Holt Educational Consultant
Apr 7, 2021
Graduate / "Accessibility" - Personal statement for MSc in HPPF in LSE [2]
Your discussion is heavily focused on the reasons why you want to study MSc in Public Health. You failed to properly develop an explanation in relation to why you chose the school and how it fits into your career objectives. This is a 4 paragraph essay that should be equally focused on the 3 discussion points (one per paragraph) and a convincing appeal paragraph at the end. Revise the essay to show an equal discussion presentation for each question. Do not over focus on a single topic because that is not the only consideration for the reviewers. Your reason for taking the course is only 1 part of a 3 part discussion consideration.
Your discussion is heavily focused on the reasons why you want to study MSc in Public Health. You failed to properly develop an explanation in relation to why you chose the school and how it fits into your career objectives. This is a 4 paragraph essay that should be equally focused on the 3 discussion points (one per paragraph) and a convincing appeal paragraph at the end. Revise the essay to show an equal discussion presentation for each question. Do not over focus on a single topic because that is not the only consideration for the reviewers. Your reason for taking the course is only 1 part of a 3 part discussion consideration.