Writing Feedback / The digital era has been changing our world. Technology make people close together [2]

Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The development of technology has given some improvements in people's life. It can be seen that technology such as internet has connected people wherever they are. However, it becomes such attention since people argue that technology breaking the cultural differences. I totally agree with the first notion and take the reverse position in the second notion. This essay will discuss it further.

Some people think that digital stuff gives bad impacts to the culture, since it may change the custom and heritage. From my point of view, technology can bring benefit to the cultures such as documenting the social life of culture, which future residents are able to watch that. This is backed up by the research from Kyoto University that some heritage and traditional people's life was recorded to be documenter movie. Some temples and statue were also preserved by using sophisticated technology during maintained the purity and were provided to tourists to know their culture.

On the other hand developing of digital stuff has connected people, even they are separated by the continent. Since hand phone and internet have been a part of people's life, it can be a media of communication by using some applications. A study from Malaysian Tech Society resulted that a large number of overseas students in Malaysia barely felt lonely since they utilized phone apps like Skype and What's App to communicate with their family in their hometown every week. So, it proves that the latest technology has bring positive effect on citizen's life.

To sum up, digital era has been changing our world. Even though people think that it disturbs the difference cultures. Nevertheless, I stand at the point to disagree with that notion and accept that technology make people close together by using some application to communicate without moving. 299w

Writing Feedback / The annual distance pace per person (measured in miles) in some modes of transport in England [2]

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

A breakdown of the information about the annual distance pace per person (measured in miles) in some modes of transport in England from 1985 to 2000 is presented by the table. Overall, all transport passed the longest distance in 2000 except local bus, in which car took the first position during the period.

Firstly, car was recorded the most transport to be used by people. It was proved by the distance passed between 1985 and 2000 at 3199 and 4806 respectively. However, there was a slight increase in cycling and walking by 10 and 20 miles respectively in which walking's distance five times in size of cycling during the period.

Meanwhile, public transportation had the long gap each other. Other modes were the highest achievement of driving, which showed a slight incline from 450 to 585. Local bus was the mode that experienced a declining from 429 to 274. It doubled of train's distance in 1985. However, train increased around 100 miles of distance. Taxi and local bus distance inclined three times and two times respectively from 1985 to 2000, which in the end, taxi was two times lower than local bus, at 42. All modes were recorded higher in 2000 by 1335 of gap.

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Writing Feedback / Summary - How Robot Swarms are Learning to Find What We Lose at Sea [2]

Methodically, a squad of robot patrols the muddy waters of Venice's lagoon. They use glide passed the gloom for seeking the quarry. Others are waiting for them on the settling floor to relay intel back to base. The robotic fasts them are developing are part of an effort to fissure one of the biggest challenges in the ocean: finding things. Learning from Malaysia Airlines flight MH370 that broke concisely after take-off in Kuala Lumpur airport in 2014 in which no one could not see the part of that crane underwater. That case may be headlines, but there are enormous reasons to improve the ability to search at the sea. Searching by human may face some problems and its causations. Robotic search could be the solution when the hard problem can be overcome first. They involved the sophisticated technology to explore Deep Ocean, in which they need human pilots and have to be regularly surface to broadcast their findings. Their scheme involves "mussel" robots that go down to the sea floor and act as a coordinating grid, staying afloat to the surface when they need to talk to a base station, then talk to the "fish" explorers among them to reduce the distance to allow signal travel. Then, the result is dynamic, slowly crawling, and seabed-exploring carpet. 216w

Writing Feedback / Summary - This Car Gadget Can Help You Keep Your Eyes on the Road [2]

People sometimes face some problems during driving a car such as they have to answer their phone, in which this case frequently caused crashes. Since then, in-car tech has done a little to help their eyes on the road. People can use smartphones and GPS systems. However, Navdy, a new smartphone-connected, dashboard-mounted heads up display (HUD). Navdy comes to help people in the way they drive a car. Navdy plugs into a vehicle's diagnostic attachment, which strengths the unit during supplying speed and engine information. Then it connects to Android or iPhone devices via an application, which it is able to show driving directions selected from Google Maps. When smartphone alerts like text messages arrive, they shift into the field of view concisely, allowing drivers to interact or ignore them. The concept of Navdy that simply flicking down to teleprompter like display is much safer than when people are turning their head to look car's dashboard or center console. Navdy is sold as much $799, which includes delivery and installation. However, it has preordered as much $6 million then is followed by more than $20 million in investment capital. 189w

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Writing Feedback / The sophisticated technology allows even close relationship with someone through the internet. [NEW]

With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Site some examples to support your answer.

The sophisticated technology allows some things happen, include make close relationship with someone through the internet. This essay will discuss how online dating can save a couple's money, but it can bring disappointment to one party. So, personally, I will not suggest my friend to enjoy someone's company online.

Some communities now have provided a place where men and women can connect each other. They aim to match single person who sometimes are hard to find fitting partner. It is remarkable idea, if it is compared to traditional dating. It will save mate's money. According to a man who had been interviewed by Cosmopolitan that he has never bored to fall head over heels in love with other women by dating service websites or social media. Since he did not need to spend much money for transport to pick his girlfriend go and forth, to treat her in famous restaurant, and to buy clothes or gifts for her. He just found internet connection in which he could make relationship with women in different countries.

However, online dating make some people are deceived. Because when they ask to meet in certain place, they find unexpected things. The research from Sorbonne University, that 92% people experienced dissatisfaction after meeting with their dating partner. Most women said that they sometimes were tricked by men's face on the internet that were actually full of fat, short, or having a bad habit. This study resulted that a large number of couple decided to break up after dating in particular place. Thus, personally, I will not recommend this idea to be done by my friend since I have known the bad effect that may cause they are brokenhearted, or getting trauma to men.

To sum up, it is may be true that online relationship gives advantages as the result of development of technology, which it can reduce their expenditures, especially for men. Nevertheless, it may fool people by their real appearance and attitude. So that it is why, I do really advise my friend to avoid this way. 342w

Writing Feedback / The maps show some development that have been made in the Lakeside from 2000 to 2009 [2]

The changes in Lakeside in 2000 and 2009.

The maps show some improvements that have been done in the Lakeside from 2000 to 2009. Overall, there were some changes in the city, which industrial complex became larger after it was extended by dragging people's living places.

Firstly, public services experienced improvements in three places. Derelic warehouse that located in the right of residential area in 2005, were constructed to be car park nine years later. Then in front of that location, there was old town, which changed into offices and university. Afterwards, in the east of the city, lake was minimized to be pond.

Furthermore, entertainment center and business place were improved to be remarkable and famous area in 2009. Art center was changed to be cinema, which it stood at the west of the city. Then, housing in the left of the river was removed to build shopping center. One of the citizen estates at the right of the river was sold in the company to make a big industrial complex that unites in the small industrial in the south east of the city. 177w

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Writing Feedback / The information about how the wave strength is utilized to yield current [2]

The diagrams show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power

A breakdown of the information about how the wave strength is utilized to yield current is revealed by the two diagrams. Overall, it can be seen that electricity can be generated by two way of process using air from wave sea direction and air from the atmosphere to sea direction.

First of all, to generate current, it needs column, turbine, chamber, and lamp as the equipment. There are two ways to produce current by using these tools. Initially, all the tools are constructed between cliff and sea body, which chamber will let the sea wave enter. The air that is contained by the waves will flow up to the turbine and rotate it among column. That process will make the lamp turning on as the evidence that it produced electricity.

On the other hand, current are also able to yield by using air from the atmosphere to be flown to the sea wave. Firstly, air is allowed in to the column and it will activate the turbine to rotate at the same direction, which it will turn the lamp on as the result of current is yielded. The air residue will go down to the sea through the chamber. 198w

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Writing Feedback / Companies Should Recruit People Who are Able to Work in Team and Dutiful [2]

SOME PEOPLE THINK WHEN RECRUITING, COMPANIES SHOULD AIM TO TAKE ON PEOPLE WHO ARE INNOVATIVE AND ABLE TO WORK INDEPENDENTLY WHILE OTHERS CONSIDERED THEY SHOULD RECRUIT PEOPLE WHO ARE ABLE TO WORK IN A TEAM AND FOLLOW INSTRUCTIONS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

The successful companies sometimes depend on employee's way of working, so business entity should recruit workers who are creative and do not rely on others. While others regard it should be better to gather employees who are able to work in squad and dutiful. This essay will discuss how independent workers sometimes bring difficulties for company and then benefit of gaining obedient employees, which I tend to the second notion because they will help company to attain the purposes.

Having innovative and independent workers are good for certain enterprise. They can be given a lot of tasks and responsibility, but it will be hard for company. Because the type of these workers sometimes authoritatively to themselves, they think that they have a brilliant idea, which they can achieve by their own way. This is supported by the study from Osaka University that 52% self-reliant workers were dismissed due to the reason that they did not follow the company rules. Even though they had contributed some good idea, but their attitude caused damage to the enterprise.

On the other hand, obedient workers and those who are able to work in team bring benefit for company. Since they will unite their thought to reach the purposes, take Google Incorporation's employees as an example. They always perform meeting to discuss company's objectives. Those who have pointed to work in squad will do their duty together while notice the company's regulation, and Internet users can see how Google shows their innovation such as in appearance and data updates. Personally, I tenacious stand at this notion since working in team is able to gain good concepts for the best achievement. It is also cannot be harmful due to the reason that they have analyzed it before doing.

All in all, it may be good to have genius workers who can work independently, but sometimes it brings drawbacks to the company because of their character. However, I strongly supported the notion that dutiful team workers are able to back company's aim up to the good accomplishment. 340w

Writing Feedback / It is Better for Children Learning Foreign Language at Primary School? [2]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some linguists think that children should start practicing a foreign language at primary school instead of secondary school. Since they will gather many advantages such as at that age, new knowledge is more easily to gain and they have much time to master it further. However, sometimes they will face hesitation because of language mixed. So, this essay will discuss benefits outweighed drawback.

Some people encouraged children to learn foreign language at primary school, because it is a golden age, which children can be more facile catch the new words and sounds then imitate it precisely. Besides, they can prepare themselves to practice more in language stages such as grammar in the next step of their life. Oxford University have conducted study to compare language mastering of international primary school students and general high school students and resulted that their managing language of primary students were almost the same as high school students in vocabulary mastering. It proved that children gain as much as vocabulary with the older people who did not intend to learn language. So, if they continue to learn they will master the language.

Nevertheless, learning non-mother language sometimes trigger non-fluency of children in talk using mother language. Take my cousin as an example. He is studying in international school where he had to speak English. He is very fluency in English, but when I talked to him with Indonesian language, he will speak doubting as he has just learned bahasa, even his mother language is Indonesian language.

All in all, the language expertise may be true that children have to learn foreign language at primary school since they will be easy to gather or remember words and applying it. Then, it is saving time to learn more at secondary school in next steps even though they may experience some hesitation in mixed language. This essay has already revealed the excellence outweighed weakness. 313w

Writing Feedback / Children who are taught at home will experience effectiveness in learn [2]

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school.

Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

Some people argue that homeschooling is the best method for children since it is good for children's growth. However, others say that going to school is essential activity that has to be done by children. This essay will discuss how homeschooling will be effective to children's learning process and attend school will be good for children's social life.

Children who are taught at home, will experience effectiveness in learn because the teacher or parent (as a teacher) will know how their children learn. If they find their children are hard to understand some materials, the teacher can swift the method without any frenzied. For example, a visual child who firstly is taught by auditory pattern, when the guide have known the learning style and the obstacle to digest the matter, the guide can change and do other approaches which child can be more understand without worrying others (students). So, I think it will be good for children in which they can freely receive the materials closely and offer many question for deep comprehension.

On the other hand, school as a medium of education is also good place to socialize with others. In my observation, many children encounter their best friend at school and some of their achievements are reached from school. In New York Time survey that seven from twelve people having best friends whom they met at school and ten of twelve confessed that their attainment mostly get in the school such as Olympiad, best student, first rank, etc. Therefore, personally I think that school can give long last experience to children in academic and social life, which influence their adulthood.

To sum up, it is good for parents to instruct their children at home because they can give the best method and the best teacher to teach their children blissful and effectively. On the other part, going to school will not be only as a place fro children to learn, but also they can make friends. So, the choice of learning depends on the demand of children and parents' guide since homeschooling sometimes take much money. 346w

Writing Feedback / Voluntary of Adult Youths for the Development Communities [4]

Adult youths are often called up for working for the development of communities. Do you think they should work voluntarily or should they get paid? Give your opinion

In society, young people frequently involve to work for that improvement. I totally agree that they should work voluntary than get some payment since communities sometimes do not have much money for disbursing temporary worker and obviously the benefit of work for communities come to the young adults such as experiences.

Many communities have some missions or purposes for developing societies, and provide opportunity to young adults to help them. But, they usually have limited money because they are NGO (Non-government organization) or non-profit organization. So, young people who work for them should work freely. Take SIGi as an example of community in my city. That organization works for educating children and helping the poor. They make money through fund-raising that backed up by the young people members. So, it is not good for the members to pay since the event usually come from the deep heart or 'soul calling'.

Moreover, people who work for non-profit organization usually called as volunteer, so they should not earn money since the organization do not make money and just help the societies. In my opinion, young adults get many benefits from working in that, such as experience and get closer to societies. As the research from Youth Connection Organization in Japan said, that 78% young people who involve in social communities get many benefits in life experiences and more easily to access the residents. As a result, many of them get scholarship from the social experience and more facile to conduct research and get some help from the people in some cases.

To conclude, I firmly agree that young adults should become volunteer who do not earn money to work for improving communities since work for communities is 'soul calling' and the good effect brings good life for all people. Moreover, that community does not earn money and actually, youth adults gain many advantages from community work such as getting scholarship because of social experience and society's feedback. 315

Writing Feedback / The percentage of people's consumption - four necessities and four different countries in 2009 [3]

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009

A breakdown of the percentages of people's consumption in four necessities in four different countries in 2009 is presented by the bar chart. Overall, housing was the most things United States spent much money. While healthcare was the lowest important thing for life demands, especially for United Kingdom.

Firstly, two countries in America continent, United States and Canada had almost the same percentage of spending money for food at around 15%. However, Canada spent much money than United States. In transportation and clothing, Canada overtook the top position of those expenditures by around 2.5%. Nevertheless, US expended one in twenty larger in housing and around 2.5% in healthcare respectively than Canada did.

Meanwhile, United Kingdom and Japan had the largest point in transportation expenditures. However, UK spent 5% larger than Japan did, at less than a fifth. UK expended much money for housing and it reversed in food, in which they had 2.5% of difference. Both countries subsidized money less than 5% in clothing and healthcare. 166w

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Writing Feedback / Causes of Children's Life Pressures and Its Solution [3]

"Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

In the recent year, young people are experiencing some problems in to be forced in education, social, and commercial views. This is because their parents expect much in that ways that their children must do more. Therefore, this essay will offer a solution that parents should lead their children without any pressures.

Every parent provides the best things for their children, so they expect their children will do the best to the best results. Unfortunately, this condition sometimes is terrifying things for children. They push themselves to get best. If someday they cannot get what they want, they will get frustration. It backs up by the research from UNICEF that 86% students who got depression in their academic and social activities due to unexpected results, which one-third of them said their purpose were to satisfy their parents or to eschew themselves from grumble of their parents. As a result, children underwent some psychological disturbance that will affect their future life.

To reduce those pressures in children lives. Parents are the most responsible people who have to take an action. From my point of view, parents should guide their children to get the high achievement without any pressures. Based on study from California University stated, that six from ten children who have worked well, had never experienced pressures from their parents. They just were encouraged to attain good result and their parents just advised them to decide the best from the some options. So, their children will get their own 'succeed' way itself.

To sum up, it may be true that children are in pressures now, if their parents push them very hard to get best accomplishment in their education, environment, and commercial without notice the condition of their child. Therefore, parents should encourage their children with some guidance not pressures. 300w

Writing Feedback / Students' achievement in the high school competency exams based on the lesson classifications [4]

Students Who Passed Their High School Competency Exams, by Subject and Gender in 2010/2011

A breakdown of the information about the students' achievement in the high school competency exams based on the lesson classifications and sexes between 2010 and 2011 is revealed by the bar chart. Overall, the girls hit the high point in computer science subjects during the period whereas mathematics was the biggest accomplishment for boys.

To start with, in science subjects, computer science was the highest attainment for female students. It reached 56.3% in which it 14% larger than male students got. However, mathematics was the largest achievement for male students even though it was 1% lower than female students did. The rest subjects of science, physics and chemistry, were the high accession for girls.

Meanwhile, in social subjects, many boys passed the exam in geography. They had 10% larger of girls, at 30.4%. Nevertheless, many girls passed the exam of the rest social subjects, history and foreign language, by around 3% and 1% larger than boys did. 157w

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Writing Feedback / Three schedules of One News channel experienced unsteadiness between July and December [2]

A breakdown of the average daily viewing figures for channel One News over 12 month period is provided by the line graph. The measurement unit is in millions viewers per day. Overall, One News channel had the largest viewers at 6 pm in January. Surprisingly, displaying at 11 pm got popularity in August after it was opened four months ago.

Firstly, One News channel showed at 6 pm had the most viewers in the beginning than two others. Between January and June, showing at 6 pm fluctuated in which it hit at four in June after two times declined in March and May. Then, the channel displayed at 9.30 pm reached a peak at just under four in May then decreased gradually to three in June. On the other hand, 1 pm remained stable at around 1.5. Then, there was a new displayed channel at 11 pm in May, which climbed gradually.

Furthermore, three schedules of One News channel experienced unsteadiness from July to December whereas one schedule tended to stable, displaying at 1 pm. In August, showing at 11 pm hit popularity at four. While 9.30 pm and 6 pm decreased dramatically to one and three respectively. However, 11 pm saw a sharp fall to just under one in the end of the year, whereas others increased slightly after hit a high point in September. 226w

Writing Feedback / Many people over the world experience water sparsity caused by the spread of the pollution. [2]

What are the causes of water scarcity? What are your solutions?

Many people over the world experienced water sparsity. They are hard to access clean water and some are difficult to find water source in their country. This is because pollutant spread the water sources such as chemical waste on the river. Then, recycling water is offered as the solution by this essay.

One factor caused water scarcity in some regions in the worlds is water pollution. Many things can be a factor to dirty water such as the lack of knowledge of people about the sewage system in which they set it near from water source. As a result, it pollutes water. In addition, an environmental study concluded that 52% water sources in Japan were stained by various factory wastes around them. So that inhabitants could not take water from the river as their water sources.

To overcome water pollution, I think that recycling water is one of the good solutions offered. People can make an invention by using the latest or sophisticated technology. For instance in Jakarta there was a group of students who made a raft of goods to recycle water in an amount of water. For a large quantity, they have to develop it further. In one hand, Australian inventor had made a water recycling which they have recycled their used water to be a clean water for other necessity. Therefore, people may apply their way to conserve water.

To sum up, chemicals from factory or bad sewage system or sanitation may pollute water sources, which will cause water paucity in which lead people to suffer. Thus, recycling used water to use many times can be applied for using water wisely. 274w

Writing Feedback / Information about current yielding by source in New Zealand and Germany [2]

Electricity Generation by Source in New Zealand and Germany

A breakdown of the information about current yielding by source in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010 is provided by the pie charts. Overall, New Zealand generated larger electricity than Germany in 1980, but it reversed in 30 years later. Moreover, in 2010, Germany produced much electricity from nuclear source and New Zealand was from coal.

To begin with, in 1980, coal was the most sources to produce electricity in both New Zealand. New Zealand produced current from more than a half of coal than Germany was just less than a third. The domination reversed on Petroleum source. Then, natural gas was the second larger at around a third from both countries. Nevertheless, New Zealand did not have nuclear source to generate electricity.

On the other hand, coal was the essential source in New Zealand whereas Germany depended on Nuclear at 155 in 2010. Coal was the largest source in New Zealand in 2010 at 150 that six fold lower than Germany. It had the same number of petroleum source in Germany at 27, while New Zealand only two. However, New Zealand produced tenfold hydro than Germany did. Then, natural gas was the lowest source in both countries over the year. 203w

Writing Feedback / Establishing Library Waste Much Money Since People Can Use Internet [2]

Some people think it is a waste of money to establish libraries since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information, do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that building libraries will spend money in futile way. Because everyone has home Internet, it can be used to find information. I strongly disagree since I think that libraries and Internet have different function in obtaining information. Firstly, some information does not publish public on the Internet and then much Internet information is anonymous.

Many textbooks now are archived on the Internet in which can be accessed by all people either to be free or to be paid. However, some of them is totally published only as textbook or has time to be posted online. So that people who need that book, have to find it on the bookstore. Based on the article of New York Time Magazine that two books in agriculture field have published in textbook forms and the publisher informed that those books were not available in digital form. Therefore, people only can read them manually without any Internet access.

Besides, allocating money to establish libraries will bring benefits since people can access exact information on the books. As many people know that, some information on the internet is provided anonymously. For instance, a student found support information for his essay on Internet. It was good; unfortunately, it did not insert the author of the information. So, it cannot be a source to cite. However, when he found on the books, it would be very clear.

To draw a conclusion, I firmly disagree that library building just waste much money since certain information can only find in a book. Moreover, the information from books has an exact writer in which it is different when people cite from the internet. 274w

Writing Feedback / Information about international visitor advents in five regions in the world [2]

International Tourist Arrivals in Five Countries

A breakdown of information about international visitor advents in five regions in the world is given by the line chart from 1995 to 2005. The measurement unit is in millions. Overall, all countries had an upward trend except USA. However, USA was the most country where was visited by tourists during the period.

To start with, from 1995 to 2005, all countries experienced an upward trend. Egypt stood at the lowest number in the beginning. It was followed by Brazil in the slight difference figure. However, ten years later witnessed a gradual rise of Egypt at more than 10, which overtook the position of Brazil at 10. Malaysia, France, and USA increased gradually until they reached a peak at 30, 70 and 90 respectively in 2005.

After a culmination of three countries in 2005 and an inclining of others, four countries continued a steady climb until 2010. Brazil, Egypt, Malaysia and France reached a high point at that last year at just above 10, around 15, 40, and 85 respectively. Unfortunately, USA declined slightly at the same number of France. Nevertheless, USA was still the highest number of visitor arrivals in all countries. 194w

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