Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK2 - Free Subjects Decisions? [2]

should people learn whatever they prefer or not?

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.

Nowadays, it is a controversial topic to discuss whether people should learn whatever they prefer or not. Some people acclaim that it is more flexible on study. However, some people claim that they should study subjects which will be useful in the future. I strongly believe that people should learn subjects that may utilize for their future's occupation which should put into first priority to study. The following essay will depict my point of view.

Studying whatever students want may be good news for most of them. They can abandon some subjects they are not good at or do not have any interest in. However, some subjects are essential in our daily life. For example, if a student just focuses on learning geology and ignores English subject, how can he read a text book which written in English? Furthermore, it may cause imbalance of student's ability which he/she has a great deal of geology information yet they cannot illustrate the information properly by words.

On the contrary, if students choose subjects which may assist in their future job, they may have a numerous opportunities to obtain a better position. For example, a well-known and affluent salary company is hiring an assistant who can speak English fluently. If a student studies subjects which related to language, it might help him to obtain this job offer more easily. This can reveal how important to study subjects that are useful for your future.

In summary, I would like to reaffirm my own opinion that students should be permitted to study subjects that will be helpful in the future rather than study whatever they like because it is easy to obtain a job and study whatever they prefer might cause imbalance of their ability.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - coffee and bananas sales statistics in five countries [2]

information about coffee and bananas consumption

The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1998 and 2004 in five European countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two tables illustrate how much euro to be sold in Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden.

Overall, it is exceedingly obvious that coffee was sold the largest amount in Denmark in the year of 1999 and UK sold the most quantity of coffee in 2004. Meanwhile, bananas were sold the most quantity not only in the year of 1999 but also in 2000 in Switzerland. Furthermore, the consumption of coffee and bananas in most of five European countries was increased from 1999 to 2004. Only Sweden and Denmark had deduction of bananas sales from 1999 to 2004.

Taking a closer look, the largest increase of coffee consumption was in UK, roughly 15 times growth from 1999 to 2004. Meanwhile, the quantity of bananas rose 3 times more in Switzerland from 1999 to 2004 while in Denmark it decreased 3 times from 1999 to 2004.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2- Benefits and Risks of people living to 150 [3]

The Problem with Longevity

In the future, it may be scientifically possible to live for 150 years. This could good for individuals but it may have negative consequences for society.

What are the benefits and risks of people living to 150 ?

Nowadays, the issue about whether people could live until 150 years old or not is definitely a controversial topic. Some people believe that this could be perfect for them. However, some people feel that it may cause repercussions for society. The following essay will illustrate the advantages and drawbacks of people living beyond 100 years old.

The first benefit of living longer is that people enable to enjoy their life more. A research showed that 68% of people before dying wish to obtain more time to achieve their life goal or spend more time with their families. Second benefit of it is that people may see the change of the world. For example, when people were 80 years old, a robot may not be invented yet. Nevertheless, if he or she could live until age of 50, they might directly see a real robot stand in front of them instead of dying in 80 years old and even can not have a glance of it.

While some people acclaim numerous pros of living longer, some vital cons are playing significant roles which can not be ignored. Elderly allowance is one of the impact factors. If everyone could live such a long age, the government absolutely will face the financial problem which needs to require heavier tax from citizens to pay for elderly than before. Moreover, more elderly means they need more medical assistance, it might cause a person in need of medical assistance which can not obtain it in a timely manner.

In summary, living until 150 years old may be a good accomplishment for human beings. However, it still has many challenges which need to conquer in the future. Not only the financial concerns but also the medical affections.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Discuss of improving public health is by increasing the numbers of sports facilities [2]

the best policy to gain public health

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Question: if I cannot finish my writing in a timely manner (40 minutes), what would you suggest me to do ? (For example, jump into conclusion directly or still need to finish at least one point of views ? Giving up to think synonyms ?)

I ran out of my time to finish this writing task 2. Some of ideas I really want to go through details but I did not have enough time to do so....

Nowadays, the issue of whether the best policy to gain public health is by establishing some of fitness or not is certainly a controversial topic to discuss. Some people believe that by doing so it must work efficiently. However, others,including me, believe that this may have few feedbacks on public health and that other means are essential to achieve. The following essay will illustrate my both point of views and give the reason why I support the latter one.

Building the numerous sports facilities will make citizens have more intentions to do the exercise. By doing so, some people may acquire not only healthy bodies but also fresh minds. However, from my perspective, without other ways to encourage people to do the exercise, some people may feel lazy after two or three months. Because nothing can motivate them to use the sports facilities, three or four years later, the public sports' space will become empty houses and no one use them anymore.

Therefore, if the government establishes some more benefits to encourage people to utilize the facilities, then rising the health of public is easy to achieve. For example, publishing the details of rewards that if citizens have visited public fitness more than six times a month, they can have 15% reduction of tax. In my own opinion, it is an active way to promote people to do the sport rather than just increasing the amount of sports facilities and do nothing.

In summary , I would therefore reaffirm my position that even though some people claimed that adding some of public sports facilities may improve public health ; Nevertheless, I still believe that they should have some other ways to motivate them to use facilities such as the tax reduction.

Writing Feedback / IELTS1 Comparison of population and projection in Yemen and Italy; the differentiation of percentage [4]

Age Structure in two different countries

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

Here I have a question:
May I rephrase "aged 0 to 15" into " teenagers"
"aged 15 to 59" into "adults" and "aged 60+" into "elderly"?

The pie charts illustrate the total amount of all ages citizens between Yemen and Italy in 2000 and the comparison of projections for 2050.

Overall, it is exceedingly evident that the group of adults from aged 15 to 59 accounted for the majority proportion not only in populations but also projections in both countries. However, the age from 60 plus stood at the least percentage in population and projection of Yemen while the aged from 0 to 14 occupied the least ratio in population and projection of Italy in 2000 and 2050,respectively.

Taking a closer look, the differentiation of percentage between 15 to 59 years old of populations and projections in Yemen and Italy are quite slight in 2000 and 2050. Only 15.3% and 11.1%, respectively. In addition, the group of aged 60 plus accounted for almost half of pie chart of projections in Italy while it stood at the least in Yemen. There is 36.6% differentiation between both countries.

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Writing Feedback / The quantity of water usage by different ways in the world and water consumption in Brazil and Congo [2]

water use and water consumption coverage

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

There are one line graph and one table. The former illustrates the quantity of water usage by different ways in the world while the latter depicts the water consumption in Brazil and Congo in the year of 2000.

Overall, it is exceedingly evident that agriculture water usage accounted for a great deal of amount in 2000. Meanwhile, water consumption for each citizen in Brazil was for than in Congo in the same year.

Taking a closer look at each graph and table, it is crystal clear that agriculture water usage was gradually increased from 1990 to 1950 and rose dramatically from 1950 to 2000 and reached 3000km3 in the year of 2000. On the contrary, industrial and domestic water usage remained stable from 1900 to 1940. From 1950 they both increased slightly while the industrial water usage rose higher than domestic one until 2000.

As can be seen on the table, Brazil had 176 million population, which was 35 times more than Congo. Compared to both countries' water consumption for each citizen, it is no doubt that Brazil required more water than Congo due to the fact that tremendous irrigated land and population.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2- E-BOOKS V.S PRINTED MEDIA ? WHAT IS YOUR OPINIONS ? [2]

printed media will not go extinct

With recent developments in technology like e-books, some people feel that printed media like books, newspapers, and magazines will soon be a thing of the past. Others feel that these forms of media will never disappear.

What is your opinion ?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Nowadays, the topic of whether the printed media such as books, newspapers, and magazines will soon be replaced by the e-books or not is definitely a controversial one. Despite some people believe that printed media will soon be eliminated by generation. From my perspective, I still believe that hardcover books will never vanish. The following essay will illustrate my reasons and point of views.

Many people think that printed media such as newspaper is uncomfortable to read not only because during flipping the newspaper, the fingers will have ink on them, but also printed media is not so eco-friendly cause most of them are made from wood. Hence, they tend to read e-books online instead of reading printed media. However, it is a well-known fact that printed media still has a significant role in this generation. In 2018, the total selling amount of hand over books is twofold compared to e-books online. It is exceedingly evidence that can prove people still keen on reading real books rather than e-books even they consider e-books are more efficient.

Furthermore, for the health concern, it is no doubt to indicate that reading e-books online for a long period of time will harm your eyesight. A study showed that reading 1 hour in front of technology devices will diminish the degree of your eyesight. That is 2 times faster than reading a real book. Consequently, this repercussion drags down the willingness of people who are in favour of reading online.

In summary, I would therefore reaffirm my opinion that although the developments of e-books have spread widely since they were created, I still strongly believe that traditional printed media will last permanently owing to health concern and people's reading habits.

Writing Feedback / Language students - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - TWO PIE CHARTS COMPARISON [3]

proportion of uk students able to speak a foreign language

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts illustrated the percentage of students who were utilized languages beside English at an university in England in the years of 2000 and 2010,respectively.

Overall, it is crystal clear to see that Spanish accounted for the majority portions of both years while students who are fluent at German stood at the least percentage.

Having an exact figure, it is exceedingly obvious that students who can speak Spanish not only occupied almost half portions of pie charts in both years but also increased 5% from 2000 to 2010.

While the percentage of students who were able to speak Spanish rose, the proportions of students who have no other language abilities decreased slightly from 20% to 10%. Similarly, the percentage of students who were able to speak French shared the same trend which decreased from 15% to 10%.

Furthermore, other languages spoken by students such as German remained steady which was 10% in both pie charts.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Procedures of Recruitment Flow Chart [4]

organization's staff hiring

The flow chart below illustrates a procedure of organization's staff hiring.

Overall, it is crystal clear that this flow chart contains thirteen different stages which beginning with the drawn-up requirements list and ending up with either applicant successfully obtained a job offer nor received a rejected letter.

To begin with, list of requirements have been drawn up, then the advertisement will be placed in the newspaper. Followed this will be the application form selected, after the application have been completed and returned, it will be opened and assessed by the human resource.

Secondly, the applicants will be either invited to the interview nor rejected by letter. Once interview finished, the applicants will be evaluated into two groups. One is an appropriate applicant and runner-up will be selected as a staff and company will offer the job. The other is an inappropriate applicant will be rejected and refusal letter will be sent to them personally.

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Writing Feedback / Overpopulation Causes and Solutions; imbalance of employment opportunity and educational resources [3]

Most major cities around the world continue to grow at a phenomenal rate due to the massive increase in population. This has led to a general decline in the quality of life in city area as the environment becomes more crowded and polluted.

Give some reasons why this growth has occurred and suggest some practical solutions to this problem.

Nowadays, a rate of the majority main cities around the world increases dramatically because of the huge population. This has caused a significant reduction in the quality of life in urban areas. For example, the environment becomes over-populated, and many pollutions have occurred. The following will illustrate the factors of over-populated and how can it be solved.

First of all, the opportunity of employment might be one of the factors. A study shown that organizations tend to set their company in a big city, which can easily earn money and build reputation. Hence, they would like to offer more job opportunities in cities more than in the country areas. This definitely causes many people move to the city. Another reason is the educational resource. Take me as a real example, I had studied in two different universities because my parents changed their working places. One is in the countryside, which is lack of teacher resource, I even did not need to attend most of the courses due to there was no teacher to teach that course. Once I moved to the capital of my country, I started to realize that why people desperately want to move to the city to acquire better educational resources. Good quality of teaching resources, professional examination system, those definitely trigger more and more citizens to move to the city.

Secondly, the best and the most appropriate solution to solve over-populated issue is that the government should balance the employment and educational differentiation between urban and rural areas. By doing this, it might equal the chance of employment, people would like to stay and find an occupation in their hometown, which leads to reduce the over-populated and pollution in the city area. Furthermore, if the government would like to assign some good teachers to rural area and provide affluent salary, this would be another proper way to persuade citizens not to move to the city.

To sum up, the factors of overpopulation in the city and how to solve them are always a popular issue to discuss. I would like to restate that the imbalance of employment opportunity and educational resources are the main factors of it. However, I strongly believe that these two factors can be solved by the government well-arranged resource management between city and country.

Writing Feedback / Should travellers obey local customs and behaviors when they visit other countries or not? [2]

foreign visitors and the local customs

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The issue of whether travellers should obey local customs and behaviors when they visit to other countries or not is certainly a controversial topic. Despite some people utterly disagree that and claim the host country should be open-minded and accept culture differences. However, I personally believe that visitors should follow local policy as and respect their culture. The following statements will illustrate my point of views.

First of all, some people said that if one country would like to embrace different concepts of other nationalities, people will become more flexible and diversity, which can be easily get along with different kinds of people. Nevertheless, in my humble opinion, it means lose of their own culture's features. Take a real example, New York is an international city and millions of different countries' people live there, yet we even do not know how to describe New Yorker's behaviors or their customs. Their own customs are getting vanish due to the acceptance of culture difference. Based on this reason, it is quite inappropriate to accept all countries' culture difference.

Second, following and respecting local policy would be a proper way out. Not only preserve the original of local people's behaviors,but also they share the different values to the visitors. In the meanwhile, visitors should respect that some people in the world who are not having similar concepts like them and it would be perfect if they can balance their culture differences. For instance, like Australia, they embrace people from around the world to immigrate to their country while they still keep their original culture concept and their culture and local customs are not influenced by outsiders at all.

In summary, I still believe that respect local customs is necessary. No matter others dispute and think that host country should be open-minded, I strongly consider protecting local culture is overriding.

Question : I don't know if I should stand firmly at one side or not in summary..( I mean after I discuss both point of views, should I state which position I prefer or i think it is better than the other one in summary?)

Writing Feedback / IELTS 1 - the statistics between marriages and divorces rate and marital status of adult Americans [2]

Number of marriages and divorces in the USA

The two bar charts below illustrate the statistics between marriages and divorces rate and marital status of adult Americans ratio from 1970 to 2000.

Overall, the rate of marriages outweighs the divorces within that period of time. Meanwhile, it is crystal clear that the proportions of married Americans is stand at the greatest amount compare to the others' categories.

Having the exact figures, the total quantity of marriage reached the same level between 1970 and 1989,which is occupied 2.5 million. However, begins from 1990, the number tends to dwindle from approximately 2.4 million to 2 million until 2000. At the same time, the trend of divorces is upward from 1970 to 1980,which is from 1 million to roughly 1.4 million. Nevertheless, it decreased slightly from 1980 to 2000.

The second bar chart displays the ratio of marital status of adult Americans. Compared to the married Americans percentage, the others of marital status are strikingly less. It is exceedingly apparent that the least amount is located in 1970 of divorce rate,which is rarely reached 2%.

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