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"The New Lone Rangers" and "Foot-binding" are representing the same sort of character

2 - This is interesting reading good luck with your grammar try buying greegs list it should help you in the...

Writing Feedbackchipmunk - Jan 15, 2009 / mcglownn - Jan 15, 2009
Leadership experience - leader is one who learns from their success and failure

4 - You also have to answer the qn "How and why did you become a leader in this area?". Also...

Writing Feedbackkbros9193 - Jan 12, 2009 / vj_justin - Jan 14, 2009
Sexual Harassment research essay

2 - Revise for conciseness by taking out unnecessary words. They suck the life out of writing! :) To begin...

Writing FeedbackKarim Fathi - Jan 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 13, 2009
"The Great Changes" - Essay Feedback

3 - This opening part: For most people, high school is just the next step of education. Most students havetheir...

Writing Feedbackseanydee - Jan 11, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 12, 2009
1984 / Modern Day surveillane proposal, but im an art student

4 - Your essay is a promising first draft of how the modern world contains Orwellian elements. It has nothing to...

Writing Feedbackliamg87 - Jan 11, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 26, 2009
need help with fixing my essay, "LETTER FROM BIRMINGHAM JAIL" response

5 - thanks guys, i'm fixing it up right now. ill let you know how it goes. =]...

Writing Feedbackamonet520 - Jan 10, 2009 / amonet520 - Jan 13, 2009
"rules of the game" in society - essay, opinions

7 - A good way to start this sort of essay is by defining your key terms. So, what do you...

Writing Feedbackyohooo - Jan 10, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 12, 2009
need help with this essay - "the subjects with which you had difficulty"

5 - thanks for the feed back...

Writing Feedbackkbros9193 - Jan 10, 2009 / kbros9193 - Jan 11, 2009
About edgar allen poe essay

11 - Shock and sophistication is a mixture that can so easily be either loved or loathed, but the point is...

Writing Feedbacknotmysuitcase - Jan 9, 2009 / silverystars - Jan 26, 2009
an experiment essay - A memorable evening

9 - ok I'll try that...

Writing Feedbackonindo - Jan 9, 2009 / onindo - Jan 9, 2009
A Separate Peace Essay during World War II in 1943

6 - Commas can be your friend. To help you out, here are some rules on commas: grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm Many teachers...

Writing FeedbackShardul - Jan 7, 2009 / EF_Constance - Jan 9, 2009
'Liberalisation of aviation' - Airline deregulation essay

2 - The airline industry currently occupies a very important place in the Irish market, due to both the major changes...

Writing FeedbackTizzy - Jan 6, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 7, 2009
Essay comments - "invention that has influenced modern society"

2 - Great job!! My suggestions would be other than calling, what else can a cell phone do that significantly improves...

Writing FeedbackJerrySpock - Jan 6, 2009 / mikedogg90 - Jan 9, 2009
'People use some drugs, always' - essay about drugs.

8 - People always use some kinds of drugs. Despite the effects of drugs, millions of people constantly consume (abuse?) various...

Writing Feedbackjurgita - Jan 6, 2009 / mikedogg90 - Jan 9, 2009
Odyssey essay; 'Sure God created man before woman...'

6 - Well, for a high school or undergraduate essay... really for any essay... quotes can be added in at the...

Writing Feedbacksczyra - Jan 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2009
Peony in love is my favorite book. Take a read of this essay

5 - Jerry, that is some great advice. Actually, the thesis sentence often goes at the end of the first paragraph....

Writing Feedbackjenf3r - Jan 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2009
Essay comments - "A place you go to relax"

4 - Thank you two for the feedback! I will change the end of the first paragraph to (my thesis statement):...

Writing FeedbackJerrySpock - Jan 5, 2009 / JerrySpock - Jan 5, 2009
Internet has given people access to information; we can't live easily without

3 - Beyond the advice you've already been given, you should revise "With the development of Technology, people have chance to...

Writing Feedbackfranklamparden - Jan 4, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 4, 2009
Lincoln Paper - Introductory Paragraph

11 - Yes, he has those leadership qualities....

Writing FeedbackGlenn900 - Jan 3, 2009 / mussy - May 26, 2013
The person I admire happens to be my rival - Essay on Role model

13 - Thanx...

Writing FeedbackULL - Jan 3, 2009 / ULL - Jan 14, 2009
writing technique advices for the essay " regular and election days"

8 - It is better than it was, certainly. You now sound more thoughtful, and have gone into more depth on...

Writing Feedbackcraver - Jan 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 6, 2009
for IELST...." sports or physical course is importmant "essay

5 - Is that true? Wow, schools should not drop phys. ed... it is so important! I is even important for...

Writing Feedbackpamfan0810 - Jan 2, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
response paragraph for the essay "why we crave horror movies"

4 - Hi Thanks a lot for your corrections. This is my essay i really want to know whether i have...

Writing Feedbackcraver - Jan 2, 2009 / craver - Jan 6, 2009
An essay about privacy and communication

4 - Another example is that when people use Internet cafés to check their email, some may forget to sign out...

Writing Feedbackray2008 - Jan 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 2, 2009
Aunt Junko, essay feedback

3 - thanks, it is a great help...

Writing Feedbackseatoy - Dec 30, 2008 / seatoy - Jan 4, 2009
Paper feedback on Nationalized Healthcare

2 - Not bad. A few questions you might want to consider: "the lack of health care is a growing...

Writing Feedbackcgryniewicz - Dec 29, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 30, 2008
Reflective Response on "To Build a Fire" by Jack London

2 - Nice job! Just use commas to introduce quotes: I think that the author does an excellent job building...

Writing Feedbackrockd211 - Dec 29, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
PERSONAL ESSAY, does it fit? (Pose an original question and answer it.)

NEW - Pose an original question and answer it. (500 words or less): Imagine that you've just finished writing your...

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Writing to improve my essay - New Year resolution

4 - Hi: Kevin Thank you very much for your fast response and helpful comments. wu...

Writing Feedbackvickyw - Dec 28, 2008 / vickyw - Dec 29, 2008
History and China - Why Lehigh, need corrections

NEW - Obsessed with the historical documentaries of his time, my father often watches them with great appreciation on the sofa....

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Essay: "What is art for me?"

4 - Those are just some mistakes you made....

Writing FeedbackPower_Hammer - Dec 27, 2008 / Angela629 - Dec 27, 2008
"Prevention is better than cure" IELTS essay - much band score I can get?

2 - This concept represents the opportunity to avoid many diseases if we take proactive steps before a problem forms. Previously,...

Writing Feedbackkazi - Dec 27, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
Magic Lu Chen - essay help

5 - Good influential essay, I'm not fond with your system of writing, but I can sense your emotion with Lu...

Writing Feedbackfl415 - Dec 27, 2008 / mikedogg90 - Jan 9, 2009
Business Law Essay feedback (Stevens, Wiley & Co)

4 - Yes, these are supposed to be grounded in your course readings. Good luck! It's hard, but it can be...

Writing FeedbackTom - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
Account of Activities

NEW - Activity 1 In the early 2008, I participated in Beijing Olympic Games Volunteering Service. I filled in the online...

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Academic Interest (I like math, physics and economics)

3 - During my studies, I try to link what I learned from books to the problems in real life. ...

Writing Feedbacktonydengcnu - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
Essay comparing two Short Stories-Topic: Naive Narrator

3 - thank you very much....

Writing FeedbackMimiroselilly25 - Dec 22, 2008 / Mimiroselilly25 - Dec 23, 2008
"George Richman" - need revision help on writing a narrative

3 - During one summer day, Rich City was blooming with beauty. The trees are fully grown, everything is green, the...

Writing Feedbackyahman - Dec 19, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 20, 2008
"Experience of Cultural Difference" essay (pls. help revise, thanks)

2 - For family reasons, I have visited New Zealand on many occasions, and have savored a distinctive cultural atmosphere. ...

Writing Feedbacktonydengcnu - Dec 17, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2008
Duality of good and evil essay

5 - You might find it helpful to read other works that present philosophies of good and evil The Virtue of...

Writing Feedbackkyudaime - Dec 16, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 20, 2008
notre dame essay! - look through and give any suggestions

3 - thank you soo much!! :)!! any other improvements??...

Writing Feedbacklilveni - Dec 16, 2008 / lilveni - Dec 18, 2008
Need revision with Humanity Paper on "is humanity good/evil"

2 - You might want to consider taking issue with the question here. Good and evil are moral concepts that presuppose...

Writing Feedbackchiknugget - Dec 16, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 17, 2008
Naturalism v Modernism - comparison essay

2 - You might want to consider picking three or four of the main characteristics of each movement and comparing each...

Writing Feedbackmichaelfrye1970 - Dec 16, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 17, 2008
"The Healthy Americans Act" - essay

3 - Thank you, it really helped!...

Writing FeedbackAndrew - Dec 16, 2008 / Andrew - Dec 17, 2008
what are some of the experiences that have shapped your outlook and the way

NEW - Nowadays our daily life and time are moving faster than it did several centuries ago. That is why every...

Writing FeedbackAsselya - Dec 16, 2008 / — -
distance learning and online computer classes should replace classroom lear

2 - Well, in your work there were a lot of mistakes. It's the way you think that is excellent!...

Writing FeedbackAsselya - Dec 16, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2008
it is better to marry someone who is similar to you - essay

3 - thank you very much...)))...

Writing FeedbackAsselya - Dec 16, 2008 / Asselya - Dec 17, 2008
Multilateral Aid is like water; it can float a boat but it can also sink a boat.

5 - No, I didn't think you were being rude! Words are a difficult means of communication.. :) Kevin...

Writing Feedbackrice - Dec 16, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2008
"A Heart's Ruin" - Romeo and Juliet Essay

3 - Here are some ideas: Most characters play major roles in the tragedy, but Romeo presents the greatest evidence...

Writing Feedbackdorukanji - Dec 15, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2008
TOEFL: If you could invent sth new, what product would you develop?

3 - however i will resist the temptation because mine MY device in the long term will dissolve this issue WILL...

Writing FeedbackNobel - Dec 15, 2008 / akashnegi - Dec 30, 2008
Essay: Preserve the old buildings; keeping distinguishing features of a city

2 - In my point of view, the importance of maintaining the historic buildings of a city could outweigh the value...

Writing Feedbackcamellia2008 - Dec 15, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 15, 2008
"Scientific Creativolution: Are Evolution and Creation Sciences?"

10 - Would anyone else like to aid in my endeavor? I'd be much obliged to get multiple perspectives....

Writing FeedbackVaune - Dec 14, 2008 / Vaune - Dec 16, 2008
person's childhood are the the most important years of a person's lives.

NEW - Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person's childhood years (the time from birth to...

Writing Feedbackcamellia2008 - Dec 14, 2008 / — -
Charlotte Brontë: Jane Eyre Essay

3 - thank you! i'll work on it...

Writing Feedbacktarynarmstrong - Dec 12, 2008 / tarynarmstrong - Dec 14, 2008
toefl: Why are groups or organizations important to people?

4 - Great work in this thread, I wonder if you have any involvement with that organization, Tzu Chi. This...

Writing Feedbackcamellia2008 - Dec 12, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 13, 2008
Essay on mandatory School Uniforms. Need revision help.

2 - The most noticeable problem with this essay is that you cut back and forth between both sides of the...

Writing Feedbackmollyvdb88 - Dec 11, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 12, 2008
"My Dad in Me" essay need help with editing and any other things you notice

4 - thank you to the people you helped this helped a lot! :D...

Writing Feedbackstef777 - Dec 11, 2008 / stef777 - Dec 13, 2008
"My hobby" essay (reading)

4 - Yes, how do you convey a feeling? I recommend making some time to read stephen king's On Writing. ...

Writing Feedbackjerry - Dec 11, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 14, 2008
"I love my friends" essay, help edit

3 - Yes, your writing is technically sound, so that is great. You have good spelling and grammar. Now, can...

Writing Feedbackstef777 - Dec 10, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 11, 2008
Chivalry Essay, Advantages and Disadvantages

2 - Too much retelling of the story, not enough analysis. Also, what analysis there is tends to miss the mark....

Writing Feedbackvkwang - Dec 10, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 10, 2008

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