Writing Feedback / The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By 2020 may be as many as 29 million vehicles. [3]


in IELTS task 2, you should mention other views instead of your statement/opinion

Writing Feedback / "Get bored because nothing to do around" - a new movie theater may be built [7]

repair your paragraphing, you should separate introduction-body 1-body 2-conclusion
so, the readers will easier to catch your points and they can understand your essay as well,

Writing Feedback / IELTS General Training; 'growing trend of increasing the retirement age' [4]

also, I just give additional advise, try to give specific details, you can take some events from your real life, it will make your essay easier to understand and attract more attention of the readers

Writing Feedback / Teaching in group along with specialised education according to abilities [5]


this may look a small mistake, but you should pay attention as well because i would be your big problem if you leave it


I cannot catch your point here, this sentence is confusing

Writing Feedback / Ielts: complaint letter - dissatisfaction with the T-shirt [4]

you've written well, you got all points that you need,,
just keep study and learn from other IELTS masters

Essays / how can i make a good introduction? essay about myself [8]

also, in introduction, I suggest you how you can compose it to attract the reader's attention, so the readers will feel curious to read more

Writing Feedback / radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. [8]

Eva, pay more attention to your grammar, you have good ability to compose your report, but sometimes you make mistakes in grammar

Writing Feedback / Germany and France electricity generation 2009 [7]


where is the verb???

in the next paragraph,,which tense would you like to use? be consistent, please!

Writing Feedback / IELTS: The relative electricity consumption; 'spa is more extravagant used' [5]


I don't understand what do you mean here or what do you wan to deliver

Writing Feedback / IELTS: electricity generated in Germany and France in the year 2009 [6]

I suggest you to write more sample answers, so you will get more ideas or recommendation how to compose your report well and make the readers catch your points easier

Writing Feedback / IELTS: production of electricity in Germany and France from all sources [7]



you wrote well, but pay more attention to some small mistakes or it would be your big problem

Writing Feedback / college or university; Success or a good life in future through knowledge [4]

in IELTS essay you cannot put abbreviation in your essay such as I'm,, you should write I am ..

Writing Feedback / IETLS task 2: Is it necessary to restict Long working hours in workplace? [9]


this sentence is too long, in my opinion

also, don't write sentence too long which could make the readers difficult to catch your points

Writing Feedback / IELTS: advertising impact on people's choice of consumption [4]


Nowadays,,
be careful with your misspelling n also you cannot use/put abbreviation in IELTS essay

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The unemployment rates: US and Japan - 5% in March 99 [6]


try to correct the first sentence, and compare it with the second sentence, what you have found there?
this is a small mistake or we call common mistake that is often made by ilets takers, but you should pay more attention to them

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: The sector of economy for employment [3]


what does the word 'than' means? you put 'than' twice in a sentence
before 'than' you put 'the most'

when you put the most, it means there is no comparison, so you cannot put 'than' after that

read your grammar book again and try to repair this report

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Sector of the economy - employment by age [5]


this sentence makes me confuse, you wrote too long. it would be better if you separate them into two sentences, so the readers will be easier to understand and catch your points

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Sector of the economy - different age groups were employed. [4]

pay more attention with your tenses use, when you can use present, past, passive or perfect, I suggest you to read more your grammar book, so that you can understand when you can apply each of them on your report or essay

Writing Feedback / IELTS: visits abroad; some persons visit to abroad because they have some gains [4]


you should use present on your introduction because it covers all parts of the report, it does not focus on a specific time yet in the data, but all parts of the data

Writing Feedback / Unemployment rates in US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999 [6]


where is the verb?

be careful when you compose a sentence,,it looks a small problem for you, but it may be your big trouble in the future
so, you should pay more attention to your structure

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1. Estimated world illiteracy [9]


when you want to add 'overview' I suggest you to write just a one sentence or two because it just contains the overview or general view,,do not write the details here

Writing Feedback / ielts; Teaching foreign languages broaden childrens horizons [7]

what is your topic?
take some keywords from the task, then use the keywords to arrange your topic

Writing Feedback / IELTS: University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the Internet.. [5]

you wrote less than 250 words, in IELTS writing, you should write at least 250 words, so it can conclude that you must write 250 words or more to complete the writing task 2

Writing Feedback / Grievance is unsatisfaction about quality; complaint by writing more effective [4]

when you post your essay, I suggest to give the type of your essay

whether this is ielts essay or toefl essay, in the topic column,

before you write the topic, you should write the type of the essay,
e.g
IELTS TASK II : your topic

Writing Feedback / 'special talents' parent and family background vs teachers influence on children [8]


you wrote this sentence too long, it would be better and more understandable if you separate it into two sentences, so that, the readers will be easier to understand and get your points

Writing Feedback / impressive buildings are important for a city or hospitals and schools [4]

nasir, when you post your essay, I suggest to give the type of your essay whether this is ielts essay or toefl essay, in the topic column,

before you write the topic, you should write the type of the essay,
e.g
IELTS TASK II : your topic (impressive building for a city)

Writing Feedback / Many teachers assign homework to students every day; 'not important in Physics' [3]

Eva, when you post your essay, I suggest to give the type of your essay whether this is ielts essay or toefl essay, in the topic column, before you write the topic, you should write the type of the essay,

e.g
IELTS TASK II : your topic Many teachers assign homework to students every day.

Writing Feedback / not to separate influence of parents & school on child; useful member of society [7]

this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result shows better than the shorter one. so that, I suggest you to follow this pattern, hope it will work with you

case/issue = use what,who,where,when,why, and how to help you construct the issue
your position/opinion = agree/disagree, advantage/disadvantage, your opinion, your idea, etc
thesis statement = this essay would examine . . ..
this essay would discuss . . . .

Writing Feedback / IELTS essay - why adults decide to study; shared cost of each course [6]

this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result shows better than the shorter one. so that, I suggest you to follow this pattern, hope it will work with you

case/issue = use what,who,where,when,why, and how to help you construct the issue
your position/opinion = agree/disagree, advantage/disadvantage, your opinion, your idea, etc
thesis statement =this essay would examine . . ..
this essay would discuss . . . .

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Children to learn about money via parents - educate about the significance of money [10]

this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result shows better than the shorter one. so that, I suggest you to follow this pattern, hope it will work with you

case/issue = use what,who,where,when,why, and how to help you construct the issue
your position/opinion = agree/disagree, advantage/disadvantage, your opinion, your idea, etc
thesis statement =this essay would examine . . ..
this essay would discuss . . . .

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Some people enjoy change, new experiences. Changing our habits is making us better [7]

this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result shows better than the shorter one. so that, I suggest you to follow this pattern, hope it will work with you

case/issue = use what,who,where,when,why, and how to help you construct the issue
your position/opinion = agree/disagree, advantage/disadvantage, your opinion, your idea, etc
thesis statement =this essay would examine . . ..
this essay would discuss . . . .

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Some people like to do only what they already do well. [10]

this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result shows better than the shorter one. so that, I suggest you to follow this pattern, hope it will work with you

case/issue = use what,who,where,when,why, and how to help you construct the issue
your position/opinion = agree/disagree, advantage/disadvantage, your opinion, your idea, etc
thesis statement =this essay would examine . . ..
this essay would discuss . . . .

Writing Feedback / IELTS: CHALLENGE - some people are attracted to dangerous sports/ activities [5]

this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result shows better than the shorter one. so that, I suggest you to follow this pattern, hope it will work with you

case/issue = use what,who,where,when,why, and how to help you construct the issue
your position/opinion = agree/disagree, advantage/disadvantage, your opinion, your idea, etc
thesis statement =this essay would examine . . ..
this essay would discuss . . . .

Writing Feedback / 'culture of conserve'; company should give money to support the arts [8]

this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result shows better than the shorter one. so that, I suggest you to follow this pattern, hope it will work with you

case/issue = use what,who,where,when,why, and how to help you construct the issue
your position/opinion = agree/disagree, advantage/disadvantage, your opinion, your idea, etc
thesis statement =this essay would examine . . ..
this essay would discuss . . . .

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Young people commiting serious crimes should be punished as adults [9]

this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result shows better than the shorter one. so that, I suggest you to follow this pattern, hope it will work with you

case/issue = use what,who,where,when,why, and how to help you construct the issue
your position/opinion = agree/disagree, advantage/disadvantage, your opinion, your idea, etc
thesis statement = this essay would examine . . ..
this essay would discuss . . . .

Writing Feedback / Technology become Culture - big effect to our lives [7]

ridwan, you should mention what type of your writing, whether it is ielts or toefl essay, so that the readers will know easily when they want to correct this essay

Writing Feedback / Parents are the best teachers? YES! 'mother always give you motivation, and love' [13]

ridwan, you should mention what type of your writing, whether it is ielts or toefl essay, so that the readers will know easily when they want to correct this essay

Writing Feedback / 'People need food, fashion, and health' - advertisements may improve our lives [6]

also, you need to pay more attention with your capitalization, maybe it seems a little mistake, but it could be your big problem when you deal with the real test. so, you should be more carefully

Writing Feedback / Article: "What do you want to when you grow up?" medical student [5]

ok, you have written some good points, but it would be more interesting if you give them more details,

Writing Feedback / Travels broaden the mind - Advantage and disadvantage of travelling [9]


be careful with the task, what does the task want? that's you should give or write


in my opinion, it would be better if you put this sentence in the paragraph, not in the different paragraph as you've done