Writing Feedback / Advertisement are only the good way of gaining information and one should not be fully depends on it [5]


don't stop to always practice here, you will get more suggestion to make your essay better

Writing Feedback / task 2 for ielts: the wealth sharing among countries always have two sides [4]


Therefore, many people propose the sharing things such as: food and education form advanced countries to the poor ones while others think that


try to give more details here

Writing Feedback / Ielts: Mobile phones facilitate our work and also simplify our lives [5]

it seems unbalanced, try to give more details in the second view

Writing Feedback / IELTS - Talent is one of the awesome things in the world [6]


grammar mistakes

also, don't forget to put space between each paragraph to make the readers easier to catch your points

Writing Feedback / IELTS - Effect of movies and computer games containing violence [7]


to make it more interesting to read, you can add a suggestion or recommendation to the readers,

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Schools greatest failure is that it focuses too intensely on academic subjects [9]

this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result shows better than the shorter one. so that, I suggest you to follow this pattern, hope it will work with you

case/issue = use what,who,where,when,why, and how to help you construct the issue
your position/opinion = agree/disagree, advantage/disadvantage, your opinion, your idea, etc
thesis statement = this essay would examine . . ..
this essay would discuss . . . .

Writing Feedback / IELTS - mobile phones: faster communication vs social problems [6]

when you write 5 paragraphs, you can follow this approach
first paragraph : introduction
second paragraph : one side
third paragraph : another side (contrast to the one side)
fourth paragraph : your own opinion (whether you support the second or third paragraph or balance) but, it is preferable if you support the paragraph which is the nearest

fifth paragraph : conclusion

Writing Feedback / IELTS - Talent is one of the awesome things in the world [6]


when you put 'more', it should be followed by adjective which is not ended by 'er' ,,when an adjective is already ended by 'er',it already means as a comparison


you don't need to put 'dot' between god and while/ or change the letter 'w' in the word 'while' with a capital letter

pay more attention to small mistakes

Writing Feedback / (IELTS) Studying abroad is a trend among university students in Turkey [5]


do these wodrs 'students' above have the same meaning or different? make it clearly, so that the readers will not feel confused

Writing Feedback / Ielts: The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business [5]


these paragraphs seem unbalanced, it will be better if you give more details in the second body, try ti put some relevant examples from your daily lives or your experiences

Writing Feedback / IELTS Education plays an important role in the socioeconomic status of a country [3]


pay more attention to the using of 'to' and 'for'
also, the word 'all' here is too general, could you make it more specific and clearly?

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Abortion Should Be illegal? People should think of the consequences [4]


don't put an abbreviation in IELTS essay, better you use 'and so on' rather than 'etc'

here, you should give two bodies which contain different views,

Writing Feedback / IELTS Essay: Animal Testing - positive and negative aspects [3]

you wrote well, I can enjoy reading your essay,
it seems to me that you may put your own opinion to support your idea in a new paragraph before conclusion

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Advertising makes people buy products that they really do not need [8]


can not cannot

I've written in my previous comments to some members of EF that cannot must be written as one word

Writing Feedback / IELTS - GUN CONTROL & INCREASING VIOLENCE [13]

when you write agree disagree essay, and you use 5-paragraph style,,
follow this approach
1.introduction
2.first point
3.second point
4.your own opinion
5.conclusion

Writing Feedback / IELTS Essay Task 2: 'Television / Children' Topic [8]


On the other hand, I do not believe that using TV regularly is always good for children

be careful with the using of 'to' and 'for'

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK - 2 Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men [5]


try to be more carefully to some details, or small mistakes that you made

Writing Feedback / ielts essay about water shortage [12]

where is the task?
when you write an ielts essay, please include the task, so the readers will be easier to catch your points and understand what do you want to deliver here,

also, I don't see the conclusion,

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Global music has more positive impacts on humans than traditional music [4]


this is common mistake that I usually find in IELTS essay, you must write 'cannot' in one word

Writing Feedback / IELTS: The private motor vehicle improved individual freedom; but it's expensive [6]

when you write 5 paragraphs, you can follow this approach
first paragraph : introduction
second paragraph : one side
third paragraph : another side (contrast to the one side)
fourth paragraph : your own opinion (whether you support the second or third paragraph or balance) but, it is preferable if you support the paragraph which is the nearest

fifth paragraph : conclusion

Writing Feedback / [IELTS] Should parents be obliged to immunize their vulnerable children? [6]

be careful, modal such as can, will, should, etc,,should be followed by verb 1

Writing Feedback / [IELTS] Should parents be obliged to immunize their vulnerable children? [6]


you wrote well, but I find a small mistake, you must write 'cannot' without space

Writing Feedback / IELTS; all towns and cities to have public spaces [5]


I don't think this is the conclusion, you use phrase 'it seems to me', it shows your opinion, not your conclusion,


SalMon is right, in the conclusion you may put a suggestion

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1. MARRIAGES AND DIVORCE IN THE USA & ADULT AMERICANS' MARITAL STATUS [6]


you don't need to put comma here, you just need to use comma when you put 'while' in the beginning of your sentence, not in the middle like this


this is the right example, you didn't put comma because you put comma in the middle of the sentence

Writing Feedback / IELTS Essay: Work or study from home - advantages outweigh the disadvantages? [4]

I cannot find what the task wants, put your own opinion by some phrases : in my opinion, in my view, it seems to me

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2. Where Talent Comes From [9]


this sentence is too long, it will be better if you separate it into two sentences

Writing Feedback / [IELTS] Prisons have various purposes [5]


when you put the word 'different', and before this word there is no comparison, it must be followed by noun plural



try to use the other phrases, when you use the same phrases as you did, it may make the readers think that after these word you will write the same sentence

Writing Feedback / IELTS: As an international tourist, whether adhere to the local custom or not? [8]


some connectors cannot be put in the beginning of the sentence

the connector 'and' , for example. you only can put 'and' in the middle of the sentence

Writing Feedback / [IELTS] We should opt for customary music rather than worldwide one [7]

you wrote well, this is still rare in writing ielts essay, most of writers just give short examples, but you made more specific example, hope it can be followed by other learners

Student Talk / Took the IELTS Today and didn't go as I expected :( [35]

yup,,keep studying and practicing more sister,
when you get what did you do which made that score unsatisfied, you will get more that others

Writing Feedback / IELTS: What are the benefits and problems brought by international corporation? [8]


doesn't it too short? in introduction, you may post a suggestion to make it longer

Writing Feedback / In many countries there has been increase in social problems involving teens [6]


capitalization,


don't use contraction in your essay

Writing Feedback / [IELTS] Classmates' impacts on children's performance at school [11]

don't these paragraphs show contrast?

I suggest you to put contrast signals in the beginning of the second paragraph above

Writing Feedback / Ielts: letter and gift to a friend who has just had a baby recently [4]


pay more attention to small details

Writing Feedback / IELTS: do animals have the same rights as humans? [6]


this is the question, let's see your answer,,


the question ask your opinion, not the other people opinion, this is common mistake that is often made by some IELTS students

Writing Feedback / IELTS argument essay large amount of violence in television programs [6]

to make your essay more specific, you can take some examples from your experiences or your daily life. it is preferable than you write another person's life

Writing Feedback / IELTS: 'The apple never falls far from the tree' - Parents should teach children [10]


this is right, you should put two sides paragraphs which contain different views, also, you should put a conclusion

Writing Feedback / IELTS Essay - Well qualified graduates without employement [5]


don't write 'cannot' with space


be careful with the using of active and passive sentence, please correct your structure again

also, where is the conclusion?

Writing Feedback / IELTS : negative effects of technological process ( agree or disagree ) [5]



you have composed your essay well,but try to give more specific examples, you can take from your daily life or your experience

Writing Feedback / 4 types of landfill waste in Molovia, Bratistan, Atlantis, Senia and Vatania [7]

when you describe a picture, you must include the picture in your post by attach file,