Writing Feedback / IF CARS COULD TALK, ACCIDENTS MIGHT BE AVOIDABLE [2]

Driver is dangerous , with the people who do not concern or regardless about truly concentration.the car accident is leading of death cause , 75% of car accidents in people age 16 or 19 in The United States but,most of them have nothing to do with drug or alcohol.

For example,when the speaker being accident of crasing car in the first time, even she stepped on the brake precisely at that time and finally, air bag deployed and fortunately, no one was hurt.

The probem of car accident is , when they did not know of what they should want to do of imergency condition and what their most important to do or prioritizing to attend on the road and also to avoid on that accident, keeping going to enjoy the comfort trip but,occasionally they sense something wrong or it was too late after they realized it as In countless accident, many drivers say as like" l did not see it came''

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Writing Feedback / IELTS SUMMARY MONTH IS COMPARING BETWEEN TABLE AND PIE CHART [2]

The pie chart indicates the agricultural land becomes less productive which compared with the table features affected to the consequence of three regions of the worldwide during 1990s.In general,as we can see,the highest worlwide causes were over-grazing and region total causes were in Europe

In worlwide,the amount of over -grazing 35% was highest which where it is also placed in Oceania with the number of 11,3% and it was highest number among region causes before accounted by total.The second highest number was placed by deforestation which accounted 30% and it is nearly as same as in North America which is 20% after changed to be decimal fractions, which is merely different 10%.The third positions were in over-cultivation 28% of worlwide causes. if It will be compared with Ocean region degradation in order to, the value of between worldwide and region were far different remarkably ,30% and 0.

In summary,the result number between two comparances that do not completely fixed or steadily because,the total of region causes not accounted by overall

Writing Feedback / MONTH IS THE PEOPLE - COME TO THE MARS YET [3]

In the near future,the plan of Nasa will despatch the thousand of people come to Mars. After months of anticipation ,space CEO Elon Musk has at least revealed his plan for making human a multiplanetary species by sending crews to Mars and beyond.Still,things have not been entirely smooth sailing for space X,with recent launch pad explosion potentially casting the shadow on their Mars ambitions,And keep in mind that when it comes to human missions to Mars , the vision's have been in the works for quite a while the last 70 years straight.The delay is at least in part technical.A trip to the red planet is like visiting an even more inhospitable Antartica,and its unbreathable atmosphere is less than two percent of what you had find at Everest's summit. Never mind the fact that you have to fly at least a year,round-trip,to get there in the first place.

Writing Feedback / Today parents do not think that their kids will be better off than they were [2]

MONTH IS AMERICAN DREAM

The lifes that quietly play out under the scream af headlines.In fact ,for the first time in American history,the majority of parents do not think that their kids will be better off than they were.This true is rich and poor,men and women.After all, America is deeply invested in this idea of economic transcendence,that every generation kind of leapfrogs and the one before it,earning more,buying more and being more.Media per capita income has been flat since about 2000,adjusted for inflanation.Nearly five million people lost their homes in the Great Recession,and even more of us sobered up about the lengths we were willing to go or be tricked into going ,in many predatory cases to hold that deed.Toll the funeral bells for everything that made American great.We can turn inward,lose faith in the power of institutions to change,even lose faith in ourselves or we can turn outward.The biggest danger is achieving a dream

Writing Feedback / Differences between water consumption in San Diego city and the whole California state [3]

The charts show the information of average of water consumption in the world compared to two countries;San Diego and California .These figures are compared to three different category places as Residental,Industry and Agriculture.As overall trend,the two countries showed different water consumption from the worldwide average.While processed the water consumption still had largest in residental of San Diego after agriculture .In San Diego ,the highest of water consumption was in Residential between California and Worldwide,acounted 60% from 39% and even ,merely 8%

In california,the highest of the water consumption was in Residential which is as same as in San Diego,which was followed by industry 33% and agriculture 28%.

In the same industry,the amounts of water consumption was in San Diego and Worlwide ,accounted 23% and even ,in Calivornia bosted from 23% to 33% significantly.

Based on the data ,the lowest of water consumption among the different countries and majorities were in Residential.

Writing Feedback / IELTS SUMMARY MONTH IS LEARNING VACATION [4]

Vacation is one of something which is many people wants,such as , when they used all the time just looking for money or working by hardworking to survive or rensponsible on the hardlive.Many ways which are used usually by the youth or adults to enjoy their vacation for example,they can learn vacation to go on tourism place or elsewhere,There are some people want to enjoy the vacation by not waste the precious time ,they tend to choose it for learning something as like,they study botany in the rain forest or gaining knowlege .Why,because by studying or learning something can hone the knowledges or skills and even, can more economic the budgets of theirs.

Writing Feedback / IELTS SUMMARY TED MONTH IS NEW POWER - it is like currency [2]

Old power is like currency and new power works like a currency .New power is not held by few ,it is made by many.New power is not facebook page ,inherently positive and invetable victor, for exmple,in fact, this is not normative argument that we are making,there are many good things about new power but,it can produce bad outcomes,more participation ,more peer coordination, and unsprisingly,as many of these new power models get to scale.

The interested of new power is the way it feeds on itself.Once you have an experience of new power,you tend to expect and want more of it.And so,the experience tends to embolden you and it tends to make you want more participation across more aspects of your life.

New power can give the values and what new power values look like ,it is such as new power values prize tranparency above all else.

Writing Feedback / COMPARISON OF THE CAR THEFT IN EUROPE AND CANADA [2]

The line graph shows the comparison ot the car theft during 1990 and 1999 in Great Britain ,Swedan,France and Canada.Overall,the most popular of the four countries of amounts car theft for the majority of the 9-year period were in Great Britain.as we can see,the amounts of car theft wiil be predicted to go up a peak in Swedan by the consecutive year,a while the amounts of the car theft were opposed to in others.bacause,the exception of swedan's car were fluctuated considerably.the amounts of car theft will increase together during two years between 1993 and 1995.The highest significant rise was in Swedan where there were from 5 to around 15 between 1990 and 1990.Between 1995 and 1999 had plummeted from around 8 to 5 per 1000 vehicles .Except,in Swedan,Canada and Great Britain will be predicted to rise and the great britain is also as same as in France with the lower one year between 1995 and 1996

Writing Feedback / Numerous negative effects were caused by nurse migration [2]

IELTS SUMMARY MONTH: NURSE MIGRATION

Numerous negative effects were caused by nurse migration .One kindof it,in developing cauntries,as like in sub-Saharan afrika ,south Asia, and Amerika-a major problem for the shortage is nurse migration to developed countries in Erope and North Amerika as well as Australia. .

Because of it,the nurses choser to go to the developed country in order to get a big earn and better quality of life available in developed countries. For example,the Philippines have myriad of trained nurses migrate to abroad,they can send money to the relatives back home [nearing $1 billion anually]

If the widespread nurse migration in the long run, it does nothing to remedy the underlying cause of the shortage and the goverentment let it occurred. In order to ,the results in millions of people being deprived of the health care they need.

Writing Feedback / Each one of us has a unique voice print that reflects our age, size, even lifestyle and personality [2]

THE TED SUMMARY MONTH IS THE VOICE

Each one of us has a unique voice print that reflects our age,size and even,lifestyle and personality. In the words of the poet Longfellow"The human voice is organ of the soul''.Based on that,the voice has different character but,the almost the same of their voice when they talk via mobile phone or similar of it.That is looked the indistinct tending difference with the fact of it.So,thevoice can change dramatically over the course of development such as,the children sound different from teens.The procces of the voice can be generated by example,speech is combination of the source,which is vibration generated by the voice box .

One the other hand,there are many people who unaible to speak.It were predicted 25 million Ammericans and many of whom using computerized devices to cummunicate.

To help on those people ,it used to create the sophisticated technology around the world

Writing Feedback / HULA DANCING. Hawaii is not only full of beautiful views, but it is also a rich culture. [3]

IELTS SUMMARY MONTH:HULA DANCING IN HAWAIIAN CULTURE

A great deal of people have a dream to visit the beautiful Hawai Island. Yes ,that certainly.There are many kinds were belonged to Hawai about culture,touristm place, and the last is stories.IT has culture which has devided to such as,dancer.It is related to the culture and tourism place considerably .For example,to appeal the tourist ,they perform with the graceful dance which WERE performed by almost females by grass skirt swaying their hips .

Hula dancing is a part of Hawaaiian life .It is such as ancient tradition that it was most likely originally performed in plain sign an altar to appreciate the gods and accompanied by great ritual. Furthermore, the Hula dances were devided to be the ancient and modern styles.

The ancient style is energetic dance performed to the accompanientment of the chants and beating of drums.But ,the both are almost similar ,which is becoming the difference of it are slower and more graceful were belonged to the modern style.

Writing Feedback / From long time ago the ancient society strived to find out something to communicate with one another [4]

ILTS SUMMARY MONTH:ORIGINS OF WRITING

How important writing and speaking in this era ,by since along time ago the ancient society sthrived to find out something for be able to communicate each other.At the finally,they did it.

Three ancient culture civilizations on writing and speaking are there, Ancient Summarians,Ancient Chinese,Ancient Maya.
The Ancient Summarians,they developed it around 3000 B.C. And they use it onto clay of tablet
The Ancient Chinese,in Chinese mythology ,the creation of writing is attributed to ancient sage and they began painting on cavewalls 25,000 years ago.
The Ancient Maya, it is famous for the writing they inscribed on tempe walls and other religious structures.The zapotec culture is a part of mayan civilization.In beside of that,the zapotec culture centered on Oaxaca,Mexico, was already writing around 400 B.C.Recent discoveries show that the Mayans have begun writing around 2,300 years ago.

In ancient time ,only specialized people such as scholars,priest orgovernment official used writing.Today,close to three quarters of the world'adult population can read and write.

Writing Feedback / "YAP" - THE TED SUMMARY; IS THE FUTURE OF MONEY [2]

Money is about the exchanges and the transactions that we have each other.Based on the story,when it lived in Micronesia in the early 1900s,called by the YAP.the YAP is the form of interest money.they use limestone discs called Rai stones.Now,the Yap does not actually move these Rai stones around or exchange them the way that we do with our coins.Because,the Rai stones can get to be pretty massive.

The point of that is there nothing inherently valuable about dollar ,stone or coin.the money is not anything objective and it's about a collective a story that we tell each other about value.

In digital world,money can reach much farther and is much faster.But we are the mercy of gatekeepers institution.money only move on the speed of banks.

Because,the future of money is programmable

Writing Feedback / A SMART BIRD - how he manages to fly without rotating parts - just by flapping his wings? [3]

The development of era is more advanced technologies .Such as, A bird is very agile to fly does not with rotating component .but,they fly by flapping its wings.

Propulsion components can be flied a bird is including a wingpan of about two metres,the length is one meter and and six and the weight ,it is only 450 grams ,carbon fiber,motor is in the middle,gear,three hall sensors.

Overall,it still rises up passive torsion to active torsion from 30% up to 80%.the next, it has to do is to control and regulate it. In order to get aerodynamic more efficiently