septiadara29
Nov 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing Task I about the number of fish caught and the number of fishing boats. [6]
Hello! I will give you some opinions about your essay.
(1) A breakdown of the number of fish caught and the number of fishing crafts in Westhavensince from 2008 until to 2011 isare shown by the bar charts.
(2) ..., 2011iswas the year with ...
Taking everything into consideration, 2011 experienced the greatest number of fish caught ...
(3) There was a gradual riseofin the number of tuna ...
(4) Although the swordfish caught had an alternate trend between increase and ...
Although the swordfish caught had a shift trend, it witnessed to increase
(5) ... stood at 75 and itwas reached 100 at 2011.
(6) After a year, itwas increased slightly in 2009 by 5 and continued to reached a peak in 2011 by 15.
Hello! I will give you some opinions about your essay.
(1) A breakdown of the number of fish caught and the number of fishing crafts in Westhaven
(2) ..., 2011
Taking everything into consideration, 2011 experienced the greatest number of fish caught ...
(3) There was a gradual rise
(4) Although the swordfish caught had an alternate trend between increase and ...
Although the swordfish caught had a shift trend, it witnessed to increase
(5) ... stood at 75 and it
(6) After a year, it