Writing Feedback / Television and its powerful influences; can simultaneously benefit and ruin our cultural development [3]

Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society?

- You should write at least 250 words.
- Allow yourself 40 minutes for this task.
Television has always been the tool, which can easily influence many societies. It is perfectly understandable, since most of the people these days tend to watch TV 6 hours a day. This can either influence horribly on our society or positively on our cultural development. For example, television can broaden our people's horizon by rendering lots of knowledge of any aspects. On the contrary, it can impart us with some noxious knowledge. Therefore, I am personally convinced that television can simultaneously benefit and ruin our cultural development.

There are numerous channels on our TV. Each of them has its own benefits. Those benefits can help our people to be more knowledgeable, because knowledge is never a waste. For pragmatic instance, I, as a worker who has a tendency to watch Animal planet a lot, can have a huge benefit. Animal planet allows me to understand about the animal's life a little bit more. This also applies to other individuals, who watch TV. As a result, television can truly strengthen our people as well as our society.

Aside from its pros, television can convey us with pointless information such as drugs, horrible celebrities and others. This might affect negatively to our society and the people, who live in it. I can recall myself, having a friend, who used to worship a certain celebrity through the TV. This celebrity, ironically, was into drugs and sex abuse. My friend, who used to be a nice guy tried to turn himself into the guy, who he used to worship. After two years, his personality completely altered in a negative way. He began to smoke and did some inappropriate things in front of the police. Hence, television also impacts terribly on our culture.

The aforesaid evidence shows that television, as a utility for spreading information, can harm and advocate our cultural development. Taking all the points into account, I believe that it is still uncertain, whether television spoils or supports our culture more.

Writing Feedback / Female and male and their ages; which group watch TV more? IELTS task 1 [2]

Two charts provide a breakdown information of TV programs watched by two genders and four different age groups, which are female, male and the ages are, 16 to 24, 25 to 34 and 45 and older. This measured in percentage. If analyzed, female takes the first place, regarding the reality shows, while 45 and older wins the first place of game shows.

Female peaks at 70 percent, if the story is about the reality shows, this value is huger than the male's one for over 30 percent. Group of ages has a different story, at first, from 16 to 24 has approximately 50 percent. The older the group the bigger the percent. The consecutive gap between all ages is about 3 percent. As a result, 45 and older reaches close to 70 percent.

When it comes to the game shows, both female and male record as roughly 60 percent. Two groups, which are 16 to 24 and 45 and older have the highest percent of viewers, as for group of ages. 16 to 24 has 50 percent, in the meantime, 45 plus has 70 percent. Alongside them, 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 share the almost identical story, with their approximately 40 percent respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Both artists and scientists have immensely underpinned our society, since they first emerged. IELTS [2]

It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members.
Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society.
Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specific reasons to support your answer.
You should write at least 250 words.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Both artists and scientists have immensely underpinned our society, since they first emerged. Thanks to scientists, we now have numerous technologies and medicines that can almost solve any issue for us. Along with the scientists' helps, the artists make our life vibrant and buoyant. Notwithstanding, our society tends to bias towards the scientists because they provide us with some tangible benefits. Unlike artists, who are not favored since people need to have a survival first before amusing.

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Writing Feedback / World population growth will be at the highest point in the near future; IELTS [3]

Two graphs provide a breakdown information of global and urban population figures in distinguishable regions, from 1800 to 2100 and 2015 to 2040. They are measured in millions.
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Writing Feedback / Education and its statistics. Breakdown information of the entrance in different Technology Colleges [2]

Three graphs provide a breakdown information of the enrollment in different colleges in the Higher Colleges of Technology, in 1999. The pie chart is measured in percentage.

It is noticeable that Dubai Men's and women's took the second and the first place, whereas certificate was favored in the rest of two graphs.

Regarding to the first graph, Dubai women and men had the highest number of people, which are 547 and 426. Both genders of Abu Dhabi managed to reach to 273 for male and 218 for female. In the meantime , Al Ain women almost doubled its males, with its 218. The leftover three candidates, such as female of Ras Al Khalnan and both sexes of Shapjah had an insignificant gap, they were all roughly 170, except Khaimah men with 102.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: multinational companies are supporting our life, in lieu of ruining it. [2]

In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important.
This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life.
Do you agree or disagree?

Multinational companies are always wonderful to have in any society. It is reasonable since they often produce for us a variety of products. This can help us have more choices when it comes to considering buying any items. Another reason is that, they will advocate us to not to be obsolete compared to other places. Therefore, I am personally convinced that the multinational companies are not destroying the quality of our life.

The items that we get from the multinational companies are really different from the rest of the company. Sometimes, it is almost impossible to choose any products in the national company because the choices are so limited. That is the point when the multinational companies step in. They usually offer us with a wide range of products that can satisfy our demand with ease. It does not always apply to every single multinational company since there are some multinational companies out there, which are even worse than the national company. Notwithstanding, the number of that type of company is quite modest. It is understandable because the vast majority of multinational companies will only emerge when they truly believe that they can entice many clients. For pragmatic instance, I have recently purchased a laptop from the foreign company because our companies do not have any powerful laptops as other countries' companies do. As a result, the multinational companies really benefit our lives.

Aside from the huge amount of choices, they bolster us regarding keeping up with other countries. It would be absolutely unfair for our people if we did not have those companies. Envision yourself a society with the national companies only. This can be a disadvantage for our people if they yearn the products that only the multinational companies possess. This can render our society to be out-of-date in comparison with other societies. Hence, thanks to the multinational companies, we now can stay updated in some sense.

The aforesaid evidence insinuates that multinational companies are supporting our life, in lieu of ruining it. Taking all the points into account, I am against the community, which asserts that the multinational companies are spoiling the quality of our life.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: ASDA supermarket and its reasons! Close to home, good reputation, 24-hour shopping, etc. [2]

The table provides a breakdown information of the reasons of why people choose ASDA supermarket. The reasons are close to home, good reputation, 24-hour shopping, parking facilities, friendly staff and competitive prices.

It is noticeable that the two underlying reasons are close to home and parking facilities.

A closer look at the data reveals that close to home was voted by 25 men and 20 women, 45 in total. In the meantime, only 17 men and 22 women voted relatively regarding the good reputation. Parking facilities were also one of the main three reasons, the number of male votes was 21 compared to female's one which was 20.

The last three reasons, which are competitive prices, friendly staff and 24-hour shopping shared the same fate. The competitive prices obtained 14 guy's votes and 17 from the opposite gender. Friendly staff, on the other hand, got 12 votes from both genders, each with six. The least favorite reason was the 24-hour shopping because it attained zero votes from females and 4 from the opposite sex.

The data suggest that people visit the ASDA supermarket mainly because of the convenience.

reasons for shopping at ASDA supermarket no. of men no. of women
close to home 25 20
good reputation 17 22
24-hour shopping 4 0
parking facilities 21 20
friendly staff 6 6
competitive prices 14 17

Writing Feedback / Choosing the custom of the place you live, and your own custom, has always been a polemical topic. [3]

When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country.
Others prefer to keep their own customs. Compare these two choices.
Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details.
You should write at least 250 words.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Choosing the custom of the place you live and you custom has always been a polemical topic. Numerous people consider it is right to follow the custom of the new country since you need to find your feet in that society. On the contrary, keeping your own custom is also reasonable because after all, you are a citizen of a specific country. Notwithstanding, I support the community, which adjusts to other custom.

When you lived in another country, it would be arduous for you to not get accustomed to its custom. It is understandable because you would be reckoned as an outsider. People would treat you differently or even discriminate. It does not always apply to every single human being. It is because not many individuals would behave that way explicitly. However, you still have to show them your gratitude. Otherwise, you would most likely to face repercussions. For pragmatic instance, I used to dwell in Russia once. I did not follow its custom. After a while, there were some horrible consequences, which happened to me. As a result, you always have to prioritize an unfamiliar custom when you live in a specific country.

There are some folks who would rather guard their own customs because they think it would be plausible. Those people have a tendency to neglect other customs because of their obsolete belief. They simply do not understand how priceless every custom is. We should never believe that way. Every custom is identical. We are born from the same god. There should be no such thing as superiority in regards to the customs. Hence, it is not the best idea to carry your custom with yourself, while living in a foreign country.

The aforesaid evidence insinuates that these days, people hold various beliefs. One might consider that it is imperative to protect their custom, others might be against it. Personally, I advocate people who are flexible and get used to the custom where they live.

Writing Feedback / There are some huge gaps between male and female regarding teaching - IELTS [4]

The graph chart provides a breakdown information of the six distinguishable types of educational setting, in the UK in 2010. The chart classified teachers in both genders and measured in percentage.

It is noticeable that there are some huge gaps between male and female regarding teaching.

A closer look at the data reveal that the female teachers preferred Nursery/Pre-school, the primary school and the secondary school. If the story is about the Nursery, females were almost the only type of teacher, and thus, 98% out of 100%. The primary school had the similar story, the vast majority teachers were females. The percentage of the female teachers were 95%, whilst the rest was obviously male's one, a 90% difference. Secondary school, female teachers were still leading with its 56% and the male teachers took the rest 46%. The college had both genders, each with 50%.

Male possessed highest percentage in the private training institute and the university. The first place, which is the private training institute contained more than half male teachers. The percent was 56 compared to the female's roughly 46%. In the university, it is conspicuous that men outnumbered female. This is because 70 % teachers in the university were male, whereas 30 % was the percentage of the female teachers.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2: Government alone cannot defeat the climate change! [3]

Scientists and the news media are presenting ever more evidence of climate change. Governments cannot be expected to solve this problem. It is the responsibility of individuals to change their lifestyle to prevent further damage.

What are your views?

Climate change has always been a polemical topic since it first appeared. It makes our planet warmer reach day. This can lead towards numerous consequences that need to be eschewed. The government cannot solve all these issues on its own because government is human after all. Even if the government could handle the problems, people will still have to back the government. This is because everyone is responsible for the climate change. Therefore, I wholeheartedly agree the statement, which asserts that we have to alter the way we live to hamper the upcoming aftermaths.

Government was created by human beings themselves. We as human beings sometimes find it arduous to fix every single hassle. It is reasonable because other issues, such as deflation and inflation overwhelm us. That is why, people should step in and change their actions in lieu of constantly relying on the government. For example, the government now has lots of troubles regarding money, so it cannot allot any second to climate change. We as the loyal citizens should fix the climate change ourselves. This can immensely benefit our planet. As a result, people must participate to the battle when it comes to solving the climate change's issue.

Aside from the responsibilities, it is imperative for any person to understand the danger of the climate change. This phenomena can ruin the planet as well as the people who dwell on it. It can be the end of our existence. We must step it up and fight back the climate change alongside our government. Assume yourself living under the dangerousness of the climate change. Obviously, we need to worry about the surviving. Hence, we have to defeat the climate change no matter what it takes.

The aforesaid evidence insinuates that humankind must be enthusiastic in regards to the climate change. Taking all the points into account, I have a robust belief that every folk need to take care of the Earth.

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1: Unpaid works and people who squander time on them! [2]

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)

Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

You should write at least 150 words.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram provides a breakdown information of the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people, of which carry children from 1 to 2, 3 and older and without children. The diagram is measured in hours.

It is noticeable that the married women have a tendency to spend more time on unpaid works, whilst the married men possess the opposite story.

A closer look at the data reveals the three types of married women, which allot an ample time to the unpaid works. Married women with 3-year-old and older child ranked as the highest with their roughly 60 hours a week. The second candidate with the lower hours is the married women with a child from 1 to 2 years old. Their hours reached 50. The last type of married women spent only 30 hours on unpaid jobs.

In regards to married men, obviously, they cannot distribute their time for the unpaid works as much as their wives. The data suggest married men with 3 years old and older child worked for 15 hours per week. The gap between all types of married men is about an hour. As a result, married men, who do not possess offspring spend 17 hours for unpaid works, more than married male with kids from 1 to 2 years old by an hour.

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Writing Feedback / Growing up in a big city can have lots of benefits, such as schools, experiences; City vs Rural area [3]

It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.
Do you agree or disagree?
Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.
You should write at least 250 words.

Growing up in a big city can have lots of benefits, such as schools, experiences. While living in a countryside can protract your child life expectancy. Notwithstanding, children should have the best education since as they become older, it will be more arduous for them to comprehend any knowledge. We also have to force children experiencing the cruel society. This helps them get accustomed to living in a big city earlier. Therefore, I am personally convinced that children should grow up in a big city.

Searching for a proper school might be complicated in the countryside. This is because not many people live in the rural area, and thus, it is pointless to build numerous schools here. The problem can easily be solved by living in an urban area or move to it. The big city usually possesses an abundance types of schools, which can satisfy your demand. Imagine yourself, dwelling in a city. Obviously, you will have endless choices regarding schools. As a result, it is quite a benefit for a child to harbor in a city.

Aside from a wide range of schools, one might be mature swifter, than those which live in a rural area. This is reasonable because an urban chill will be able to encounter a variety of people from different ethnicity. Even though, it does not always apply to every single human being because it might turn out that your child will stay at home all days. However, the vast majority of children now are dissuaded by their parents to entertain outside their home, playing with other kids. For instance, city is the place in which your child live and it has an enormous amount of personalities which live there. Briefly, your child will develop faster because of the numerous interactions.

The aforesaid evidence alludes that dwelling in a city is much more wonderful for children. Taking all the points into account, I tally the community, in which people believe in the city.

Writing Feedback / Growing numbers of people send their offspring to study in other countries - it has its detractors [2]

Nowadays, education overseas has become more accessible and growing numbers of people send their offspring to study in other countries. However, this trend has its detractors.

I strongly believe that the pros far outweigh the cons, and will examine both below.
You should write at least 250 words.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Education has always been the way for parents and other people to ensure themselves that their kids will be provided numerous knowledge. Having said that, studying abroad also helps children be mature swifter. Even though it has some disadvantage, such as having a nostalgia feeling. The cons can never exceed the advantages. Therefore, I am personally convinced that studying abroad's cons are no way near its benefits.

The vast majority of people now have a tendency to send their children abroad since most of their countries cannot satisfy their demands regarding the education. This phenomena force their child to be exposed to the real world, which should expedite the maturity process of their children. The knowledge that is imparted by a specific country, in which the child moves to is abundant. It is reasonable because their parents usually vigilantly choose the country, of which contains lots of knowledge before sending their children to a certain location. Envision yourself, being a kid who has the opportunity to study in England. Obviously, your English will be enhanced once you live there as well as your maturity due to living alone and encountering a tremendous amount of people. As a result, the benefits of studying abroad are enormous.

Along with the advantages, the only disadvantage is the loneliness. You might not be able to make friends in a certain country, loneliness would overwhelm you. It does not always apply to every single human being because not everybody suffers from the same issue. However, there are some individuals who possess a strong bond with their families and thus, fail to survive in a foreign country. For instance, I have an elder sister who has been residing in Australia for 5 years. She used to keep in touch with our family because no one understood her personality there. It was a huge obstacle for her to concentrate on studies. She eventually overcame it, but it was quite a process and not everybody might end up that well. Briefly, missing home is the only disadvantage of studying abroad.

The aforesaid evidence insinuates the number of benefits people receive when they study abroad exterminate its insignificant setback. Taking all the points intro account, I tally with the community, in which people believe in studying abroad and its lucrativeness.

Grammar, Usage / Future perfect continuous tense and its usage! [5]

By the time when you have been singing for 7 years, she will have been singing for 14 years!

I wonder whether it is a congruous sentence!