Writing Feedback / Fulfilling the requirements for raw materials needs sacrifice of the environment [2]

IELTS SUMMARY 1:Environmental Impacts of Logging

The logging industry have an important role for supplies raw materials. But, for fulfill the requirements need to sacrifice the environment or in this case leads to deforestation. Habitat loss, pollution and erosion is the myriad effect of deforestation. This is not only can feel by humans, but also plants, animals and microorganisms lost their ecosystem. For example effect of deforestation to air pollution. The function of the trees is remove pollution in the air. Because of photosyntesis process, trees can produce oxygen from carbondioxide with chemical reaction. In the other word, cutting the trees automatically will effect pollutant airborne. The others effect are damaged aquatic habitats, drought and forest fires because the subsoil cant hold water and release it into the atmosphere. However, keeping the existence fundamental resource it must consider before deforestation for better future.

Writing Feedback / Taklimakan Desert - dominated by sand dunes and extreme conditions and free from vegetation [2]

IELTS SUMMARY 2 :Plant Life in the Taklimakan Desert

Almost domination by sand dunes, free of vegetation and extreme conditions, makes the Taklimakan Desert become one of the most extreme desert on Earth. Only three plants can survive, there are Popullus euphratica , Tamarix ramosissima and Alhagi sparsifolia. Every resilient desert plants have strategies for survival. Populus euphratica can survive because not only control evaporation with opening and closing the stomata mechanism, but also endure high-salt concentrations with dilutes mechanism. Different from Populus euphratica, Tamarix ramosissima or commonly called tamarisk has root system can take up water in underground. Tamarisk also has unique mechanism. That is dropping salt to the soil which it produces from accumulation salt on the glands. The purpose is make the soil around of tamarisk more salty,so another plant can not live. Same as Tamarisk mechanism, Alhagi sparsifolia also has roots with developed strategies with hydraulic conductance mechanism.

Writing Feedback / Unfortunately the speed in electric cars is slower than on gas-powered vehicles. [2]

Since the first launching in the early twentieth century, cars not only has change old Roman roads with longer and wider highways, but also gas station and stop-and-go traffic are become common phenomenons in our society. Because prices of oil rises and exhaust fumes causes violent life, electrical cars are becoming one of the best alternatives. Although the electrical cars give more advantages, unfortunately the speed is slower than gas-powered vehicles.That is the reason why in North America, almost cars in there is gas powered vehicles. Different from North America, electric cars are developed by some major manufacturers in Europe and Asia. Futhermore, the government of China give some incentive not only for car manufacturers, but also for buyers electrical cars. On the other hand, American manufacturers makes the electrical cars looks like motorcycle with seats two and three -wheelers.

Writing Feedback / The incredible story of Hula Dancing and Hawaii. Gorgeous islands. [2]

Women with grass skirts, garlands of leaves with anklets are dancing in near beach, almost people evokes these are the characteristics of Hawaiian dancer. This is becoming general stereotype when the society mentions Hawaii islands. As we know, Hawaii islands are one of best destination places in the world. Not only about the beautiful panorama of the beaches, but also about the Hawaiian culture. Hawaiian people have local traditional dance. It is called Hula dance. The origins of Hula dance, some women dance performed in near altar in honor of God or Goddess. But in this era, the purpose of Hula dance is for entertainment tourist. In eighteenth century, the Hula dance was changing as a result of merge culture between Hawaiian culture with European culture. Recently year, Hula dance has become a form of entertainment for tourist and cultural heritage for native Hawaiians.

Writing Feedback / Today, the health care system world is threatened by nurse migration [2]

IELTS Summary Task : Nurse Migration

Today, the health care systems world are threatens by nurse migration. This migration are caused by vary and complex problems. Higher salaries and better quality of life are some reasons why nurses moving from native country to wealthier countries. In some region especially developing nations such as South Asia and Latin America, the primarily reason for the shortage is nurse working abroad to meet demand needs in Europe and North America. The other case occurred in Philippines. They send thousands nurse working abroad and got income one billion dollar annually. The consequences of those policy is the Philippines feel the effects of the nursing shortage. Furthermore, the side effect of nurse migration is their leaving of health care up to assistant nurses, who have rudimentary training. Meanwhile, developed countries invest and focus on retaining and rewarding nurses, both financially and high-quality working conditions

Writing Feedback / The world will become a very scary place if we lose our listening skills [2]

Listening is one of the parts of communication. In general, almost people spend their time in communication for listening. Listening is the process making meaning from sound, process of extraction and essence. In other situation, listening have a patterns which is we can recognize, like someone in party situation. Culture, language, values and attitudes categorized as the filters from all noisy sound. So people recognize patterns to distinguish noise from signal. Listening is the access to understanding each other.Unfortunately, people retain just 25 percent of what they hear. This means that people becoming desensitized and it is becoming problem. When media using some kind of words like shock, scandal and sensation as their headline to get our attention.It is harder for us to pay attention. This is become serious problem if we losing our listening. The consequences is the world become very scary place.

Writing Feedback / TED Summary Lighting Up Indonesia's Future [2]

"Indonesia Mengajar" is innovation program from the Minister of Education which is aim to developing our education in Indonesia. The backgrounds of this program because unequal distributions of the teachers in Indonesia and the quality of the teachers is low. From the facts, the best way is try to send the best young generation to become elementary schools teachers in most remote areas. In his standpoint, he argued that he choose elementary schools because almost 66% of elementary schools are understaffed. The presence of volunteers of "Indonesia Mengajar are not only for teach a lesson, Anis also want them to inspire and become role model. Not only for education purpose, but also young people Indonesian has opportunities to live the people with of this country. Their will live with hard conditions. Hopefully, that experience will useful when they become leaders in future. They will become world-class competency and grassroots understanding.

Writing Feedback / TED Summary Task: A new way to grow bone [3]

Molly Steven is a head of a biomaterials lab and she is really fascinated about material engineering. Bone is one of the tissues in our body. She said that humans always try to keep health and minimize suffering. Human also find way to used materials in really creative ways in the body for face many diseases. For example when the bones had fracture and we need to repair the bone crack, iliac crest harvest is the solution. The iliac crest procedures are takes some bone from our iliac crest and transplant somewhere else in the body. Unfortunately, it might have significant pain even 2 years after the operation. From that problem, she uses the same approach as well as iliac crest to solve the bone crack. The main idea is inject underneath it a liquid, lead to the proliferation and they can form lots of new tissue.

Writing Feedback / The chart shows international tourism is the highest incomes [3]

Overall, the chart shows international tourism is the highest incomes. On the other hand, meat products are the most minimize incomes. Meat products are decrease gradually from 2005 to 2025. In 2005, the income of meat products is 4 billion dollars, but it decrease during 20 years with revenue 3 billion dollars in 2025. The total income from meat products during 20 years in the amount of 10 billion dollars and 2005 become the best annual income for meat products. Dairy products increase dramatically from 2005 to 2015 with difference almost 3 billion dollars and a little of decrease after 10 years. The total income from dairy products is 20,5 billion dollars. On the contrary from meat products, international tourism are increased gradually during 2005 to 2025 with the total income 21 billion dollars. Start from 2005 which has income 6 billion dollars to 2025 with income almost 8 billion dollars. Compare with the others, International tourism become the greatest income in 2005 and 2025. But dairy products become greatest income in 2015.

Writing Feedback / Almost one-third of travelers each year prefer learning program more than other types of vacations [2]

IELTS Summary Task:Learning Vacations

In recent years, surveys show almost one-third of travelers each year more prefer choose learning program more than other types of vacations. The main reason is they can enjoy the value of a vacation with new ways, not only just spending their time for useless thing. A couple of years ago, types of vacations are more preferred for young people such as students of French spending their time studying language in Paris and students which is focus on marine environment learn how to diving and accompany researchers become their assistance. Now, so many travel programs offer some educational endeavors. For example schools in Britain providing some courses such as history and philosophy for travelers in which enroll in residential colleges around the country or travelers can honing their cooking skills and how to prepared traditional meals. Not only got new experiences, but also improve knowledge and skills.

Writing Feedback / Shawn Anchor believes that our brain views can shapes our reality. [6]

IELTS Summary TED The Happy Secret for Better Work

Shawn Anchor believes that our brain views can shapes our reality. Not only change our brain views, but also we can change the lens in which has effect on our happiness, educational and business outcome at the same time. He tried to find the key to understanding the science of happiness. He said that our external world is predictive of our happiness, we just know only 10 percent of long-term happiness. Fortunately, the most gives impact is how to our brain views processes of the world. That is the formula for happiness and success. We can change our mind, automatically we can affect reality. From his research, he find that only a quarter job successes are predicted by IQ, the rest are predicted by our optimism levels, social supports and the last our ability to see stress as a challenge. When our brain positive performs, it will rises other aspects such as creativity and energy.

Writing Feedback / Summary 2 Pie charts represent water usage in San Diego,California and Worldwide [5]

The pie charts represent about water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world. Overall, San Diego is the region in which have the biggest water usage for residential and California is the region which is the biggest water usage for industry. Different from San Diego and California, Worldwide is the region which is the biggest water usage for agriculture. In San Diego and Worldwide, both of them have the same number water usage for industry.

Resident is the highest user of water in San Diego and California. In San Diego reach three-fifths water usage and California approximately two-fifths. On the other hand, only a very small number water usage by resident in worldwide. Worldwide have a significant proportion of water usage by agriculture. In contrary, Agriculture is the lowest water usage in San Diego approximately 17%. Not only San Diego, but also worldwide have the same percentage of water usage for industry by 23 percent.

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Writing Feedback / The more we talk to others, the more links gets stronger - 7 Ways to Make Conversation With Anyone [5]

Conversations are links. Every time we talked with someone we never know before, a tiny link is formed. The more we talk to others, the more links gets stronger. In every conversation construct new links. Conversation is interesting process. The benefits of this process are establish a connection, process learn something new, gives a whole new perspective and experience for us. The major question is how to make a conversation with anyone. Malavika Varadan, a radio presenter, she has a conversation with almost 1.6 million people that she never seen every morning. She suggests some advice about how to make conversation with anyone. First, word flood gates, it is means said first word in the beginning of conversation will affect everything. Second, she suggest skip the small talk. That means leaving the chit chat and directly to the personal question. Third, find something that us and other person might have in common. Furthermore, give a unique impression and ask for an notion.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Summary Task American Bike Project where to Sleep [2]

Tyler Metcalfe, as a National Geographic Travel photographer, quit his job and sold off his properties to do a journey of cross-country cycling. It is likely that a touring cyclist will sleep in a different place of their journey. The major problem from travelers using bicycle is finding place to sleep. He argued that finding a place to sleep often result in some of the most frustrating, exciting, and even scary moments of a trip. Furthermore, he said that the best option for finding a good place to sleep on a bike tour is campsites. Travelers can choose a number of options to reserve tent campsites with relatively cheap cost. Campsites also usually offer fire pits, running water, restrooms, and usually are located near park visitor centers. Second, Hotels and motels are become other option. Stay in a hotel it offers some sort amenities such as laundry services, showers and a soft bed. Third, hostels also provide options for cyclists looking to find comfortable and cheap. The benefits of hostels are lower costs but almost same facilities like hotels

Writing Feedback / TED summary Task Every Kids Need Champion [3]

Rita Pierson, a teacher, spent her entire life either the schoolhouse or the way to the schoolhouse. She is come from educator families, both of her parents are teacher. She taught since 4 decades ago. So she can look at education reform from other views. Some of those changes have been good but some of them have been bad. She argued that poverty, low attendance and negative influences are the common reasons of the kids drop out. She regrets why people never discuss about the value and the vital of human relations. She also said quotes from James Comer that no significant relationship will affected to zero significant learning. Furthermore, she told about her journey taught in which low academically class. She got essential point from his mother experiences. When her mother passed away and so many her mother students came to her funeral. The point is her mother left a legacy of relationships that could never lost.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Summary Task BlackBerry's Rise and Fall in 10 Phones [4]

The era of BlackBerry has end. BlackBerry company officially announced would stop designing and producing its own product. The major reason for BlackBerry's stopped is iPhone changed everything with their numerous of innovation and BlackBerry was too slow to adapt with it. To face the future, BlackBerry itself will live as a software and services provider. Nowadays, BlackBerry was made the most revenue from software, it is contrary from the past. The software business holds nearly as many challenges today as hardware did a decade ago. Furthermore, it may be difficult to remember in 2016, but BlackBerry was once not just a dominant force, but the most innovative company, with handsets beloved by businesses, politicians, and fast-typists in the past. The behavior of the business it is chasing is evolving rapidly, with strong new competitors coming in. BlackBerry is not starting from dominant position this time around, so it is less vulnerable to that sort of disruption, but it is not going to be an easy way.