justivy03
Feb 24, 2016
Letters / LETTER OF MOTIVATION FOR RWTH, AACHEN ADMISSION [8]
Prince, I believe the revised version is better than the original one.
I'm grateful that our insights here on EF are helping you.
Now, as much as I would like to give you a go signal in submitting your essay, I believe
you can still enhance it, I would like to share my remarks with the focus on the last two
paragraphs of your essay.
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-I am not the best in world, but( never think less of yourself ) Armed with the useful
- Ican certainly prove the worthiness that I am upholding. Afterwill prove my worth and after Graduating
- in June, 2016 Iam absolutely ready to join in winter semester in October of same year, and have no doubt in seeing myself as the part of RWTH Aachen University. I hope to hear from you in the near future.will follow through with my education and RWTH Aachen University will be a great addition to my preparation for a great career in the future.
There you have it Prince, I hope I was able to help.
Prince, I believe the revised version is better than the original one.
I'm grateful that our insights here on EF are helping you.
Now, as much as I would like to give you a go signal in submitting your essay, I believe
you can still enhance it, I would like to share my remarks with the focus on the last two
paragraphs of your essay.
- The
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- After completing my masters,
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- most
- based universities
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- I
- in June, 2016 I
There you have it Prince, I hope I was able to help.