Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: GOVERNMENT PRIORITY IN SPEND MONEY (EDIFICE OR PUBLIC INFRASTRUCTURE) [2]

Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many citizens think that fund should be wasted to increase the quality of health centres and schools, while others argue that huge, spectacular constructions are essential for a town. Although the government has to develop some exciting buildings to attract the tourists, I believe that the state budget should put education and health improvement as a priority.

It is important to encourage the edifice constructions. This will help the city to be more attractive through the tourists and provides them additional reasons to visit. Taking Burj Khalifa and Burj al Arab buildings in Dubai as the examples, it has attracted more tourists to come there since they had been structured. As a result, the government would earn more income from the tourism activities. It shows that, attractive building constructions are necessary for the city.

However, I extremely confident that the schools and hospitals must be the priority of the state investment based on some reasons. Firstly, schools are the place where people gain knowledge, which is important to support their life in future and good-quality school generates high standard graduates. Secondly, school must be capable to facilitate all students' needs while the instructional process. On the other hand, a city have to increase the condition of health centres, so the severely ill patients can be treated better by the local hospitals.

In conclusion, I consider that government has to make the schools and hospitals as the precedence in state spending. However, some spectacular structures should be constructed to charm foreign visitors.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: NEGATIVE EFFECTS OF TOURISM ON THE DESTINATION COUNTRIES - statement verification [3]

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to.
How true is this statement? What can tourist do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

Many citizens argue that tourism has lots of drawbacks on the tourism destinations. It is justified to say that some kind of journey activities have some detriments, such as environment disaster and stress on infrastructure, but the holidaymaker can preserve the local cultures and surrounding area as the solution toward these problems.

These days and ages, traveling is becoming more and more popular among people and brings harmful effects on the destination countries. Firstly, uncontrolled number of tourists will lead to the incapability of nature to deal with the tourism pressure. As a result, there will be the improvement of the pollution and waste, tightness of water resources and put the local inhabitants competing with foreigners to use the limited assets. Furthermore, the explosion of visitors will force the local government to develop the infrastructure. For instance, the roads must be wider to deal with the traffic which is busier, and cause more natural habitat loss. As a consequence, tourism heightened the deforestation level and danger many species of animals.

However, this is not mean that there is no solution toward this problems. The travellers can avoid or minimize the detrimental by preserve the local cultures and environments. For example, by manage the local resources consuming and use the infrastructure wisely. In addition, the tourists can make a good write about local traditions to promote them. Thus, the foreigners can help the development of regional tourism and maintain the natural surroundings. To conclude, the holidaymaker can reduce the harmful effects of travelling activities.

In conclusion, even excursion brings drawbacks such as natural damages and strain on the local buildings, there are some preserving acts which will scale it down and can be done by the holidaymakers.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: TRAVEL TO SOMEWHERE NEW AND DIFFERENT OR FAMILIAR PLACES [NEW]

Some people like to travel to somewhere new and different when they go on holiday, while others prefer familiar places.
Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to visiting new places?

Many travelers tend to revisit their holiday destination, while others enjoy to go to the area, where they have never visited before. Traveling to new places have some disadvantages such as it may cost more expensive and can lead to fall ill. However, there are more benefit of this, for example improve the resourcefulness, widen the business opportunity and increase knowledge.

These days, there are some visitor who enjoy take a vacation in new destinations which causes some detriments. Firstly, foreigners may pay more for the journey fee since they do not know yet about the best cheapest places. For example, they may get involved in tourist traps and have to waste more money for the facilities which could be cheaper. Secondly, new situations make unawareness toward certain conditions such as weather and food among the holidaymakers, cause they get sick easily.

On the other hand, there are many positive effects of come to unvisited region instead of the negative side. For instance, encourage the natural ability in solve issues, since experience new situations which have never encounter in daily would make people more capable to face change and overcoming problems. Next, foreigners can see new people in different places. This let them to expand the work relationship. Last, by travelling, a lot of knowledge can be mastered. Learning through personal experience make the information much longer.

To sum up, even though visiting new places have detriments, for instance cause more high payment and the posibility to get sick; however, the visitors can get more merits such as develop the sense to deal with problems, extend the business accessibility and gain new information.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: THE PROPORTION OF REALITY AND GAME SHOWS WATCHER [4]

A breakdown of the proportion of the people who watch reality and game shows in Australia is described in the bar graph. It is noticable that reality shows are most watched by female and people aged over 35, while the game shows most popular in the watcher aged over 45.

Based on the percentage of the spectators, reality shows are most enjoyed by women and audiences aged over 45 which have reach around 70%, while the game shows is liked by 70 percent of the residents who is over 45 years old. Both sexes reach equal number for the proportion of the game shows audiences.

Turning to spectators' age, the citizens who are between 16 and 24 years old reach approximately 50% in both tv programmes. On the other hand, around 60 percent to 70 percent of 25 to 44 years old watcer tend to enjoy reality shows than game shows, while the 25 to 44 years old game shows audience only at about 40 percent.

Writing Feedback / The number of the hybrid vehicles which sold increased dramatically - data for 2006-2009 [2]

IELTS TASK 1: GLOBAL HYBRID VEHICLE SALES

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

A breakdown of the transportation which uses both of fuel and electricity sales around the world from 2006 to 2009, a 4-year period, is described in the bar chart. Overall, the number of the hybrid vehicles which sold increased dramatically. In any case, US was the country with the largest total of buying.

During 2006 to 2008, 3-year period, the number of the trading in Japan and other countries rose slightly. Begin with both area which stood at around 50,000 sales in 2006. In addition Japan has sharp enhancement to about 300,000 in 2009, while other remained stable for the entire period.

In contrast to this, US experienced fluctuation during the period, which stood at over 250,000 in the first year and peaked at 350,000 in the next year. The biggest rise of the vehicle which uses both of fuel and electricity trading in US occurred between 2006 and 2007, by 100,000 sales improvement.

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Writing Feedback / Investors hold more important role in communal equipment improvement (investments) than doctors [3]

IELTS TASK 2:
Inventors are not as important to society as doctors.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Some people believe that society profession such as doctors are more important than investors. People who work in health sector such as doctors have important role among citizens, since they maintain others' body condition and cure diseases. However, I strongly believe that investors can help inhabitants generally in a country by invest money for public facilitates.

These days and ages, there are so many differences illness widespread and attack people in any age, so a country need medical specialist such as doctor to take part in health problems solving. For example, people who experience certain disease need to meet doctor to cure their sickness. As a result to this, the government need to take responsibility of the existence of the person who works in medical department. To conclude, it is important to provide the medical professional in a area as the act to handle the overcome illness possibility.

However, government priorities are not just the citizens healthy. They should put more attention in public infrastructure improvement. Investor will invest amount of financial assistance which could encourage the local construction development. An illustration, the government can develop the public buildings such as school, roads, bridges, even hospitals. As the result, the government can increase the public structures in many aspects. For this reason, I strongly believe that investors has more important role toward public necessity.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that, even though society profession as doctors are necessary to preserve people wellness, but investors hold more important role in communal equipment improvement through the investment toward government.

Writing Feedback / ENGLISH AND FRENCH LANGUAGE TEACHER IN ONTARIO BASED ON THEIR GRADUATED YEAR - IELTS TASK 1 [2]

The explanation about the proportion of English and French language teacher in Ontario based on their graduated year from 2001 to 2007 is described in the line graph. Overall, French language teachers experienced slight rose, while the graph of English Language teachers showed the reverse by immense fell.

In 2001, both language teachers were in similar percentage at around 70% and over. Then, they experienced similar pattern until 2002 by went down to under 60%. However, the graph had 2002 until the rest of the period. In 2003, there was a sharp rose of French language teachers, went up to virtually 70% and kept going up until 2007, when it peaked at around 75%.

In contrast, English language teachers experienced dramatic fell to 40% in 2003. Continued by the rose and down for the following 4-year period. Even though there was a slight up in 2005 at around 45%, the graph of English language teachers show significant dropped until 2007 at just around 27%.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: TABLE OF JOB SKILL - a questionnaire answers [2]

The table describes the proportion of the worker's questionnaire answer about the main skill in their professions, in 1997 and 2006. Overall, during the period, many employees determine dealing with people skill are the most important accomplishment to have, while making speeches or presentations is considered as non-priority expertise.

There was a slight rose of around 1% to 4% in some categories, such as planning the activities of others, advising or caring for costumers or clients and making speeches or presentation. A higher increment rate was experienced by dealing with, instructing or training, and persuading or influencing others which stood at 60%, 25%, and 16% in 1997, then grew to 65%, 30% and 21% in 2006, all respectively.

In 2006, most laborers decided owning knowledge, cooperative analyzing and listening others as their priority skillful management. It is evidenced by there was a enormously improvement of 6% to 9% in those dexterity. When it comes to the capability to sell a product, some workers no longer found it as important as in previous year.

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Writing Feedback / It is not too hard and time-consuming to have a better pattern of a healthy lifestyle. IELTS TASK 2 [2]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that if they want to be healthy and fit, it would be easy, while the other argue that it is not easy to live in healthy way in this modern era. However, in my opinion, people can use many kinds of advanced technology to keep them healthy and fit, if they want to. For instance, they can put a gym tool in their house, so they can do exercise whenever they want while being in home. This years, when the world are becoming more sophisticated. Citizens around the world have higher cost of living than in the part, which forced them to work all the time for pay their bills and forget the importance of having healthy habits.

This days and ages, lots of people go to work every day in order to get the salary and solve their high payments. Most of them tend to overwork and have less time for their self and their body which cause them have a big possibility of having a broke healthy life. For example, the workers who waste most of his time in the office would not have extra time to exercise or even put attention in their diet. This would affect their body condition in future. As a result, most people who have this kind of lifestyle will get sick easier. That is why some people say that it is hard for them to have a healthy behavior.

However, it is not that hard to have better pattern of life and do not take too much time. An illustration to this, the inhabitants can save a little amount of their salary to purchase a gym tool, so they can practice by their self in their leisure time. As a result, people will more fit and will not have serious problem with illness. To conclude, we still able to develop a healtier way to life even if there is not much time.

In conclusion, although other people argue that it is very difficult to have a healthy life style when the world force them to keep work, i do believe that there is still a way to maintain our body condition by take an exercise.

Writing Feedback / The press should report the residents life who have some inspired story, not some celebrities rumors [5]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days there are too much news of how artists life their days and their issues with others, while some people believe that they have to give a shoot to non-celebrities citizens more. However, I strongly agree that the press should report the live about residents who have a motivated story, than information of others' issues.

There is a clear reason why media always present all about celebrities as their topic. It is because this kind of news are entertaining publlic. As an illustration to this, every famous person has their own fans, and those people tend to have hogh intention to receive these kind of information, such as their favorites schedule or newest appereance. In the end, the companies who provide these shows, would be able to attract their readers or watchers and have high rank for their ratings. That is why they keep serve inhabitants the material from creative person.

On the other hand, I immensely agree that audiences should be given more valuable stories. This kind of descriptions will encourage people to have a better life. For example, an autobiography of an ordinary man who starts his own business in such a young age. There will be more benefit, when watchers enjoy it, since they will have a motivation of starting create their brighter life. To conclude, it is important to present the beneficial information.

In conclusion, even though the news about some singer, actors or footballers provide entertaining effect, it is important to know how ordinary character build their life, in order to bring inspiration toward others, so they will start to develop their self, not consume celebrities scandals.

Writing Feedback / Technology devices brings merits toward the users, particularly on their personal relationships [2]

The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Technology device brings merits toward the users, particularly on their relationship personally. Technology is designed to ease human activities. However, by observing people social behaviour changing, I immensely agree that electronic may lead to lack in public connectivity.

Taking telephone as an example, it is justified to say that it had changed the way people greeting others. Back to years ago, when texting and calling or even chatting was uncommon, friends would keep in touch one to another by hangout together regularly. In addition, family member who was working far from the home town, would back intensively to visit his parents or brothers and sisters, since he could not contact them for a while. It makes clear that, in old days, citizens tend to have direct interaction among them.

In these days and ages, when almost all inhabitants around the world have such kind of electronic media, the way of its users to communicate has experienced an evolution. Start from the accustom of talking to others through call and text, until the internet connection also introduce chatting as the replacement of texting. It caused public stuck with their phone due to the attractive features on it rather than arrange an appointment to meet their relatives. On the other hand, actually technology bring some advantages in our life, such as make our work is easier so we have more time to do other work.

To sum up, technology device brings ease to our life, but create a distance among people personally, even though they are in a reachable place. It is changing how people find out and react toward other's condition. According to this, I do believe that those electronics bring merit.

Writing Feedback / The parts of the technology for producing electricity from the wind and where it should be installed [2]

IELTS TASK 1: THE DESIGN OF WIND TURBINE AND ITS LOCATIONS

The diagram describes parts of a technology for producing electricity from the wind and where it should be installed. According to the diagram, a wind turbine consist of a tall and strong steel tower, which is planted in the ground as the base of the machine, fiberglass or wood blades, a generator and a wind sensor which send information to computer. Overall, that turbine is looked like a huge fan.

In the first stage of the process, after the installation, the wind blow the blades as it rotate. At the same time, wind sensor will calculate the speed of the wind and track the direction, then send the data recorded to computer. As a result, following the rotation of the blades, generator will produce up to 1.5 megawatts of electricity.

Wind turbine can be planted in both landscape or bottom of the sea. In this case, taller the ground where is placed, then stronger the wind blow can be gotten. However, it would caused damage in the landscape rather than when it is placed in the seabed. In addition, a domestic turbine can be constructed to generate smaller amount of electricity.

Generally, although installation of this technology can brings merit toward landscape, it is an alternative way to produce electricity and harnessing renewable energy

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Writing Feedback / The bar charts present the rating of happiness level of residents aged 18 to over 65 [2]

The bar charts present the data of the proportion of happiness level of residents aged 18 to over 65 and the families who have children or not in United States. Overall, it is justified to say that, the married people is found happier than the unmarried, while couples experience similar rating from them who have children or not.

In the first chart, people in the 18-29 age group already in a marriage, experience the highest percentage at 45% rather than those who between 50 and 65 of age by only 40 percent. On the other side, they who in the 30-49 and 65 and over age group witness the equal rating 44%. However, the unmarried citizens find less pleased with their life, with greatest level is only 34 percent which is witnessed by they who at the age of 65 and over, while the youngsters are in the lower level at around 21% - 22%.

Focus on the married couples, the second bar chart describes that, they who all of the children have aged over 18 years are 2% lower, compare with those who do not have children at 41% and 43% respectively. On the other hand, there are 44% of the couples who experience blissfulness by having children at the age under 18 years old.

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Writing Feedback / The air circulation in an accommodation, which affect room temperature and energy spent [4]

The diagram explain about the air circulation in an accommodation, which affect room temperature and energy spent. Overall, most of the air leak in the main floor of the building, while in the attic, most of it get out from the house. In addition, lights cause the air leave the house.

Based on the diagram, the air leak into rooms through the space inside the house. In the basement, the air go in through the crawl space, behind the outdoor faucet and by dryer vent and windows in the electrical outlet room. In the main floor, there are loots of air leak in through the door and windows, while in the kitchen and bathroom the air come in by the fan vent in the wall

Based on the diagram, in the attic, there are many amount of the air which leave the room. The recessed light also cause the air out from the house. In addition, the come in air will out from the main floor, through the attic to the outside and affect the room temperature in the house.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: SOME ORGANISATIONS BELIEVE THAT THEIR EMPLOYEES SHOULD DRESS SMARTLY [2]

Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many companies argue that work performance is more important than appearance. On the other side others believe that their worker have to dress appropriate to their professions. In my opinion, uniform could determine someone's identity and affect other's judgment. However, quality of work is one that has to be acquired by worker too.

First of all a uniform presents itself as a dress code. Many people's first judging toward somebody else based on how they are looking. It determine if you put attention to yourself or not and make people analyse will you able to be professional in your job. The Human Resource Development section in a company would put their first assessment toward the worker candidates through their appearance; this is what we call as 'standard procedure'. As the result, many companies think that dress is important in world of work.

On the other side of this argument, other companies believe that appearance is not the most important point in working. That is the capability in responsibility on their duty as employee, which should be prioritised instead of used suit, since someone's ability does not depend on their clothes. Take an architecture as an example, the design which is produced would not change if he use another clothes. To sum up, clothes would not give significant effect on someone's quality of work.

However, in my opinion, I believe that both quality and appearance is important in professional world. We have to accomplish the skill needed in our work in order to do our duty in the office very well which will support our career. In addition, good appearance will build good impression toward our self, so other people will find it more comfortable to have a collaboration work with us.

In conclusion, while other debate about the importance of dressing and the quality of work, I do believe that, a professional worker has to being clothed properly to improve their prestige in other's eyes and should possess the required skill.

Writing Feedback / Many people prefer to open their own job field rather than enroll to a corporation or organisation [2]

Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organisation.
Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

Many people prefer to open their own job field rather than enroll to a corporation or organisation. Although this may brings a merit, as we need longer time to earn money and has a bigger possibility to experience bankruptcy, start a business has some benefits for indovodual and other. For instance, that will teaches a person to be an independent man, create a new job field for unemployment people and improve the financial condition of his country.

Build a new company will not be easy. There are many things need to be prepared, such as the briliant business idea and well-developed business plen. Even though so, a business need very long time to grow. It needs a bog effort to build connection with other company or even to hire people who different problem which may be faced, that is why it has a bigger possibility of loss of profit.

On the other hand, new corporation needs to hire others who will be the partners to build the business. It means, there will be a job field opened and brings a new hope for people who have not get a job yet. This also will let a person learns how to be independent or leader, and teaches us to criticize in facing different problem. A developed country have have lots of private business, which means that the residents tend to start a new business can be an alternative way to improve the economical rate of a country.

In conclusion, start own business brings many advantages toward an individual, public and the government, since it would improve the personality and problem-solving skill of someone, brings new hope to others who cannot find a job for his self and reduce the financial issues in a country. However, start new company is not easy and they have to experience bankruptcy

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: YOUNG PEOPLE SHOULD TAKE A JOB BETWEEN SCHOOL AND UNIVERSITY [4]

Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university.
discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

Some people say that school leavers should find a work before they go in a university. This will bring benefit toward the graduated students, especially in their personal growth and skill qualification. However, work after leaving the school can affect them in some negative ways.

To be part and parcel, work experience is one of the important requirement that young people must to have. Having a job after graduate from school will help them their mature and teaches them to live by their own. Taking japan as an example, where most of students there enroll for a job while they still in senior high school and continue until they leave the school and get in a university. As a result, japan has a good quality of human resources. In addition, most companies believe that work experience is important skill that someone needs as his qualification when taking a job. In fact, someone will have a better opportunity to be accepted in a corporate if they have the related work experience toward the offered position.

However, young people who take a job for a few years before go to university will face some problems. First, too long being in a profession will reduce their desire to continue their desire to continue their study to higher degree. This cannot be called as positive, since young people still need to improve their knowledge which will support them to have another better job for them. Next, for them who take a degree in university after years leave the school for work, have a bigger possibility to face some problems when they back for learn. They tend to forget the basic knowledge which had been taught in school, so they will find it more difficult to learn.

In conclusion, it is justified to say that take a job for a few years between school and university will create some lacks, as it would decrease young people's spirit to continue their study and make it harder for them to back for learn after leave the school for years. On the other side, work skill is needed as an important qualification to enroll for a profession in a company and teach them to live by their own.

Writing Feedback / IELTS2: INTERNET - EXCELLENT MEANS OF COMMUNICATION but not be the best place to find information. [2]

It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Most people are standing on their own think that say internet is a good way to communication while others believe that it is not the best place to discover certain kinds of information. Internet can be used to have a far distance contact, which is very helpful in social life. However, internet had become unsafe place to seek information provided by a lot of not reliable website.

These days and ages, there are so many people who use web connection to keep in touch with others. Its user have growth each day due to the high-technology feature as chatting, calling, even video calling. This causes people depend on it to get through somebody else. As a result toward this, majority of public state it as the best alternative way of communicate instead of mailing or texting.

On the other hand, internet does not only support the communication developing, but also provide the discovering of information. Many people read different articles in several website, both trusted and not trusted URL. There are a lot of links which serve people with issues and news and majority of them are based on someone's opinion. It is not always based on the actual condition. To sum up, the online readers should be wise to accept what they have read, especially if it is not from the website which is capable to share certain kind of information.

In my opinion, public should use features of internet wisely both in communication and information. Internet cannot replace our existence beside your beloved person and there are a lot of other trusted sources of information, such as books and journals, so they have to be careful to choose the source.

In conclusion, it is justified to say that internet has a benefit toward our way to contact someone, while on the other side, we have to put more attention in choose wisely our source when we have to discover certain kind of information in them, since there are a lot of untrustworthy source include there.

Writing Feedback / The sum of airplane's passengers in John F Kennedy, LaGuardia and Newark Airport from 1995 to 2000 [2]

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York city between 1995 and 2000.

The bar graph describe the sum of airplane's passenger in John F Kennedy, LaGuardia and Newark Airport from 1995 to 2000, measured in millions. Overall, it is noticeable that LaGuardia attract the most visitors during the interval time, except in 1997 when John F. Kennedy saw a higher increase than LaGuardia.

The number of travellers who visited John F. Kennedy Airport stood at around 27 millions in 1995, then witnessed fluctuation over the year until reached about 45 millions in the end of timespan. In contrast, there was a sharp rose experienced by LaGuardia Airport along time frame, from approximately 35 millions in first year to virtually 70 millions in 2000, much higher than other two airplanes. Following that, Newark Airport visitors number had increase in first 4-year period between more or less 17 millions and over 40 millions. Afterwards, it evened out at over 40 millions for the following year.

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