Holt Educational Consultant
Mar 10, 2024
Undergraduate / "why you are considering transferring and how MIT aligns with your goals" [3]
I hope that you are just asking me to review a draft of your actual response to the question. That you are actually planning on expanding upon these discussion paragraphs and perhaps, adding more paragraphs to the mix that will help the reviewer better understand your overall needs in relation to your desire to transfer to MIT. Do not focus solely and so quickly on the academic shortcomings of your school and strengths of MIT. There needs to be a well rounded discussion in the presentation. Academic, social, and training considerations must be discussed as equal highlight points. There is not much for the reviewer to go on in this presentation. It is too basic and uninteresting. Your discussion points are common and the reasoning, even more so. You need to beef up the overall discussion by expanding on it as best as you can.
I hope that you are just asking me to review a draft of your actual response to the question. That you are actually planning on expanding upon these discussion paragraphs and perhaps, adding more paragraphs to the mix that will help the reviewer better understand your overall needs in relation to your desire to transfer to MIT. Do not focus solely and so quickly on the academic shortcomings of your school and strengths of MIT. There needs to be a well rounded discussion in the presentation. Academic, social, and training considerations must be discussed as equal highlight points. There is not much for the reviewer to go on in this presentation. It is too basic and uninteresting. Your discussion points are common and the reasoning, even more so. You need to beef up the overall discussion by expanding on it as best as you can.