Writing Feedback / In this digital era, the growth of technology is inevitable. The way that couple meet evolves too. [2]

With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Site some examples to support your answer.

In this digital era, the growth of technology is inevitable. Many activities can be experienced through technology such as virtual dating. However, i personally would not recommend my dear friends to get a date through online because the demerit of online dating is riskier than its merit such as they can be fooled by their mates.

Although i would not advise my friends getting a virtual date, i realise that dating on internet will ease our communication in relationship because flexibility of internet offers reducing time when communication is held. Based on survey research through skype users in 2015, almost 2 million people in the world have used skype to communicate with their companions while others use it for business purposes. As a result, we can clearly see that skype is one of the essential adjacent media which provides the easiness when getting video call to date.

On the other hand, technology as a media for communication cannot control actual life of people. So, it is a huge chance to be deceived by mates. For instance, my gorgeous friend who had a long distance relationship in almost six months was fooled by her boyfriend because he cheated with another girl in his town. Thanks to the incredible technology, through her curiosity, she can find his girlfriend by searching on the application which is provided by the internet. As a result, even we are able to stay in touch with our boyfriend by online, we cannot take care of their real life. So, risk of virtual dating is higher thank its benefits. That is the reason why i do not advise my friends to take online dating anymore.

In conclusion, getting date via online is unrecommended because people are easy to be fooled while the quickness of communication system through technology is inexorable

Writing Feedback / The alteration of the lakeside in 2000 and 2009 is shown in the diagram [2]

The changes in Lakeside in 2000 and 2009.

The alteration of the lakeside in 2000 and 2009 is shown in the diagram. Overall, it can be seen that residential area was concentrated in the north-west part of the lakeside while other public services were developed at each side of the area

In the west side of the river, several changes in public services happened between those two years. Following by the developing years, Art Centre was rebuilt and changed the name into Cinema. Afterwards, the number of offices and university was constructed next to residential area while derelic warehouse was demolished and turned into a car park. Moreover, a shopping centre was built opposite the cinema and schools while the residential area in 2000 is moved into the north.

When the lake was changed into a pond at the end of the river, an enormous number of industrial estate was constructed at the east side of the river. In addition, in 2009, the ninefold of various types in industrial complex were built by destroying a residential area

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Writing Feedback / A structure of the electricity production, based on waves as a power source. [2]

The diagrams show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power.

The diagram illustrates the flow of electricity production by using waves as a power source. It can be seen that generating electricity needs a turbine to spin the waves which will enter the system.

Initially, column and chamber are built to isolate the waves so that it can be concentrated to the electricity power system. It can be located on a cliff or at a sea wall to make an easy operation when the waves' air comes to the turbine. The process begins when the waves are pushed by air to move into the chamber. Secondly, the air comes through the column and turbine which is rotated in a clockwise direction. Finally, the waves' air creates the electricity.

On the other hand, when the electricity reaches the highest power, the waves are pushed by air which comes from the top of the column. Turbine still rotates in the same direction while electricity is generated. The air occurs the move of waves because the amount of air will affect the power of electricity which is generated.

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Writing Feedback / Companies arrange their recruitment to find people who are suitable for the position offered [2]

Some people think when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Recruiting new employees is held by companies regularly, and some people have an argument that companies should take on job seekers who are innovative and be able to work independently while others think recruitment is held to find people who want to follow the instruction and have an ability to working in a group. As far as i know about this notion, companies have their personal requirement of people who will be their employees. I believe that the characteristic of people who are recruited depends on the companies' necessity.

Initially, people who have an ability to work independently are needed in the position that occurs the employee solving the problem by themselves without any help. They have to be innovative and creative when thinking the solution. For instance, SSCX International as a consultant company was looking for people who can reveal the client's problem and give the presentation. So, when recruitment was organised, independent people became the main specification. The position as consultant in industry enhances the company to choose someone who has this ability.

On the other hand, other companies have to employ people who are capable of working in a team and follow the instructions. Taking Telkomsel as an example, the company needs people who will create a project which should be done as a team. Somehow, the requirement provides provision for jobseekers to have particular soft skills. As a result, because of the position which provides team work in project, they organise a recruitment for people who can fulfil their terms

In conclusion, companies arrange the recruitment to find people who suitable for the position offered. So, i think people should be aware when registering a position that appropriates to their criteria.

Writing Feedback / When people try their best with determination, it would be easier for them to become successful [2]

Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion

Everyone absolutely has desire to be success in life and some people believe that the main aspect to reach the goal is hard work and determination. However, others argue that there is another factor behind the success. I firmly believe that determination is a convenient key to success while an obvious schedule board as a planning method is needed when gaining a successful life.

Creating a mind map of the future planning is the wise step that we should make before taking a real action. A vision planning will be our guidance when we begin determined work. Based on a motivational book titled 'When the Dream Comes True' by Thania Miles, there are many categories which provide the success in life. One of the lists is schedule board. Every step of our life should be noted and when we able to fulfil our requirement as well as what we wrote, we can achieve our goal easily. However, as far as i am concern, schedule board which id designed by us will be useless if we do not determine it.

Determination and hard work are the real activities that we should do when we want to be success. Although the tracks are difficult, people who have a sophisticated desire will keep trying through their optimum ability. For instance, Joe Alexander, 15 years old big dreamer, got a precious nobel as the greatest pianist over the world after he practised every day and struggle since he was five, finally he can have a big smile in his face when he experienced the nobel as his biggest goal. Now, he becomes a successful boy in his early age because he has been reached success through the competition.

All in all, through hard work and determination, at the end we can achieve our success. I believe that when people create the mapping plan and try their best with determination, it would be easier to make they dream which is being success in life become true.

Writing Feedback / Some people think that home-schooling is the best method for children's development [2]

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

Giving the education for children are divided into two perspectives. Some people think that home-schooling is the best method for children's development while others believe that children are necessary to go to school. I personally believe that both of the ways can give the advantages to children but in different point of aspects. In general, children who are taught at home become more independent, and usually solve the problem by themselves whereas children at school take the advantages through the teamwork and leadership skills which they will obtain there.

Children who study at school have to socialise with other students. Through communities at school, children can learn about team building, and how to create leadership skills. According to research in Educational System Department in Indonesia, 88 percent of children at school have joined the communities which have been provided by every school in that country. As a result,most people gave learned about socialisation and commitment in the team. Indirectly, community gives many skills which can obtain the children to learn about soft skill in life such as organisation skills.

On the other hand, children who are taught personally at home feel the different way of advantages. They will gain self-development which will help them in every critical situation. Based on the psychological research towards home-schooling students, when they are put in the empty room aloe with many cases in line with the academic matters, they can survive without looking other's help. it proved that home-schooling is the best way to create the individualism and confidential system in their personality.

All in all, teaching children at home or school has advantages in each method. I firmly believe that children at school are good at social skills while home-schooling students gain the best way of independent personality

Writing Feedback / A curriculum has been designed to fit students' requirement in line with their ages [3]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Opponent perspectives are argued by experts because some of them think that learning foreign language will be better if it is started in primary school rather than secondary school. I firmly believe that the merit of this notion outweigh the drawbacks

Children at primary school have many subjects which they have to learn besides the foreign language such as mathematics, science, and others. It will distract the concentration of children when they study at school. In contrast, children at secondary school will be more focus in absorbing the information because secondary schools provide the main subject which is language subject. Although the primary schools have demerit on studying foreign language rather than secondary schools, the merit of primary school outweigh the drawbacks

As far as i know, children start the primary school in six years old. It is the appropriate ages to accept new information seriously. In the primary school, teachers have been made the curriculum have been created the curriculum which suitable to their ages. Joanna Roberts as a headmaster in Colombia Elementary School said that curriculum has been designed to fit the students' requirement in line with their ages. As a result, primary school provide the convenient subject for children. Moreover, children can be optimum to gain new vocabulary when they learn with many friends in class. They can easily practice their study in foreign language with friends at primary school.

In conclusion, the advantages of learning foreign language for the first time in primary school will be better for children rather than begin in secondary schools because of the curriculum which is designed by schools to suit their ages

Writing Feedback / Most people in their productive ages is invited to make the development in the community system [2]

Adult youths are often called up for working for the development of communities. Do you think they should work voluntarily or should they get paid? Give your opinion

Most people in their productive ages are invited by communities to make the developments in the community system. In my opinion, giving the salary for their job in community depends on the type of the organisations such as profit or non-profit community. If the community is profit based, people have to get paid. However, they should not get paid if the type of organisation is non-profit

To start with, profit based community such as start-up business have the money purposes. Even the start-up provides the social effect, people have to be paid. For example, start-up charityevent provides the space for others to give some money to others, and people who worked at there should be paid because they use their ability to work and the community gets expenses by the application which they built. It will make sense if people behind get the salary of their work.

On the other hand, adults who joined in non-profit community should not be paid, and ought to voluntary themselves when making the development because the organisation will not gain any payment of their community activities. For instance, the First-Action community in Norwegia asks people to join the team to create the development in their distribution system when helping others who became victims of disaster. The organisations itself have to find the sponsorship so that their community can hold, and i think people should voluntary themselves to develop the social community

To conclude, getting the salary of developing communities depends on the type of the community itself which is profit or non-profit organisation. I believe that adults will be paid with the profit organisation while they have to unpaid in community which stands for non-profit based

Writing Feedback / Children are facing the tension in many life aspects, such as academic, social, and commercial. [3]

Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

In recent years, children are facing the pressure in many perspectives such as academic, social, and commercial. As the experiences, the kinds of pressures are caused by parents and the social community which children live. Reducing the pressures is needed to create the better mentality of children such as giving the parenting education for parents and entering children to the right community

First of all, parents which take full responsibility to children's mentality provide the pressure itself to children such as children have to study so that they can reach the sophisticated ranks in school. The research of Cambridge University in Educational System proved 62 percent of parents put their children to other courses after schools 4 hours in average time of their leisure time. It will harm children's brain and make them stress. Parents need parenting education to understand the way of growing children so that they can reduce the pressure and take the children to the highest potential level

Secondly, the community joined by children can give the other pressures for children themselves. Friends from community usually have many perspectives in life such as having the modern life and hedonism with many modern gadgets. It will obtain another pressure in children. For instance, children who cruel with parents because they did not get any technology stuff get the pressure from their community lives. To reduce that pressure, children need to reveal their inconvenience and move to another community which provides the better social lives

All in all, parents and community who cause the pressure on children's perspective in life should be reduced to increase their potential in every subject. Taking a parenting education and changing the better education will provide less stress to children

Writing Feedback / The information about the subjects of high school exam which are passed by both gender students [3]

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.

A comparison of the information about the subjects of high school exam which are passed by males and females students during the period 2010-2011 is shown in the bar graph. Overall, most of subjects which were passed by girls especially in computer science experienced the highest percentage whereas boys gained higher than girls only in Geography matter

Initially, a sharp difference between boys and girls happened in few subjects such as chemistry, computer science, and geography. Girls students dominated in computer science at 56.3% while boys passed at 42.1%. The same pattern was experienced in chemistry because the percentage of females and males students gained by 16.1%. In contrast, boys got the higher percentage when they passed geography which was about 30.4% whereas females passed by 10.3%

On the other hand, some subjects passed by students witnessed a slight difference which was in physics and history. Foreign language and mathematics experienced the same. Foreign languages and mathematics which were passed by females gained higher than males by almost 1%, and 36.7% of girls passed the physics subject whereas boys passed at 34.6%. In addition, history was passed by females at 25.6% while 22.9% of males got through of it.

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Writing Feedback / Spendings of four big countries in the world for various purposes [2]

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009

A breakdown of the information about five major categories which spend the expenses of United States, Canada, United Kingdom, and Japan in 2009 is depicted by the bar graph. Overall, it can be seen that most of all countries spent their income in housing purposes than the other categories. The United States became the country which spent the most expenditures in housing

To begin with, three of five categories which were food, housing and transportation were spent by many countries higher than other categories. The United States shared the most expenditure about above a quarter in housing while others gained under a quarter. Food consumption was spent by Japan at around 23% while the United States consumed solely under 15%. Moreover, Canada and the United Kingdom gained 20% and 15% respectively, and Canada dominated in transportation at 20% whereas others gained under 13% separately

On the other hand, health care and clothing witnessed the fewer expenditures in these countries. The United States gained under 10% in health care whereas others consumed under 5%. In contrast, clothing expenditure gained above 5% in Canada and the United Kingdom while above 5% experienced in the United States and Japan respectively

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Writing Feedback / The number of daily viewers for 1 pm, 6 pm, 9.30 pm, and 11 pm news in Channel One over a 12-months [2]

The graph below shows the average daily figures for Channel One News over a 12-month period

A breakdown of the information about the number of daily viewers for 1 pm, 6 pm, 9.30 pm, and 11 pm news in Channel One over a 12-month period is illustrated by the line graph. It can be seen that 11 pm news was launched on 1st May and peaked at August then decreased till the end of the month. 6 pm and 9.30 pm news fluctuated while 1 pm remained stable

From January to April, 6 pm news became the most popular news shown by people about under 5 million in January, and it experienced a fluctuation in the number of watchers. However, at the end of the month gained the highest viewers about above 3 million. Channel One at 9.30 pm increased slightly to under 4 in May while 1 pm remained steady at above 1 million watchers.

On the other hand, 11 pm news which was introduced on May rose over three months and reached a peak at 4 million in August, but in the next four months decreased gradually and bottomed at under 1 million in December. However, 9.30 news least popular on August about 1 million viewers, but the news attracted viewers and got viewers attention on December at the second position which was about 3 million.

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Writing Feedback / How many international tourists arrived in Brazil, Egypt, Malaysia, France, and USA (1995-2010) [2]

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.

A comparison of the information about how many international tourists arrivals in five countries (Brazil, Egypt, Malaysia, France, and the USA) between 1995 and 2010 is shown by the line graph. Overall, all of the countries experienced an upward trend in the number of visitors. The USA was the most popular destination whereas Brazil was the least.

From 1995 to 2000, four countries increased slightly while the number of tourists came to France rose sharply from 30 to 60 million. The USA as the city of the highest number of international comers gained 80 million in 2000 while the others were around 30. The increasing happened slightly in the next five years, and the USA held this position while Egypt and Brazil were a bear at above 10.

Between 2005 and 2010, when four countries rose gradually, the number of tourists decreased in the USA. However, the rising number of international comers in France gained the highest position as same as the USA at above 80 million in 2010. Malaysia which was about 40 million obtained the third position while Egypt and Brazil became the next destination about under 20 and above 10 million respectively.

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Writing Feedback / New Zealand experienced the biggest shift in the electric power source. [2]

The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010.

A comparison of the information about source of electricity generation in Newzealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010 is depicted by the pie charts. Overall, the alteration of total sources in these countries was almost double in 2010. Nuclear power became the main source in Germany while Newzealand took coal as their main source.

To begin with, Newzealand experienced the biggest shift in the electric power source. In 2010, coal produced electricity twofold higher than 1980 which was about 56 units. Natural gas and petroleum source which were 30 and 11 units decreased at 2 units to each source. In contrast, hydro witnessed a slight rose from 30 to 46 units respectively in three decades

In 1980, the deployment of source used in Germany is almost equal, but in 2010, nuclear power gained the biggest units in the source of electric power. Nuclear power increased dramatically from 20 to 155 respectively whereas utilisation of natural gas and hydro which were 28 and 7 went down at 2. When coal did not experience the changing, petroleum rose slightly by 5 units

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Writing Feedback / Development of technologies changes the way of looking the information. Are libraries still needed? [3]

Some people think it is a waste of money to establish libraries since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information, do you agree or disagree?

Development of technologies changes the way of looking the information. In the past, people tended to visit library to find subjects, but nowadays people can obtain the information through internet. That is the reason why some people think that building a new library is just wasting money. I totally disagree with this notion because i believe that library provides accurate information through book and convenient place to study

To begin with, the internet becomes the most popular technology used by people to find the information. However, according to the data from information technology management in California, 74 percent of students in California use the internet to accomplish their assignment because internet provides information in many ways such as articles and videos. As a result, looking for information not only from reading but also from watching in visual. Even internet gives complete and complex system than books, establish new library is necessary to provide place to save the collection of books and convenient space to study

Nowadays, the function of library has changed in line with the growth of technology. Library should be established to create the convenient place to study because the Bodleian Library in Oxford recorded 82 percent students come to library not only to find books but also do their assignment or just play computer which is provided by library's management. It proved that library has become a sophisticated place to study even for finding information through books or internet because library can facilitate us.

In conclusion, i strongly believe that library is the place to find the information from books and internet which are provided in the library

Writing Feedback / In several countries water scarcity becomes a problem that should be solved [2]

IELTS Writing Task 2: What are the causes of water scarcity? What are your solutions?

Water supply is a critical need in human life. However, in several countries water scarcity becomes a problem that should be solved. In consequence, this essay will discuss causes and solutions for the water crisis.

Firstly, the main reason why water becomes scarce is the excessive consumption of people. Many people usually consume water undue and out of control. For instance, theme park which provides recreational activities use thousands cubic of water and dispose it into the rivers. Overuse of water without any care about the effects on the environment can reduce the amount of clean water. The solution to tackle this problem is giving education about how to use water wisely and making the water recycler. Producing the technology of recycling water can revolve the water consumption so that we can always use clean water without any scarce

Secondly, bad habits of many factories which throw their waste into the water, and cause water pollution makes people have difficulties to find the clean water. For example, factory's waste water consists of mercury and nitrates. They drain the waste through pipes into rivers, canals and led to the ocean. As we realise, it will affect the supply of clean water to household. The solution that can be given is building the proper waste management system so that the factories can provide the positive impact to human life. In addition, making wastewater treatment or water purification can increase the capacity of clean water.

All in all, two factors can cause water scarcities are overuse water and water pollution. We can conclude that recycling water technologies and operate wastewater treatment are the problem solving of the water scarcity.