Writing Feedback / Cutting down on fossil fuel usage through utilising renewable energy [2]

In some countries, government are encouraging industries and business to move to regional area outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages

The use of renewable energy to generate electricity becomes popular nowadays. while astronomical budget is required to undertake this project, the reduction of fossil fuel is the merit can be gained.

On one hand, the cost of constructing infrastructure to provide renewable energy is unquestionable high as the limitation of technology as well as human resources are rarely available. When the invention of new renewable resources from living organism, such as, plant which can be extracted to gain ethanol to produce electricity are harnessed by community, they need advance machines which occasionally provide by big companies to do the process. Besides, only a few of expertise that can operate those machines and understand the process are presences to be hired to do so. As a result, researchers try to evaluate the effectivity and consequences to build such modern technology that can be used to produce electricity. They have found that producing electricity from renewable energy are 85% output outweigh the old methods, such as, solar combustion, and powerful machines and expertise to operate them are the main concern as they are twice expensive as harnessing from unrenewable energies.

On the other hand, electricity that is produced by non-recycle energies shows more benefits than drawbacks, which are preservation of natural habitats and economic stabilization. As exploitation of resources from lands and sea need to be determined to extract fossil fuels, end of using non-renewable energies will conserve natural environment of mining places where most animals and plants live. In addition, the cost of processing the fossil fuel can be used in other economy sectors to develop certain goals that need urgent calls, for instance, accommodation for homeless and health care insurances. Group of scientists from University of Oxford agree and prove advantages of the prompt through their studies which result that burdened cost of extracting fossil fuels are effectively allocated for other commodities depended in every country needs and most of endangered animals and plants are saved because of stopping this exploration.

In summary, astronomical asset to implement the project is undoubtable, while the beneficial of cutting down used of fossil fuel are outweigh its disadvantages. It is suggested that the cost of building such huge transform machines that need renewable energies to produce electricity can be gained by using the allocate budget from cutting down fuels.

Writing Feedback / Article Summary - Hurricane Matthew Makes Landfall in Haiti [3]

The Hurricane Matthew, which categorize as 4 type storm swept away southwestern coast of Haiti on Tuesday. The wind went directly to north Cuba and eastern coast of Florida with the maximum speed of 145 mph, where bring about 15-25 inches of rain, announced by a meteorologist from U.S. National Hurricane Center in Miami. He predicted that the storm made the East Coast beaches in hazardous condition. This was officially proved by the people who observed the roaring winds and massive waves sweeping the coast beaches in Port Salut. In addition, there was a report victim of tornadoes at least three people.

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Cited on: 2016 16 Oct

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - The relationship at work and with co-workers [3]

The pie charts compare the data from survey between the relationship at work and relationship with working partner in the year of 2005 and 2009. Overall, in the relation at work, there are distinction in data of all type of answers toward the questionnaire between 2005 and 2009, while the differences of replies also recognize in those years.

In the data response of survey of relationship with supervisor, almost three by four of employees are very satisfied in working with their chief, which were shown by increasing of answer "very good" from 61 percent to 65 percent in four years period. As the participants in 2009 loved to answers all the questions in surveys, the replies of 'no answer" was not present in the data, in consequence there would be an increase in all categories answers in 2009, for instance, "don't have supervisor" increases from 1% to 5%.

On the other hand, the response towards relationships with co-workers had various differences in comparison of data between 2005 and 2009, which included the decline and climbed up in number of group of answers, for instance, increase from 63% to 70% of satisfaction working with their partners and decrease in answering "good" from 28% to 25%.

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Writing Feedback / The experience of working and saving money for the higher education - gap year from school benefits [2]

Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university.
Discuss what advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Teenagers get advices by older people to have job before entering university, which does have benefits and drawbacks to their life. The experience of working and store money for the higher education are the major benefits that can be obtained by them, while the competition in getting job and irrelevant salary are the cons.

After the graduation from high school, the students have obligation either to directly go to work or continue to higher education in university. Meanwhile, they should searching and gaining experience before proceed to advanced education which can only be afforded by getting to work. In addition, by prioritizing the work before continue to next level of their education, they can save a lot of money which in turned to be used to pay their studies. It is not a wrong decision to work before their studies, hence it may support their studies later on.

On the contrary, they should also consider the consequences of getting early employment, competition between qualified candidates for job and unfair salaries among employees. As they just finish their high school and search for job, the probability of having occupation become narrow down in consequence of tight qualification. Furthermore, the amount of salary are not equal between them and qualified job seekers. Thus, the number of experiences as well as the educational background are determination of this problem.

In summary, the students who decide to work earlier have to consider the competitors between job hunters and unequal amount of salary they may received later, even though they can still get many job experiences and keep the money for their next stages of education. After all, it is their decision to make.

Writing Feedback / Ted Summary - Technology hasn't changed love. Here's why [3]

Helen Fisher started her presentation by overview of why people do built love. Thus, tendency of male to have several wives are undeniable in every culture as it is common to have and build love to each other. Meanwhile, the technology has helped us to transform the era of loving each other. She conducted research to investigate the brain function during processing love emotion and invented that human brain has ability in controlling sex drive, feeling towards partner and bonding with long-term partner, which combined together to form sexual, romantic and have family senses.

Furthermore, the effect of technology to the love emotion between individual does not changed at all, instead it modified by a modern trend called the concept of paradox of choice. This concept had been identified in the brain and conclude the changes in how brain cope with it, by calling it as cognitive overload. In consequence of cognitive overload, slow love was invented. This could be seen by overlooking the statistics data: over 50 percent of American today do have long-term partners but not marry each other as the terrified consequences are unavoidable. After all, the people do have romantic relation in their life, even only once.

Writing Feedback / The level of satisfaction of workers depends on how they do their job, the occupation is not crucial [2]

Some people say that in order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing it. Other say that other factors are more important.

Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job they really enjoy?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The demand of company to recruit new employees push people to get job as soon as they graduate. Even though some of the people get the right job, the counterparts who do not get proper job still do it with heartfelt intention. That is the reason why I think the level of satisfaction of people doing their work depends on how they do their work rather than getting a proper one.

People start to enter school and finish their education in university so that they can get an occupation which match their interest. They can only be found in professional workers rather than usual employments, for instance, a doctor. Most doctor who already finish their studies in university have to work in the hospital or other medical facilities rather than working in office. Beside, their satisfaction towards their work in the hospital is not relied on their proper position only but the will to do the process of working also necessary.

Moreover, many people who just work and do not wonder whether their work position are good or bad have tendency to focus more in doing their job. For example, uneducated people try to work in any types of jobs so that they can earn money to live. Thus, their satisfaction of earning money rely on their competency to do the work.

In conclusion, people who enjoy their work the most are the one who feel more satisfaction than the people who do their work with the proper occupation. In fact, the uneducated people have shown how the satisfaction depends on the process of doing their work.

Writing Feedback / Nigel Marsh shared his point of view on how to balance between life and work [2]

Ted Summary - Nigel Marsh - How to make work life balance work

Nigel Marsh shared his point of view on how to balance between life and work. At first, he talked about his desperation towards his jobless status, until he got new job to work for. From that time, he learnt about how to properly manage the life as well as work by solving the problem.

To solve the problem, there are 4 tips to be considered: acknowledging the reality of society which means to know the fact about our surroundings, takes the full responsibility towards your own problem as the government and company will not help us, never put your life in commercial cooperation as we are the one who decide to put boundaries of our life, and careful to adjust our time frame to do our activities so that it can be organize well. In addition, he said that approach the balance in balance way, for instance, the organization of time between work and life need balance and not higher than the other.

Writing Feedback / Ted Summary - Hans Rosling - Debunking third world myths with the best stats you have ever seen [3]

Hans Rosling introduced the effective way on how statistics can be implemented to solve the world dilemma. He mentioned that most of the world problems are lack of evidences, which need to be solve using a proper statistic. Furthermore, he said that one of the problem that the world now faced is about life expectancy. The myth of life expectancy of western country is growing can only be shown by comparing the data between them and other countries, for instance, Asia countries. The result showed that western countries steadily increased their life expectancy from 1960 to 2003, while Asian countries caught up behind them.

The other topic that he covered was the myth of distribution of income among all the countries, which grouped into Africa, South Asia, East Asia and OECD or rich countries. The statistic consisted of 3 X-axis, which were 1 dollar/day, 10 dollar/day and 100 dollar/day. It revealed that from 1980 to 2003, there was improvement in distribution of income from 1 dollar/day to 10 dollar/day, which dominated by South and East Asia. Therefore, this proved that almost 60% of the countries were classified into middle income, while OECD and poor countries are equally distributed about 20%.

At the end of his presentation, he hoped that all the data that are still uncovered and inter-connected together with known data, such as, UN and NGO data, can be merged into a single system in which people can access and update

Writing Feedback / Summary Article - Indegenous 'Chola' Clothing Comes to Fashion Week [3]

A Bolivian fashion designer present her local culture through fashion in the spotlight. "Cholas" is known as the local women who wear traditional clothes included hats, handmade macramé shawls, tailored blouse "Pollera" skirts and fascinating jewelry. As its fashion is popular among the poor women, she tried to show the essence of the fashion which can also represent the professional fashion in the spotlight. This is huge deal for her to show it in the international level.

The aim to bring up on the stage was to introduce new ways of "Cholas" as pattern clothing around the world. With the help of international atmosphere, she hoped that the new era of fusion between Bolivia and other countries design can last for long.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2 - Internet invention over the last 30 years [2]

The internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be completely different.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The advance in technology development has changed the era from industrial to modern revolution, which internet becomes the biggest leap invention next to the computer invention. It also changes the way people do their task. In my opinion, the interne has influenced in how do people do their work as well as the way they communicate.

Every invention not always has benefit to the users, similarly to the internet. The era of internet has closed down several occupational sectors and cause social dilemma among people. Firstly, the postman and the telegraph translator are the two jobs that get replaced by it. Furthermore, social issues related to the internet is often correlate with the children, as they tend to use it unwisely without any guidance.

In contrast, internet has several workers to simplify their tasks, which include archiving and sending their documents between companies and seek the latest information that may help their paperwork. Besides, it also provides the modern communication between people, which improve the efficiency of time and budget. It takes less time to send and receive messages over a long distance and have some online meetings between different companies which are the parts of minimizing the budget and time to communicate through internet. In this manner, the internet has changed the way people do their work compared to the past.

To sum up, the internet does influence the way people do their work, which are simplified their work and improve the communicative necessity. Besides, the discharge of employees in some jobs and social dilemma which commonly effect the children nowadays are the effect of internet.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2 - People live in one place and live in many places - which is better? [3]

In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their life time.

What are advantages and disadvantages of both?

People tend to settle in the same place whole their life, while some of them prefer to change one to another. There are several benefits and disadvantages.

Better living facilities and higher income are the main reasons why they change their living places recently. In developed countries, the government provide their citizen with easy accesses to health care, public transports and advanced education system which attract people form developing countries to move. On the other hand, the higher taxes of developed countries make people to consider again whether to stay or not.

The tremendous salary appeals the people to move away from their hometown so that they can afford enough money for their family or start a new family. In contrast, the tight requirement of job and competition among new employees have sorted the people to settle on their hometown, as they already achieve higher status in their office.

Furthermore, people living in one place has several reasons to settle, which are live nearby to their parents and already comfort with their neighborhood. At first, people whom already have raised family want to stay close or with their parents so that their children can have good relation with their grandparents. On the other hand, the children can become introvert to their friends as they feel more comfortable with their families than friends. Moreover, people prefer to stay in friendlier environment, such as their old neighborhood. This is because they think that friendly environment helps their children to increase sense of self-awareness to surroundings, however, the bad influences can easily infect their minds.

Overall, living facilities and higher income re the consideration of people to change their living places, even though the higher taxes can be a troublesome to stay on. In addition, live nearby to parents as well as feel comfortable are the reasons of why people tend to settle in one place only.

Writing Feedback / Ted Summary - Edward Snowden - How we take back the internet [2]

Edward Snowden, who said to be a traitor and hero towards America National Security, had attended in the stage talking about his issue. The dilemma of his action became the controversial in America as he revealed the archives of America government's secret data. As he was part of NSA, he had to work and fully support the government action, however, he has managed his own ways to help America even if he had to be said as a traitor.

His actions of publishing certain classified data to the journalist were his attention as he thought that some of government actions were gone too far. For instance, PRISM program of NSA has broken the law of privacy which may affect the company courtesies as well as securities. This kind of program needs to be erased based on his point of view. Furthermore, the solution has been given by him to the companies through his action so that the companies can increase the encryption of their websites to defend from intruders.

Overall, his intention through controversial actions are aimed to protect and remind America about its action towards other internet users privacy. This step needs to be done to create better future in privacy of accessing internet.

Writing Feedback / Do schools kill creativity - TED Summary - Sir Ken Robinson [3]

Sir Ken Robinson delivered his presentation about how important is creativity. At the beginning, he stated that everybody has interested in education, or formal education. The capacity of young children to learn things are extraordinary compared to adult do as they have enough creativity. In reality, children with full of creativity may forgot them as they grow older. This is because creativity needs to come with original ideas or interest which makes it difficult for adult to do it.

Furthermore, the intelligence itself is based on 2 things: diverse, which demand as to think in every way, not just being short-minded person and dynamic, which supports the originality of the idea. This foundation should become the important notes for the people, who think that academic ability as well as the most useful subjects are the parameter of successful person.