justivy03
Jun 22, 2015
Scholarship / My first essay to apply for scholarships! (Graduating 2016) - Why i deserve X scholarship? [4]
Tiyeda, first of all WELCOME to EssayForum...we're glad to have yet another member of the forum..
Now, writing an application for scholarship is never easy, however if this is what you want then we will be here to help out.
-I need thisThis scholarship because I know how much my mom wants me to succeed, that's all she's ever wanted from me.will be my key to advance and succeed in life, it will also be my proof to show my parents, especially my mom, that I can succeed in life.
-What girlWho would notdoesn't want to be able to run to her dad if a guy breaks her heart?
- It tears me apart inside, for the longest time I thought I did something wrong, always blaming myself.
- Since my mother has lupus heknowknows that stress is a key component in causing it to flare and that is exactly what he is trying to do.
- Right nowin my life my motivation is on making my mom proud, giving her a peace of mind, I hate to see her struggle.
- She is too good of a person for me not to dothethat one thing that she asks of me, which is getting the most education I can and becomingbecome a registered nurse.
- But of course I'll only find outthe authenticthat magnificent reaction I will receive when that day comes.
So there you go, Tiyeda, I made a few corrections, however, I have to be honest with you, the points that the institution would seek in order for them to grant you the scholarship is not only due to your current family and financial status, they will look more into your academic standing and what you can contribute as a student.
I suggest re- writing your application with the notes and points I have given.
Good luck and let us know if you need further assistance.
Keep writing
Cheers!!!
Tiyeda, first of all WELCOME to EssayForum...we're glad to have yet another member of the forum..
Now, writing an application for scholarship is never easy, however if this is what you want then we will be here to help out.
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- It tears me apart inside, for the longest time I thought I did something wrong, always blaming myself.
- Since my mother has lupus he
- Right now
- She is too good of a person for me not to do
- But of course I'll only find out
So there you go, Tiyeda, I made a few corrections, however, I have to be honest with you, the points that the institution would seek in order for them to grant you the scholarship is not only due to your current family and financial status, they will look more into your academic standing and what you can contribute as a student.
I suggest re- writing your application with the notes and points I have given.
Good luck and let us know if you need further assistance.
Keep writing
Cheers!!!