Writing Feedback / The graphs present information about the number of two kind of fish [4]

The graphs present information about the number of two kind of fish which seized close to Westhaven and the number of trawling vessels in Westhaven during 4 years from 2008 to 2010. Overall, the number of two kind fish, tuna and swordfish between 2008 and 2009. It was a slight increased, and followed in 2010 until 2011 tuna rose constantly. Otherwise, swordfish was fell in 2010 and went up rapidly in 2011. The number of trawling vessels, there was an upward trend from 2008 to 2011.

As can be clearly seen, between 2008 and 2009 the number of trawling in Westthaven increased slightly from 50 to approximately 55. After that, there was dramatic decreased by 10 in 2010, and reached peaked at 75 in 2011.

In comparison, the number of two kind fish, between 2008 and 2011 tuna was increased gradually from about 75 in 2008 to 100 in 2011. Whereas, swordfish from 65 in 2008 rose rapidly to 90 but fell quickly by around 20 in 2011. After that increased again to 90.

Writing Feedback / (Summary TED) How America public schools keep kids in poverty [3]

Nowadays, most of people particularly who have much money can get good education in school, registered to excelent school with exclusive facility. On other hand, the poverty people decided to drop out from school, and more choose for work because they realized their family need help and they must work. In fact, most of school which have good facilty is not free, the student who want to study at school must pay enough expensive and its not reasonable for poor family.

Writing Feedback / (Summary article) A new weapon in the fight against malaria [3]

Anopheles is one of the most dangerous mosquitoes in the world. Recently, scientist discovered weapon to exterminate or eradicated it. They called ivermectin. It can't immediately protect human from bite anopheles but it can killing easily after that. Therefore, the researchers are trying to give ivermectin to most of people in an area, particularly which had several case area. It can seriously impact to anopheles and making inhibitans safe from malaria.

Writing Feedback / Summary TED (The birth of virtual reality as an art form) [4]

Chris Milk is a innovative person. He uses technology to make interactive. He with his friend, Joshua and Mckenzie have idea to creating virtual reality projects. He showsnand brought the TED audience together in the world's largest collective VR experience. Recently as we know many technology like virtual realty has changed people view about technology.

Writing Feedback / (Summary Arrticle) This Aviation Startup Promises to Revive Supersonic Passenger Air Travel [6]

Boom, start up in technology of aviation which sponsored by virgin's Sir Richard Branson recently launched their new prototype of supersonic passenger jet and predicted will became the first supersonic commercial jet. The company revealed that the jet will start to fly around 2020. It also give details about that such as jet can accomodate passenger until 50 people. But unfortunately the price probably more much expensive than other ordinary jet.

Writing Feedback / (Summary TED) Philip Zimbardo the demise of guys? [3]

Based on data, 30 percent of men higher to drop out from school. In Canada, each 5 boys drop out in school whereas just 3 girls drop out from school. Young man can spend his time for playing video games and watching porn on internet. Video porn is very dangerous because it can ruin men's brain. I think parents must be more protect to their son, because right now pornograph became one of many entertainment from internet.

Writing Feedback / (Summary Article) Why Mark Zuckerberg Is Fortune's Businessperson of the Year [11]

Facebook, one of the most enormous company was surprised people in the world. Because the chairman, Mark Zuckerberg became fortune's businessperson of the year. Facebook which had 16.000 employess and got annual revenues almost $27 billion in 2016, with profit approximately $7 billion. In past, facebook perhaps only small business which built by drop out people. Nevertheless, now had been the biggest company in the world particulary in media and advertisement. The company has estimated to be worth $350 billion. In consequence, mark became one of the richiest man in the world and winner many award of business. He has inspired most of people. In comparison, he leader his company started since build until now. On other hand, Larry Page as chairman and CEO of alphabet, didn't leader google before different with mark. Why did he can become good businessperson? he said you must have ablity to see the world, consistency, and discipline

Writing Feedback / (Summary article) It Just Got Easier to Shop Directly on Instagram [3]

In the past, perhaps most of people just knew facebook to post their photo or video. Neverthless, since instagram appear many years ago a lot of people thought better post their photo in instagram. Because instagram had many advantages feature which didn't has other social media. Until now, approximately 500 milion people joined to instagram, it was one of the most enormous user of social media right now. Recently, facebook which owned instagram announce regarding new feature of instagram. With that feature retailer can post their products and if user like their product just click the photo and will shows about price and how to order. It's new model of commerce, and is probably success. The company also revealed about advertiser in instagram almost 500.000 and gradually increase.

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Writing Feedback / Antony Goldbloom, A machine can work like human, and substitute his work [5]

Antony Goldbloom, he is scientist who learned about machine. He rely to machine will change position of human. It can work like human, and substitute human's work. Furthermore, it can exceed human's abilities such as finish high volume task at little time. Although, actually machine hasn't been fully fulfill the human's work such as solve for strategic of company. On other hand, Antony believes that one day later machine will be changing human job. He has prediction in some years later, will invent some good technology in machine which more easily to solve enermous problem in many place in the world and is probably will happen in short time. In my opinion, perhaps machine be able to solve some problem in industry and many place, however human must more smart than machine, and is imposible machine be able solve all problem. In conclusion, human need machine, similiarly machine need human for work.

Writing Feedback / A good environment with humble people only in a small village - english studio [6]

As we know, many people like to lived in small village. Almost all people recognized the other. They usually met in everywhere such as market, street, garden, and many more. But now, many poeple tend to forget their tradition, often we find someone so busy to greet other people while he walking in street. He prefer played with his handphone. Particularly, in big town many people have many problem, so they just greet other people who have recognized by him.

In comparison, in village many people like to talke with strangers, don't like people in town.
Many benefits if we live in small village than town. Firstly, in village there are many pretty scenery like waterfall, farm, river. When we bored just walk around village. Secondly, there are many humble people in small village. They usually smile when he met someone. Thirdly, food in village is healty and tasty because the use good vegetables from their farm and cook without chemical.

In other hand, many disavantage when we decided to live in village, such as limited education, and bad service of public area, many road in village are broken. In conclusion, there are many advantage and disavantage live in small village. Depens you to decided because town is good place for modern life with all of people. There are many good public area and education in town. But if you want to live in good environment with humble people. I suggest you to live in small village.

Writing Feedback / The kind of transport to go to work in Houston, Texas. Writing test 1 in English studio [6]

The table shows information about kind of transport to go to work in Houston, Texas. According the table people prefer to use car than public transport. Overall, the most people who go to work use cars, and the least people choose bikes for work. In other hand, the higest average age who go to work are use trains and buses, and the smallest average age use bikes.

By comparison, cars used by workers has 48 percent but the percentage of cylist just about 4 percent. And the graph shows CO2 emisson from various transport car with driver only has aproximately 0,32 CO2 emission. In comparison, buses and trains just has 0,07 CO2 emission, but there is no emission if use bicycle. In conclusion, the highest CO2 emission is from cars with driver only, furthermore cars with 4 people are the second. But the best transport is bikes because there is no C02 emission and more healty for our environment.

Writing Feedback / Summary The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000 [7]

The graph ilustrates the figures of Gross Domestic Product (GDP) of the UK from IT and service industry in the five different years during the period from 1992 to 2000. In comparison with the data in 1992. Overall, there was upward trend in the percentage of service industry during period 1992 to 2000.

As can be clearly seen, the highest GDP of service industry in period 2000 with the total GDP approximately 8 percent, which increased gradually from 1992. During the periode 1994 to 1996, there was downward trend about 1 percent in IT. During the latter for period from 1992 to 2000, the figure for IT was highest GDP with more than 15 percent.

In conclusion, there was substanicial increase of IT and service industry during the period 1992 to 2000. whereas, the percentage change of service industry between 1994 untl 1996 fell by around 1 percent.

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Writing Feedback / Marcin Jakubowski Open-Source Blueprints for Civilization [5]

Marcin Jokubowski, He was born in Poland, and until now he live in America. He graduated from University when 20 years old, in major Fusion Energy. After graduated and got Ph.D degree, he tried to farm in Missiouri, but he realized there are many problem, he has tractor to help him process his farm. Moreover, he always studies regarding agriculture to make his farm better. But, he realized that he useless because for process his farm need high cost because he must buy tractor and many tools to help him on farm. When his tractor broke he must pay someone to repaired it. Despite, he already repair his traktor, but after that is broke again. He must repair his tractor again. consider that if he always repair, why he don't build tractor for himself. In short time, he decided to build tractor, and he sucess to build tractor with low cost. He built his tractor in six days.

Writing Feedback / Apple has announcement, that it will sell refurbish Iphone for the first time in nearly a decades. [3]

(Summary Article) Apple Has a New Way to Get a Cheaper Iphone

In 2016, As we know Apple, The Company which knowns as produced iphone, macbook, ipod, ipad. It has announcement will sell refurbish Iphone for the first time in nearly a decades. So, its costumers who want buy iphone but didn't enough money can buy and saving their money, because refurbish iphone will sold cheaper than new iphone. In fact, Apple never sold refurbished iPhones at retail since 2007. The company has sophisticated robot, it called Liam. The robot can systematically remove components in iPhone, then reused the good component to other units. Like brand-new iPhones, the refurbished handsets Apple is selling with new batteries and outer shells. So customer don't worry to buy refurbish iphone, because Apple also give one-year waranty for all customer who buy refurbish iphone

Writing Feedback / (Summary Article) Donald Trump wins the presidential election [3]

(Summary Article) Donald Trump wins the presidential election

As we know, Before Donald Trump winning the election to became president of United States of America, Many pundits in the world predicted the rival of him, Hillary Clinton will winning the election. Perhaps we still remembered regarding the statement from Donald Trump that he will prohibit to moslem people for came to America. Because he afraid of terorism. Because his statement made many people angry to him. But, the result of election made surprised many people. Mr Trump had been voted from Iowa, Ohio and Wisconsin, and Pennsylvania which last always votes for republican. He had 273 electoral vote, and his rival Hillary Clinton just have 218 electoral vote. Whereas, The rules in america to winning election must get 270 electoral vote. All people hope to him can make america better than now, and his statement regarding prohibition for moslem to came amarica will not happen.