Writing Feedback / "Inventions vs doctors"; 'broken bones, diseases, pain and suffering' [NEW]

Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extend do you agree with this statements? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

These days, the profession as a doctor is kind of an important job which many people really need in this society because as we know that much kind of diseases have appeared in around us and threat our life. Beside that, the inventor is the kind of job which many people need to get new things and improve their life. So, some may argue that inventors are more important than doctors. Now we will discuss about them in this passage.

It has been argued that a doctor is more important than an inventor although it's unsettling to have to argue inventors as less important than anyone. As we know, the population of human in the world getting more and more every year and a lot of people get many diseases because the environmental changing and their condition of people's living. Moreover, the citizen need a doctor for healing their diseases and confer some advices about how to survive in a healthy environment and decline the impact of unhealthy life. Doctors have the ability to improve a person's physical and mental well being, to eliminate pain, to prevent death.

My argument now is this. A person can live a full happy life with a less than adequate invention but a person cannot live a full and happy life if they have broken bones, diseases, pain and suffering. People with a medical condition do not have the ability to maintain a reasonable level of being without medical intervention.

Another argument against those inventors is as great as doctors. The inventor has an ability to produce new things which can improve human's life. They are not only finding good devices but also discover new enlightenment which support other subjects, like medical, biology and economics. For instance, they discover new diseases which are dangerous to our world and invent a new device which could generate easier our task, like cleaner stuff, tools of work and etc. And today, we realize that some countries are shortage of inventor because it is hard to become a tremendous inventor. They need a special ability to develop new things which can be accepted by other peoples.

In short, this theory has a downside because a doctor will initially need an inventor in order to develop their job and we should appreciate to both of those jobs because they can increase and bring a better life to us. As a result, every job has an important role and without both of them our life turns into imbalance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 : Colour can affect human psychologist [4]

Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people's health and capacity for work?

Colour is important substances which can possibly fast caught by eyes. For that reason, since we were kindergarten, we acquired by many kinds of colours. Then when we grow up, the colour has been developed into many of the decorations and fashion style. The colour has an important role in our psychological behavior such as being part in a place where most of the people visit like in offices and hospitals.

Generally, the people who work or stay in a room where too much colour as decorating has, they will be hard to concentrate and their mood will be unstable. The people may focus on the colour around them when they are working. Room colour can influence our mood and our thoughts. Colours affect people in many ways, depending upon one's age, gender, ethnic background or local climate.

The interesting view is about the effect of colour to the performance of people when they are working. In the office usually use a different colour to represent their job like light colour or bold colour. For example, many of offices in Indonesia use light colour like in the bank, they use prominent colour light grey, peach and light blue. They use those colours because there are give effect to control their mood to do the best for their job. Light colours are expansive and airy, making rooms seem larger and brighter. On the other hand, there is a place of work using dark colour like creative room, they use dark colours such as red, yellow, orange, and green. Those colours give more passionate for person to be creative. Bright colour raises a room's energy level so it is a good choice to stir up excitement. In an entryway, it creates a strong first impression. Red has been shown to raise blood pressure, speed respiration and heart rate.

Furthermore, the important building like hospital painted in white for all over the room. The psychologist for the person's response to the colour of white is relaxation. White will be build the mood of patients to recover from their disease. That colour will give the best impression about calm so the patient will take a rest with quietness.

In conclusion, it is clearly that colour give effect for human changing psychology. Certain colours or groups of colours tend to get a similar reaction from most people and the overall difference being in the shade or tones used. So when it comes to decorating, it is important to choose wisely.

In conclusion, it is clearly that colour give effect for human changing psychology. Certain colours or groups of colours tend to get a similar reaction from most people and the overall difference being in the shade or tones used. So when it comes to decorating, it is important to choose wisely.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : Televisions are the most favorite media for comunicating [8]

Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective.

Human behavior has been changed throughout the years. This could be influenced by advance technology which is well-known around the world. That technology provides people to get information by media. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of visual and audio-visual media. My argument is tending to audio-visual media which many people preferable to use it. Now, let's discuss this issue.

The first media is radio which many people can hear news everywhere they are, like at home, in the office or in the car. But, radio has a limitation in seeing the visual. The second is film, which is very interactive media and it becomes favorite of many people. In contrast, the number of film that people can watch is very limited because they do not have much time for watching movie. The last media that give a huge impact a lot in human's life is television. But, sometimes the children can watch some inappropriate shows for children under age without guided from their parents.

While I have argue about the most effective media is television because it has thousands of advertisements showed up every day. Television can persuade the audience to be very consumptive. On the other hand, television could be a great media to get relax after working all day long and sometimes people spend their time to watch with their family. From television we will get a lot of information from all over the world so the people just sit and watch it calmly. Then, it provides a lot of job opportunities for many people to work in television stations officer.

To sum up, most of people prefer to choose television as their media communicating information because they can get more benefits from the advertisement which appeared every day. As a result, television and people make a good relation which interrelated between both of them.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : Erosion of a headland [3]

The diagram below show the stages in the erosion of a headland. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates a headland, the area of hard rock which juts into the sea, erode slowly in stages.
At the first time, a headland stood much further in the sea. Continuously, the waves attack the base of the cliff which has the weakest area. Then, the rock eroded into cracks and over the time it becomes larger and larger.

These cracks which created by erosion develop into a cave. The process erosion continuous widens the cave and it undercuts through the headland until shaping an arch. There is an impressive example of natural arch just Durdle Door in Dorset.

Next, the water continues to wipe the structure of an arch. Therefore, it makes the arch unstable and cannot support its roof. Further, it collapses into the sea when a mass of rock higher than the mainland so it becomes a stack.

Moreover, the stack continually eroded until it finally leaves behind a stump. As a result, it creates the headland retreating but stack standing independently besides the headland.

Overview, headland slowly disappear from the surface our planet, it is caused by erosion which waves against the cliff of coastal.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS : Space Exploration - More to do with national pride than international effort? [3]

Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future?

space exploration importance

In ancient century, fire-lighting has been found by the early man. It is kind of big invention which brings the huge impact throughout the world. But now, people who explore the space is a common in our life, it has been argued that people going outer space have had more to do with national pride than international effort. In my mind, people who explore the space have been made their nationality proud of them because they brought their country flag which fluttered in space. Now, let's discuss this essay.

Since people know about technology, they try to develop their knowledge about all of science without exception they are looking for something new in outer space. Neil Elden Armstrong was an American astronaut and the first person to walk on the Moon. In July 21th 1969, they landed on the Moon then he put the American flag in the surface of the Moon. From that moment, America has been well-known as the Superpower Country which has advance technology to send the man explore outside Earth. People who journey into outer space make their country really proud of them because they show to throughout the world how great their country. Then, it could be national prestige which is no other countries have it.

On the other hand, some may argue that space exploration has had international effort because the current practicality confirms that collaborative efforts are available and the efforts will contribute to the fulfillment of the purpose of the space exploration. Even if the United States alone is fully capable of going to Mars, it has no reason to make that ventures an isolated effort. The United States must be open enough to work with other nations not only for even higher efficiency but also for a share of excitement and benefits with everyone on the earth.

In the future, I think voyage to outside the Earth is becoming a necessity for human because many people use advance technology which can be developed on other planets. Travel to outside Earth will be common for ordinary people who do not have basic as a cosmonaut. Next generation, the situation in our Earth will be changing and there is new information about move the half of people on Earth to live on Mars. Thus, the scientists have prepared and enhance the knowledge how to survive in outer space.

To sum up, Astronaut who succeeded travel outer space will brings the prestigious impression about their country. Although, the nations of the world must move toward global unification and the cooperation in space will be an ideal approach since there exists no national border. Then, high technology will make easier people on Earth to have journey outer space and it will get well-known in the future.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Art subject can be accepted as compulsory subject if it brings positive role for students [4]

Some educationalists argue that non-exam, art-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, some pupils are not confident to express their feeling about something, include their argument. The way to build their confident is a must have curriculum about art in the second-grade school. I would agree with this statement to some extent because I believe that it help students achieve good ability in soft skill.

Definitely, the secondary-school's subjects have advantages for improving student's creativity such as arts subjects, with the aim of balancing the student's intellectual beside study about exam subjects. One of them is to teach students about teamwork, for example drama. This may help students to enhance their leadership skill for managing their team. So, they can do the best in their performance. Otherwise, they will finish this task in a long-term. It seems, can have negative influence on students because their exam subject is overlooked.

Some may argue with non-exam subjects are not as important as exam-subjects. They think students have to study about Maths, Physics, Economics and etc to get properly job after they graduate. Then, they assume that study about art seen only as fun and spend much money to buy some propts. In any case, exam-subjects can improve student's soft skill too. For instance, communicating skill, they can explain about what problem surround them. They also have to learn to produce some researches which give benefit to the society in the future.

In the end, art subject can be accepted as compulsory subject if it brings positive role for students and make their parents proud with the achievement. Alternatively, exam subject as an important subject should be given attention for students because without this subject academic performance will be imbalance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : The main function of a university [4]

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skill needed in workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for it own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

University is the place to give specific knowledge for students. Meanwhile, some people think that university should prepare graduates for working. Personally, I agree that university's role is to prepare graduates in the workplace. However, I also believe that education process in university has a positive impact on individuals.

Obviously, now the higher education prepares students for working and university provide graduates with the activities which support their academic skill. These include people skills such as, communication skills, collaborative skills, analytical skills, and networking skills. For example, in university, student study about how to write properly in their task, such as thesis and report. Then, students understand how to write a great job application letter and curriculum vitae or represent their character and talent at a job interview. As we know that, many of companies need fresh graduate who competence in their specialization. Thus, this is why the argument that university has a role to prepare students for working after they graduate.

However, study about specific knowledge is an important to build intelligence of student and practical context. For example, study about Law and Political Sciences are commonly to understand about social problem and demand to solve all the potential crises. As such, the degree will provide with an understanding of the sources which are leading to the transformation to identify the new skills and competencies required for the learning consultant affected by these changes. Therefore, the knowledge which the students have truly become more benefit to their social life. Because of this the graduates have positive impact to show their intellectual to become better individual.

In conclusion, both sides of the argument have possibility to enhance the qualities of the graduates. It is clear that university has a role to produce the best graduates which can compete with others to get proper job in the future

Writing Feedback / IELTS: women's work / historic buildings / equal numbers of male and female students [2]

In some countries, it is common for women to find a job when their children are young. What one of the advantages and disadvantages of this.

In today's world when human right is the same with others, mothers tend to be workers. Consequently, they will leave their children alone at home. Therefore, if mothers find a proper job in their life, what the advantages and disadvantages which are given ?

Nowadays, historic buildings are destroyed to build new constructions. Is this a positive development? Explain your point of view!

As we know that we cannot step back in time to the ancient century which built many of the historical buildings. Different from the old days, now some people are destroying the historical area and build a new structure because they do not care about old buildings. This essay will discuss about the positive impacts and state my opinion.

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Every person has the same right to get proper education without seeing their gender and universities as the higher education have to accept the competence people without compare the number of students. In contrast, others think that universities should accept equal numbers for every gender in every subject, but I believe that universities have to accept the person who has good capability to get better education.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : Fixed Punishments for each type of crime [3]

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Deciding on the punishment for each type of crime has been pros and cons. Some may argue that for fixing punishment, it should depend on individual crime and reason for doing that. While, I think this has possible reasons in both of views.

Firstly, as people quote, there are crimes when there is have chances, much of crimes have been appeared today and some argue punishment decided based on type of crime. For the illegal activity, we can mention corruption, for instance. This measure makes suffer of financial lost in some countries and makes their citizen live in poverty. Therefore, corruption is a crime which can infect many people to become corruptors. Then, corruption is a dangerous crime which there is not only government but also manager in some institutions can do it. Again, robberies, murders and rape cases are illegal activities so they should get heavy punishment because they found victims to do crimes. As such, crimes which make suffering other people reasonable to get heavy punishment depend on how they do their crime.

However on the other side of this argument that the reason why people doing crime affect to punishment what will they get. For example, kill somebody to defense ourselves. Much of crimes threat us wherever we are, when somebody tries to attack other people, they have to self defense like fight until they inadvertently kill the culprit. From that case, it will be injustice to person who had committed a crime for self defense because it can not be considered as crime as it was unintentionally done by the person. Moreover, before fixed the punishment, the judge have to looking for the reason and make it clear why people doing that. Thus this makes it clear why the argument that decided punishment depends on motivation for committing it.

In conclusion, government has a key role to arrange the punishment and create a rule which is fair for culprit based on their crimes. So, it makes the culprit do not repeatedly do their fault. Thus, deciding punishment fairly is really important to decrease the criminal in some countries.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : Diet and General Health of Students [3]

The charts below give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the type of food which eaten by both of two groups of pupils, while the table describes information about something related to their health.

Generally, it can be seen from the charts and table that containing of food affect to the healthiness. More they consume unhealthy food, more health problem they get.

The pie charts show the type of food with high fat content placed in first position in Group B, it is half portion of the pie chart. Moreover, in Group A still in the high proportion but slightly smaller than Group B by the difference 15%. Then, Group A eat many vegetables and fruits with the percentage are 22% and 8% compared with Group B, consumption of veggies and fruits are just 5%. Interestingly, consumption of cereals and fish in both of groups have the same proportions, at 35% and 5 %.

Moving onto the table, it describes the effect of consuming many types of foods to their health. First, in Group A the percentage of overweight and illness in past year a much lower than Group B by the difference around twofold. Furthermore, many of students in Group A attendance at classes with the percentage is 90 % but in Group B, percent of students who attendance at classes is just 75%.

Overall, it is clear that too many consume unhealthy foods give many bad effects to children's health, mainly for their attendance rate at school.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Fitness betwen 1970 to 2000; 'Since 1970 men became higher membership' [3]

The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000.
The bar chart describes the membership of fitness between men and women over thirty years, from 1970 to 2000.
Generally, it can be seen from the chart that the number of two members of fitness fluctuated.
Since 1970 men became higher membership than women, then it increased highly at 4000 men in 1975. During twenty years, the number of men decreased but until 1995, it rose highly and reach a peak at 1995. After five years, in 2000, it went down significantly to the position 1000 members of men.

However, women started up at 1000 in 1970 and over fifthteen years, it rose highly at approximately 2800 and it felt down slightly then rose up again with the same number at 1985. In 2000, the number of membership of women decreased slightly to 2000 and became higher than men.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : Using electronic calculators in school [7]

Some people believe that electronic calculators should not be allowed in school until after the pupils have mastered metal aritmetic. Others believe that calculators save pupils time, especially with complicated calculations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, technology is used by people not only in the workplace but also in the school, take example electronic calculators. Several people think that the electronic calculators should not allowed in school before they understand about mathematics. Critics claim that calculators can help students to solve the complicated calculation. In my view, using electronic calculators for students make them will hard to understand to solve the mathematics problem by their own knowledge. In this passage, we will discuss both of views.

Mathematics is a complicated subject in the school, as we know it consists of arithmetic's, algebra, and trigonometrics. Students demand to understand how to solve the problem in mathematics with their own knowledge and not with calculators so it trains them to do their next exam. For example, teacher should teach the students about how solve the complicated number like trignometrics and they can answer it with the right way. Furthermore, with their own knowledge they can be diligent to study and enhance their ability about mathematics because they know how to explain the answer which they get. Thus, students can do their exam well without calculators and it affects their future to become more intelligence.

From the opposite statement that pupils can use calculators to solve the problem in mathematics. The reasons are it can save much time for student to do their task about complicated calculation. For instance, some students avoid arithmetic's and algebra in their subject because it is not easy to solve with their own, it need calculators which have tools and key points to do their task. Then, it makes easier for students to answer the difficult question about complicated calculations.

One on the whole, it can be tolerate for some students to use electronic calculators but not in the long term, maybe just in several material which students cannot solve it. Then, their teacher should teach more about how to solve the difficult calculations so the students do their task not depend on calculators but by their own knowledge because it will give benefit for their career in the future.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : Many vehicles on British roads [3]

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the eighteen century, the first car had discovered in British. Then, over a hundred years, the number of vehicles increased to 29 million in 2000. While critics claim that the number of alternative transportation should be improved and British Governments have a rule to maintain using of private cars. Personally, I agree that the government's policy should make limited number for using vehicle and give solution for urban and environmental problem.

Since the first car appeared in British, many Britons prefer to use private cars to reach their destination. Over the years, many kinds of feature cars make people interest to buy the new one and it will show about their social class. For example, in 2000, the number of private cars increased significantly to 29 million because the total purchase of cars rose up highly. Thus, the British roads were getting busier and affect to traffic and more pollutant would appear.

The opposite statement said that the British government should be encouraged Britons for using alternative transport and make policy to control car use because the impacts of the highest number of vehicles are urban problems like traffic and environmental damaged or pollution. For instance, the government adding the number of public transportation and improve the quality alternative transport like bus, subway train or build a way for bicycle. Moreover, International laws should be introduced the rules about private cars, such as give the highest tax for people who have a car. Thus, Britons would not buy a car, they could help government to decrease pollution caused by car.

To sum up, the number of using private car in Britain slightly increase every year and until 20th century. The British government has a role to maintain the number of private cars so their country will decrease the traffic and pollution in their cities.