Writing Feedback / Powerful matthew hurricanes threaten Jamaica. [4]

Powerful matthew hurricanes threaten Jamaica.

Recently there was occurs an extremely hurricane in jamaica it called matthew hurricane, and this was a powerful storm, they were reached the top classification, category 5 becoming in felix in 2007. The gale move slowly through caribean on Sunday, and lead to the atlantic. Whereas run was already fall in jamaica it will give big whorst effect in those area. Based on storm observer, matthew hurrican will be predicted had winds of 145 mph (230kph), it will be causes big disaster in around jamaica.

During the hurrican occur, government had anticipation to evacuates all of civilisation, they were build sehlters area to give accomodation the refugee, and total of shelters can be hold up approximately 340.000 people in an area. While government anticipate the storm, it was caused more loss to the jamaican, such as broke homes, office, hospital and others facility. New york times reporter present the information, it was big and powerfull gale in the recent history but there was no victim in this experiences.

Writing Feedback / SUMMARYS The colorful propaganda maps in 20 century wars [4]

The colorful propaganda maps in 20 century wars

Maps made to persuade to the public during war times were funy, attractive and informative. This is occurance during 20 century, every maps has hidden agenda, it is clear to convince to the public that war is must have and they has common enemies. For the example, war map of Rusia created in 1900 by Frederick Rose, British cartographer, this map reveal detils about politics, art and cultur of the countries. The main actor of this map revealed by big octopus with big body and long tentacles reaching out in all directions, strangling Poland, Finland, and China, and reaching toward Turkey, Afghanistan, and Persia. As the result, most european are depicted as victim of Rusia colonialism. In addition, war map can be seen international situation in one picture, and make fast the spread of information in the world. Pople will easy to understand the information but several persons it called propaganda.

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Writing Feedback / Speaking like a leader - most people does not have good speaking skills [2]

Speak like a leader

Recently, most people in the several countries does not have good speaking, because too difficult speak infront off the audience and they are do not know the way how to be good speaker. Simon lancaster TED speaker said in the TEDx on august 2016, speaking like leader is not hard, it was simple and easy learned. He said, there were six step to learn speaking like a leader, those were:

1.Three breathles sentences
This way often used by leader when they speaking infront of the public, three breathles sentennces mean in one breath we speak 3 sentences or word with good voice.

2.Three repetitive sentences
This mean to emphasize the important point of topic to convince the audience, for example ,in the future i will creates new good life, new idea, new concept and new freedom for this countries.

3.Three balancing statments
Most leader in the world always use balancing statement when they speak in the public, their statment not blaming in one topic or one object, but they use balancing data or case, for illustrates, the leader speak case rightnow, they are not only talk about now but also talk about past time and the future time as several persons it is interesting topic.

4.Rhyme
It is one of important part in speaking more people can not use it caused by too hard to create rhyme in the speaking.

5.Exaggeration
Exaggeration is art of speaking, make up the sentences with good word, avoid negative word eventhough that is fact.

6.Methapor.
It will make interesting speaking with good word like idiom to create beautiful sentences.

All of Above are steps to speak like a leader, simple and will make your speak like a real the leader.
In conclusion all of peopole in the world can speak in infront of audience if they are know the way .

Writing Feedback / The punishment should be fixed without considering the background of the criminal crime [2]

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of criem. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and motivation for comitting it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Several humans think of that crime must have punishment every case occuring. While others have opinion that the people have the reason for do the crime and this reason must have consider before the punishment is fixed. On the other hand I really keen on with the first view because crime is negative behavior and should be vanished to prevent more criminal.

Recently, degree of crimes always increase in several countries, this is caused by more factors. On of the factor is less of streght law. Interestingly, while the countries have a law arranging aparticularly crime, this is do not be considered by criminalis. Wherever every criminal should be give hard punishment. For illustrates, indonesia has a good law arranging crime, but criminal always occurances because they do not strict with the criminalis. As the result, crimes always occurance every where and everytime caused by less stress of law and punishment. I believe that strenght law and hard punishment are the good solution, and there is no amnesties to the crime because crime always culprite and make uncondusive situation.

However, several people have opinion that every body engaging crime have a reason and this is crucial to be considering before the punishment is fixed. In the most country there are more aspect to consider before punishment is gived, one of all is background or motive the criminalis doing the crime. For example, the United States of America has a culture in consider punishment to the criminalis. They have human right aspect to consider before they giving the punishment. While this way will give more jobs for the police because the police always geting new criminal case with the same problem.

In conclusion, preventing to the increases of criminal, punishment should be fixed without considering the background of the criminal do the crime .

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Writing Feedback / AN ARTIST'S UNFLICHING LOOK AT RACIAL VIOLENCE [3]

AN ARTIST'S UNFLICHING LOOK AT RACIAL VIOLENCE

Recently, more of artist's in America getting discrimination in their life between black and white ras. In 2005, one of the black ras arts's created six thousand glasses x symbol mind and spirit with details architecture and good materials, but they get the shokcing experience, the glasess color had been changed by buyer and be becoming insulation in the home. This is caused by global industry in the USA which every body free to do something about their thing without considering the brand of art. The speaker said, he created painting video with high performances to depict the life of black ras in USA. This video illustrates the phenomena of the black arts's judgement. Some day, they created a vodoo, to find out the materials they should be arounding the world, they think of that the vodoo very valuable. However after the vodo fisnish the american buy it and than change the color to shoot it with the gun and the bom. Seeing on this phenomenon the black art's feel unfair. It is not about industry. It is about real

Writing Feedback / The Surprising History Behind the Scary Clown Phenomenon [2]

The Surprising History Behind the Scary Clown Phenomenon

Long time ago, the crepy clowns had been appear, fisrt of all the clowns were marginal grouphs society in America. They always funy dressed but they make up the face with freak style. This phenonema not only occur in the USA but also in the several countries. The clowns popular as scary creaturs because their style was very stranger in the society. In the 19 century, the scary clowns popular as criminal. Therefore they are popular as crepy creatures. Spreading of the scary clowns are very rapidly. During the 19 century, they became enemies in the several country. However, After 19 century, condition of clowns became better than the 19 century, Charles Dickens london flokflore member grouph changed of scary clowns became the real clowns. In the 20 century, clowns industrys have been rapidly develop, sighting of scary clown in 20 century are hoaxes. The police had arrests all of scary clowns and right now, the clowns will be favourite entertainment in the USA and in the several countries.

Writing Feedback / Draw your future and control your life - TEDx [2]

Draw your future and control your life

Speaker of TED talked, not only active people who can draw the good dream, but also solitary as well. Leading your life design and get up from grave illness to the real life. Recently, most people in the world do not know what the aims of they do, approximately 40% people who know about purpose of their life. The speaker said, decided the best ways you should try to create your own vision with picture, because picture can be creating movement, not only that but also the picture can touch your heart.

For illustrates, the speaker created two pictures these were curent state and desired new reality, John had lovely wife and a lot of money but in the behind john does not felt happy because john had negative bos and any problem. Based on the picture john is in the current state, to get the best life john must be move to the new reality. After jo moved to the new reality he had new job, kind boss and jo had new children as well, not only that, but also john get new home, more conection and felt freedom.

What kind step to get success like john? The speaker explained, these were, the first is see it, the second is believe it and the last is action it. We have good brain and good imagination, so we should use it to get good life, strugle, get up and action every day.

Writing Feedback / Give me some advice about How to introduce yourself? [4]

How to introduce yourself?

Speaker TED-x talked about how to be good self introduction with new person. He said, most of people in the world have different style self present. Grouping by age , there are many styles self acquaintance with new person. For example speaker said, when he was primary school they introduce their self with stranger," halloo my name is Kevin and I like power ranger", they do the same style when he was junior high school and senior high school. According to the speaker that is bad self introduction and almost everyone do it. In fact everyone have same pattern and meaning on their self acquaintance, and that is bad self introduction. On the other hand the speaker is popular man when he was collage, most of people call him as master self present and master communication. Back to the topic, based on the experience of speaker, most of strangers do not care about your self, major, activity, hobby and all of your life. Several people think of that other people activities are not important on their life and those are something boring. So, start being kind man, safe and honest. In addition , to get good self introduction we should be inspiring person, awesome person, and avoid the meaningless conversation. In the conclusion the speaker change their self introduction when he was collage with word " halloo am Kevin and I love when people truly happy".

Writing Feedback / Overweight mothers give birth to biologically older babies [2]

Overweight mothers give birth to biologically older babies

Woman who are obeses while pregnant having impact which related to the their babies healty. There is big corelation between overweight pregnant women and their kids. The effect is their babies ageing 10 years older than normal babies. In addition, the babies sceptible get more deseas from their mother, such as diabetes and atherosclerosis.

According to the research, there is corelation between people biologicals and telomeres lingking to the DNA. On the other hand, team of research invent fascinating finding that the babies from overweight women expected 10 years older than the babies from healthy women, it causes that the fat in our body can prompt the inflammation, and give reactive chemicals can threatening cells and shorten telomeres.

Source: newscientist.com/article/2109327-overweight-mothers-give-birth-to-biologically-older-babies/

Writing Feedback / Anti-Trump protests continue across America [2]

To response the result of USA president election, Obama said that most of America society exultant and a lot of Americans more less so. Obama said that Americans are hard to be reconciling with the new situation and a lot of protesters breaking out against to the president elect in the several cities across America.

In Boston, Chicago and Washington DC; in Portland, Oregon and Austin, Texas and Donald,s trump house, New York City, many demonstrants are taking the streets to condemn the president elect. According to the demonstrant trump is the racist president. The demosntrants fill the several streets in the number of america cities. They recite chanting like ("go away president racist"), ("f**k you wall") and more chants. Not only that but also many protesters do the anarchism in the streets. Based on the chanting total of demonstrants is 20,000. They have schedule to protest in the street on November 10th and in the weekend. On the other hand The Number of Americans were shocked and appalled with the election outcome, because many people predict that Clinton will be the winner in the USA president election.

source: economist

Writing Feedback / British societies facing more problems caused by globalisation. WHY BREXIT HAPPENED? [3]

Why Brexit happened.

Ted speaker said that Brexit phenomenon is the good decision to Britain societies to face more problem caused by globalisation. This phenomenon gives big impact to the Europe, because it is not about politic, but more that, Brexit phenomenon are engaging many things around the world such as education, trade, and social. The speaker said, It Is not about right and life but to serve British societies from crisis globalisation and it is about tax, economy and politic. There are two facts that speaker tell, the first is degree of immigration and refugee always increase every year. They come from more countries the world. This phenomenon will leads Britain to the bad impact. It is not about tolerance, open society, and inclusive but it is to keep nationalism from negative globalisation effect. Based on speaker experience they find out that British people completely open and tolerance. Overtime, Globalisation and immigrant can be vanishing their culture and all of the aspects such as language, behaviour and education. The second fact is Liberalism international will threaten the nationalism of Britain civil. The New way of globalisation cause open liberal people in the Britain therefore government should give protection to keep and manage the globalisation. Britain believe that this policy will reduce the Immigrant, refugee and can manage globalisation effectively. Brexit will divide among civil life, culture ,education, and globalisation.

Writing Feedback / Summary TEDx Backyard forrest to face smog in the cities [3]

Subhendu Sharma was speaker in the TEDx, he spoke that he fascinated to the forest. Recently, forest more help people to reduce the smog, but the problem was the forest rare finded among the cities. Therefore, the speaker had idea to create forest in the backyard. Beside reduce the pollutant, backyard forest offers more advantages, one of them was harvested fruit in the backyard. In addition, Backyard forest was simple to be created. They only use biomass as the basic materials such as grass, powder of rice house, coconut shell, organic manure and water. So people can create forest by themselves with simple way, efficient, and cheap.

Writing Feedback / Here's How Facebook Actually Won Trump the Presidency [5]

Here's How Facebook Actually Won Trump the Presidency

The CEO of Facebook Mark Zuckerberg hard to convinces the citizens that Facebook had not nefarious role in America election. While, the dicector of Trump Digital said that giant social media had effective to send the information to the voters. Trump's team use Facebook as their cmpaign media. It aim to give information to the societies if spreading hoax issue and inaccurate information about trump and to tackle it. They use twitter as well to promote trump as candidate of USA president. Compare with Clinton, Trump spend more time on social media than television; whereas clinton more like campaign in the televison than social media.

Source: wired

Writing Feedback / An appropriate job can affect the happiness of people, but there are many other factors too [3]

Question:
Some people say that in order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing. Others say that other factors are more important.

Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job they really enjoy?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Happiness is something that make people feel comfort, happy, without much problems, and they can smile every day; however every single person has own definition about it. In fact, several people argue that job is the most factor, but the majority said that more factors would be affecting the happiness.

Nowadays, people having good job give argumentation that their job can be improving rate of happiness. This is because when people enjoy their life in every activities they will feel comfort and feel that their necessity can be filled. Not only that, but also they will be free people in the world because they can get happiness when they working in appropriate job without enforcement.To instance, people who like reading and writing get job in the publisher will fell really happy, because in the work they can practice their hobby and their skill in the same time without changing their hobby with other job which they do not like.

On the other word, the majority of people believe that happy can be caused by more reasons. The factor of happiness is not only occupation, but also other factors such as, family, social relationship, entertainment, basic necessity as well. To illustrates, the people who have good social relationship more happy than other people particular solitary person, such as harmonic family, kind friends, and positive surrounding. Other case is people who can fill their basic necessity because in fact people do not happy and stressful caused by basic necessity.

To sum up, job appropriate can be affecting rate of happiness people, but on the other side there are many factors which can affecting the happiness.

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Writing Feedback / Showing TV shows in all countries - writing IELTS academic task two [6]

Question:

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

Answer:

In globalisation era, people can get anything information every time particular by television. In this case several people believe that from television contents or movies we can access and learn about another state; however, not all of countries can learn by television because several of them have vital privation which is cannot expose to the public.

Recently, developed era offering easiness to access much information connecting people in the worldwide. In this view people can learn anything including about another country such as cultures, languages, and social lifestyle even the heritage. For example, there is television station providing programme about explore countries in the world called VOA channel. This channel gives much information about another country such the USA. When they shows the USA, they will explore anything about the USA such as economic, education, culture or politics which is up to date in the USA.

On the other hand, there are several countries which is would not shows their details country. This is because to keep their vital information to the public, to prevent threatening from out country and limited facilities or inaccessible. Other reason is the state does not interesting to show in the movies or television programmes. Many reasons in this case which is cannot showing the country to the television programme, so if people want to know about the country they should visiting directly the place.

In conclusion, television programmes and movies some times can be reference to learn about another country, but in fact not all of countries can show in the both of those. I hope in the future television programme completely show all of the countries even remote area and inaccessible.

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Writing Feedback / Information on the total number of fish caught and total number of fishing vessels used in Westhaven [3]

The data give information about total of fish catch and total of fishing vessel used in Westhaven during 2008 to 2011. Overall, it can be seen that every total of fish caught increased the number of fishing boats rose as well.

First of all, the first bar chart shows that during the time rate of tuna fish caught increased dramatically from 83 in 2008 to 110 in 2011. In the last period caught of tuna reached the highest value at 110. On the other word, rate of swordfish caught increased steadily by 100 in the fisrt two period, but their point decrease in the next period in 2010 at 78.

On the other hand, the second data shows that the biggest total of fishing vessel was in 2011 at 79; while the lowest point was in 2010 at 48. Not only that, but also there was fascinating phenomenon, it was in 2008 total swordfish 83 and total fishing boat was 50, then in 2009, number of swordfish was 100 and number of fishing vessel was 55, it mean that every fishing boat increased total of swordfish rose as well.

Writing Feedback / TASK ONE IELTS ACADEMIC WRITING LINE CHART [4]

The line chart shows information about total of amount of money a city council presented to the book clubs during four year measured by pound sterling. Overall, it can be seen that total of money which is given by city council always bigger than total of the book clubs.

Total money stood at 20,000 in the first year after that increase steadily by 3,000 in the second year from 20,000 followed by dramatic raise in the third year and peak at 40,000. However, in the last period the trend change decline dramatically by 37,000.

On the other word, books club has reversed pattern with total money pattern. First of all, the data of book groups stood at 6000, then in the next year slight decline by 5000. In the third years, book clubs rise significantly by 10000. In addition, trend of book clubs always increase from the last 2 years and reached at 12000 in the last period.

Writing Feedback / Sumarry TEDx How we will find life on other planet [2]

How we will find life on other planet

Aomawa shields is astronomer from University of Washington. On TEDx 2014, she was as a speaker. She said that there was water in our earth therefore there was life in our planet. Every places containing water can be predicted that there was life in that place. Recently, the result of Universe research shows that the materials in others planets have different kinds. Take it sample Venus, this planet has temperature surface 600 degrees Fahrenheit which was can melt a metal. On the other word, the place can be living should has atmosphere because it is the crucial items as balancing climate. Next speaker claim that characteristic of planet which is can be lived at least quite similar as earth. Another example was Glaces 7667 C planet 23 light way from earth, in this planet detected there was water on the surface. In the end, she believe that there was another one universe which is can be lived.

Writing Feedback / Why you should care about whale poo [2]

Why you should care about whale poo

Asha de Vos was whale protector and she became TEDx speaker in 2015. She said that Blue Whale became extinct because many people caught and made it as fish oil or fish production. People should aware that blue whale could hold environmental destruction. Whale conservation discovered that whale was sea engineer, because whale have two kinds of advantages to maintain sea habitat. The first was their poop can stimulate plankton to life and breeding, and the second was their carcass could be eaten by other creatures surrounding them. On the other word, they are nomadic animal usually they migrate approximately 16,000 miles each year between feeding and breeding, and back in the last year so this animal was vulnerable to disappear. We could prevent blue whale from extinction and the clearly way was conservation. Not only that but also we need revise our modern problem to stop throwing rubbish in the sea and fishing net the Blue Whale. We have to protect the blue whale because the true ecosystem was valuable.

Source: ted