Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug [6]

People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example.

Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

drugs are everywhere

in today society, there are a lot of drugs, both legal and illegal, and the problem is that the starting age of using drugs is decreasing constantly, in this essay we will discuss the causes and effects of using drugs in younger generation.

In older times. people always used home remedies to cure their sicknesses, when i was younger, we rarely used drug for a simple headache, but nowadays, the first answer to any kind of health problem is a pain killer. it could be parents fault for drug abuse in home which could set bad example.

Another reason could be laws in different countries, there are some drugs that are legal in one country and illegal in another one. when people see that a drug is legal in one country, think to him/her self that it could not be dangerous at all.

From other side, the governments can help preventing use of drug, there must be a lot of advertisements and announcements which shows younger generation that it is a bad habit to use drugs and shows them the right path.

From my experience, in my own country, drugs are available everywhere, government must control it because if young people see drugs every day and watch people using it, they would not scare of it anymore and it becomes typical.

to recapitulate, using drugs is a bad habit of today's generation, they start using it when they are young, and ruin their future before they even have a chance to know wrong and right. I think the society must stay together and help each other to stop this bad habit.

Thanks in advanced.

Writing Feedback / Nowadays, a lot of new, big supermarkets are appearing every day - what about local business? [4]

Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

small shops face extinction

Nowadays, a lot of big supermarkets are appearing every day. Some people say that it could ruin local businesses because they can't compete with supermarkets and it would be the end of small businesses. I partially agree with the idea that supermarkets are strong and it is hard for local shops to fight with them, but I think they still can protect themselves, sure they will have fewer customers, but it is not the end. I'm going to describe why, in following paragraphs.

First of all, The big supermarkets with so many branches have a lot of resources which makes it hard for local shops to win. Supermarkets can offer various kinds of discounts and make special plans for their loyal customers, they can present goods for different tastes. Personally, when I have to buy lots of stuff, I prefer going to one supermarket instead of going to different small stores.

On the other hand, supermarkets are often hard to reach, usually, because of the distance and traffic, people can't go to them for every little item. It is when the small shops come in handy. There has always been a small shop available in the neighborhood that can fulfill people's basic needs.

In conclusion, even though the supermarkets are very useful both for people and economy and of course made our life much easier, everyone prefers to get basic items from the nearest small shop in the neighborhood with a friendly and familiar face. And that's the reason, although local shops can't compete with big supermarkets, they still can survive if they change their business plan tiny bit.

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Writing Feedback / Some people believe that the amount of time that is put into art could be better managed [5]

Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

art courses in schools

Children learn a lot of subjects at school, one of them is art, which some people think is necessary while others totally disagree and believe that the amount of time that is put into art could be better managed. In this essay, I will discuss both points of views.

From one hand, there are a lot of people believe that art should be one of the courses at school because it develops cognitive skills in children, everything is possible when it comes to art, for example in drawing, one can draw and show his/her imagination on a piece of paper, it helps them to think freely.

From the other hand, there are parents who think there are no points in learning art for their child, they argue that the time could be better spent, for example, adding extra time to mathematics and physics courses. because in future nobody cares about art, but math going to have a positive impact.

Lastly, I think the art course is really important, especially for children because it opens a new door for them, full of opportunities, I remember my school days when I couldn't wait for the art course, I enjoyed every minute of it. In school, we learned how to play music and it really changed my understanding of music for the rest of my life.

In conclusion, we discussed people's opinion about art course in schools, some people think it is positive, while others not. And at the last paragraph, I mentioned my own idea about the topic.

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Writing Feedback / The proportion of men and women from the Aussie country who did systematic physical activity [4]

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram compares the portion of people from Austalia based on age group who exercise regularly in 2010.

It shows that Australian females have the most activity from age 35 to 64. in contrast, Australian men exercise more when they are younger, specifically from 15 to 24 years old. also from ages 25 to 64, women have more activities than men, but in other periods they are fairly close.

While the portion of active Australian men drops down as they get older, females figures increase. However, when they get older, after 65 years old, numbers are pretty much the same. Also, over 40 percent of both males and females have regular exercise after age 45. Although this number never went under 40 for females, for men in a brief period when they are 25 to 34 it reached to 39.5%.

In conclusion, It seems that females have more physical activities than males in overall. And they reach to almost same number when they are above 65 years old.

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And I have a related question, do numbers count as words in IELTS exam?

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Writing Feedback / Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research [3]

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

Discuss both these views and give tour own opinion.

sharing information for world prosperity

In today's world, information has a lot of values. while there are a lot of companies or people that share their data or knowledge, others try to keep data to themselves. I will talk about both points of view and also share my own ideas as well.

From one side, data and knowledge bring a lot of power with itself. And there are people who share their knowledge with everybody. There are the people who push the world forward. Because when the data or results from their work are available, others can extend the findings or even invent something new.

On the other hand, there are companies or people that always try to hide their findings, sometimes the data is critical or in some cases secret (e.g. military information) which is understandable, why they can't present them to the public. But in some cases, it is because of the selfishness of one person. for example, apple inc. always tries to hide the new inventions and doesn't publish any papers about their work, And it is the reason why scientists are not willing to work for them because their work will remain anonymous.

In my own opinion, everyone should publish the information they have, of course with the right copyright statement. It makes their work much more valuable. For example, I always publish my works and it gives me the joy to watch people extend it. People always appreciate that and no one ever misses my findings.

In conclusion, there are two types of people. Some people think it is alright to share the information with the world. While others disagree. Although it is fine to keep the critical information to yourself. I think sharing will have a lot of good feeling and also makes the world a better place.

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Writing Feedback / Maps below show the centre of small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development [4]

The maps below show the centre of small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

plethora of changes in the future

The maps present information about Islip city present and future. It seems that the small city is going to evolve after the finish of development plan. The changes in the city will be discussed.

Islip town has a main road right now, which carries the whole city traffic. There is a big park in the east and the countryside in the north that can be used for entertainment. The school is near to houses in the south of the city.

In the future, the main difference would be in the size of the park, which is going to be smaller, therefore new houses will take most of the space. All the shops in the north are changed to bus station, shopping center, car park and of course new houses again. The main road usability has changed, so only pedestrians could use it.

In conclusion, seems like the city is going through a lot of changes in the future. Nevertheless, the shops in the center of the city will stay exactly the same. Besides, the population of the city is going to increase due to the new houses that are going to be available.

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Writing Feedback / The population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults. good or bad? [2]

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

the challenges of population aging

In today's world, there are countries that the percentage of young adults is more than elderlies. The question of whether it is a positive or negative thing is a controversial one. I will discuss this issue and present some examples and talk about the effects of it to the country.

From one had, the higher number of youth in a country means more people are available for work. Obviously, every country needs workers and professionals for developing. There are some countries whose citizen's average age is retired, therefore they have to accept migrants to solve their lack of working labor problem.

Another angle is health care system. When a country's most population become old, they need special treatments for their health as well, so the government needs to pay a lot of money to build or maintain hospitals and prepare proper health insurance.

On the other hand, the older people gained a lot of experience in their life and it would be a shame if countries don't use their skills. While training new employees is a hard and expensive process, the elders already know how to get the job done perfectly.

In conclusion, while it's awful for a country to loos all their experienced people, every country still needs working labor for progress. In overall it is a good thing if the number of youth increases in a country, meanwhile elders are also valuable and younger people can receive advice them, also companies can use their experience to train new employees.

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Writing Feedback / The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurant between 2003,2013 [3]

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph compares how often USA citizens eat in fast food restaurants in 2003, 2006 and 2013. It categorizes the results in 6 states; which are Every Day, Several Time a Week, Once a Week, Once or Twice a month, a Few Time a Year, and Never. In this report, we will discuss the findings in more details by presenting the main trends in the graph.

Under 5% of USA people either never ate in fast food restaurant or ate every day, although the numbers are decreasing gradually from 2003 to 2013. 17% of people ate fast food several times a week in 2003, this number increased to 20% in 2006 and rapidly decreased to 16% in in 2013. Just over 30% of people were using fas food at least once a week in 2003, and the figures gradually went up to around 33% in 2006 and significantly went down to 28% in 2013. In addition, in 2003, 30% of citizens ate fast food once or twice a month which had significant decrease to 25% in 2006 and surprisingly grows to 33% in 2013. In the last category, there were 13% of people who ate fast food a few times a year, and this number gradually increased to 15% in 2006 and remained steady till 2013.

It shows that in general, the number of people who ate fast food is decreasing in 3 categories over the mentioned years, except for "Once or Twice a Month" which raised to 33% and "a Few Times a Year" plus "Never" which remained steady.

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One additional question I have is about the number of words that I used. Are they too much? Do I get a deduction in grade if something like this happens in IELTS exam?

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Writing Feedback / Is it better to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway or on public transport? [2]

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trans between cities.

Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

commuting between cities

In today's world, transportation plays an important role in our everyday life. While some people think that it's important to invest n railways to travel faster between cities, others believe that the government should dedicate money to makes the available transportation system better. It's a controversial discussion, so I will discuss both points of views and present my idea with an example to support my answer.

On one hand, there are people who think that we need better railway so have access to other cities in short time. They think that it could help the environment by reducing the traffic between two destinations, therefore eliminate the air pollution and also save a lot of time when one wants to see his/her loved ones in a far city.

On the Other hand, some people believe that the transportation that we already have, need a lot of maintaining and have much room for improvements. In fact, they think that the most crucial part is the local transportation because we use it more often in our everyday life. For example going to work or restaurant and also for entertainment. So it deserves more attention as well.

In my point of view, I respect both of these opinions, and I believe it really depends on the country and its priorities. For example, in my own country, we need more railways to connect cities together, because a lot of workers have to travel to a big city near them for work, so it will save them a lot of time and also reduce the traffic in cities rush hours and saves tons of money for them.

In conclusion, two point of views plus my own comments about whether it is important to connect cities to each other with faster vehicles or to spend money on the transportation we already have and extend it, are presented in this essay. I believe that it depends on each country plan of development to select which plan is more suitable for them.

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Writing Feedback / Allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters or not [3]

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matter that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

giving freedom to your children

In today's world, we overcome obstacles on a daily basis. It is important to learn how to make important decisions for everyone. Nevertheless, there are people who think that if we give children the freedom to choose what to eat or what to wear, etc. , they become selfish. On the contrary, some people believe that it is necessary for children to make decisions about his/her actions. Two points of views shall be discussed. In addition, also my idea will be presented.

On one hand, there are a group of peoples that think giving freedom of choice to children will be bad for the future of them. Because there will be a lot of persons in the society that doesn't respect others opinion and only care about their own feeling. For example, one of my friends has a child who only sits by himself at the parties and doesn't lend his toys to other kids, and cries if a person tries to touch them to play with him.

On the other hand, nowadays also of people think it is great to teach kids how to make a decision, it makes them independent which is a very good characteristic. They think it makes them ready for future life. For example, while I was growing up, there were many kids in my age that have the freedom to do what they want, and they turned out fine.

Lastly, in my opinion, it is crucial for children to learn how to make decisions. Becuase if they do not know, this will hunt them for the rest of their life. I have always admired my mother's attitude toward me. I was free to make a decision. But if it was wrong, she tried to talk me out of it or support me through the process to see the consequences myself.

In conclusion, two types of thinking were discussed it my essay, and in the fourth paragraph, I presented my own thoughts on the subject. Overall it does not matter if you are scared to give freedom to your children, because it is also important to think about his/her future and believing that, your kid is capable of doing anything as long as he/she has your support.

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Writing Feedback / The diagram presents the process of generating electricity from geothermal energy in a power plant [3]

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

generating electrical power with the help of geothermal energy

The diagram presents the process of generating electricity from geothermal energy in a power plant. I will walk through the steps that take to convert cold water to electricity. There are 3 main stages. First, changing cold water to steam, second, power the tubing with the steam, and lastly, the generator produces electricity.

Firstly, the cold water pumped down 4.5 km distance into the earth, after that with the help of injection well, the water goes to the geothermal zone that heats up the water using hot rocks. Furthermore, with the help of production well, the hot water will be pumped up to the condenser, where the steam from the water is held.

Secondly, the turbine continues its circular movement with the help of the steam. Lastly, the generator uses the energy from the turbine to produce electricity.

In conclusion, the diagram demonstrated the process of generating electrical power with the help of geothermal energy, and what it takes from using cold water in power plants to using the electrical power in our homes.

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Writing Feedback / Statistics of CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal [2]

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The artificial production of carbon dioxide

The graph compares the production of carbon dioxide in average for each individual based on metric tonnes in four countries, namely, United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.

The United Kingdom appears to have the most numbers, started from around 11 metric tonnes in 1967 and gradually decreased to just under 9 in 2007, however, remained as the most producer of CO2 gas till the end. After the UK, there is Sweden, which has the second biggest number, around 9 in 1967 with a sudden increase to its peak approximately in 1988 to around 10 and a rapid decrease till 2007 to around 5.

The Italy started from Just well over 4 with a fast increase to around 8 in 1997 and remained steady till 2007. The Portugal has the lowest number of CO2 production in 1967 with only 1 metric tonnes per person on average, nevertheless, its figures grow quickly over the years to reach 5.

Through the years, The UK stayed on top with the highest number and the Portugal, putting the quick increase aside, remained the lowest producer of CO2 till 2007 when they meet the Sweden in 5, who had a surprisingly decrease from around 8.

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Writing Feedback / There is a lot of information in each country that becomes accessible if you know their language. [2]

Since people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

reason for learning a foreign language

In today's world, communication plays an important role in all aspects of our life, from having fun with friends to resolve the complex political matters, and it goes without saying that languages are the main tool to communicate. In regard, some people think it is not necessary to learn other languages unless we want to travel to its country. Other people disagree and believe there are other reasons involved. Both points of views will be discussed, plus my own opinion on the subject.

On one hand, there are people who never used another language other than their native one. They fell that it is too much work to learn another language, because they never needed it. For example, my grandfather worked at a bank, all his life he only spoke and written in Farsi and also changes his smartphone language to his mother tongue. He never felt the need to learn another language.

On the other hand, lots of people believe that in a world that we live now, there are no borders, there is a lot of opportunities for a person who can understand people from another side of the world. For example, one of my friends learned 3 languages in university, everybody thought she was weird, because who needs to know four different languages. Eventually, she got a job with high salary as a translator for an international company in Iran.

Lastly, in my own opinion, I think our modern world, with the help of the internet that made us closer together, There a lot of information online. For instance, when I was doing my thesis and also when I want to work, all of my references are in English, even though I am in Iran, I need to know English to become successful.

In conclusion, there are some people who have not needed other languages their whole life and are against in learning it. In contrast, a lot of people believe that in our world, it is impossible to be successful if one does not understand others. And I believe it is a must-have skill because there is a lot of information in each country that becomes accessible if you know their language.

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Writing Feedback / Numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished [5]

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Ashdown museum visitors

The table shows the total number of people who visited the Ashdown museum a year before and after the changes in inside and outside of the building. Also, there are two pie charts that compare the result of the visitor's comments before and after the changes, about whether they liked the new likes or not.

Firstly, the total amount of people who visited the museum raised from 74000 before the changes to 92000 after it. In fact, by paying attention to the charts, it is understandable that the percentage of people who were satisfied or very satisfied increased from 45% to 75%.

Secondly, the portion of visitors that were dissatisfied or very dissatisfied dropped from 50% to 20%. In more details, the portion of people that have been very dissatisfied fell dramatically from 40% to 15%. Also, there are 5% of visitors who didn't engage in the survey in both years.

Overall, from the pie charts, it is obvious that more people liked the new style.

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Writing Feedback / Governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people disagree [3]

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

the importance of economy

While there are a lot of countries that only aimed for economic developments, there is a portion of people who say there are a lot of aspects for a country to count it as a strong one. Both points of views shall be discussed along with my own ideas about the subject.

On one hand, in today's world, money plays an important role. From the government's perspective, a great economy will give them the power to prepare better lifestyle for their own people. For instance, countries that have a good economy, their citizen's are happier than other countries.

On the other hand, there are a lot of other aspects involve, namely; healthcare, sports, and culture. There are people that argue these types of development is as crucial as the economic one. Because the economic itself does not guarantee the well being of citizen's life. For example, there are countries that have a lot of resources but spend all of it for wrong purposes, like war missiles.

Lastly, in my own opinion, a good economy can give advantages to the country. In fact, it is a leverage that can be used in international talks or to prepare a wonderful healthcare system for their people. It is the matter of how to use the resources, whether care about the citizens or not.

In conclusion, both points of view about the importance of economy were discussed, in addition to my personal view on the subject, which is, even though economics is the most important aspect of a country, it is also important how to use it.

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