Writing Feedback / International communication online. Distance is not a main problem in connecting people anymore. [5]

Some people think that being able to communicate with others online is breaking down geographical barriers and enabling people, who would normally never have a chance to meet, to communicate.

What are the advantages of international communication online?
Are there any disadvantages to this?
(IELTS task 2)

Online communication has been advanced nowadays. Distance is not a main problem in connecting people as it used to. Moreover it brings an opportunity to make a relationship and friendship with someone in oversea. Beside of many benefits brought by international communication online, it also brings several drawbacks.

Internet is now used by a large number of people around the world . As a matter of fact, More than 3 billion people in the world are internet users, which social media users approximately reach 2,2 millions. It means that more than one third of population in the world are connected online. we can say that Geographical barriers are slightly eliminated. We just need to stay online to search people we want to meet or to have a chat with. In addition, online communication does not cost too expensive and much more affordable than before. Another advantage is to access information easily. Due to spreading internet connection in almost every place in the entire of the earth, news and information now are accessible and up-to-date. It will surely make people pampered and enable them to communicate with everybody elsewhere .

In spite of this, some drawbacks appear as well. Face-to-face communication can be slowly decreased. The more people go online, the less they have sometime to socialize with their environment. Hence, it can lead people to be selfish and ignorant. In another case, Because of unlimited accessing data online, some people try to misuse this facility. There is no limitation to upload and download data or information. Fraud and propaganda are common terms of abuse. To illustrate, some countries try to protect their citizen by banning some harmful website, some do even worse. North Korea restricts the society to access the internet, because the government possibly think that it is not proper to be consumed by the citizen or it could be forbidden to communicate with other people from other country. As a result, it can be a boomerang for online community.

In conclusion, people have a right to communicate with everybody from everyplace. They also have a right to access information. internet is a communication tool that provides those chances. What we need to understand is to utilize the facility wisely. Since it is developed in order to break communication barriers, it will never be true if we use it as a means of abuse.

Writing Feedback / Business & money - recruiting workers important for a company (ielts task 2) [5]

Some people think that when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others consider they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.
ielts task 2

Hiring someone to work in a company is not an easy task to do, especially for human resource department in certain company. Employers should hire innovative and independent workers with an expectation that they might bring the company developed by their idea, however they should think about hiring employees who have good teamwork and obey instruction as well. It is rare to have a worker equipped those two aspects mentioned. In this case, the author of a company needs to set up a standard in accepting an employee.

Innovative and independent workers have a wide view of work and things they have done. It can be caused by either their experience or their intelligence. Additionally, most of them are not developed in teamwork skill. To illustrate, a smart worker with high education and a lot of experiences has many creative ideas that are anti-mainstream. He usually does something inappropriate with other workers, even the policy of the company. But sometimes he is admittedly able to bring the company developed. It means that creative workers tend to work independently, because no one is brave to take a risk like them. It is not always good because a company has a set of procedures to be obeyed, and a breakthrough is not always successful.

In another side, when employers hire workers with a good teamwork and submissive, they need to ensure that policies and programs they have made are full of consideration. it is good to have this type of workers in order to running an order well, but Once the author make a mistake, no employee will predict it. A harm is not easily detected. For example, a manager of marketing is negligent to make a decision in promotion programs, his men will go with the instruction. It means that a failure is waiting if there is no critical person - the creative one who always thinks before obeying a policy. by contrast, having too many independent workers is not suggested.

To reiterate, i believe that a standard of hiring a worker should be well-established. Companies should recognize what kind a person they are. thus, employers can put them on proper departments, or, at least the number of both kinds of workers is balance. However, employers are fully-authorized, so they have a right and consideration in what kind of workers are needed in their company.

Writing Feedback / Business and money; big budgets for marketing and promoting. [4]

large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products.
what problem does this cause?
what could be done to encourage people to buy local products?
ielts task 2

Big business spend a lot of money on advertising their products in order to attract people. It makes people able to easily recognize the products and influences consumers to buy more and more. Therefore local businesses are unable to compete in marketing. as a consequence, it might be a dead-end business for them.

Promotion is a key for companies to be successful. They persuade society to buy their products. The more advertisements appear on media, the more chances come to get their products sold out. Despite of success for big companies, local business will experience a hard time. There is no sufficient money to fund promotion such as advertising by TV or on line media. It means a death for local business, particularly small business.

Even though a threat is on the move, local business should not just give up and let everything happen. They need to find a way to deal with this situation. At first, they need to keep the quality of products they produce. Then, small promotion might be set up. To illustrate, local business can utilize social media to share what they have made, as we know that social media is free of charge. They can put some testimonies of consumers who have ever used their products on it. Due to lack of budget, this way will be very helpful, or at least local business still exist, not completely disappear. By the rising number of social media users, it is not admittedly surprising if their consumers are increasing.

Marketing is a must whatever the business is. The range of consumers taken depends on how financially strong a company funds it. Instead it must not be counted as a barrier. there will always be a way to cope with it. Local business just need to keep finding solution to be sold out as well as big business.

Writing Feedback / Closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities [2]

hii, EF members, please give me comments and advice.

Due to the development and rapid extension of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?
ielts task 2

The increasing number of supermarket in several countries has made local business knocked down. One opinion states that local people will be bankrupt due to collapse of local business. However, i believe that it can precisely bring local people to be much more developed if this problem is positively responded. So, i firmly disagree with opinion mentioned.

Local business run by local people looks out of date and is not attractive. Modern community likes something instant and more colorful. To illustrate, traditional markets in some developing countries are dirty and messed up. Supermarkets, as a comparison, are clean and well-arranged. It is one point that attracts people to choose supermarket for shopping. People in common will surely choose shopping in a place with air conditioner, sweet-smelling and comfort. In addition, the price is also competitive. As a result, less and less people go to traditional market for shopping, in other words, there is no reason for people to choose traditional markets as the first option.

Local businesses have a lot of homework dealing with this condition. If they do not want to fall, they need to rearrange everything, including service, appearance and marketability. Started from things they sell, local businesses have to keep the quality and offer something that supermarkets do not. For example, local clothing companies should make copyrights and keep their originality, and only sell the products in their own outlets. They should be creative in producing products as well. Because once they are not creative, loss of market is a consequence. Fresh food and vegetables, additionally, need to be considered for traditional market to preserve. It means that local sellers should care about the freshness and pay more attention to the hygiene of food and vegetables sold. It can be a consideration for consumer to choose where they shop. The last is price. As we know that monopoly is a public enemy. How to avoid it and how to keep the price lower than modern markets are questions that need to be answered by local businesses.

In my view, it is only about how to keep creative. Local businesses cannot prevent a competition. The only choice is to face it. They need to see this situation as a challenge, or at least they must still stand as an option for buyers. I never think that it is a death for local businesses, but it is a chance to rise up instead. It can obviously stimulate them to come up with innovation. In addition, government should wisely take a part in making policy, so healthy competition will be guaranteed.

Writing Feedback / Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools [2]

Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that the discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents.

Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
ielts task 2

The problem of who should be responsible of students' discipline is now faced by modern schools. Some argue that teachers should be in charge of this situation, while others are in the opposite. Discipline for students describes as a proper behavior including time management, responsibility and also dealing with rules. Actually we cannot just appoint one of both parents and teachers to be responsible with this, but a teamwork - between educators and parents - should be well-established.

Schools, which essentially have a function to guide children not only about the academic skills but also about their attitudes including discipline, should clearly understand their role. Students spend their time a lot in school, which implies that their characters are built in its environment. They go along with their friends, teachers and school circumstances, which sometimes teacher do not realize that they go too far. Some learn how to lie in school because they try to escape from any punishment given by their teachers. Others try to disobey the strict rules which put them on pressure. Those examples can bring pupils to the wrong way, but only few educators carefully recognize this as a problem. understandably, it is impossible for teachers to control each student in school. Moreover modern schools have a great deal of information technologies that can ease students to access everything which is not supposed to be done, such as pornography, gang fights and other worse things. Indirectly, it can also stimulate them to get lack of discipline. More controls and appropriate regulations are needed in order to discipline enforcement.

In keeping students' discipline, parents also play an important past as well. It is important that parents know what their children face and feel as long as they are not at home. Then, parents can decide what should be done to develop their self-discipline. Here the sustainable process of what schools have done continues. For example, parents should remind them to do their homework, Or help them in managing time so they will not be late to come to the school. Correspondingly, the importance of obeying the rules should be taught and applied in home.

In conclusion, school and home are two important places in developing students' self-discipline so that, as has been noted, a well-established teamwork between parents and teachers must be set up. In the light of difficulties in educating children to be discipline, either parents or educators need to make a good communication and be supportive in order to find an appropriate way to implant self-discipline in students' mindset.

Writing Feedback / Some group of people complain and feel unsatisfied that government is wasting money on arts [5]

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere.
To what extent do you agree with this view?

National budget is managed by the government. When it goes to wrong sector, some group of people in society will complain and feel unsatisfied. In this case, a statement attacking the government is that they should not waste too much money on arts. They think that other sectors need to be financially supported by the government. Although we cannot judge that art sector is not important, wasting too much money on it is unnecessary.

Since people pay tax to the state, moreover when the charge of tax is high, they will put pressure on government to provide their demands. It will surely be a problem because government will never be able to full fill all what every citizen wants. Art, in this context, is non-essential sector to fund. Perhaps, art is not a beneficial sector in certain industrial areas, but it might be an important sector that consumes more national budget in any other areas. The opinion depends on where people live and how they see the situation. Non-industrial areas which have many craftsmen living will fight against this argumentation.

Actually, it is difficult for government to make a decision. One thing that can be done by government is to measure the level of necessity that country has. It means that what country needs should be sharply recognized by the government. Other sectors, like education, economy and health care, are need to be considered too.

As my final statement, government must find out what is urgent to be a priority. Art is also essential to develop, moreover when art comes as a character of the county itself, nevertheless state cannot override other sectors and people's aspiration. I agree with the opinion to not waste money on art, Because Waste word here means spending too much money. So, government, as a policy maker, should properly spend the money and ensure that the sectors funded will give a positive feedback.

Scholarship / School should cut off art and music out of curriculum to avoid the pressure on young students [4]

The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology.

To what extent do you agree?

World needs to prepare young generation in the early age to face modern era. In this situation, Schools should actively take an important part to make them ready. As they have to focus on some useful subjects related to information technology, an opinion about to cut off art and music from the curriculum comes up. This argumentation is not absolutely wrong, but in the other hand children also need arts and music as a part of their life. I partly disagree to eliminate those subject out of curriculum and education.

Art and music are some most important components in the development of children. Since babies were born in the world, they have dealt with music and some kinds of arts. They understand music at the first time they can hear a sound. Those are familiar with children, so it seems like we take a piece of what they have naturally. Music and art can control mood and human's emotion, moreover children. Keeping them in a good mood and making them enthusiastic to study are not an easy task to do. Teachers in kindergarten use music to give an instruction for their students, also they use a simple drawing or picture to get them interested in studying lessons. This means that music and art cannot be separated from the students, especially children.

In other condition, music can increase the students' intelligence. Some research shows that a person who plays musical instrument well has better opportunity to master academic subjects quickly because tones that they produce in the music can stimulate their creativity, imagination and comprehension. It strengthens the argument that music and art should not be eliminated. In addition, Albert Einstein ever stated that imagination is more important than knowledge. we know that music and art have a tight connection with imagination itself. Therefore, eliminating those subjects is not suggested.

By some thoughts above, i assume that the problem is not about tightening up the academic skills of the students by eliminating those subjects, but how to make a correlation between science and art. We cannot put such an pressure on young students to learn certain subject strictly. Sometimes what parents and teacher think is not always right. In other words, it does not mean that students will have more seriousness in their academic subjects without music and art. Just let the students freely choose what they want to learn as their interest. Schools just need to guide them properly, and finally the students will find the way of what they are as they grow up and have more understanding.

Writing Feedback / News: the truth should be objective rather than subjective [6]

Most people think that the truth should be objective rather that subjective when it comes to the news.
Do you think all news is true?
What is the function of a newspaper?
IELTS TASK 2

The main function of news is to inform people about reality so that news should be presented as objective as possible, But the fact says something different. Not all of the news now is based on the truth. Mass media is used to spread an important issue to support certain party. I think it is out of the main purpose of informative media that should be objective.

Back to Nazi era, Media, particularly newspaper, was used as a propaganda agent. Hittler used media to direct people go with what he needed. By this way, we understand that news can be a tool to some group brainstorming the public. It is clearly opposite with what news should be. If we look at a definition of news in dictionary, news means noteworthy information, especially about recent or important events. We can notice the word noteworthy here means essential information that we cannot manipulate or make up a story to replace the fact. Once people get wrong information, they will try to judge something the same with what they have got from the news, even they have no idea about what the truth is.

One of traditional media, newspaper, is still used around the world. although it is now being replaced by some electronic media, it is still popular in society to get information. Newspaper can reach all social classes, started from the poor to the rich and the educated-man to uneducated man. Beside of spreading factual news, newspaper can also be a means of advertising purpose. Because of that, it is not surprising that newspaper is owned by businessmen and some specific allies. While the function of newspaper enlarges, the fact presented in the news is also turned. The owners, which are sometimes involved in a certain party, try to get a support from society by informing lies or non-essential information in order to scapegoat their opponents. It is completely faulty. The absolute truth will always be mysterious.

To conclude, i agree with the statement that news should be objective rather than subjective. As a citizen, i need a news by reading newspaper, watching TV and going on-line, yet i will not always believe what i read and watch. I suggested to not directly capture a raw information. As a smart society, we should categorize a news which is true (or only a rumor) and which is a diverting issue. We must make sure ourselves to not be provoked as what we have learnt from the past. The media should also ensure that the news is the truth as well.