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My father said my essay sucked (Why Engineering? Why Cornell)

6 - Engineering reminds me of the particle accelerators that smash atoms together to make extraordinary products. If we put the...

Undergraduatechuliuxiang - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
Alex and Su essay (the Monkey King and Alexander the Great) common app

6 - I applaud your extra effort. When you feel inspiration come over you, always use it! Put the comma...

Undergraduatejenf3r - Nov 24, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
[BYU] What to write in a brief biography?

6 - Good! It's funny how, in order to achieve your goals, sometimes you need to be smart and tell people...

UndergraduateAmyRemus - Dec 19, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
Should we hide feeling or not?

2 - I am very above-board and talkative. I tend to express what I think . However, hiding emotions also has...

UndergraduatePuck - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
'disciplinary lessons' - Tufts - Short Answer

6 - Yes, I second that! You guys are great! To all of you who offer such meaningful peer reviews, please...

Undergraduatehello123 - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
'I began to finalize my own college list' - Why Carnegie?

12 - Cornell harbors brilliant professors and a diverse student body that I know will stimulate me to be my best....

Undergraduate123abc - Dec 23, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
common app short answer (work at the hospital)

3 - Having worked at the hospital for almost two years has helped me prepare for the real world, at least...

Undergraduatejoke0611 - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
Common App-Significant Experience- To jump or not to jump (suggestions pls)

5 - I was not the kind of girl who enjoyed going without showers for a week, surviving on the staple...

Undergraduatecutiepotutie25 - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
As inventory and supply manager of the restaurant, such is a typical work day for me.

3 - It had been a long tiring walk to the restaurant from the Port Authority. I finally reached the restaurant...

Undergraduateakashnegi - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
'I came from a past marked by war and political corruption in my homeland' - UVA supplement essay

3 - My parents, during the Salvadorian civil war, belonged to two opposing political factions, embodying the spirit of Romeo &...

Undergraduategmanz - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
U of wisconsin essay - "knowledge is boundless"

3 - Heyy...I wrote another one...i felt this answers more of the question... The University of Wisconsin values an educational...

Undergraduateprincetongirl - Dec 23, 2008 / princetongirl - Dec 27, 2008
Common application essay (why the caged bird sings) --is it too typical?

4 - Only the establishing of the timeline. Once you have fixed that and the metaphors, you can post the revised...

UndergraduateHg4ever - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 27, 2008
JHU essay - why this major

3 - Your opening dialogue now ties in to your introduction much more clearly. Grammatically, "CEO, the check that we received...

UndergraduateSapphire - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 27, 2008
Biomedical Engineering at the McCormick School of Engineering and Applied Science - NU essay

3 - The revised version is definitely clearer. You could smooth out the grammar like this: I wish to study...

Undergraduatechuliuxiang - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 27, 2008
"My vacation of 2007" - Princeton Supplemental Essay

8 - Thanks for pointing out my mistakes. When I read my essay, I knew there were something that has to...

UndergraduateAngela629 - Dec 18, 2008 / Angela629 - Dec 27, 2008
Common App Essay- 'Passion'

5 - Thanks for all the comments! They have been very useful (:...

Undergraduatechickpig - Dec 21, 2008 / chickpig - Dec 27, 2008
College of Arts and Sciences- Cornell Essay (need advice on shortening)

4 - Actually, after reviewing the essay, I find that the front portion of paragraph 1 is still relevant because it...

Undergraduatechickpig - Dec 20, 2008 / chickpig - Dec 27, 2008
Upenn Essays - the courses of study that most interest me

6 - Hmm mcwingo20, I'm not too sure how to fit in 'interesting catchers' for an essay prompt like this because...

Undergraduatechickpig - Dec 19, 2008 / chickpig - Dec 27, 2008
MIT (Optional Essay: Describe something you've built)

3 - Thanks for the advice. Are there any other grammatical errors and do you think this is an effective essay?...

Undergraduateocer22891 - Dec 26, 2008 / ocer22891 - Dec 27, 2008
General essay question - Stories

4 - I think its very important that the point can relate all three stories though! I wrote an essay in...

Undergraduatet3h50 - Dec 25, 2008 / shadiali - Dec 27, 2008
undergrad essay, Pratt is the best option for me

2 - This essay suffers from numerous grammatical problems, but before you revise for grammar and style, I would advise rewriting...

Undergraduatelorerainbow - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 26, 2008
why tufts? need to know if its specific enough

10 - thanks heaps guys! I feel that SAT CR section is much easier than this "why us" questions. Its very...

Undergraduatezowzow - Dec 26, 2008 / zowzow - Dec 26, 2008
Middlebury College Essay ~ on Christmas Eve lol

5 - Looks great! Merry Christmas to you too! (Have you got a good recipe for hot and sour soup?) ...

UndergraduateBensonGuo - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
My mother's depression - personal academic interests relate to your intellectual goals

2 - Fortunately, her distress eventually got better after one change in her daily routine: consultinga psychiatrist. However, in my...

Undergraduateahpahf723 - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
'one's self is through discovery' - EMORY supplement

4 - when you mention your friend be sure to add a name, it will make it sound more personal. Also...

Undergraduatemustaa - Dec 25, 2008 / debaterchick09 - Dec 26, 2008
MIT (Short Activity Essay) RUNNING!

4 - This is a very nicely written answer. There's a lot of imagery in there that helps the reader grasp...

Undergraduateocer22891 - Dec 26, 2008 / hello123 - Dec 26, 2008
first moments teaching - Common App Essay - A story (Topic of Choice)

5 - Good Essay, but like said just a bit too wordy :)...

Undergraduatexperceptionx - Dec 26, 2008 / ocer22891 - Dec 26, 2008
'an elderly man singing' - Emory Supplement

7 - yeah, social studies and social sciences...but thanks anyways!...

Undergraduateyee - Dec 24, 2008 / yee - Dec 26, 2008
Extra curricular essay (helping Thanh in English)

3 - Since then, I was very excited to help him because he not only helped me in my Physics and...

Undergraduatekingah - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
'Love for sciences and environmental studies' - Johns Hopkins Essay

3 - Thank you so much Kevin :]...

Undergraduateatomvik - Dec 25, 2008 / atomvik - Dec 26, 2008
U of Illinois application essay (the local church worship team in Korea)

3 - At first, I was very reluctant to accept the offer when the team leader asked me to play the...

Undergraduateahpahf723 - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
Cornell Engineering Essay. (Not titled yet)

5 - Homecan be a place of tranquility or chaos, but it should be the person's choice, regardless of where the...

Undergraduatedrman54 - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
Why CMU essay - Computer Science School

4 - Alright guys thanks for the advice.. I did have some more stuff that I was gonna put in but...

Undergraduatevaibhav2614 - Dec 25, 2008 / vaibhav2614 - Dec 26, 2008
Cornell Essay - interests in economics

3 - Thank You imike. I really appreciate it!...

Undergraduatehbinjo - Dec 26, 2008 / hbinjo - Dec 26, 2008
Why U of C Essay

3 - "So, where do you want to go to college?" A simple question that has become a reoccurring theme over...

Undergraduater991183878 - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
UPenn Supplement (academic programs!)

2 - To me, it's fascinating how the beautiful syllables of the word "UPenn" truly reflect the characteristics of the University...

UndergraduateIvy_91 - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
CommonApp Essay: "I am.... born in India"

3 - I wasn't sure if colleges would like an essay describing various experiences instead of simply expanding on one single...

Undergraduateashwin17 - Dec 25, 2008 / ashwin17 - Dec 26, 2008
Global warming. Stanford essay. Solution? 'Working together as a society'

4 - We may drive our cars to a store four blocks away or go to another city, but the distance...

Undergraduatemember123 - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
Why Bates supplement any suggestion and comment is welcomed

4 - I think you answered the question nicely! :)...

Undergraduatejustinwang - Dec 24, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
'Academically and Athletically' Trinity College essay help

2 - I would make the last two sentences into their own paragraph, that would wrap up your ending nicely! ...

UndergraduateKTarsa - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
UPENN page 217 of a 300 page biography

4 - Somebody else has asked this question in the past. The truth is, they probably expect you to be talking...

Undergraduatepikezander144 - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
UPenn required supplement length?

6 - A little short is okay, but try to get as close to the number they specify as possible. It's...

Undergraduatepikezander144 - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
"With Pressure, the Fruits of Labor Will Taste Even Sweeter" Common App

5 - There's no word limit, it just gives the question and leaves it up to the writer I guess. ..and...

UndergraduateMelafire29 - Dec 24, 2008 / Melafire29 - Dec 26, 2008
'girl from a foreign country had impact' - harvard common app

26 - chink i need ur help again lol after the climax " see you later big brother" should...

Undergraduatequack09 - Dec 10, 2008 / quack09 - Dec 26, 2008
'special interest clubs and organizations' - Pitzer Supplement Essay

9 - The workers that my aunt hired were always interesting, because my aunt hired workers based on their needs, rather...

Undergraduatedennyssampler - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
Common short essay: Summary of activity, all comments are welcomed

8 - I taught my students Everyday English, which was not an easy task. Most of the students were very shy...

Undergraduatejustinwang - Dec 23, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
"A reason to everything that happens" app essay- revision?

3 - Thank you very much!!!...

Undergraduatexsilverlovex - Dec 23, 2008 / xsilverlovex - Dec 26, 2008
Common Application Essay: personal/local concern and its importance

2 - Sights in India are often quickly associated with street cows, monuments, festivals and modernization, which I do not deny...

Undergraduateexperimentalist - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
Rice Supplement- Cultural Essay

5 - You can cut out SOME of that 3rd paragraph to shorten it, but it is the 2nd paragraph that...

UndergraduateChiHF9009 - Dec 24, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
Common App essay - Uniquely "Un-Asian"

5 - Yes, change it to Malaysian, so it is more specific and descriptive. Words and phrases are like employees; the...

Undergraduatelali - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
'earthquake-hit areas' - Sarah Lawrence essay about changes

4 - "You're going to study abroad? What's your major?" I knew my answer. To say, "It's undecided," was thought to...

Undergraduatevan_gogh - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
Among all majors, I believe engineering helps us enhance our lives; Columbia Short Answers

4 - Thanks so much!! :)...

UndergraduateJJBrown - Dec 24, 2008 / JJBrown - Dec 26, 2008
'Ambiguity ' - University of Virginia (favorite word)

2 - Ambiguity seems to bother some, and this is understandable . The ambiguous nature of literature also enables me...

Undergraduatealice955 - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
"integrity"; This is the idea that I would like to convey, does it make sense and read well?

3 - At, the Pizzeria however all of my effort was ignored --- The comma should be removed you focused...

Undergraduatepurple92 - Dec 26, 2008 / imike - Dec 26, 2008
Common app essay: Topic of your choice ("a flower vase")

7 - wow thanks alot kevin i think i kinda get it :) does the essay feel very long? if...

Undergraduatenylrej - Dec 22, 2008 / nylrej - Dec 26, 2008
Common Application Short Response(Activity-Cambodia trip)

2 - A little more than a year ago, I was a part of a trip to Cambodia. To contribute to...

Undergraduatealice955 - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
Common App Essay - Topic of your Choice (My passion for public speaking?)

2 - Well, the first part of that last paragraph is good... but you can conclude with mention of how your...

UndergraduateUnicornsnowind - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
Common app essay (topic of your choice) - Fly high

2 - The mention of the book is fine!! If you talked about it any more than you did, it would...

Undergraduatechocolatelee - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
FIT Essay - Fashion and Wall Street job

5 - Thanks for the feedback, everyone! Another question for you guys? Do you think the beginning of my essay...

Undergraduateblackkpearl09 - Dec 23, 2008 / blackkpearl09 - Dec 26, 2008
Listening to calm, soothing music; MIT short answer/ What I do for pleasure

4 - how about adding a little more detail to make it interesting? example : " listening to Bach, i...

UndergraduateSapphire - Dec 25, 2008 / gmanz - Dec 26, 2008

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