Maria
Dec 12, 2019
Letters / Motivational letter for stipendum hungaricum scholarship, Bsc Biochemical Engineering [2]
@Ahmadjb225
Welcome to the forum! I hope my feedback gives you a clearer idea on how you can improve this essay.
I first recommend that you keep the first parts of the essay more focused on expounding on the reason why you are writing this in the first place. Afterward, you will be able to integrate more specific information about your childhood that you find to be relevant (still, remember to be brief if you intend to do this as you don't want to overcrowd your essay with too much background data that do not really relate to the technical angles of the application).
Before you focus on the content of your writing, I highly suggest that you focus more on trying to be more dedicated towards ensuring that your writing is free from fundamental grammatical mistakes. This will also include technical angles of writing such as punctuation and flow of writing. Being organized will also go a long way, considering you were jumping from one concept to the other without necessarily giving out a clear-cut reason as to why you are writing in this manner. If you are able to give out more detailed and focused content, it will benefit you in the long-run.
Remember: be as specific as possible when writing these letters as this will determine to the evaluators how focused you truly are specifically about this program and university. This is one crucial thing that's missing from your writing.
@Ahmadjb225
Welcome to the forum! I hope my feedback gives you a clearer idea on how you can improve this essay.
I first recommend that you keep the first parts of the essay more focused on expounding on the reason why you are writing this in the first place. Afterward, you will be able to integrate more specific information about your childhood that you find to be relevant (still, remember to be brief if you intend to do this as you don't want to overcrowd your essay with too much background data that do not really relate to the technical angles of the application).
Before you focus on the content of your writing, I highly suggest that you focus more on trying to be more dedicated towards ensuring that your writing is free from fundamental grammatical mistakes. This will also include technical angles of writing such as punctuation and flow of writing. Being organized will also go a long way, considering you were jumping from one concept to the other without necessarily giving out a clear-cut reason as to why you are writing in this manner. If you are able to give out more detailed and focused content, it will benefit you in the long-run.
Remember: be as specific as possible when writing these letters as this will determine to the evaluators how focused you truly are specifically about this program and university. This is one crucial thing that's missing from your writing.