Writing Feedback / A glance at the line graph reveals the numbers of visitors in Brighton known places [2]

The summary overview should contain at least 2 sentences. This single sentence should be divided into 2, with the addition of the information reference list. A total of 3 sentences. Such a presentation would create a truly informative summary paragraphwith proper reference points. The reference list may again be presented in the trending paragraph for discussion outline purposes.

There is an instance of a missing period in the presentation. That shows a lack of final editing on the part of the writer that will lead to a GRA deduction. The writer also limits the punctuation usage to a comma and period. Varied punctuation usage such as a semi- colon, parenthesis, and others would have increased the GRA consideration.

Writing Feedback / Many individuals warn that the vanishing of various species is a major hurdle for humans [2]

Do not sensationalize the restated topic. To use a popular reference, that writers interpretation is fake news when compared to the original. The first sentence does not contain any information similar to the original statement. The second sentence contains some prompt references but misleads the reader as there is an incorrect reference to "major hurdles for humans" as opposed to the original "environmental problem" reference. The prompt topic restatement is a total alteration of the original presentation although the last part relates to the original requirements a bit. Only the second presentation is accurate . The writer does not a personal opinion at all even as the prompt requires such a representation upon interpretation presentation.

When a reference to "some people" and "others" is indicated this is a signal GRA scaring will include pronoun usage along with sentence formation, among others. It clearly indicates a comparative deliberation prior to a personal opinion presentation. The writer does not offer a complete picture of his sentence formation and grammar usage abilities due to these missing reference points.

The personal opinion is also presented as a conclusion , which creates an improper response format. That is the 3rd paragraph presentation. The essay does not have a proper conclusion presented. Overall, the response format is incorrect.

Writing Feedback / Governments should make laws about people's nutritions and food choice. [2]

There is no reference to the government wanting to control people's food choices to direct their health.That is a writer's personal opinion that disqualifies the paraphrase in terms of information accuracy. The writer must use only the existing information in that paragraph. The unwarranted opinion maybe used as a part of the personal opinion paragraph.

Both views are not discussed in the essay and only 4 out of the required 5 paragraph format is present. One point of view is not written based on public perception, it reflects only a general opinion based on the writer's perception. Missing from the presentations are GRA scoring related paragraphs that reflect a public opinion based on proper explanation development using correct pronoun references.

Writing Feedback / Some claim that beside of making a profit, all enterprises are accountable for helping the society [2]

The opinion response signifies an agreement to businesses needing to have a social responsibilty. The first reasoning paragraph does not reflect a related reason to the aforementioned opinion. In fact, it is not a discussion related to the discussion opinion. It will not recieve a scoring consideration.

The second paragraph is ecology related rather than social responsibility focused. Yet another unrelated response has been provided. Social responsibility is based say, on the way a product affects the mental health of a person. The way a product encourages poor people to buy a product because it is in fashion, even if they have to borrow money to do it. The social responsibility is related to the way a business is directly responsible for the way people lead their lives in relation to the product brand.

The writer understands some, but not all of the topic. The lack of understanding led to the irrelevant / incorrect reasoning presentation.

Writing Feedback / Should everyone stop eating meat in order to have a good health? [3]

In the restatement, the writer did not provide the original reason for the provided opinion. It was altered from, "...they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet" to, "...a vegetarian diet is better for their health." Altering the original topic and changing the reason for the succeeding discussion. This portion will recieve a failing score based on an unrelated prompt response.

The actual response is not in the prescribed format either, further adding to the score failure consideration. The original instruction was to write 2 paragraphs that prove the validity of an agreement or disagreement with the topic. While this was responded to in the first paragraph, it was not properly supported in the succeeding paragraphs as the writer changed the response format from agree or disagree to a comparison format based on advantage / disadvantage consideration instead.

The essay cannot get a passing score based on these reasons.

Writing Feedback / CHILDHOOD OBESITY : CAUSES AND SOLUTION (writing part 2) - several reasons [2]

The topic restatement is well developed and does not alter the original topic and concerns. However, simply restating the discussion instructions does not increase the TA score as no straight responses were provided to help show a clear opinion based on English comprehension skills. The questions are meant to provide your discussion summary in relation to the writing instructions. The current paraphrase + response format doesn't maximize the score for that paragraph due to the limited response presentation.

To write a cohesive paragraph, learn to develop connecting sentences or presentations that show a connection between point 1 and point 2. For example:

The unhealthy food consumption, coupled with a sedentary lifestyle creates the perfect combination for obesity. This inactivity...

Such a connected transition will help increase the clarity and connectivity of the paragraph discussion.

In the solutions paragraph, the introduction of controlled screen time is not well done.The reason lacks proper explanation development when compared to the first. This is going to lower the score for this section. Remember what I said above about the need to properly connect the discussion points.

As this is your first essay, you should not be concerned with a score yet. Once you have learned to properly write the essays, then scoring can follow. It is too soon to be score centeredin your writing.

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Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: ADULT LITERACY RATES IN SEVERAL DIFFERENT COUNTRIES AROUND THE WORLD [4]

The word count is too much for a Task 1 reporting essay. The overall essay, as written, would take about 40 minutes to write. That presents a problem when the writing time provided is only 20 minutes for this task. The essay is meant to bea summary report of the main and comparative features of the chart. An analysis is unnecessary as a personal opinion is not required for this part of the witten test.

The summary portion is to be presentend in at least 2 sentences, 3 being ideal. The presentation is a run. on sentence, indicating an early scoring decduction for the examinee. It is difficult to keep track of the compressed information as there are no pause points to allow the leader to understand the essence of the sentence.

The countries are provided in alphabetical order.The comparisons should be done by pair as well (A&B, C&D ). Develop a quick analysis writing style. Completely report and analyze within 175-200 words. Avoid mentioning an actual measurement in the trending statement. Those should always be integrated into the report paragraphs.

Writing Feedback / Nowadays people use bicycles less as a form of transport? Why is that? What can we do to encourage . [3]

The first paragraph has specific information requirements.There are:

- Restate the prompt as close as possible to the original prompt
- Do not add information to the presentation that is not in the original information
- Directly respond to every question provided using topic sentences to create the response outline.

This paragraph failed to meet these accuracy requirements.

Every body paragraph should be clearly explained within 5 sentences. In the 1st body paragraph the writer does not offer clear and informative sentences, regardless of the paragraph length / sentence number.

There are too many unnecessary introduction sentences that fail to produce a coherent and cohesive paragraph. It takes too long for the writer to get to the point. The information needs to be scannable by the examiner.

Keep the paragraphs short but informative. Make sure to check for scoring requirements. The TA and C + C problems have been indicated above. The rest of the errors are GRA related.

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Writing Feedback / Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local foods is more environment [3]

The discussion presented becomes confusing to the reader as the writing format contains several eerrors that affect the clarity and defense of the single opinion presentation in the thesis statement. The opinion presented is that there are more drawbacks than benefits. Therefore, 2 justifications for this opinion are required to prove opinion validity.

The writer instead of strengthening his opinion, showed confusion instead, having given reasons for the acceptability of both points of view. This will result in an incoherent discussion presentation because, why would the writer contradict and weaken his own opinion ? was he confused? Did he misunderstand the discussion question? What led to the discussion error ?

The use of a comparative discussion is what led to this essay not recieving full and passing scoring consideration. The discussion is not clear because the opinion presented became questionable due to the contradicting opinion discussion paragraphs.

Writing Feedback / The diagram details the process of making clothes from plastic bottles. [2]

When the essay has a minimum word requirement, in this case, 150 words, the writer must meet that requirement. Any less and the essay will be unable to meet a passing score because:

- Penalties will be applied for not meeting the minimum word count
- The report / description will be deemed lacking in substance due to the under explained creation process.

The main deductions will be in the TA and C + C sections. These types of essay presentations do not have a passing chance because the writer rushed through the writing and failed to double check the presentation for scoring requirement compliance.

Writing Feedback / The give line graph compares the four different regions in term of the amount of oil consumed [2]

2009 is the starting point. Proper reference was made to this in the presentation. However, 2030 is a projection or estimate which not clearly referred to as such in the summary presentation. There is also a lack of the word " is" in reference to the verb reference for future consumption of U.S. oil.

The writer neglected to reference the equal oil consumption for China, along with Western Europe and Japan in 2015. The same consumption among the nations is predicted to happen between the Middle East and Western Europe and Japan as well in 2025. The analysis presented is not very thorough as it missed these comparison points.

Writing Feedback / The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.- Task 1 [2]

A review of both images does not provide a village name to the Mader.Where did the name come from? The writer must make it clear that the name of the area was provided in the original presentation. The year estimation is incorrect at 27 years, it has only been 26 years. The transformation is already referenced in the diagram as having been completed, yet the writer makes time references as still ongoing. This is an incorrect presentation as it is written in present tense.

The writer shows vocabulary usage confusion based on homonym references for "a company " (a number of individuals assembled or associated together; group of people.) and "accompany" (to be or exist in association or company with). The English language in tricky when it comes to homonyms, which can result in serious LR deductions.

Beyond these errors, the essay makes creative use of both image presentations resulting in an informative and interesting read.

Writing Feedback / IN THEIR ADVERTISING, BUSINESS NOWADAYS USUALLY EMPHASIZE THAT THEIR PRODUCTS ARE NEW IN SOME WAY [2]

There is a difference between the original topic and the topic restatement. The original topic highlights how companies call attention to product improvements. The writer thought this referred to "distinction " from other brands. The original topic did not involve competitor products. That means an incorrect reference was made in the restated topic. The discussion reference was unintentionally changed by the writer. The paragraph also fails to provide a solid reasoning topic to the first question.

The writer also offers a redundant response to the second question. Adverse and repercussion both mean a negative result. One of the two descriptive words should have been chosen for use followed by the word "progression", an alternative to the word "development". The error in word usage in this and other sections will definitely reflect in an LR deduction.

Both paragraphs have plausible reasons presented in relation to the original prompt. The weiter managed to get the discussion back on track for the most part. There is still the problem of the inclusion of competitors in the discussion when there should not be any.

The relevant reasons do not represent well thought out and developed examples and explanations. There and too many reasons presented when a single reason would have sufficed.

The scores are based on the way reasons are fully developed as an explanation. When too many reasons are presented, without proper validation, then the paragraph is under developed in terms of scoring considerations. The C + C score will definitely suffer in the end.

The writer should improve on the points discussed here to improve his scoring chances.

Writing Feedback / Most people no longer remember the original purposes of traditional or religious festivals [3]

This is a single opinion extent essay. There is no room in the choices for you to take a neutral opinion, or for you to side with both. The best combined opinion you can deliver will be in the forum of a properly stated thesis opinion such as:

I disagree with this statement to the extent that there is always room for fun amidst remembrance during cultural holidays.

Note how in the above version, only one clear opinion is supported (disagree) even as I leave room to show that the other opinion has some merit ( to the extent that). The next paragraphs should combine a support for the reasoning opinion ( there is always room... )

The second paragraph of this essay is actually quite good and contains 2 discussion points that would have properly supported the presented opinion. This essay would have scored well had you done that instead.

As of now, the essay will be scored based a position of needing a more opinion reflective discussion. The current presentation is underdeveloped as the first paragraph is not single opinion supportive. There is no proper opinion reflected based on writing directions.

Writing Feedback / Essay about opinions on extreme sports [2]

The prompt paraphrase reflects only one of 2 stated opinions. The writer, having written over 300 words still responded to the essay prompt in a format only partially related to the discussion. The TA score will definitely be a failing one due to the paraphrase and discussion response being format non- compliant. The rest of the discussion shall receive a non-passing score as well as the overall discussion does not reflect the " discuss both points of view " part, just the personal opinion section. The essay will recieve only a partial score for that. The length of the essay does not prove useful due to the prompt deviation in this case. There is no sense in over-ariting when the written text doesn't meet the prompt requirements. The writer failed to compare the validity of his text with the original presentation topic and instructions.

Writing Feedback / Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today's life, while others disagree [2]

In my opinion, this still isn't a 5.5 essay. The prompt paraphrase does not accurately reflect the original discussion points as the first sentence is a statement that reflects personal insight. The paraphrase actually starts in the second sentence. The first paragraph needs no more than 3 sentences reflecting:

- Public opinion 1
- Public opinion 2
- Personal statement

A proper restatement reflects only the provided discussion points. Any additional comments creates an inaccuracy in prompt interpretation.

Due to the provided instructions, the essay should have 3 comparative paragraphs. The 1st 2 shall explain /discuss the logic behind each public opinion. Once the writer has proven that analysis, reflecting a public opinion through proper pronoun usage, the writer may then decide on a personal opinion witten from a first person perspective (GRA related). This essay fails to differentiate the talking points of view, causing confusion for the reader as all paragraphs represent a generally first person opinion , without proper grammar references.

Writing Feedback / It is often argued that learning History is considered to be great of significance [2]

The essay must provide at least 250 written words to avoid pre-scoring deductions. This presentation has not met the prescribed written word requirement. The examiner will have no choice but to apply word number deductions to the score. As this is done in relation to TA accuracy, the exam taker is risking starting the scoring basis from a failed score. As the writing is quite brief and does not follow the discuss both public points before explaining the writer's point of view, the essay cannot recieve full scoring considerations.

The discussion instruction for this type of essay is always comparative in format. To be precise, the writing formula is:

Public opinion 1 + Public opinion 2 = Personal Opinion

The writer must detach himself from the public opinion reasoning for the first 2 parts and instead, clearly show a general analysis (3rd person pronoun) of the public opinion:

The people who believe that... do so because... They appear to support this stance because... While this discussion has value, it is important to analyze the group that counters their opinion.

This opposing group says... These people explain that ... It is not for them to ...

After analyzing both opinions, I have come to the understanding that... That is why, I am of the opinion...

The sample above highlights discussion clarity and cohesivenews between paragraphs. The personal opinion must effectively reflect aqquick comparison reference to the public opinions that led to a concute opinion/support for one of the 2 views.

Writing Feedback / A large number of teens nowadays choose to stay at home and communicate with their pals online [2]

The question that the original prompt asks the writer to respond to is: " Is this a positive or negative development?" It appears that the writer confused the writing instructions for this prompt with another discussion topic. Rather than the supplied prompt, the writer decided to write about a cause and solution essay instead. I am not sure how the confusion happened since the original prompt presentation is very clear:

Nowadays more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. it is a positive or a negative development?

As the task requirements for the discussion were not met, save for the topic restatement, the essay will recieve a failing score based on an unrelated task response. Regardless of the other scoring considerations, the improper discussion consideration is what ultimately reflects more than half the scoring consideration. The essay does not have a passing chance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK2 Where students should learn to be a good person? Home or school? [3]

The essay more than meets the word requirement for the presentation. When it comes to proper response formatting though, the writing proves to not meet the discussion requirements. Rather than presenting 2 public opinion explanations prior to a personal point of view, the analysis is only from the writer's perspective. The discussion instruction for the public views are based on the "some people" and " others" reference.

Each point of view needs to be explained to the reader in a manner that boosts the C + C and GRA scores. Through the use of 3rd party pronouns for the public opinion and 1st person references for the personal opinion. This essay totally avoids that scoring aspect for some reason. The clarity of the explanation is based on properly identifying who owns or proposes it. That is why the reasoning paragraph for this discussion is divided into 3 parts, one for every represented point of view.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK1 The diagrams show causes of land degradation and percentages in three regions. [4]

The information from the images , specifically in the summary overview section are upresented in 2 images. Each image is composed of stand alone information. Therefore, the image introduction must be completed over 2 seperate sentences as well. That will provide an easy to follow description When compared to the current confusing format. One image, one set of related descriptions over 1-2 sentences, That is the clearest and best scoring possible format.

In the second paragraph there is a GRA punctuation concern. A comma was used instead of a semi-colon in reference to the reasons for land loss. The writer is often confused and indicates land degredation as one of the reasons rather than the result. This is a an English vocabulary (LR) situation that affects the clarity of the presentation.

The writer consistently produces run-on sentences that will tremendously lower the final GRA score, also lowering the final score.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: NEGATIVE IMPACTS OF COMPUTER GAMES ON CHILDREN AND SOLUTIONS? [2]

The topic representation in the first paragraph alters the original presentation. The student included several references to data that represents a personal opinion or knowledge rather than a simple rewording of the original. The examiners hate when students do this and often award a failing TA score to the students that do this. The first 2 sentences in the paragraph caused that problem. Then, the student. did not offer direct responses to the thesis creating questions, which posed another TA scoring deduction for that paragraph.

The second paragraph is an empty discussion. It fails to develop an acceptable negative impact. The writer just dida writing excercise in this section by indicating the discussion topic in several ways. All without making a clear discussion point.

The essay is over-developed from the required 4 paragraph format. The reasoning paragraphs should be composed of :

1 negative effect paragraph
1 solutions paragraph

The over- discussion is why the essay had problematic paragraph presentations. Had the witter focused on the clear simplicity of the discussion, he would have written a proper passing essay

Writing Feedback / High income is far more significant than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? [2]

There will be minimal percentage points deductions for the missing 2 words that would have completed the 250 miniman word count. The writer must always be concious of the word count as it relates to pre-sectional scoring considerations. Avoid starting with deductions because these will definitely pull down your TA score. Even the slightest deduction will have an effect on your final sore.

There should not be a contrasting discussion here as there was no comparison discussion indicator in the prompt. The focus of both paragraphs must be only on enhancing your opinion. The contrasting discussion will lower the TA and C + C scores because of the , alteration that led to non-cohesive discussion paragraphs. The writers opinion also became incoherent to a certain degree because of it. The second paragraph is what supports the writers thesis statement. That will recieve a score. The first opposing paragraph will not. I cannot be sure that this essay may receive even the lowest possible passing score at this point because of the improperly developed explanation paragraphs and word count deduction.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: Printed vs Online Newspapers and Books - support your opinion [4]

There is no possibility that this essay can achieve your target score as there is a clear disconnection in terms of hour you understood the writing instructions. Rather than offering a proper extent of agreement or disagreement response, you changed the discussion format to: I will give my opinion on why I think such a scenario is not possible. That response has nothing to do with the discussion instruction.

The response to the question, as well as the response format is not related to the provided instructions. Prompt alterations such as these indicate a weak English comprehension ability and is always given a failing TA score.

Therefore, although there will be some points credited for the other discussion sections, and the reasoning paragraph seems to offer a related explanation to the prompt, the writers opinion is still not properly indicated anywhere, in relation to the required response format. That is still a major TA problem that relates directly to the C + C score. The only score this essay can receive is a failing one as it failed in a major scoring consideration section, causing a ripple effect in the other scoring aspects.

Writing Feedback / The line graph represented how many units of electricity generated from three primary energy sources [3]

The proper reference is "The line graph represented the kilowatt hours used by the millions..." rather than, " how many units of electricity " as that is not an informative reference that adds to the important summary points of the paragraph. That point of correction does not take away from the informative nature of the succeeding sentences in the summary paragraph.

In the second paragraph, the base or starting measurement should be indicated to lie the increase to a baseline, as all measurements of this nature requires. The graph also indicates an equal measure reference to coal and natural gas in 1990 which was overlooked in the analysis presentation. There is limited numerical data shared in the overall discussion that made the essay questionable to the reader. It lacks in information that would've been helpful in keeping the reader informed based on the image presentation.

Writing Feedback / The provided line graph depicts the marriages and divorces figures in the United Kingdom - IELTS 1 [3]

The measurement type is an integral part of the summary as this indicates the measurement basis for the graph. The reference to measurement by the thousands should have added to the numerical clarity of the " divorce figures " indicated.That is where "by the thousands" should've been mentioned. The first sentence in the trending statement contained 2 opposite information pieces. That should have been divided into 2 seperate sentences rather than being connected as a run-on.

The same runproblem on issue exists in the second paragraph. The clarity off the information presented is affected when a sentence contains too many words. The thought process and information presentation becomes more difficult to follow. Meet the minimum word count using direct data presentation instead. The last paragraph, contains a cleaver presentation due to individual and more direct information presentation.

Writing Feedback / Smoking is on the increase among young people. Discuss the problem. [3]

The first half of the essay is a direct prompt deviation. Information about the member of young smokeus are not indicated in the original prompt. The finst discussion point in relation to the reasons for this problem was changed to problems smoking causes. The essay, at this point, is presenting a response unrelated to the task. In relation to that, an irrelevant paragraph discussion was presented soon after. These are the presentation points that will lead to a failed preliminary score for this essay. These will also be the reason for the final overall failing score of the presentation.

It is important that the discussion presentation is never changed from the original course/ content. The student is scored on his ability to understand and follow English instructions. The writer followed one out of two discussion instructions. The writer must always follow both instructions and offer a paraphrase without adding unsupported data (not in the original prompt).

Writing Feedback / 'always a journey, but not a destination' - a debate whether one's success depends on luck or not [2]

The essay is subject to a tremendously low, definitely failing score. I will save you a public embarassment here by not mentioning the actual score. Just know that not writing a 250 word essay is where the failure started. There are only 224 words presented here. The improperly quoted text is another reason, along with the confusingly worded response sentence. The use of the word " rubic" doesn't make sense. It does not relate to the original prompt. The opening paragraph problems are enough evidence as to why the overall grade will be failing.

The essay presentation must never make reference to a religion or divine belief of any sort. The reasons must be based on commonly held opinions and general considerations. The examples provided are even further removed from the evidence requirements. The essay totally changed from the original requirements. These are the reasons why this will be a failing essay in an actual test.

Writing Feedback / Driverless vehicles - IELTS TASK 2 - TECHNOLOGY [4]

The essay calls for a 2 reasoning paragraph presentation. It does not require an agreement paragraph because an agreement response was not required in the original prompt.That paragraph is useless and will not receive any points since it is irrelevant to the discussion. Only the next 2 paragraphs which reflect the positive point of view will be scored.

The relevant paragraphs show a clear knowledge based on personal and public information. The discussions are informed and well support the opinion presentation. The use of the conjunction "because" at the start of a particular sentence in this presentation shows a GRA will unfamiliarity. Connecting words are never used to start a sentence in an academic discussion. That is allowed only in informal writing settings.

The arguement of the winter is useless in the concluding summary. Again, that is an unnecessary inclusion as it is not a discussion target nor consideration.

Letters / University of Skoltec as a Master student - Motivation letter for Master scholarship [2]

The motivation in relation to your research interests should be the focal point of your letter. Consider how, overthe course of your professional career, certain events happened that led you to this patti. Discuss how those experiences served to motivate this final decision. The second paragraph is an S O P required presentation. Take that out of this essay and transfer it to the S O P. Develop the university choice and curriculum paragraph to your study targets as a researcher. That paragraph requires more relevant explanation development in relation to your current career path leading into your becoming a researcher. The essay provides the basic requirements of a motivation letter with plenty of room for improvement.

Writing Feedback / Some say that pupils should be required to join in voluntary work in order to raise living standards [3]

The prompt paraphrase section is an incomplete representation of the original. The second public point of view was not presented as a part of the opinion considerations. It should have been presented to prove that the writer completed a thorough analysis of the discussion points prior to representing the measured response to the question. While the paragraph presentation is on point and effective, the lack of the second option presentation is what made it an under-explained restatement.

The 2 reasoning paragraphs properly developed a varied supporting statement based on the writer's point of view. The first reason developed the analytical standpoint of the writer. This showed a coherent thought process that led to the point of view presentation. However, the paragraph is missing a transition sentence as the third representative sentence. This would have helped the paragraph meet the 3 - 5 sentence requirement for the paragraph and offered a smooth transition / change of topic introduction in the succeeding paragraph..

The example paragraph and explanation is solid and helps to connect the 2 discussion paragraphs. The cohesiveness in the presentation is highly evident. This is a well developed essay, provided the examiner will ignore the early presentation error. Regardless of that error, even the GRA issues do not affect the clarity of the overall presentation. This may just be a passing score essay .

Writing Feedback / TODAY MANY CHILDREN SPEND A LOT OF TIME PLAYING COMPUTER GAMES AND LITTLE TIME ON SPORTS. WHY IS IT? [2]

There is a repeated word meaning based on synonym usage in the first paragraph. Youngsters and children refer to similar age groups. since "children'' is the keyword used in the presentation, it should not have been used in the restatement. Rather, the word youngsters alone should have been used to refer to an alternative word representation. It must also be pointed out that a "negative change" does not have the same meaning as a negative development:

Development- noun; a significant consequence or event

Change- verb; to transform or convert

The error in word usage will negatively affect the LR and GRA score.

The writer uses effective reasoning in the paragraphs. That is not to say that the reasons are consistently well developed because these are not. In every paragraph, the second topic always lacks in terms of a fully developed explanation. This affects the coherence and clarity of the explanation. It is always better for the final score to have a single well explained reason in a paragraph than to ruin it with a second weakly explained reason alongside it.

Additional deductions will apply for the sudden change in the writer's . in the concluding summary. It went from;


at the start to;


The discussion and opinion reference totally changed in the end.

Writing Feedback / Discuss both views about Fortune-telling and superstition [2]

It appears that the student created an original topic for the Task 2 discussion. This prompt cannot be sourced from the standard materials and sources. It also has confusing discussion instructions as it combines 3 different response formats in one essay:

- discuss both views
- extent response
- advantage V. disadvantage

A proper task 2 essay prompt will provide a writing instruction based solely on 1 of the 3 discussion formats. Due to the conflicting discussion requirements, I will be unable to proceed with a review of this paper. Kindly develop another essay based on a properly witten original prompt. The writer does not need to make one up as there are countless free prompts available online. A proper assessment can only be completed when a properly instructed essay is developed and presented for review.

Writing Feedback / Today many countries import food from different parts of the world. Is it positive or negative [2]

The use of the word " consequences" is incorrect in the first paragraph.This is improper ' word usage based on lexical meaning:

Consequences - root word: consequence; noun; the effect, result, or outcome of something occurring earlier: The accident was the consequence of reckless driving; implies a negative result.

The word should not have been used at all in that sentence as it is both evidence of incorrect word usage and grammar inaccuracy.

While the essay presents several strong reasons representing both sides, that was all the writer made an effort to do. There is no evidence of logic and reasoning presented in defense or support of the ideas provided. The essay does not clearly develop the believability of any provided discussion points through any explanations or examples. The essay does not meet the discussion requirements as expected.

Writing Feedback / Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study [5]

Do not make any claims about the truth of a particular stance in the essay. The presentation does not require such a reference. Neither is it a discussion requirement. All that does is change the actual discussion topic and opinion presentation method. The essay now does not meet the discussion requirements as required. All of these led to a failing TA score for the essay. Kindly avoid over- exaggerating the response as well. A simple statement of :

This may be considered a positive development

would have sufficed as the single opinion presentation. As there was no extent response indicator in the original presentation, adding such a sentiment to your response will not be helping your score as it does not factor into the scoring consideration.

The negative discussion in this essay is another non-scoring presentation. The scores will only be provided for the paragraph that offers a supporting statement to the given discussion. Since only one supporting reason is provided, this presentation will receive a score based on an incomplete reasoning presentation.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - registrations of trucks, taxis, and buses in the US between 1970 and 2010 [2]

We do not access images that are not located on our seiner due to software and security concerns. As a warning, the forum cannot be held liable for any damage possibly incurred by a user who accesses an exterior site. The essay will be reviewed based on general considerations.

Remember that this report is being written for a specific audience. Therefore, concrete image references are required. A graph can mean and describe any measurement image. The reader will be looking for specific image identities since the measurement comparisons are reliant on the type of measurement image used. It must be a report compliant image based on the target audience.

The report may not be presented as a single paragraph. The required format a task I essay is a 3 format paragraph analysis. Each aspect of the graph must be presented in a proper comparative paragraph to meet the analyze and compare where relevant reporting requirement of the instructions provided.

Writing Feedback / The maps show some changes on the island without and with the development of new infrastructures [3]

The image number indicator is an integral part of this presentation for summary clarity. Note the clarity difference for the reader in the following :

The maps illustrate changes...

2 maps have been provided that illustrate changes ...

The first one is a vague general reference. It poorly informs the reader. The second one clarifies the number of comparative images in relation to the discussion requirement.

Superflous word fillers do not add any substance to the sentence in terms of overall scoring. Avoid the use of phrases like;


This can be ommitted and / or avoided. Direct image references work best in terms of scoring potential.

The rest of the presentation is clear and detailed. It shows a passing score potential.

Writing Feedback / [WRITING TASK 2] MOST COUNTRIES WANT TO IMPROVE THE STANDARD OF LIVING THROUGH ECONOMIC DEVELOPMENT [2]

Avoid making claims of truth in a Task 2 essay. That is because there are 2 opposing opinions constantly present in every discussion. Neither opinion is fully correct , nor totally wrong either. That is why attestations are never a part of the discussion requirements of this task. Such actions change the discussion focus of the essay which, based on discussion requirements, should only be written from a comparative A/D stance. There is a GRA issue in the essay as well. "Believed" implies that you once supported an idea but not anymore. If the writer still believes in the same opinion , then the presentation should be in the present active form of "believe".

The first reason presented is good. It supported the writer's reason for the most part. It lost its relevance when the second reason was presented as this was no longer leased on an economy related reason. The with should not have included that topic in the paragraph to preserve what would have been a strong C + C score.

The second paragraph is even further removed from the prescribed discussion topic. This caused a total collapse of the discussion and in the process, the failure of the essay presentation.

Scholarship / Turning Points in My Life - GKS Undergraduate Personal Statement [2]

The scholarship application and appropriate written interview requirements will not be available until September - October. The information requirements tend to vary per application season so I cannot assure you that this essay will be useful at this point. I can however, comment on the basic content.

Ther actual content is not remarkable. There are no undergraduate accomplishments in relation to Creative Writing. The presentation is not previous prompt compliant due to the lack of relevant information. The weakest point is the reason for studying in Korea. The choice of reasons will depend upon the application type (university or embassy). At this point, the essay needs be more information specific. Right now, it is just a general narrative, which doesn't help the application consideration.

I strongly advice that you wait for the new prompts before revising the essay. That way you can correct it based on actual application requirements. Right now, I am just . you an idea of the weaknesses in this version. Wait for the new written questions before you revise this istay.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Discuss both views: IS MATHEMATICS REDUNDANT? [3]

The essay is a bit over the ideal 300 word maximum essay. The writer tried, but failed to portray a higher than average level of English vocabulary by using misplaced advanced jargon to the point were some sentences presented were already gibberish. The task 2 essay is scored on the proper way a student uses everyday English words in a discussion.

The task 1 essay is the one that normally benefits from more profession related word usage. The task 2 essay suffers score-wise with every incomplete thought presentation, every incomplete sentence written, every word used improperly (out of actual meaning / word definition). This essay unintentionally committed these mistakes.

It over-intellectualized an otherwise simple discussion and confused the reader over several sentence presentations. It is wordy but not properly developed in terms of thought presentation or writing.

Undergraduate / "Is he going to be a theater major?" - Common App Personal Essay [3]

It is unclear if the student wrote the essay based on prompt 1 or 7. As each prompt has a different focus, it will be difficult to assess the work in terms of relevance to the prompt. A clear prompt reference would have been helpful.

Don't be Ethan Hunt. Be original. Though the theatrics depiction shows the student's individuality, the merging off the 2 personalities into one is important. That is what creates the unique individual. The actor who thives as an engineer and vice versa.

True, the essay is unique, but limits the stand out appeal of the student. Perhaps a reference to engineering merging with acting can be provided to heighten the stand out effect. Do not just stand out. Aim to be unique by being a potential student of complex character and abilities instead.