Writing Feedback / Logging industry can affect forests by loss of water, nutrients, and shelter for living organisms [3]

IELTS SUMMARY 1 ENVIRONMENTAL IMPACTS OF LOGGING

Logging industry supplied for an array of products. However, this can harm environment like habitat loss, and climate change. Logging industry can affect the forest like loss of water, nutrients, and shelter for plants, animals, and microorganism.

logging can affect on soil. For example, the rainforest floor, which have leaves and branches intercepting heavy rainfall to prevent soil damage, the roots also prevent erosion. Trees also helps maintain a steady water and the shade inhibits the growth of algae. Logging lead to oxygen depletion, killing fish and other wildlife. Tree also against air pollution with remove carbon dioxide and filter pollutants from air. Deforestation is responsible about one-fifth of carbon dioxide emissions worldwide.

Protecting forest can be done with responsible logging and ensure biodiversity and habitats are protected. Responsible logging also prevent global warming and climate change for future generations.

Writing Feedback / Birds abilities to navigate through very long distance has fascinating observers for centuries [2]

IELTS SUMMARY 2 BIRDS MIGRATION

Many kinds of animal travel each year from cold to warmer place to breed and survive, and probably bird migration are the most interesting from other animals. The most common of bird migration is travelling to higher latitudes during the warm season and returning to lower latitudes for nesting and feed the young. During migration birds fly for a limit period, probably about six to eight hours and take a distance about several hundred miles. However, some birds undertake much longer flights when their routes include large amount of water. For example, some bird regularly crossing the Gulf of Mexico and flight continuously up to 1000 miles.

How bird ability to navigate through very long distance has fascinating observer for century. Researchers found that migratory bird have some ability to navigate through extraterrestrial object like stars and sun or geographic features like mountain or sea coast.

Writing Feedback / Taklimakan desert occupy about 337.600 square km of northwestern China [3]

Plant Life in The Taklimakan Desert

Taklimakan desert occupy about 337.600 square km of northwestern China and consist of sand dunes up to 250 m tall, daily temperature up to 68 F and lack of water. But some plant form has developed unique mechanism that adapted to extreme temperature and high-salt soil. For example, desert plants like Euphrates poplar has an extensive root that allow to absorb water far away. Otherwise, P. euphratica have ability to opening and closing the stomata for minimize evaporation and conducts photosynthesis. And Tamarisk plant, have high tolerance for salty conditions and produces its own salt for repellent another plant.

Although under extreme condition, desert plants have some benefits for ecosystem. For example, desert plants like Euphrates have extensive root and stabilizing sand dunes and preventing erosion. Otherwise, desert plants also becoming home and protect some animals in the desert from predator or extreme temperature.

Writing Feedback / Nowadays, people assume that muscles are the main factor which determine athlete performance [5]

IElTS SUMMARY 4 Peripheral Vision in Sports

Until up recently, people assumed that muscle are the main factor which determine athlete performances, but it proved that athlete's visual ability have the main role for athlete performance. When athlete performing sports, they must keep track as much as possible while performing physical maneuvers and tracking fast objects. Otherwise, athlete's body position must integrate with eye movement to assist in balance. Other aspect like environment also contributes to athlete visual sharpness like sufficient lightning, non-confusing uniform color combinations.

Athlete's rate of blinking also influenced their vision, when athlete blinking about two and a half seconds every minute and more than that if athlete is anxious. Blinking cause rapid blur that happen when athlete's eyes move in and out of focus on specific objects. For anticipation, more practice will serve the athlete well, in many ways.

Writing Feedback / The oldest form of circus has existed in Roman Empire around sixth century [2]

IELTS SUMMARY 5 HISTORY OF THE CIRCUS

The oldest form of circus has been existed in Roman Empire around sixth century B.C. Circus Maximus was public entertainment at that moment containing chariot races, gladiator fight, and exhibits of exotic animals. When Roman Empire fall, the circus reduced to small member include performer and animal trainer and travel around the world.

When the Dark Ages, the circus went from one village to another village and entertained people. However, in the Dark Ages leisure time was extremely rare, but people still have few opportunities to enjoyed circus performance. Modern circus was founded by an Englishman named Philip Astley during late 1700s. Philip was invented some performance like stunt riding in the horseback and performed in a circus ring. After Astley's death, the circus already known in America during the early 1800. Joshua Brown introduced portable tents in 1825 and used by modern circus until now.

Writing Feedback / Europe is the pioneer in underground railways system. Comparison. [3]

IELTS SUMMARY 6 Major Subways of Europe

Europe is the pioneer in underground railways system as public transportation and London was built the first subway in the world which opened in 1863. At this time, train still used steam engine and the smoke must be released through the vent in the surface. Otherwise, in 1825 London was build pedestrian tunnel under the Thames River which is the first underwater tunnel in the world.

Paris also built a subway to compete London and opened when Olympic held in Paris in 1900. Paris metro is known for its beauty which decorated with mosaic, sculptures, paintings, and innovative doors and walls. After that Moscow built underground railway in 1935 which filled with artworks like statuary, painting, and mosaic.

Except for transportation, underground railways have many advantages. For example, subway was used as bomb shelters when World War II, and Moscow subways also was used as military headquarters.

Writing Feedback / Cars have been used as public transportation since early twentieth century [3]

IELTS SUMMARY 7 Electric Cars Around the Globe

Cars have been used as public transportation since early twentieth century, even though gas-powered cars polluted urban area with exhaust and consumed gasoline which is irreplaceable resources. But technology advance offer the new alternative for eco-friendly public transportation such as electric car which is more quitter and don't produce greenhouse gases. Many major brands like Mitsubishi, Nissan, Toyota, and Mercedes Benz produce electric cars and distributing around the world.

Electric cars were invented in early twentieth century even though it didn't gained much popularity because they were not able to travel the required distances and their slow speed. But now, the most advance sport electric car that can travel 300 miles on a single charges and accelerate from 0 to 60 mph in3.7 seconds. Electric cars are the new answer for urban life problem like air pollution and oil price rising.

Writing Feedback / TED Summary Peter Singer: The Why and How of Effective Altruism [4]

Peter Singer stated that 6.9 million children died each year in 2011 caused by preventable disease, while most people spent their money for something they didn't really need like vacation or buy a new car. Peter Singer introducing effective altruism that is movement which promoting effective and rational donation. For example: rather than spend 40.000 dollars for trained a guide dog for one blind people in America it will be better if spend 40.000 dollars for cure blind people in developing country which each people cost about 20 up to 50 dollars.

Peter Singer also stated that people should have moral obligation to help other people even though they are far away from where we live. Physical distance, race or nationality difference didn't have morally relevance as reason for not help other people.

Writing Feedback / Hula dance takes an important role in Hawaiian culture as a part of ritual in honor of gods. [2]

IELTS SUMMARY 8 Hula Dancing In Hawaiian Culture

Hula dance takes an important role in Hawaiian culture as a part of ritual in honor of gods. Although the origin of Hula dance can be track in Hawaiian mythology even though in reality, it is impossible to know precisely when hula dance was firstly appeared. In the eighteenth century Hula dance was discouraged as a result of the contact with European culture, but, King David Kalakaua reviving hula dance in the late nineteenth century. Later, in the 1960s modern hula dance are developed to attract more tourist.

Difference between traditional and modern hula dance is based on the atmosphere. When traditional hula is an energetic dance with accompaniment of chants and the beating of drums, modern hula dance is slower and graceful with flowing guitar and ukulele music. Eventually, hula dance more recognized outside Hawaii island and becoming the icon of Hawaii island.

Writing Feedback / The nursing shortage is still a problem in both developing and developed countries [3]

IELTS Summary 9 Nurse Migration

There are many nurses today than any time in history, but nursing shortage still a problem in both developing and developed countries. In developing countries, many qualified nurses working abroad to wealthier countries to get better salary and better quality of life while at their home nurse position go unfilled or just nurses with rudimentary training. In developing countries some patients go untreated not because drugs are unavailable but because there are not enough nurses to care them.

In developed countries like Europe and North America health care services are largely needed because of largely amount of elderly. Otherwise, underinvestment in nursing education cause decline of qualified nurses for future needs. For example, nursing school refuse many qualified applicants because of their shortage of nursing faculty. Developed country need to invest in nursing education and focus on retaining and rewarding nurses appropriately.

Writing Feedback / TED Summary Why I Read a Book a Day? By Tai Lopez [3]

Tai Lopez shared his experience for everybody who pursued a good life which divided into 4 things: happiness, wealth, love, and health. The first are spend your 33% on your life around people lower than you and help them to find happiness, another 33% around people same level as you to become your friends, and the last 33% around people higher than you to become your mentor.

But some great mentors didn't live forever, and you must learn from their books. Book will help people to overcome their problem and help people to reach their good life. Tai Lopez want every people treating books like a friend, he said: "you must read it every day over and over and imagine yourself as a goldminer who just looking for that one nugget and then put it back on the shelf."

Writing Feedback / TED Summary Jamie Oliver Talk About Obesity and Food [2]

Jamie Oliver stated that one of four peoples in United States will die because of what they eat every day. In America the biggest death factor is caused by heart disease which is diet-related disease. As a chef, Jamie Oliver challenge people to stop eating highly-processed food and start to cook and enjoying fresh food. 30 years ago, many foods available are local and fresh but now, big companies make people far apart from the "real" food and offering fast food which added many additive ingredients and sugar.

Ensuring what children eats in the school also important things to do. In America, average kids eating fast foods in the school every day which is not fresh and not enough vegetables. It is important to control the children about what they eat and teach them to eat vegetable.

Writing Feedback / Overall, there are four kind of meat noted in the graph: Beef, Pork, Broilers, and Turkeys. [2]

U.S MEAT & POULTRY CONSUMPTION PER CAPITA, BONELESS, BY SPECIES

The graph presents meat and poultry consumption in US

Overall there are four kind of meat: Beef, Pork, Broilers, and Turkeys. It is important to notice that between 1955 and 1976 beef have the highest consumption with 90 pounds per person per year. During the same period broilers consumption arose with 30 pounds per person while pork consumption were fluctuated between 50 and 40 pounds per person and turkey also fluctuated with 10 pounds per capita each year.

Between 1976 and 2012 the amount of beef consumed had decreased with 50 pounds, but broilers consumption had doubled since 1970 and arose to 55 pounds per capita. Meanwhile pork consumption were not have significant changes with 40 pounds per capita and turkey also fluctuated with 10 pounds per capita.

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Writing Feedback / Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015 and predictions for 2025 [2]

The chart presented Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015 and predictions for 2025. Overall, the meat products had the lowest percentage of incomes and decrease gradually between 2005 and 2015 while dairy product had the highest percentage of incomes and increase gradually between 2005 and 2015.

There are 2 categories of product: Meat Products, and Dairy Products and 1 kind of service: International tourism. It is important to noticed that meat product had the highest income in 2005 with 4 billion USD but decrease 0,5 billion in 2015 and will be predicted decreased 0,5 billion in 2025. Meanwhile dairy products had 5 billion USD in 2005 and reach a high of 8 billion USD in 2015 and will be predicted decreased 0,5 billion USD in 2025. And the other hand, from service incomes, the international tourism had 6,5 billion USD in 2005 and increased steadily at 7 billion USD in 2005 and will be predicted still increase steadily at 8 billion USD.

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Writing Feedback / TED Summary : Let's Teach for Mastery by Sal Khan [11]

Salman Khan criticizes the traditional academic model when the teacher gives many homework to students and teacher judge the student based on the score they get. In real life, the traditional academic model is unacceptable. For example, when a contractor gives an order to workers for build a foundation, and he said "do it as you can" and when the workers did not give the best result the contractor just give a bad score to them.

Salman Khan stated that traditional academic model constructs a pyramid society, while in a base of the pyramid there are many people for human labor purposes. In the middle of the pyramid is consist of information processing or bureaucracy class, and top of the pyramid are consist of capital owner or entrepreneurs. In communication era, many people have access to information but the majority didn't participate in technology. Meanwhile, just fewer people know how to operate a technology or do something aspirational.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Article Writing Task 1 Refugee Fence and Solar Plant May Wipe Out One of the Rarest Mammals [2]

Last week, Hungarian conservationist started to relocate Vojvodina mole rats as part of an effort to relocate them to safety. Vojvodina mole rats are very rare species with around 400 individuals left in the world and inhabit only in Hungary and the province of Vojvodina in Northen Serbia. Hungarian government are planned to build a new solar power plant outside the Kiskunsagi National Park where some of mole rat population live.

Otherwise, Hungarian government erected a fence to deter refugees from entering the country. The fence could physically isolate the mole rat population in half and will speed up its extinction. To overcome this problem, the rangers already build an artificial burrow half a meter below the surface. meanwhile, conservationist are lobbying the government to restrict development of the solar plant on the site of the largest mole-rat population.

Writing Feedback / The water usage in California had the biggest percentage in the residential sector [2]

The charts present water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world. It is important to notice that water usage in both San Diego County and California had the biggest percentage in the residential sector. Meanwhile, the water usage in industry sector had the lowest percentage in both territories

Overall there are 2 territories: San Diego and California and will be the rest of the world. In San Diego County, the residential sector had the significant proportion with 60% or about three-fifth from total water usage, and the agriculture sector had a minority with 17% or just less than a fifth from total water usage. Meanwhile, in California, the residential sector also had a significant proportion of 39% or about more than a third of total water usage and the agriculture sector had a minority with 28% or about more than a quarter of total water usage.

On the other hand, the agriculture had the significant proportion of worldwide sectors with 69% or more than two-thirds of total water usage in the world. And, the residential sector only had a minority with 8% or less than one in ten of total water usage in the world.

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Writing Feedback / Five Wild Lionesses grow a mane and Start Acting Like Males [2]

Five lionesses found in Botswana have grown a mane and are showing male-like behaviours. One is even roaring and mounting other females. This anomaly has started studying by Geoffrey D. Gilfillan at the University of Sussex in Falmer UK, and he stated that lioness is mostly female in behaviour and she also has some male behaviours, such as increased scent-marking and roaring.

Luke Hunter, president and chief at global wild cat conservation explained that a maned lioness is caused by increased level of testosterone and high levels of testosterone due to a problem in her ovaries. While some manned lioness is observed mating, none of them became pregnant. The test revealed high levels of androgens such as testosterone in females. Hunter says that must be a genetic component in this population underlying the phenomenon.

Writing Feedback / TED Summary: The Prison of your Mind by Sean Stephenson [2]

Sean Stephenson is a disabled person but he proved that physically weakness is not an excuse for not influenced many peoples. First, he taught them to never believe every prediction that doesn't empower them, Sean himself predicted by many doctors that he would be dead within 24 hours, and now he sit and inspired many peoples.

Second, never pitying yourself, he said pity is the most dangerous drugs in the world that would totally frozen your potential. Being disable does not mean you are literally disable, but the real disability is refusal to adapt. Adaptable in every conditions give many chances for you to learn with new environment and meet other people. The last, you must bullying yourself with many negative predictions, opinions that other people tell you. The best thing to do is love yourself in every conditions and love everyone because everybody need to be loved

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 Proportion of Pupils Attending School Between 2000 and 2009 [2]

The table presented the comparison of Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009. It is important to notice that almost every school attendance had decreased gradually between 2000 and 2009 except community school which increased gradually between 2000 and 2009

In 2000 Voluntary-controlled Schools had the biggest percentage of school attendance with 52% or more than a half of total school attendance. The second is Grammar School with 24% or less than a quarter of total school attendance. The last, specialist Schools and Community Schools had the lowest percentage of school attendance with 12% or less than a fifth of total School attendance.

In the other hand, in 2009 Community Schools had increased significantly with 58% or more than a half of total school attendance. And Voluntary-controlled Schools had decreased gradually with 20% or a fifth of total school attendance, Grammar School also decreased gradually with 12% or less than a fifth of total school attendance. In the end, Specialist School had the lowest percentage of 10% or just one in ten of total school attendance.

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