Writing Feedback / IELTS: university education "to help graduates get better jobs" [4]

Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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University is place for getting knowledge. These days, more and more people are making the choice to continue study in university. They have opinion that if they study in university education, it will help them to get better jobs. However, others believe that much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society.

That is true, if some people want to continue study in university is to secure a better job. The majority of people want to increase their career in the future for increasing their insight, marketable skills and attractiveness to be showed to their potential employers that they can responsibility toward their daughter because they have enough knowledge and material to be in the future life.

However, there are other benefits for individuals and society. In my opinion, if we continue study in university that makes our life to be independent because we are far distance of our parents. Then, we can know how to cook. As we know, some students live in the dormitory and they meet new friends. As a result, they become responsibility toward themselves and they have maturity to think their problem in their dormitory or in their college. Next, society will gain from the contribution that the graduates can make to the economy. We should know, we are living in around competitive world. As a result, our country need student from university to compete to abroad.

In summary, I believe that although purpose of university education is to get the best job, there are clearly further benefits. If we always support university with we continue study in there and we may promote and encourage university attendance many students to develop our country. That will be making each person in our country to think better future for individuals and society.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Part of nation's history - "Old building" [3]

Many old buildings protected by law are part of nation's history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by ones.
How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress?
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Old building is one of thing that becomes nation's history. Most nations around the world have old building at least some, or possibly many old buildings. In my opinion, it is very important to maintain these, but this does not mean progress should stop.

We can find many old buildings that become nation's history such as temples, churches, palace, and houses in their cities, villages and surrounding areas which have historical significance. Preserving certain old buildings is important for several reasons. Firstly, these structures give insight to our country which shows how many centuries ago lived their lives. Because, without them we just could read history in the book or we just hear from our grandmother. As a result, with old building, we can see them. For example, The mosque "Baiturrahman" in Aceh, Indonesia. It is a palace king "Iskandar Muda" several centuries ago. Nowadays, this palace becomes mosque.With this building, I can look structure of building from my ancestor king which it is very beautiful. If we enter to this mosque, we can feel condition calm. This building provide important income to my country as many tourists visit them in great numbers.

However, this certainly does not mean that modernization should be discouraged. I believe that old buildings can be protected in tandem with progress. For example, in many conditions we see old historic buildings being renovated whilst maintaining their original character, and being used for modern purposes. For example, Borobudur temple in Yogyakarta, Indonesia, we can look that it is renovated because for keeping this temples from broken. Also, in no way does history hinder progress, and in fact it is the opposite. By studying and learning about our history, we understand more about the world we live in, and this helps us to build a better future.

In summary, I believe that it is very important to protect and preserve old buildings as we can learn about our history or other countries. Such knowledge can help us to understand how to modernize our countries in the best way.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production [3]

Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?
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Food is supplying energy for body which is containing carbohydrate and vitamin. All of people need food for their life because without food we can die. Several centuries ago, many people cook in their house for their family, so, they can eat natural food. However, since half to twenty century, many people have busy toward their job in a variety of company or in other places. As a result, they have not enough time for cooking, so, they begin to buy some food in a small shop or restaurant or sometimes they buy fast food for supplying energy for their body. As we know, in the fast food contain matter of chemical that is danger for our body. Therefore, I will explain danger derived from this food.

On the one hand, food that is containing matter of preservation. For example, noodle is a fast food that is liked by many people especially in Indonesia. Many people in here choose noodle as a favorite food if they hurry up for supplying their energy because this food is a fast food and we can find anywhere in Indonesia. They know that noodle contain matter of chemical such preservative (sodium benzoate) which is danger for their brain. That is why we always get headache each we eat this food.

On the other hand, food that is used flavoring like food in the restaurant. For example, I find some restaurants and small shop using flavor like "Ajinomoto". We know that "Ajinomoto" is a flavor for putting in a food, so, a taste food become delicious. In my opinion, I think that food is using "Ajinomoto" is not good for my brain because if I eat that, I become headache.

To sum up, I believe that fast food that is containing matter of chemical is not good for our brain because that becomes boomerang for our body to life future. I think we better cook in our house than buy in place random and we should avoid from fast food.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: taxing private car owners heavily in order to solve traffic problems [3]

In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such solution?

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Car is a thing that is used for transportation by individual or together. Several hundred years ago, we seldom find a car because car is a thing that is very expensive in that century. So, we just find a car on a rich people. However, from year to year the world becomes increasingly sophisticated. As a result, we can find car anywhere because many people use car. Therefore, we can look in the street today which undergo traffic jam. So, in order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use money to improve public transportation. However, from this solution, it will bring advantages and disadvantages.

On the one hand, they can get advantage from this solution. For example, they are not undergoing traffic jam that make crowded in the street. As a result, people can go to their office or other workers that will become fluently through obstacle. It is because some people are not driving car excessive. Other examples, in Aceh seldom undergo traffic jam because some people in there that are not using car, but just some people again are using car. However, they just use one car in the one house.

On the other hand, we can get disadvantage from this solution. Sometime, some people have not much money for paying tax because they just have a little salary. It is caused that some people pay credit cars for going to office to become easy. If we will go to office or other works, we should use public transportation such as train, bus, and other. So, we will spend long time to go to our office especially if we are far distance from our house to office. With the result, we will always late to arrive in there. I think this solution will be made people who feel difficult for some people who have a little salary.

In summary, I think this solution from government is good idea for decreasing traffic problems with tax private car owners heavily. However, some people are very need a car because they are working by far distance and they just have a little salary for paying tax every year because their car are bought with credit. I think that every house should have car just one car.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: Global warming "serious issue" [2]

Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take a tackle the issue?

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Nowadays, earth becomes hotter than previous approximately one hundred years ago. This is caused global warming. Global warming is process raising temperature average, sea, and earth land. It is one of issue that is faced today. This issue occurs since half to twenty century. It is caused many factors. I will explain with this statement to support my opinion.

On the one hand, firstly, factor global warming is effect greenhouse. All of source energy is from sun. When this energy arrived in the earth, so, it changes from light to warm up earth. This condition changes perpetually. As a result, this is causing average of temperature every years perpetually increasing. Secondly, many people in the world are cutting trees. For example, several ten years ago, environment in Banda Aceh is still calm. However, after many people in countryside cut many trees for getting much money. With the result, in around Banda Aceh becomes heat. Lastly, next factor is from transportation which is producing smoke or carbon oxygen that is dangerous toward environment.

On the other hand, we can search solution for this problem such as we can plant trees, if one house plants trees less than 2 or 3 steaks, we can imagine what will happen if all of house plant trees or government should be out money for planting trees in the forest and keep forest. It can make environment becoming calm and we will have air refresh. Then, we do not cut down trees at random in the forest. Afterwards, we should alleviate lamp in the afternoon because the lamp also makes temperature becoming warm. Then, we should reduce using individual transportation, if we want to use individual transportation, we should use environment friendly fuel or we can use transportation go green like bicycle. Next, government should think other alternatives for developing country.

To sum up, there are many ways to solve problem of global warming like information danger of global warming to public. I think that we should keep our environment. It is for our life becoming comfortable. So, we should not go to other countries for refreshing. However, Even if it is hard to solve a problem but government never give up information and save the world.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: Stress "contributing factors and how to reduce" [3]

Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the factor in modern society that cause this stress, and how can we reduce it?

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Stress is pressure or worry caused by the problem in life. It is felt by many people in the world which it does not know who they are. Stress come up because they cannot finish their problem in their environment. What makes many people get stress? I will explain some factors in modern society that cause this stress and how to reduce stress.

On the one hand, in around family, stress is caused by interaction between family members, in term of household, for instance, dispute which happens because of money. For example, I have a neighbor in my country. It consists of wife, husband and two children. Wife is older than husband. They ever make relationship before married. However, after married they always dispute because of money. Her husband works as a sales noodle in a village. But, he is sometimes lazy and he prefers sleep in his house. As a consequence, he cannot buy some rice for his children and his wife. So, his wife is very angry about that because their children famished. This is casing them dispute every day and this makes his wife gets stress. Sometimes, their children hear their dispute. With the result As a result, children become stress and they become naughty. Therefore, I think that how to reduce stress in life household is keeping responsibility respective between wife and husband, and always keeping romantic relationship because another understand.

On the other hand, in my opinion, stress came from ourselves that we cannot finish our problem and we always say that we cannot do it. For example, we have homework from our college or school. We think that homework is difficult, and we always complain, however, we do not try to make it. With the result, it makes us stress. Therefore, I think that how to reduce this problem is trying to make and sharing with friend that understands about this homework or we can search book in the library to read it. Next, we can lose our stress by watching or gathering with our friends to make a sense of humor. Other ways, we can be refreshing in the park and beach.

To sum up, I believe that if we can be patient to finish our problem and we always try to become better, we cannot stress. Then, we should be negative thinking toward our problem that we can do it.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: Global sales - dvd's, games, cd's over a three-year period [4]

The chart provides information the changes in the sales of video material or DVDs, games software and CDs around the world in billions of dollars over a three-year period.

In the one hand, in 2000, DVD or video were sold just under 13 billion dollars worth, climbed ever higher to below 22 billion dollars in 2001. Then, it began to rise reached about 27 billion dollars in 2002, and increased sharply in 2003 approximately 30 billion dollars.

In the other hands, between 2000 and 2003 the sale of games software just less than between 12-18 billion dollars. Next, CDs were sold increasing in 2000 by approximately 35 billion dollars, despite it began to fall slightly in 2001. Afterwards, between 2002 and 2003 were sold about 33 billion dollars.

To sum up, between 2000 and 2003, the sale of videos and DVDs rose by approximately 13 billion dollars. The sales of games software also rose during this period, but less sharply. Sales increased from about 13 billion dollars in 2000 to just under 20 billion dollars three years later. By contrast, during the same time period, the sale of CDs fell from 35 billion dollars in 2000 to about 32.5 billion dollars

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Writing Feedback / Borrowing money and returning it will help to keep friends together. [3]

It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

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I think that borrowing money from a friend has some negative aspects and can harm or damage the friendship in some cases. For example, a person borrowed some money from his or her friend and did not return it. However, I believe that borrowing money from a friend and returning it on time can not harm friendship. Moreover, it even can strengthen the relationships between them. For several reasons, which I will mention bellow, I think borrowing money from a friend and returning it do not damage the friendship.

I think that borrowing money from a person who is close to one is normal. Imagine that someone needs help and no doubt that his or her friends will offer it. For example, when my friend asks me to baby-sit her child while she is taking her classes I agree because I know that she desperately needs my help in order to finish her degree and save some money. Furthermore, I am sure that she will be there for me if I need help. The same thing is with the money, sometimes we borrow money from each other but we always return it to each other. I think it is very important to return money borrowed from a friend. I am glad that I can lend her some money when she needs it because I am sure that she will return it as soon as possible.

In addition, I believe that when friends lend and borrow money from each other it means that they trust each other. However, I cannot disagree with the fact that money often can cause the end of the friendship. For example, a person, who borrowed money from his or her friend and did not return it, will try to avoid any contacts with the second person. At the same time, a person who lent the money to his or her friend and did not get it back will have more likely an unpleasant feeling about the situation too. As a result friends will fall apart.

In conclusion, I think that borrowing money and returning it will help to keep friends together.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: Unpaid work "women and men" [5]

The chart below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories.

In general, it can be seen observation from average hours of unpaid work per week done by married women and married men without children, with 1-2 and 3 children.

In household which there is married women without children to work during 30 hours and for married men to work during 18 hours. They just have fewer hours for working because they have not responsibility as big as.

However, after married women have children consist of 1 and 2 children. They have time for working during 50 hours and married men have time for working during 17 hours. Furthermore, after married women have children consist of 3 children. They have time for working during 55 hours and married men have time for working during 15 hours.

In short, the data gives information married women have many children which they have time for working increasing sharply. However, married men have a little time for working per week which the data decrease slightly.

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Writing Feedback / IELT TASK 2 :TV programmes should be blocked "agree or disagree" [6]

TV programmes should be blocked. Do you agree or disagree?
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Television is media needed by many people for watching programmes. I think that television gives many benefits and disadvantages for us. If TV programmes should be blocked. I totally disagree with this statement. However, I will explain my reasons for supporting my answer.

Television gives many disadvantages for us. For example, many TV programmes show film that it bring negative affect for many children such some sinetron in SCTV. I think that it is not for children because it shows some bad character. With the result, students follow their character such as kiss, stole, and kick. Therefore, I think that TV programmes should be omitted from screen from screen for growing generations better.

However, television programmes give many benefits. For example, we can get many information about event that happen in other countries with we look TV programmes such as Breaking News, Liputan 6, etc. Then, we can advertisement needed for improving ourselves such as Muslim dress, cosmetic, medicine, etc. This example is clearly that, we need television programmes for getting information useful. Therefore, I believe that television gives many advantages for some people. In my opinion, I choose TV programmes should not be blocked because it brings me to get many benefits. For example, YKS program and Lawak Group in TRANS TV are bringing me to be happy because their attitude show a sense humor. This is very funny and makes me enjoying.

In conclusion, I think that TV programmes bring many benefits for our living to get information. So, TV programmes should not be lose because we can get many experiences from TV programmes.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 : Birth rates of China and the USA - comparison percentage [2]

The two graphs provide information changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000.

In general, it can be seen that the graphs show comparison percentage of birth rates in two countries during seventy years.

In the first graph, in 1920, birth rates in China had percentage approximately 10, and climbed slightly about 12 in 1925. Afterwards, it decreased to back same as in year 1920, however, it began to increase in year 1935 approximately 15. In contrast, it began to fall sharply from year 1940 to 1945 approximately 5, and it rose sharply in 1950 about 20. Next, it continued to fall sharply in year 1955, and it decreased step by step from 1995 to 2000.

In the second graph, in in 1920, birth rates in US had percentage approximately 12, and climbed slightly about 13 in 1925. Then, it decreased to back same as in year 1920, however, it began to increase steadily in year 1935 approximately 13,5. In contrast, it began to fall sharply in year 1945 less than approximately 5.1, and it rose sharply in 1950 approximately 15. Next, it continued to fall sharply in year 1955, and it began to fall step by step from 1995 to 2000.

To sum up, it can be conclude that both US and China undergone to be fluctuated. Next, Birth rates had increased sharply between US and China less than approximately 15-20, and US and Chine decreased to fall sharply from 1995 to 2000.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: "Books" source is more important [4]

It has been said," Not everything that is learned is contained in books". Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

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All of people in the world are learning and practicing for getting new knowledge. I believe that many people in the world have experience and practice that are reason clearly of person life. However, in my opinion, knowledge gotten from books are very essential for moving forward life that looked of important role such as basic, history and hold all knowledge.

From the one side, one reason for supporting books essential is basic. Basic gotten of books plays a very important for being able to step easier to continue level. For example, all of children in my country in Aceh are learning in kindergarten level. They are studying basic book such alphabet book. It is book that benefit for their basic lesson. Those book what will help them for continuing to elementary school. Therefore, books are very significant for basic capability.

From the other sides, I think that books are writing of history. It makes us know about several thousand years ago. For instance, all of Muslims in the world have knowing about prophet history. These history events last ago. However, we can know about that of writing that written in the books. So, books are knowledge source that be no estimated price. Additionally, important advantage of books can hold all knowledge gotten by previous generations. Some of people write invention them of research or observation in the books. It is for continuing generation. For example, add people thought that the earth was flat. It was concluded from observations and studied. However, the next generations, using the experience of their ancestors, proved that the earth was round.

To sum up, I think we should take basic knowledge from books because it helps us invention with doing observations for moving forward.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Global warming - 'we should keep our environment' [5]

Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today.
What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?
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Global warming is one of event that is caused process surrounding. Some people think that earth becomes heat is caused by humankind themselves. However, some people never aware what they are doing. They just search much money, but they do not care influence toward environment them. It can be seen that earth undergo greenhouse which is caused by many events.

On the one hand, many people in the world are cutting trees. For example, several ten years ago, environment in Banda Aceh is still calm. However, after many people in countryside cut many trees for getting much money. With the result, in around Banda Aceh becomes heat. Because, there is not oxygen again that gets out from leaves from trees to environment. Then, sun shines earth is heat energy radiated into space. This is then energy reflected off to atmosphere. Next, in Jakarta, many people are establishing build especially factory which is producing smoke or carbon oxygen that is dangerous toward environment. So, it is continuing which extra carbon dioxide from burning fossil fuels is brought to atmosphere that is causing atmosphere become thin and it is causing greenhouse. Therefore, solution for this problem, if one house grows trees less than 2 or 3 steaks, we can imagine what will happen if all of house grow trees. It can make environment becoming calm and we will have air refresh.

On the other hand, in the earth, many people are using transportation. It can cause pollution because it has carbon which is dangerous toward environment. This is then extra carbon dioxide from burning fossil fuels and it is continuing to atmosphere. Therefore, I think that we should finish this problem in our environment such as we can use transportation go green like bicycle, and we should grow trees in our surrounding.

To sum up, I think that we should keep our environment. It is for our life becoming comfortable. So, we should not go to other countries for refreshing.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: traffic problems - some people in the world have a car for themselves [5]

In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?
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Nowadays, some people in the world have a car for themselves. With the result, we find many cars in the street that are causing traffic jam. Then, in order to solve traffic problem, government should tax car owners heavily. Next, governments use tax money to improve public transportation. However, this order of such a solution which has advantages and disadvantages should be known.

On the one hand, they can get advantage from this order. For example, they are not undergoing traffic jam that make crowded in the street. With the result, people can go to their office or other workers that will become fluently through obstacle. Because, some people are not driving car excessive. One house just use one car, they do not use individual car again because tax is expensive.

On the other hand, we can get disadvantage from this solution. Sometime, some people have not much money for paying tax because they just have a little salary. It is caused that some people pay credit cars for going to office to become easy. If we will go to office or other works, we should use public transportation such as train, bus, and other. So, we will spend long time to go to our office especially if we are far distance from our house to office. With the result, we will always late to arrive in there. I think this solution will be made people who feel difficult for some people who have a little salary.

In summary, I think this solution from government is good idea for decreasing traffic problems with tax private car owners heavily. With the result, some people will alleviate their car because they should pay tax expensive because sometimes some rice people are stingy, so, they will think twice to use many cars. As we know, rich people have many cars in their house. They use car for showing. However, some people are very need a car because they are working by far distance and they just have a little salary. Their car are bought with credit.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: Sport in UK - boys interested to play football [2]

The table provides information percentage of school aged boy in two different age groups who participated in 5 different sports in the UK in 2010.

In general, there are sports that are liked by boys in age 6-11 and age 12-16.

To begin with, Sports in the UK are football, basketball, cricket, rugby, and swimming in 2010. However, people in there have different participated. In the first, boys 6-11 are interested to play football approximately 87, however, in begin to decrease which boys like basketball almost 35, and increase again that boys like cricket approximately 45. By contrast, some boys again are interested toward rugby just almost 23, approximately 19 like swimming.

On the the hand, boys 12-16 are interested to play football approximately 78, almost 25 boys like basketball which it begin to decrease slightly. However, it climbs ever higher toward cricket that liked by boys approximately 34, continue to fall to below toward devotee rugby approximately 21, and approximately 19 boys like swimming.

To sum up, many boys in UK are most interested toward football than other sports, and swimming is lowest devotee.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation's history. [8]

Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation's history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by news ones.

How important is it to maintain old buildings?
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As we know, every country has history about old builds. That builds are keeping by government with law that they are permanent to be protected. Those are part of a nation's history. However, some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by news ones.

Firstly, some people want to change old build in their country with new build. For example, in the village have many history's houses such house Aceh that is built by using wood and roof from leave, this house is calm and natural. But it is several ten years ago. However, nowadays, many people change their house by establishing build from cements, bricks, and roof from iron. It is very hot if we stay in there. With the result, they should buy fan or AC to condition cold. This is not comfortable and safe because if the electricity turns off, they will feel heat again.

Secondly, some people think they should not change their build. For example, in my country there is a build that is never changed. Located is in Economy college in the Syiah Kuala University which this college has older than other colleges in this University. Until now, this college is not yet changed. However, this college is still hefty than new build that is build now. Therefore, some people who have social status in this University do not want to change. Then, every people or Alumni from this University who come to there can remember about history in this build.

In conclusion, it can be conclude that we should keep old build as history because history remembers experience that is very value. With the result, new person in there can know about history. Then, in fact, old build is heftier than new build.

Writing Feedback / IELTS 1: Computer ownership among educated people [5]

The graphs show information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

In general, it can be seen from the graph that percentage from computer ownership and level of education which have different every years.

The first graph, in 2002, computer ownership was approximately 55 percent, and increased slightly almost 60 percent in 2004. From 2006, it began to increase steadily just above 65 percent, despite a slight rise in 2008 approximately 67 percent, and climbed ever higher to almost 70 percent in 2010. With the result, computer ownership from year 2002 until 2010 has undergone increasing step by step every year.

The second graph, education level is consisting of several levels by computer ownership from 2010 until 2010. For example, no high school diploma has approximately 18%, it began to increase slightly almost 38% in around high school graduate, continued to rise steadily in college among 52%. Afterwards, it climbed even higher to almost 68 % in bachelor's degree, and rose sharply in postgraduate qualification approximately 72 %. However, in 2010, computer ownership by education level was different in 2002 which was computer ownership higher than in 2002.

To sum up, it can be concluded that computer ownership in years 2010 had percent higher than in year 2002 until 2008. Then, computer ownership by level education had different percent between level which was higher postgraduate qualification in 2002 and 2010 than other levels, and no high school diploma was fewest than others.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: Animals should not be exploited by people [6]

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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As we know, some animals have high energy than human. Some people are exploiting this animal, but other people said that animals should not be exploited by people because they think animals should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. In this statement, I will give reason for supporting my opinion.

Firstly, animals such cow is often used by humans for working such plow up. While, cow sometimes is stopping because I think it feels tired, however, it is hit by humans. That is caused that humans want to cow finishing plow up. This is for satisfaction them. Secondly, animals often are used for researching, especially vet. Vet is often doing research about animals. Habitually, they operate on animals for getting organ what they want for looking, and they will write in the book. It is used for their thesis or project.

In my opinion, I think that animals should have the same rights as humans because animals are also living thing which we should keep. It is caused that our religion teach us for keeping living thing and animals have right for life. We should not be subjected without reasons.

As a result, we should keep animal for comfortable life and animals also creature creation our God that should be keep.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Planning a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Pellington. [8]

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Pellington.
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The map shows a drawing of Pellington town. The governments of this town plan a new hypermarket. This hypermarket will be placed in three choice areas.

In general, three areas are crossed by railway and motorway.

The first possible location is in area B. This location is more refresh and relax because it is long distance from industrial areas. However, this place is countryside and it is far distance from many people. Furthermore, in this hypermarket have not many people for buying something. So, it makes hypermarket disadvantages. The second possible location is in area C. This location is in suburbs, near industrial areas, and it is crossed by railway. With the result, sometimes people who are traveling and worker who are working in industrial factory can visit to this hypermarket for buying some food, if they feel hungry. However, this place is far distance from center city.

However, the last possible is totally than area B and C. It is located in the Town Center, near with park, near traffic free zone, and industrial areas. Also, this area is full housing in around here. It would be crowded hypermarket. So, many people can be easier to go to hypermarket because it has near distance. Furthermore, people should not need long time for buying to gain in their household.

To sum up, the last (A) possible area is more recommended because it is place located in center city where many people live and work. As a result, it will be more crowded when it is built.

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