Writing Feedback / Writing task 2 _ Some people think having healthy lifestyle is difficult while others think it is ea [6]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days, healthy lifestyle has become a trend among most of inhabitants. What kind of food they eat, how many time they go to gym and what yoga course they take are being concerned mostly by the majority of citizens. Thus, this new trend eventually lead them to a healthy life even though another group of people find it is still difficult to be run.

Many people assume that healthy lifestyle means improving lifestyle cost. Consuming oorganic food, for instance, is something that is considered asa luxury. Besides, bad habit like consuming junk food which has been being done by most people also takes big role of the reason why live healthy life is difficult. Nevertheless, I am convinced that it is not hard to live healthy lifestyle as long as the subject itself has a strong willing for it.

On the other hand, some societies find it easy beacuse they only need to be discipline to live healthy life. Exercise, taking some rest, and balanced diet are the main points that build healthy lifestyle, I think. People do not need to go to gym to do exercise, even walking pass some metres around office to find a restaurant in break time can be counted as an exercise. It is as simple as that.

All in all, it seems that the intention determines ifhealthy lifestyle is difficult or easy to be run. Either he/she is busy or not, they first thing should be questioned is how far someone wants a healthy lifestyle.

Writing Feedback / Article Summary _ You Can Now Buy Harry Potter's Childhood Home at 4 Privet Drive [3]

This summary is extracted from an article published on time, on September 2016. Its original title is "You Can Now Buy Harry Potter's Childhood Home at 4 Privet Drive".

Have you watched Harry Potter and The Sorcerer's Stone? You would be familiar with the Dursley's house then. Now, the home where Harry Potter spends his childhood can be enjoyed by Harry Potter Series' fans. The cost might not perturb you unless you are a big fan. $620,000 is required to have a precious memory spending time in its backyard, laying down on its bedroom and feeling the atmosphere of the cupboard under the stairs. This residence is located at the suburb of London.

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Writing Feedback / Current development is signed by the advancement in technology. Internet is one of its invention. [2]

The internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be completely different.

To what extant do you agree or disagree?

Current development is signed mostly by the advancement in technology. Internet is one of its invention during the last three decades. It gives huge influence to the majority of inhabitants' lifestyles. I believe that most of people's lifestyle is under internet's effect.

It cannot be denied that easiness causes most people to become lazier. Then internet comes with it. It accustoms its users to depend on it. Consequently, most of societies are internet maniacs which lead them to be an ignorant people in real life. Keeping relationships on by having chat online, for instance, can cause them to think that they do not have to meet one another anymore.

On the other hand, basically, the advancement of technology ease its users' life. Internet, as one of them, comes to facilitate people either to find informations and/or to keep communications with other relatives or colleagues. Young people mostly interract each other by using social media accounts which means they use internet access regularly. In additional, office workers, academicians, businessmen, housewives or whoever they are, make internet being one of their necessity to do their works. For example, a researcher will spend much time conducting his research unless he has an internet access.

To sum up, I genuinely believe that this kind of cutting-edge technology does effect most of inhabitants' way of life. Simply it eases everyone's needs indeed.

Writing Feedback / Summary _ Anniesa Hasibuan Becomes First Designer to Present NYFW Collection with Hijabs [2]

This summary is extracted from an article published on cosmopolitan.com/style-beauty/a3381189/anniesa-hasibuan-first-nyfw-runway-collection-with-hijabs/ on 15 September 2016. Its origina title is Anniesa Hasibuan Becomes First Designer to Present NYFW Collection with Hijabs

Fashion designers are getting more competitive. In the lastest New York Fashion Week,a very prestigious event among fashion designers, presents a very talented designer, Anniesa Hasibuan. An Indonesian fashion designer who focuses on muslim fashion. This very talented designer presents her collections which are inspired by her hometown, Jakarta. By using colorful silks and patterns, she made 48 glamour collections that consist of trousers, suits, kimonos, tunics, and gowns. She said that her aim is to introduce Indonesian name globally especially in fashion world. At the end of her runway, she gets a standing ovation, a high esteem in Fashion Weeks.

Writing Feedback / These diagrams explain two traditional systems to draw water. [3]

Writing task 1 _ Two methods of collecting water for irrigation purpose

The diagrams explain two traditional systems to draw water. The first method involves human power while cow is involved by the second method. Overall, both methods use pail as its tool.

In the first method, called Rope and Bucket, draws water by using two pulleys. Pulley 1 is put on the left side of the stagnant pit while the other one is above the pulley 1. Then, the rope is fixed to the pail, and is installed to the pulleys'rollers. Moreover, there is an irrigation channel right beside stagnant pit and a down hill next to it.

The process is started by putting the buffalo on the down hill with the rope on his body. So when it goes down through the down hill, the rollers work and a pail of water comes out. The water is directly poured to the irrigation channel because the pail is blocked right after it is up.

On the other hand, the second method, called Swing Basket, involves two workers and used a traditional pail made of bamboo with two ropes are fixed to both its right and left side. Its irrigation channel is beside the reservoir. In compare to the first method, this Swing Basket runs simply by swinging the pail full of water. So the process is started by the workers holds the two ropes in each side, after that they dip the pail to the reservoir and finally it is swung and poured to the irrigation channel.

Writing Feedback / Summary _ Halal foods are particulary popular with millenia [2]

One of Muslims' culture is accepted warmly in America by the indigeneous. Nowadays, people tend to pay more attention to what they consume. Regardless its taste, the consciousness of foodstuff holds another role. Halal foods becomes a trend to American. It is foods that are controlled based on Islam's rules, either its ingredients, or its treatment matter. It has its own criteria and requirement. The data from Bloomberg shows that it has increased one-third since six years ago and keep rising. This new trend isinseparable from Muslims' role in America that keep growing as well. Even though Non-Muslims in America take part in it also.

Writing Feedback / The shown line graph indicates the readers' changes of Starmouth School library [3]

The shown line graph indicates the readers' changes of Starmouth School library according to how many books read over four years period. The readers are grouped based on gender identity. Overall, it is seen clearly that during the first three years, both male and female readers are in accordance. Until in 2011, they intersect. Henceforth, for the next year its gap widened out.

The data shows that from 2009 to 2010, male and female readers who read books in the library jumped steadily. Male readers rose to 30 people while female readers rose to 20 people. Moreover, the male readers read books rose dramatically to 20 books while female readers rose slightly to 60 books. As a result, the gap between them was narrowed down from 40 to zero over a year period.

Nevertheless, in the last year, books that was read by male in the Starmouth School library fall by 20 books, while books read by female reached a peak at 140 books.

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Writing Feedback / On the video, the most things that Gore emphasize are optimistic and awareness. [5]

Summery TED _ Al Gore - A new thinking on the climate crisis

On the video, the most things that Gore emphasize are optimistic and awareness. We, the inhabitants of the universe, have to use the resources effectively. Let's utilize all that we have, technology, for instance. As what Australian have done. Taking the advantages of television, radio and internet to inform everyone that we are actually in urgent; that our live is on danger. Then, times later, Australian can recover from their drought.

Thus, when everyone, especially young generation, has the sense of the ecology then we can solve the problem. Be an active citizen or the use of CO2 in all countries rockets faster than we think it can. So, we need to move fast and far.

Writing Feedback / Five - second rule revealed (summary) [3]

Overyone surely is familiar with this term. This non-written rule is actually applied by most people where we have to directly pick up our dropped food or plenty of bacteri attack it. All moms over the world seems to teach their children to take the fallen food as soon as possible. However, there still is no scientific explanation about it.

According to food scientist, Paul Dawson, how fast and many the bacteria can come to the food that hit the floor depends on the kinds of the surface which is hit and the food itself. Wet foods, for example, are faster to be clung than a cookie.

Source : news.nationalgeographic.com/2016/09/five-second-rule-revealed/

Writing Feedback / Bill Gates - how do you stop deadly disease that spread by mosquitos? [3]

Summery TED _ Bill Gates - Mosquitos, malaria and education

Bill Gates' speech focused on two different questions; how do you stop deadly disease that spread by mosquitos? and how do you make a teacher great?

The deadly disease, in this case is malaria had been a phenomenal case over the world. Then people in the past use tools to eraducate it such as bed net, quinine treatment for the patients and kill the mosquitos. As a result, the number of malaria patients went down. Most of infected countries had recovered. However, there are still numerous countries had the disease. What should be done is involving everyone who is expert in their field to make a change.

On the other case, a conducted reasearch proves that those great teachers are not because of their master degree but their past experience. KIP (Knowledge is Power), a school that has great teachers. They points are those teachers are being very active, they perticipate each students and personnel system. KIP teachers have target, measure their skill and criticize their work each other regularly.

The point is gathering people to work together and the solution is on progress.

Writing Feedback / The interesting Al Gore speech on ecosystem [2]

Summery TED _ Al Gore, Averting The Climate Crisis

Al Gore starts his speech by his own true story in some funny features. Continuing his speech, he slowly brings the listeners to the main topic, ecosystem. The fact that he experienced the extremely temperature change only in two days just shocked him. Therefore, these are his resolutions of the problem. Firstly, we are asked to change our way of thinking that actually by minimizing the use of electricity and energy is not a sacrifice anymore because the benefits are back to ourselves. Secondly, Gore suuggests us to use transportation efficiently, simply to reduce the pollution. And the last but not least is, changing the way of life. Let's be greener. We should start it from home such as buying green electricity and increasing hybrid.

Writing Feedback / Most Young American Can't Pass a Test on Global Affairs -- Can You? Summery for an Article [3]

Youth people nowadays has limited knowledge about national and international issue. A survey conducted by Council on Foreign Relations and the National Geographic Society proves that in fact, young Americans, which can be said that their level of educations are in upper level, are hard to answer the list of given questions.

Youth are lack of information about socio-cultural enviroment. They have no idea about what the current global issues is happening. They seem not interested in discussing politics or economics. They tend to find it as a heavy matter to be talked by people in their age. Thus it becomes a weak side of being good citizens to face the next coutry or even world problems.

Based on the survey that has been done, repondents always get some countries problem incorrectly. However, regardless of their weak awareness, Richard Haass, Council on Foreign Relations' president, suggest that to make things right, we should educate our young generations.

Source : news.nationalgeographic.com/2016/09/survey-geography-foreign-relations-americans-students/

Writing Feedback / Several different citizenships of New Zealand's guest [2]

The pie chart illustrates several different citizenship of New Zealand's guests and is measured by percent. Those guests are from three different continents; Australia, Europe and Asia. Overall, it can be seen that the citizens who come from Australia and Europe continents place more than half of the overall percentage, while only small group of tourists from Asia continent who visit New Zealand.

The tourists from Australian and Europe continents; Australia, United Kingdom and United States, are the largest number. At the top of the percentage is Aussy, it takes 40 percent travellers. The second is British which takes 12 percent and the third is placed by American which takes 9 percent.

On the other hand, Asia continent which consists of South Korea, Japan and China, place the last three stages. Tourists who come from South Korea are only 3 percent from the overall visitors. While Japanese and Chinese who in New Zealand as tourists take 4 percent and 5 percent respectively.

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