eddies [Contributor]
Mar 24, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS - Crime in UK; percentage of criminality of British people in different age/gender [11]
Use these phrases to avoid repetition of words in your visual writing:
The number of = the figure for
The proportion of = the figure for
Proportion = percentage
Grammar errors. A 20-year-old woman
Overall, you write well. You just need one or two detailed sentences in the last paragraph.
Use these phrases to avoid repetition of words in your visual writing:
The number of = the figure for
The proportion of = the figure for
Proportion = percentage
20-year-olds
Grammar errors. A 20-year-old woman
Overall, you write well. You just need one or two detailed sentences in the last paragraph.