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|I need help review this essay ("the greatest goal you hope to achieve")
3 - Please give a little bit more substantial help to other members! Then, I'll spend time helping with your essay....
UndergraduateGrammarFool - Apr 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 13, 2009
|UCF admission essay (why did I choose to apply and family influence)
Undergraduategizzy1376 - Apr 8, 2009 / gizzy1376 - Apr 9, 2009
|NYU SUPPLEMENT QUESTIONS -- DEADLINE SENSITIVE
4 - This is the para regarding starting a club or an activity. As pointed out 'human rights' is a very...
Undergraduateisgluska - Apr 1, 2009 / vistasad - Apr 7, 2009
|Personal statement-Law ("The world makes way for the man...")
6 - You have worked as an intern in a law firm. Bring out your learning with respect to law during...
Undergraduatebarbie - Apr 2, 2009 / vistasad - Apr 7, 2009
|(Hardships / Family history / Institution / Qualities) - college essay remake
6 - The first para definetely needs improvement. Make it more real life by alluding to an actual set of circumstances....
UndergraduateMr2009 - Apr 4, 2009 / vistasad - Apr 7, 2009
|Supplemental application for UBC -- Passion, Bachelor of Science program
13 - Oh... yes, I think you should attend to that prompt about evaluating an experience. I think you can explain...
Undergraduatecocobean - Apr 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2009
|Which essay idea seems to be best.
16 - Jay, in both the prompts the central point is 'the impact on you'. You appear to have missed this....
Undergraduateflight23 - Mar 25, 2009 / vistasad - Apr 6, 2009
|'I love the sciences' - UVM Waitlist Letter
7 - Complacently This letter may indeed become one such document, but... Above, I don't think "complacently" works in that...
UndergraduateJonathanI20 - Apr 4, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2009
|Stevens or NJIT - which college to choose?
Undergraduatejen2 - Mar 26, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 5, 2009
|Questbridge Application, vegetarianism
10 - Your second essay is a good description of something that is important to you. Is that what the prompt...
Undergraduatekenziii - Mar 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 1, 2009
|'A hope for a wonderful learning experience' - college entrance essay (UCF)?
8 - Try to draft an outline by using question and answer form. Here's the example: Why am i choose...
UndergraduateMr2009 - Mar 23, 2009 / Abby002 - Mar 31, 2009
|Broadening Horizons Spiel: Conclusion, Questbridge essay.
3 - When looking at photos of my childhood, the usual , carefully manicured sets of school pictures are scarce ....
Undergraduatekenziii - Mar 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 30, 2009
|Reasons for transferring (NYU's BFA Program of Dramatic Writing)
7 - Hey, I look forward to seeing the next draft! I see that all but the second paragraph are quite...
Undergraduatejudas - Mar 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 30, 2009
|Motivation essay for Student Exchange Program (deadline at Monday)
2 - Now I'm studying Advertising and have already realized that main tools of an advertiser, as well as any human-related...
Undergraduatereactor - Mar 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 30, 2009
|essay on the topic "who i am"?
7 - With regard to the essay about who "you" are, you could argue that every single quality embodied in you,...
Undergraduateemmi - Mar 17, 2009 / Mustafa1991 - Mar 29, 2009
|International Student Essay for SUNY (motivation essay)
Undergraduategreep - Mar 28, 2009 / greep - Mar 29, 2009
|Transfer to NYU from Rutgers Newark -- Entrepreneurs, Pioneers.
10 - thanks a lot! i appreciate your help! so i'm submitting it tonight! i think it's ready! wish tme the...
Undergraduatetransfer498 - Mar 21, 2009 / transfer498 - Mar 29, 2009
|"Improvability" - NYU Transfer (activities, additional information)
Undergraduatejudas - Mar 26, 2009 / judas - Mar 28, 2009
|Short Response - to change one thing about my community
14 - Thanks!...
Undergraduateflight23 - Mar 22, 2009 / flight23 - Mar 26, 2009
|Motivation to Business Studies; Degree at JKP
Undergraduatetaodo - Mar 19, 2009 / Hoa Tien - Mar 23, 2009
|My racing mind filled with worries regarding my future. UCF Personal Statement (obstacle, family)
4 - In my childish imagination, I associated immigration to Israel like an exciting adventure to a new world. In August...
UndergraduateLeeloo26 - Mar 7, 2009 / flight23 - Mar 22, 2009
|"high regards on my education" - Need Imput/Editing on My Statement
4 - Your last paragraph seems a bit desperate. I think you should focus less on the hopelessness of the situation...
UndergraduateWritersBlock - Mar 18, 2009 / flight23 - Mar 21, 2009
|Bachelor's degree in Nursing - my background, attitudes, and interest essay
Undergraduatedenndj1 - Mar 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 21, 2009
|"three unique factors" - Is my short answer response too weak?
15 - That will help. The idea is to stay fairly neutral yourself, to avoid seeming overly religious or overly critical...
Undergraduateflight23 - Mar 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 21, 2009
|University of Hartford (future businesswoman)
11 - If accepted I will establish what I am capable of, I believe the University of Hartford will help me...
Undergraduateanibete11 - Feb 18, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 20, 2009
|Unique Factors That Have Most Shaped Who You Are
6 - Just wondering, since I have to answer the same questions/topic above, but is it okay to use something that...
UndergraduateTabiaa - Mar 8, 2009 / jihui_go - Mar 19, 2009
|Using personal pronouns and personal examples and opinions in an essay
UndergraduateChidem - Mar 18, 2009 / Chidem - Mar 19, 2009
|SMU Essay; Achievements and Volunteer Work
Undergraduatekofpower2411 - Mar 14, 2009 / technogirl - Mar 18, 2009
|'Focusing to get some sleep' - Upenn, 300-page autobiography
4 - Page 217 in an autobiography does seem like it would cover material that happens well after the age of...
Undergraduatekarena89 - Mar 15, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 17, 2009
|Essay for Study Abroad -- Language and Humanities
2 - I am not only I gifted in the study of languages and humanities, but also in math and science....
Undergraduatematts05 - Mar 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 17, 2009
|Study Abroad Essay - Why You Would Like to Attend
Undergraduatekayad - Mar 15, 2009 / kayad - Mar 16, 2009
|Topic for UTSA Engineering; Three People
4 - Cool topic! I would choos one faculty member from this school to which you are applying, even though that...
Undergraduatejbaez101 - Mar 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 16, 2009
|Personal Essay (Questions are a necessary part of life)
Undergraduateshadowx - Mar 4, 2009 / sharkbait09 - Mar 15, 2009
|Positive contribution to my own views of conflict and foreign affairs. Professor I'd Like to Study
3 - Thank you very much. Do you think it is too specific? Does it still answer the prompt sufficiently?...
Undergraduateisgluska - Mar 15, 2009 / isgluska - Mar 15, 2009
|"Start young, think big, and stick to it" ; TRANSFER REASONS & OBJECTIVES
7 - The changes you made are good. I don't think you need help with the transition, it seems to become...
Undergraduatemichaelciputra - Mar 14, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 15, 2009
|Acceptance Essay; Principles of Biomedical Sciences
3 - "Medical scientists commonly work with human and how the world around humans affect their bodies." This above might sound...
Undergraduatetoxiicity - Mar 14, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 15, 2009
|Challenging the limits of my intelligence and responsibility - Philosophical Warrior
29 - Despite the fact that some of these posts have gotten a little more personal than I would have liked...
UndergraduateGautama - Feb 11, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 15, 2009
|From Peking University to Stanford
Undergraduatepingping - Mar 13, 2009 / pingping - Mar 15, 2009
|"Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes. Art is knowing which ones to keep" SCAD Statement
6 - Great job. Your revised essay is very well-written. I can't think of any major criticisms for you, so I'll...
Undergraduatelindsayloring - Mar 13, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 14, 2009
|Nanyang: My proudest achievement essay.
9 - Good job on the essay. Kevin is right, though, you should tie your achievement into your educational aspirations in...
Undergraduatesumantneo - Mar 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 13, 2009
|'a pinch, blend of that'; EDUCATION AT THE ART INSTITUTE vs ATTAINING MY GOAL
3 - Yeah, losing an essay you've worked really hard on is a horrible experience, especially if you were pleased with...
Undergraduateshannon1 - Mar 12, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 12, 2009
|SMU essay (took part in the victory)
Undergraduatetechnogirl - Feb 28, 2009 / technogirl - Mar 12, 2009
|My Passion for Fitness and Wellness -- Career Goals
5 - Cool! You have one of the most fascinating subjects. Muscle testing is especially fascinating. Look at this video: ...
Undergraduatelaqrjone - Mar 9, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2009
|Rice Transfer Essay- What will you be able to contribute to Rice?
Undergraduateaggiesgirl1945 - Mar 9, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2009
|Statement: Studying People my Whole Adult Life
6 - Wow, Mustafa makes such a poignant and meaningful contribution to this forum. People are getting a good, strong perspective...
Undergraduatedpeterson - Mar 8, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2009
|Spelman College Essay - Review & Make neccessary changes as u see fit
3 - So, as you continue to revise, keep this in mind: "Seeking knowledge and commitment to service"... and also... "ways...
Undergraduatecwales6 - Mar 7, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 8, 2009
|intellectual pursuit + a brief autobiographical statement
3 - "Although I have always been considered intelligent and well read by my families and friends,I feel,to my detriment,that I...
Undergraduateshinez - Feb 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 6, 2009
|Commonapp short answer ("a member of track and field team")
UndergraduateGreekman - Feb 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 6, 2009
|U of Minnesota - My Dream, My Will
UndergraduateKeonYe - Feb 22, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 6, 2009
|Hospitality is a virtue passed down to me from my family; NYU sup 5 short answers
4 - Thankx Tyler! I am staying in Singapore. And everyday is summer here. That's a huge blind spot. And Kevin...
Undergraduatealright - Mar 4, 2009 / alright - Mar 5, 2009
|Texas Austin - (rat surgery)
Undergraduateluckygirl - Feb 22, 2009 / technogirl - Mar 5, 2009
|Technology for ESL Students
6 - One technique is to just brainstorm every possible idea that you have to support your thesis(no matter how specific...
Undergraduateesperanza_10472 - Feb 27, 2009 / Gautama - Mar 3, 2009
|I made a decision that change my life completely; Why I Want to Transfer to Cornell
4 - The ending isn't that bad. It clearly refers back to the opening, "We are raising you and your siblings...
Undergraduatepvg - Mar 1, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 3, 2009
|Degree at a good standing university - Rice Transfer (reasons I choose Rice)
6 - Can you take this sentence: I believe Rice's overall ...after graduation. And make it your intro? That would...
Undergraduatemeli - Feb 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 3, 2009
|Why I Would Like to Transfer? - Common App
Undergraduaterobbyj123 - Mar 2, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 3, 2009
|UT Austin issue of importance! Taking a Stand: Activism.
6 - Your problem seems to be that your issue is more like a meta-issue. I mean, if everyone became a...
Undergraduatekatj21 - Feb 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 2, 2009
|'unexplainable bond' - Burnett Honor College Essay for Entrance
4 - Specific is good, as the others have mentioned. In addition to specific anecdotes, you might want to discuss some...
Undergraduatescholargirl - Mar 1, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 2, 2009
|Why did you choose to apply to UCF? ["My mind is like a open book"]
Undergraduatelguer47860 - Feb 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2009
|SBU Essay - An Intellectual Experience
5 - When you say, "mounting the horse with a bizarre passion that was overwhelming in its sincerity," it sounds really...
Undergraduatemadihalubsyoux3 - Mar 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2009
|" Would I fit in?" ;TRANSFER -UT Austin McCombs-SOP
3 - Your essay is excellent. Great style, solid grammar, and you stay on-topic. For the second one, the key, as...
UndergraduateLoeia - Feb 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Feb 28, 2009
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