Giansy11
Sep 15, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary: What's wrong with our food system? [4]
Hallo Bung Ilham, that is interest topic, overall your idea already delivered. However, I have several suggestions for your writing.
Birke Baehr, 11 years old, talked (talk) about what is ...
This is appositive sentence = noun+noun+v1
To begin with, kids are easily led to believe all the marketing and ... ( use the strong vocab, and make it simple to understand)
This genetically engineered (seeds?) and organisms
Food production has been proven to cause cancer (...) and people human , when they consumed unhealthy food since 1990
Hallo Bung Ilham, that is interest topic, overall your idea already delivered. However, I have several suggestions for your writing.
Birke Baehr, 11 years old, talked (talk) about what is ...
This is appositive sentence = noun+noun+v1
To begin with, kids are easily led to believe all the marketing and ... ( use the strong vocab, and make it simple to understand)
This genetically engineered (seeds?) and organisms
Food production has been proven to cause cancer (...) and people human , when they consumed unhealthy food since 1990