family expense for transportation and clothing decreased significantly about 36% and 33% lower than in 1991.

Both in 1991 and in 2001, the biggest expenditure of every Australian family was for non-essential goods and services about 37% in 1991 and 38% in 2001 and others cost remained the same proportion excepted housing and electricity. The dramatic increase in electricity expenditure caused electricity expense as the third highest money cost, which was the fourth position in 1991, whereas clothing was the lowest cost of the all monthly budget of Australian family.

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Writing Feedback / Most people desire the happiness. Some of them think that you can buy it with money. It is not true. [2]

Some people believe that our happiness depends on how much money we have. Others say that money cannot buy happiness. Do you think that having money is the key to happiness or are there more important factors?

Most people desire the happiness. Some people think contentment depends on their wealth, but others say money cannot acquire happiness. I do agree people's blissfulness does not depend on the number of their prosperity and cannot be purchased by money as money can buy anything that people want, since the higher people's earning the higher expectation.

Everyone works hardly in order to get higher incomes and money. They think their happiness is influenced by their finance, since they can use their income to buy the goods they want even they do not need it. For instance the wealthy will buy jaguar even they have had a car. So, they spending their time to get more money not for leisure time. It is evident that numerous money not influence the happiness even people can purchase what they want. I believe wealth cannot affect the contentment.

Happiness is a thing that is affected ample factors. Expectation is one aspect that related to the happiness, which it cannot be purchased with money, because higher earning did not mean it can find the expectation, as higher income influences the increase of the expectation which is unlimited. As sample the riches expect to stay in luxurious hotel than inn. Therefore they never meet the happiness. It conclude, even they have more money, but it cannot buy blissfulness.

To sum up, I believe happiness is not affected by the number of properties even we have it and people cannot purchase the blissfulness. Where possible everyone should have more time to enjoy their success since happiness is unlimited.

Writing Feedback / A thing that you can learn about another country by visiting it and impossible to know just from TV? [2]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and film about it than by actually visiting it.
How true is this statements? Is there anything that you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes about it?

Television programmes and films broaden people's horizon, especially to the young people and children. People can get more knowledge about other nations through television programmes and watching movies which share about these countries. But I believe it will be better way if people travel and stay abroad which they learn directly to native inhabitant both habit and culture totally than just watching partially on television programmes and film.

Every society has different habit and customs, which is affected by the history. To know more about it people should learn deeply and experience the same environment. Travelling and living in other country means being involved in native society and more than just seeing the habit and culture. Western people who come to Indonesia can observe how villager can walk without shoes. As a result of this traveler remember the reason and the effect of the habit which became a culture. It is evident that this such immersion activities than just watching.

Most television programmes and movie just describe the most important part of another country, not all the aspects of lives and generally it only tell the good one. For instance, sheriff in old American films always represents as a hero, in fact not all sheriff is good. As a result we only see partially of the native habit and customs, this way is not enough to give us more detailed information.

To conclude, although we can learn foreign cultures and habit by learning television programmes and watching movies, but I would believe by travelling and living in native nation gives more knowledge of the whole part of other's habit and customs. Where possible it is good being stayed a while for traveler in overseas which they can be involved in native inhabitant.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Children should not go to work. They must instead to educate themselves at schools. [2]

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience.

Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

Child worker is a global problems in certain countries. Some people argue it is unacceptable while others say this is highly recommended. While it can be a valuable working experience, I would believe child who works while studying is hard to be accepted as this make them become an illiterated person.

Children who live in poverty areas, generally will get a job in order to support their parents fulfilling the household revenue but also it will be a precious working experience in their future. For example, child in Bangkok is used to work at a small restaurant or traditional market as a waiter or waitress. They can use their skill in service if they will work for service company years later. As a result, they do not need to get some courses, they can apply their experiences in decent work.

There is no doubt that this has a good impact for children to work in their childhood.Unfortunately, there is a negative side of child labor. Children who get a job while studying has a tendency to be uneducated person, since they have no sufficient time to learn. They directly go to the job and work until night. It means they cannot prepare well for the next day. As a result of this, there will be a massive problem which they will be an illiterated generation in the future. It is evident that children worker will be risky to the future.

To sum up, I would believe it cannot be accepted that children have to work as they will become an illiterated generation, although they have a precious working experience. Where possible it is good if The Government make some funding programs for disadvantage students.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Global trade is important to fulfill people's need [2]

As Global trade increases many goods, including those we use on daily basis are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distances.

Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

Currently, International trade has increased. Many primary needs are imported from other countries. Its benefits like availability of citizen needs which are not found in this countries far eclipse any drawbacks, although this will make small local business bankrupt.

The development of International trading showed an increasing in number which has a good impact to mankind's life. People's necessity nowadays is different from past. Consequently society's primary needs has burgeoned in past few year, customer will try to find their supplier even if their needs must be imported from overseas. This is an opportunity to the trader to meet a demand of customer and to maintain the availability of society's necessity which not available in their nation even it was from a far distance. For instance, some of branded clothes from Italy can be found in Singapore. It conclude that global trade increases is good for mankind's live.

On the other hand, the inclining of global commerce also has negative side which will impact directly to the small local business. They will be collapse because they must compete with other multinational companies, which may be have a huge amount of money and resources. This is not a good for developing local business, they must create a new way to survive their business, but it can be a trigger for them to service well. It conclude that there is a probability of small local business to be bankrupt.

To conclude, the rising of international trade gives good effect to the availability of inhabitant's primary necessity, which cannot be found on their native regions will be met. Although, it also will affect small business bankrupt. I believe that the advantage of multinational trading improvement is more than any demerit. Where possible, it is better if we still use our local product than imported product.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Doing job that really love not always make people get the happiness [4]

Some people say that in order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing. Other say that other factors are more important.

Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job really enjoy?

Everyone wants to be happy. Many people thinks if they want to be happy, they have to work by doing a job they really impressed, but others say there are some factors that can affect people's happiness. I do believe there are numerous factors that can make mankind perfectly content, working is only one thing, because people live not only for working. Although having job that really love it can give the satisfied result.

People's happiness is affected many factors in their life, such as family, job, relationship, faith and etc. For instance, Japanese people are known as keen worker and they relish mostly. According to the BBC News, in 2015, South Korea and Japan are two highest suicide rate among wealth nations. In Japan, 70 suicides per day which the fastest growing suicide demographic is young men aged 20-40, many Japanese men feel isolated from others. Evidently, job is not the only factor, I conclude and believe other factors are more necessary.

People who get occupation that make them impressed produce the best. Mother Theresa is a good sample to explain this idea. She worked for helping people in the poverty area in India, she loved what she was doing, and it has been recognized and acclaimed throughout the world and has received a number of awards and distinctions included Nobel peace prize. It conclude best result can be achieved by one who enjoy their work.

In conclusion, I strongly believe having job that people really enjoy is only one factor that makes people happy because it can deliver the best result, but other factors are more important since people live not only for working. Where possible, spending time to others is better way to be happy.

Writing Feedback / The internet makes our live completely different - IELTS TASK 2 [4]

The internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be completely different.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Technology invention makes mankind's lives more convenient. The internet is the most popular innovation of the three decades which some people argue that without it their live quite dissimilar. I do agree that networking makes communication easier, although the rising of cyber crime is increasing.

In the past people can connected across the globe only by mail, then it has developed by using phone and know we can do it by the internet. This improvement proves invention in technology gives facilities to humankind especially in correspondence. For instance, people in India can connect directly to their relatives in the Netherlands by using video call from smart phone, sending e-mail and using social networking such as Facebook, Twitter and others only just in a few minutes. As a result people can keep contact more intense to others although they are separated by distance. It is evident that the internet fosters in communication.

However, there is no doubt that the internet also has demerit in human's life such as the rising of cyber crime. In the light of the recent cyber-attacks on bank, health insurers, retailers and other sectors. It's no surprise that everyone is concerned, because of the risk in financial loss or other deceptions. For sample, somebody can hack credit card and use it to purchase. As a result of this, society new a law that can prevent from criminal networking. It is conclude that the internet impact the inclining of cyber crime.

To conclude, although there is a probability that causes the rate of cyber crime is rising, but I agree that the internet makes a significant difference in people's lives, especially to communicate easily. I suggest the Government should in charge to make some rules related to the risk mitigation around cyber security.