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The line graph below shows changes in the youth unemployment rate from 2000 to 2012.

2 - The essay is overwritten. You should not be writing more than 200 words maximum for a 20 minute writing...

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[WRITING TASK 1] The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 & the plan for changes in 2024

2 - This vocabulary is too simple. You want to use somewhat advanced or intermediate English vocabulary to increase your...

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IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TRAFFIC CONGESTION ISSUE - CAUSES AND SOLUTIONS

3 - "Due to a dramatic rise in population, traffic jam has been a globally debatable issue. " In the beginning,...

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[WRITTING TASK 1-MAP] The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise.

2 - You are missing an important element in this essay. Where is the summary overview? You began with the trending...

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Task1 line chart - overseas travel to an european country

2 - This is a missing element in your summary overview. You need to mention these 3 places immediately for...

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Writing a small research about the challenges of Derivative market in Vietnam

2 - Do not start your essaay without a proper introduction to the topic. Your current concluding paragraph will work well...

Research PapersAgnes Thao - Oct 20, 2023Holt - Oct 25, 2023
A statement of purpose for masters in computer science for UIUC.

2 - You must know the difference between a statement of purpose and an extended discussion of your academic background. You...

GraduateWooper358 - Oct 20, 2023Holt - Oct 25, 2023
The bar chart below shows the data about British emigration to 5 destinations between 2004 and 2007.

2 - This essay would cause you to automatically fail both task 1 and task 2 essays. That is because you...

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Advantage and disadvantage of watching tv of children

2 - Okay. This is an advantage v. disadvantage essay. It is not a personal opinion essay. Therefore, you are not...

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Task 2 essay on legislations against tobacco.

2 - The essay is missing an expanded discussion of your personal opinion. While you did discuss the 2 opinions as...

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Chevening Essay - Leadership and Influence - Lead a collaborative effort and develop the team

2 - This is a networking reference. it does not work well in the context and requirement of this essay....

Scholarshipauzan - Oct 16, 2023Holt - Oct 25, 2023
[Writing task 1] The main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

2 - When you summarize your presentation, make sure to indicate that the pie charts are individually assigned to each year...

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The restriction of using vehicles on certain days as a way to reduce air pollution

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Children watching TV - Writing Task 2

3 - First paragraph: not good job of paraphrasing. It is clear but you will need more advanced words, for eg:...

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Essay about separate education for students with different academic levels

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Letter of Motivation Master Control, Microsystems, Microelectronics

NEW - Motivation letter Dear Members of the Admissions Committee, My name is XXX, and I am an Electrical Engineer...

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Access to experts - Scholarship Prompt for X University

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Motivation letter/ Statement of Purpose for MSc of Environmental Economics

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Mental health disorders - Commonwealth Master's scholarships, development impact essay part 1

2 - I am not sure if this is a topic slant that can get you a Commonwealth scholarship. While mental...

ScholarshipPiperskm - Oct 15, 2023Holt - Oct 15, 2023
Common App Essay - Describe a topic, idea, or concept you find so engaging

2 - Try to avoid using movie references as inspirations for a future career. Specially when you clearly claim that you...

UndergraduateMHJN - Oct 14, 2023Holt - Oct 15, 2023
The bar chart shows the literacy rate (% of people who can read and write) in 2011 by regions

2 - Never ask the reader to look at the image. You have to narrate the information, not ask the...

Writing Feedbackhtlam11 - Oct 14, 2023Holt - Oct 14, 2023
"My reflection through the car window" - common app essay

2 - The essay is not complete so I cannot truly review it and give you advice on how to improve...

Undergraduatesohaiblol - Oct 14, 2023Holt - Oct 14, 2023
Was the American Revolution a Civil War?

2 - The formatting of this paper is just all wrong. Paragraphs should be used to separate the idea discussions. There...

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Chevening Leadership and Influence Essay - Digital Illustration

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Educated - tara westover; UGA supplemental essay

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Getting information from newspapers and other media

2 - You made your position clear in the writer's opinion section. Yet you contradicted yourself in the discussion paragraphs. You...

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The chart illustrates the contribution in percentage of two different sectors (Task 1 IELTS)

2 - Try to be more specific about the kind of chart that is provided. That will help you gain...

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Comparing life with parents to living on campus

2 - I cannot accurately review this essay as the word count and paragraph representations do not follow the necessary requirements...

Writing FeedbackNguyen Hoa - Oct 10, 2023Holt - Oct 14, 2023
IELTS Cause/Problem Essay question on children spending less time with their parents

2 - This is personal information or a representation of your personal opinion. It is not a part of the...

Writing FeedbackDirkhammet - Oct 10, 2023Holt - Oct 14, 2023
The proportion of population who used the Internet in three different countries between 1999 & 2009

2 - A trending statement needs to cover the most common information for the sources provided. You did that properly...

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