justivy03
Oct 28, 2016
Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - The graph below and the chart on the next page show the answers people gave [4]
Hi Mardian, I have a few suggestions for your essay;
- ... information about the satisfaction rating ofwith life according
- ... be seen that theleast happiness occur in young
-agepeople are happier by having money,
- ... older people does not make them happy.
-After thatHowever , they have similar
- pattern in 21-30 age group until it reaches thea bottom in 41-50 ...
- ..., the trend is upward and has hit a high pointatof 5.6 for everyone
- and this has decreased sharply
- health issues begins from the bottom
-inat the age or more than 75.
- There is a cross in age group of 45-54 between
There you have it Mardian,I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and overall, the analysis only needs minor modifications and this should help enhance your analysis.
Hi Mardian, I have a few suggestions for your essay;
- ... information about the satisfaction rating of
- ... be seen that the
-
- ... older people does not make them happy.
-
- pattern in 21-30 age group until it reaches the
- ..., the trend is upward and has hit a high point
- and this has decreased sharply
- health issues begins from the bottom
-
- There is a cross in age group of 45-54 between
There you have it Mardian,I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and overall, the analysis only needs minor modifications and this should help enhance your analysis.