Writing Feedback / Summary an article: Polio back in Nigeria, still attacking African people [4]

This is a summary based on an article in newscientist.com and written by Andy Coghland. The title of an article is Polio back in Nigeria two years after being wiped out In Africa. Polio is deceases that was attacking African people. After declaration Polio free in Africa, Nigeria was infected by Polio's viruses. Nigeria has been globally infected over 2012. The country has been more than 50 percent of all cases globally.

After two children was contaminated by polio's viruses, the country government has immunized every children rapidly and ensure that nothing child was infected before viruses replicated in children's body. Nigeria's Government and WHO make cooperation about eradication program. It aim to solve polio's virus contamination in people and rid of deceases. Based on globally cases, WHO has been predicted, if all people in the world will be free Polio deceases in 2019. After this case was published by Pakistan and Afghanistan. The Talliban has opposed to immunization program in both countries.

link: newscientist.com/article/2100902-polio-back-in-nigeria-two-years-after-being-wiped-out-in-africa/

Writing Feedback / The first quantum satellite in the world [4]

This essay is a summary an article was written by Jacob Aron, and posted in newscientist.com. The original titles of summary is "China launches world's first quantum communications satellite", the satellite name is Quantum Science Satellite (QUESS). QUESS has been the first quantum communications satellite in the world that was sending up by China. It is sophisticated technology by using uncollapsable communications network.

University of Science and Technology of China was experimenting this satellite to try quantum entanglement by using photons. The test used quantum pellets that connected separately at 1200 kilometres. On the other hand, they apply quantum lock channelization to test security from eavesdroppers.

However, QUESS is best satellite technology, but it must be test by advanced experiment to unsure all device that ready to use and the end of validation has been done in the orbit. Many scientists hope, it can help all people in the world to work on the free-space quantum communication.

Writing Feedback / The road through your imagination, invention and searching for problems solutions, to the science. [2]

How to teach kids to love science

This essay is a summary of a video from tedtalk.com by Cesar Harada. The original tittles is "how I teach kids to love science". Caesar Harada is a teacher from Invention of the Hongkong Harbor School. Based on his teaching experiences, he taught children to enjoy about science by their experience. There are three steps to prepare children who care about environment and people's problem, and they can solve the problem. The first step is investigating the local problem. For example, firstly he brought his students to investigate the local problems and collected data about plastics in the sea and real fact in ocean problem. Secondly, he taught his children into workshop. The third, he absolved students imaginations how to solve the problem and he collect all students imaginations be one idea. The fourth, he invited students to make a robot and coached his student to make prototype. The result is every children very enjoyable and he launched a robot to decrease plastics in the ocean.

The second is developing student empathy to other and investigate the remove problem, for example in water pollution in Bangladesh. The result is they found spectrometer to solve the problem. The third is investigating global problem in Fukushima, Japan about radioactivity. They establish the map of radioactivity, and very useful for fisherman and local inhabitants safety. In conclusion, teaching student to love the science is let them with their imagination, make invention and make solution to solve the problem.

Writing Feedback / There's a statement that tourism gives negative impacts in their country's destination [3]

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to.
How true is this statement? What can tourist do to reduce the harmful effect of tourism on local cultures and environments?

In the present time, travelling in around the world is a good choice for the most people. But, there a statement that tourism gives negative impacts in their country's destination. I think there some reason why this statement is true, especially in culture change and environment problem.

The negative effect for culture change is cultural acculturation. The tourist who travel in the other countries bring their original behavior in their country's destination that influences the local culture. For example ethnic group in Kajang, South Sulawesi. Before international tourist came, Kajang had two types of ethnic which is White Kajang and Black Kajang. But Nowadays, White Kajang has been not, because culture acculturation. It happen because the original culture from international tourist influenced local culture in White Kajang that change local behavior directly.

Not only about cultural change, but the tourism has influenced environmental change who people travel to. Foor example, the tourist think if they do not responsible to protect the environment. Many tourists throw plastics in their destination area. Finally, tourism places have been dirty area.

In conclusion, tourism has been brought negative impact in their destination such as local cultures and environment. But we can reduce that negative impacts when every tourist have responsibility to protect the original culture and environment who they travel to.

Writing Feedback / Writing task one on how much money in the city council received and if it affected book club members [2]

The line graphs gives information about how much money in the city council received and how many members in the book club for fourth years. Overall, in the first line shows there is fluctuation in amount of money in city council found over the period, and the second line presents there is an upward trends in the number of club members over the period.

The first line in the graph shows there slight increase between first year and second year. In the third year, amount of money has increased dramatically and reached a peak of money received over the period. However in the fourth year was fell suddenly under £ 40,000.

The second line in the graph present there decreased slightly from first year to second year. The number of book club members was rising sharply in the third year. Finally, the last year has reached a peak of book club members.

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Writing Feedback / Ted talk 7 the way we think about work broken. [5]

This essay is a summary a video posted by Tedtalk.com and the speaker is Barry Scwhartz. The original tittle of the video is "the way we think about work is broken". Barry gives a question for the audience "why we work". Many people in our planet say, we work because challenging, engaging, and meaningful. But according to Barry, the answer of why we work is technology. It is not mean technology of something, but idea of technology. Sciences find the idea or a way, and the social science find the way to understand ourselves.

Idea technology is the way to understand ourselves which influences how people thinks and how people act. It is the most profoundly important technology that science ever found because ideas about human being will never go away from people's belief. Human being is connecting with human nature, because human nature has been improved by understand about human being. Barry said "human being is unfinished animals". It means just the human nature can produce human society and who people live. Those people design human nature by design with the way people live and work. In conclusion, Barry suggested if you want to understand yourself, must focus on the question what kinds of human nature that you want to design.

Writing Feedback / We can learn by watching television program or films, but culture is too complex to for this [4]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching TV and films about it than actually visiting it.
How true this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it, that you cannot learn by watching TV or films about it?

Information is easier to spread than the past. There are many ways to report news or announcements, such as by television, internet, email and others. Based on the situation, some people say that those can learn many cultures from the other countries without travelled in there. We can learn by watching television program or films. But, I think that statement not generally true, because many cultures that people can learn just watching TV or films.

Firstly, TV channels or films not only to entertain, but also it explains local culture especially in people's behavior and the way of thinking. Because, according to psychologist in multicultural approach, culture is pattern of thinking and pattern of behavior. Some people can observe and understand the local tradition of country by their behavior and pattern of their language. For example I can understand china's culture life Barongsai festival, lampion party, and china's new-year by watching TV or China's films although I am never go there.

Secondly, TV stations have been cultural TV program which explain about culture in other countries, specifically in human interactions, religion ceremony, indigenous people, and special traditional festival over the year. It is very helpful to know about local culture in the other countries.

However, there are some aspect that people cannot understand about countries culture, when we do not come there. That factor is emotional aspect and social aspect. That factors are very specific and we can learn about their pattern when visited in there. For example, we can understand traditional ceremony in other countries, but we cannot apprehend emotional pattern in there. Because it is very specific we must have enough directly interaction with others.

In conclusion, we can understand other countries tradition by watching TV or film. But I think, it is not enough to know more specifically when we not visited in there.

Writing Feedback / There a different systems to produce electricity - by water's power and air pressure. [2]

WRITING TASK 1 HOW TO PRODUCE ELECTRICITY

The diagram shows information about the process to create electricity by hydroelectric dam and wave-air generator. Overall, there a different process to produce electricity based on the diagram that is by water's power and air pressure.

First method to create electricity by hydroelectric dam is used reservoir, gate in the reservoir, penstock, turbine, spindle, power lines, water released, and water groove. The process begin with gate is paired in the reservoir that used to open and closes water from the penstock speed water up. The penstock is entered water from reservoir, while gate is opened. Then, the turbine and spindle are turned by water's speed. Finally, electricity is produced by rotation of turbine and spindle. Now, electricity distributed in the power of line to every houses in city and water from the turbine released into the river and the farmland.

The second method is creating electricity by wave-air generator which is using air pressure. It is made from generator which consist of lower chamber, upper chamber, spindle and turbine. Spindle and turbine are paired in upper chamber which is connected with generator out of the upper chamber. The first step is waves which is filled to lower chamber, and air pressure enter into the gate between lower chamber and upper chamber. Next, turbine and spindle are rotated by air pressure, when air rises out of the upper chamber. Finally, the generator is produced electricity by rotation of spindle.

In conclusion, hydroelectricity dam and wave air generator are process to produce electricity. They have different based on the production process and their resources.

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Writing Feedback / Lonely experience. Small land in the city center causes urban community to live in the flat. [3]

Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Other say that people who live in high-rise apartments have much better sense of community than those who lives in houses.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Small land in the city center causes urban community to live in the flat. Some citizen think that people who live in the apartment block are isolated, because they are careless from society. But in the other hand some societies say that people who live in the houses have worse sense than people who live in the high flat. Overall, in my opinion that people who live in the houses have better sense than live in the high rise apartment. There are advantage and disadvantage live in the flat or houses.

Living in the apartment makes people to have private life that is needed by urban people who work in city center. When urban community work all the day in their office, after those are finished their work. Some people need to refresh their mind without others. They sleep all the night and have quite flat. Although, when they have leisure times or problems, they will feel lack of socialism and careless person. For example, some people choose live in the apartment because the need quietly life, but sometimes they say I am alone in the flat, I'm isolated person, no one support me.

However, some people argue living in the houses better than living in flat. Some people thinks that people who live in houses have better life specifically in social communication, attention from the others, social support and work together. For example, they have more experience to work together in society. It helps people to make a good actualization in community. In the other hand, the disadvantages of living in the houses is some people believe that they do not have private life that families or neighbors involve to solve the problems, which they do not need it.

In conclusion, I thinks live in the houses better than living lonely in high rise-apartment. Although, some people argue living in the houses lack of privacy life but every people have more advantages such as high attention and living together.

Writing Feedback / In the modern era, most people argue if impressive constructions are essential for a city [3]

Some people think that large, impresive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should spent on improving schools and hospitals. Disscuss both these views an give your own opinion.

In the modern era, most people argue if impressive construction are essential for a city. But others think that the money should be spent to improve public facilities such as schools and hospitals. In my opinion, government should be spent of much money to improve public facilities than construct impressive building. There advantage and disadvantage both these views.

Impressive construction building in city is important thing to make modern city, such as landmark, unique feature in the city. It can be popular tourism from other countries. Modern construction building became special feature for tourism. For example, Eiffel in Italy is a one of popular construction and tourism in the world.

However, wonderful building not enough to make a modern city, because public facilities for citizen more important too. The government should be spent much money to improve public facilities for inhabitant such as schools, hospital. It is about societies comfortable to live. The government should be ensure education and healthy for their citizen. For example, although the government success to construct amazing building in the city center, but they do not ensure public facilities for citizen, it cannot help to make a modern city. Public facilities not only about schools and hospital, but also public transportation and towns. In Makassar, South Sulawesi has impressive building such as Phinisi, but the government do not improve transportation network. The result is many congestion in city center every people in hurry. The condition not support to make comfortable tourism for tourist. In conclusion, the government should be construct a good facilities for public before build wonderful building in the city.

Writing Feedback / The percentage of people's trouble when they live abroad in the other countries, based on the age. [4]

The chart presents information about the percentage of people's trouble when they living abroad in the other countries based on the age. Overall, the most common people which have the highest problems is the middle aged, from 35 years old to 54 years old. That problem are finance, healthcare and finding school for their children.

The highest problem that people who move to live in the other countries is finance trouble, in the aged between 16 years-old to 34 years-old. Then the least problem that society who living abroad is finding school for their children in the same aged. In contrast with elderly people when they live in the other countries, the much higher trouble is healthcare and the least is to find out good education for their children.

In conclusion, the most complicated problem that people have, when they choose to live abroad is people with aged from 34 years-old to 54 years-old. Also, the least problem that people have when they move in the other countries is elderly people.

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Writing Feedback / Children are picky-eaters, therefore they have unhealthy lifestyle and prefer to consume junk-food [3]

There many kind of food that can be detectable, especially on its taste, appearance, packaging, freshness, content, type of farming and others. Those products have influenced people's attitude particularly. In children who have problem as picky-eater. As a result, most children have unhealthy lifestyle while prefer to consume junk-food than vegetables, both schools and parents have responsibility to overcome this problem. However, parents have the greatest role of it.

In present time, there many schools which not give a role to protect their students avoiding hyperpalatable-food. Those have independence to choose type of food that the want to consume. In schools, teacher have explained to children about healthy life pattern. However, in school's café, there are many fast-food those sell and children tend to buy junk food than fruit. On one hand, children learn to unhealthy lifestyle from their friends. Finally, schools has responsibility to protect them by new regulation about food in schools café.

Although, schools have responsibility to keep them, but parents have greatest role to control their children from unhealthy life. In fact, many children learn to eat junk food from parents attitude, for example we have seen many families eat together in fast food restaurant that situation not teach them to live healthily. Many children imitate parent's behavior before they decide to control children's diet. This is contrary fact to overcome this phenomenon.

In conclusion, both of them have responsibility to avoid their children in unhealthy lifestyle. However parents are most responsible to protect them than others.

Writing Feedback / Summary : the mission to find the world's rarest cat in jungles of Java [4]

This essay is a summary an article was written by Chelsea white. The original title is "the mission to find the world's rarest cat in jungles of Java". That article has explained about Anthony Giordano's expedition. He found that Java fishing is a subspecies of cat in Java, Indonesia. It use their paws to grab fish from the water which is uncommon cat species in the world.

Java fishing cat has been specific track and we can discover it by semi-retractable claw system. However, their habitat and the destiny of subspecies is unidentified. According to historical record, this cat spread in wetlands and was across South-East Asia. The fishing cat research indicate that the part of rare species has been existence in the world. In conclusion, as the final Giordano's expedition, that he has focused to find on the evidence of Java fishing cat habitat and their spread area.

Writing Feedback / The events of 2016 may seem bleak, but the study of history offers some context [4]

This is a summary of an article. An article is written by Paul Lay which posted in historytoday.com. The original title is "the events of 2016 may seem bleak, but the study of history offers some context for those who believe we are living through the worst of times". 2016 has been many bad incident around the world that influenced media statement that "it is much worse year in the history of the world". That statement is reasonable, because there many ugly incident that influenced movement pattern in the world such as terrorism in Europe, racism in US, global hunger in the Africa, wars and conflict in Iraq and Syria and others.

Historical research found that social media's declaration has similarities with historical record in 1347 about Black Death reached Europe. It is about worst year in the history when continent population was death over a three-year period and destroy systematically Asian's people. However, that statement not generally true because in the same year, European spread peace, artistic invention and scientific innovation.

Writing Feedback / task 2: children should teach children how to be a good members of society [NEW]

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good members of society. Others however believe that school is the place learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Education not only teach how to be a smart but also as a kind part of society. Some people argue that learning to be a good people in society is parent responsible. But others think schools have responsibility about that. In my opinion, both of them have the same role to teach children. However, parents have the highest role on it.

The first stage of people life in their family, start from children. It is affected how to make moral behavior as member of society. Every children learn about kindness by imitating parent's attitude. For example we learnt about bad thing such as honesty, working together, appreciate others, and morals when we was young. Those have influenced the way of thinking and interaction pattern. So, I think parents has the most responsible role to make them be a kind group member.

However, parent has the highest responsibility to their children, but schools have affected them to responsible in country's problem. In the school, children have studied about nationality and assignment as citizen, for example we learn about heroism, nationalism and how to be good citizen by teacher's explaining in the class. We understand about people task as member of society from books and discussion and other activities in the school. It makes to make decision why we must be kind person to others.

In conclusion, learning to be a good citizen not only about parents responsibility, but also schools have role to teach them. Although, the highest role to affect them is parents, because family is the first learning place in their life.

Writing Feedback / How to produce silk cloth and silkworm life cycle, IELTS task 1 [3]

The diagram presents about silkworm's metamorphosis and how to create silk cloth. Overall, the production of silk is a part of silkworm's life cycle when they transform to be a cocoon.

The stage of silkworm life include eggs, silkworm larva, larva in silk thread, cocoon, and a young silkworm. The process to be a silkworms is began from eggs which is produced from elderly silkworm. After 10 days, those are becoming larva which is mulberry leaves as foods and place of living. Next stage is larvae transformed be a larvae in silk thread for four until six weeks. After that those is becoming cocoons and finally to be a young silkworms after 16 days.

The stage of silk cloth production is began when silkworm as cocoon. That process are select, boil, twist, and wave. Firstly, cocoon is selected which is boiled in the pan. Then, those is unwind throughout 300-900 metres which is twisted in the dye. Silk thread is interweave by weaver. Finally, silk cloth is produced and which is sealed in the store.

Writing Feedback / The percentage of first-year teachers with regular teaching jobs by year of graduation in Ontario [4]

The chart gives information about the percentage of fresh graduate who recruited as English language teachers and French language teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007. Overall, although, both of them started in the almost same level, but it was present different trends. English educator showed downward trend and other presented fluctuation drift.

During 2001 to 2008, the percentage of English teacher experienced deep by 30 percent. Also other went up and went down from 52 percent to 60 percent. The next, presented the same movement between 2003 and 2005. Start from 2005 both of them showed the opposite movement. The percentage of English teacher was decreased dramatically of 25 percent in 2007 and other was slightly increase of 75 in the same year.

According to over the period, the proportion of English teacher fell by 45 percent. On the other hand other showed the same percentage of fresh graduated educator in French language.

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Writing Feedback / How I turned a deadly plant into a thriving business [2]

This is summary a video by Achenyo Idachaba which has published in TEDtalk.com. The original title is "how I turned a deadly plant into a thriving business". Idhachaba was to expound on riverine communities in rivers across Nigeria which water ways have been infested by aquatic weeds. Others living problems have been dealt such as economic has blocked, marine transportation has hampered, fishing yields has declined, children have broken out from the school and water hyacinths have dared in this society.

In 2009, she found out to create an alternative solution for it which can turn economic growth by using application for handicrafts. The benefit that is easily to employ for community without technical skills. There are three stage to work out this solution. Firstly, get out into the water lines which can open new access marine transportation. Secondly, dry the water hyacinth stems and the third, wave these in the new product to be long ropes. These way can change financial trouble to the prosperity which teach riverine society to alter their mind in different light.