Writing Feedback / Writing task one on how much money in the city council received and if it affected book club members [2]

The line graphs gives information about how much money in the city council received and how many members in the book club for fourth years. Overall, in the first line shows there is fluctuation in amount of money in city council found over the period, and the second line presents there is an upward trends in the number of club members over the period.

The first line in the graph shows there slight increase between first year and second year. In the third year, amount of money has increased dramatically and reached a peak of money received over the period. However in the fourth year was fell suddenly under £ 40,000.

The second line in the graph present there decreased slightly from first year to second year. The number of book club members was rising sharply in the third year. Finally, the last year has reached a peak of book club members.

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Writing Feedback / There's a statement that tourism gives negative impacts in their country's destination [3]

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to.
How true is this statement? What can tourist do to reduce the harmful effect of tourism on local cultures and environments?

In the present time, travelling in around the world is a good choice for the most people. But, there a statement that tourism gives negative impacts in their country's destination. I think there some reason why this statement is true, especially in culture change and environment problem.

The negative effect for culture change is cultural acculturation. The tourist who travel in the other countries bring their original behavior in their country's destination that influences the local culture. For example ethnic group in Kajang, South Sulawesi. Before international tourist came, Kajang had two types of ethnic which is White Kajang and Black Kajang. But Nowadays, White Kajang has been not, because culture acculturation. It happen because the original culture from international tourist influenced local culture in White Kajang that change local behavior directly.

Not only about cultural change, but the tourism has influenced environmental change who people travel to. Foor example, the tourist think if they do not responsible to protect the environment. Many tourists throw plastics in their destination area. Finally, tourism places have been dirty area.

In conclusion, tourism has been brought negative impact in their destination such as local cultures and environment. But we can reduce that negative impacts when every tourist have responsibility to protect the original culture and environment who they travel to.

Writing Feedback / The road through your imagination, invention and searching for problems solutions, to the science. [2]

How to teach kids to love science

This essay is a summary of a video from tedtalk.com by Cesar Harada. The original tittles is "how I teach kids to love science". Caesar Harada is a teacher from Invention of the Hongkong Harbor School. Based on his teaching experiences, he taught children to enjoy about science by their experience. There are three steps to prepare children who care about environment and people's problem, and they can solve the problem. The first step is investigating the local problem. For example, firstly he brought his students to investigate the local problems and collected data about plastics in the sea and real fact in ocean problem. Secondly, he taught his children into workshop. The third, he absolved students imaginations how to solve the problem and he collect all students imaginations be one idea. The fourth, he invited students to make a robot and coached his student to make prototype. The result is every children very enjoyable and he launched a robot to decrease plastics in the ocean.

The second is developing student empathy to other and investigate the remove problem, for example in water pollution in Bangladesh. The result is they found spectrometer to solve the problem. The third is investigating global problem in Fukushima, Japan about radioactivity. They establish the map of radioactivity, and very useful for fisherman and local inhabitants safety. In conclusion, teaching student to love the science is let them with their imagination, make invention and make solution to solve the problem.

Writing Feedback / The first quantum satellite in the world [4]

This essay is a summary an article was written by Jacob Aron, and posted in newscientist.com. The original titles of summary is "China launches world's first quantum communications satellite", the satellite name is Quantum Science Satellite (QUESS). QUESS has been the first quantum communications satellite in the world that was sending up by China. It is sophisticated technology by using uncollapsable communications network.

University of Science and Technology of China was experimenting this satellite to try quantum entanglement by using photons. The test used quantum pellets that connected separately at 1200 kilometres. On the other hand, they apply quantum lock channelization to test security from eavesdroppers.

However, QUESS is best satellite technology, but it must be test by advanced experiment to unsure all device that ready to use and the end of validation has been done in the orbit. Many scientists hope, it can help all people in the world to work on the free-space quantum communication.

Writing Feedback / Summary an article: Polio back in Nigeria, still attacking African people [4]

This is a summary based on an article in newscientist.com and written by Andy Coghland. The title of an article is Polio back in Nigeria two years after being wiped out In Africa. Polio is deceases that was attacking African people. After declaration Polio free in Africa, Nigeria was infected by Polio's viruses. Nigeria has been globally infected over 2012. The country has been more than 50 percent of all cases globally.

After two children was contaminated by polio's viruses, the country government has immunized every children rapidly and ensure that nothing child was infected before viruses replicated in children's body. Nigeria's Government and WHO make cooperation about eradication program. It aim to solve polio's virus contamination in people and rid of deceases. Based on globally cases, WHO has been predicted, if all people in the world will be free Polio deceases in 2019. After this case was published by Pakistan and Afghanistan. The Talliban has opposed to immunization program in both countries.

link: newscientist.com/article/2100902-polio-back-in-nigeria-two-years-after-being-wiped-out-in-africa/

Writing Feedback / TED Talk Summary: Alzheimer is normal aging, we can cure it [3]

This is summary of video in TED talk by Samuel Cohen. The title of video is "Alzheimer is normal aging, we can cure it". Alzheimer illness is original name of Dr. Alois Alzheimer, and he found it from 1040 years ago. Alzheimer deceases infected for 40 million people in the world before 21 century, and 1070 million people in 21 century. Only one of two persons can be survive from this illness. The scientist found that Alzheimer is the biggest social challenges in this generation. Also, it spreading can be decrease slightly.

In the present time, many scientists confused about causal factor of Alzheimer deceases. Because, it is the biggest causal of death before cancer illness. Alzheimer works significantly destroy brain's process such as memory and mental ability. But now, they innovate drugs to cut infection of spreading viruses. The drugs works by cutting off virus replications specifically. Those work with farm industry to develop Alzheimer vaccine cheaper than others.

Writing Feedback / I disagree with the statement that getting a job that we love will make us happy [2]

Some people say that in order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing. Others say that other factors are more important. Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job they really enjoy?

All people in the world want to be happy. They do anything to get happiness such as getting much money, having a job that they love or having get married. In the present time, many inhabitants around the world think getting a job that their love will make her/his happy. In contrast, I disagree with their statements because many other factors influence the people's happiness.

Getting a job that people love is one factor to make enjoy, for example you can do all things that you enjoy, and it can develop yourself to get peak of career. You will never feel bored, high stress and under pressure when you work with your passion. However, working with passion does not guarantee, if people will be happy ever after. Those in the world get a job based on their passion, but they did not show their happiness. For example a person who has reached the highest career need therapist to help her/his in their problem such as depression, broken home, love and others. In contrast, people who did not get work that they love or those have normally life. They have been successful in family life, social interaction, religion and others. They live peacefully with their imperfect life.

In conclusion, happiness is not about getting a job that people love and those want. Happiness about how can people make a good deal with their fault, your heart, their ambition, their self and their imperfect life.

Writing Feedback / At the present time, the televised talent show are famous programs in many countries. [2]

Question : Televised talent show have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment?

Television show needs more interesting program to entertain every person. At the present time, the televised talent show are famous programs in many societies. Some people think if aptitude program in television just entertainment. In my opinion, it is not only entertainment but also the most important thing is a good system to find people who have natural skill.

Talented program in television makes people to see the brilliant aptitude in something. The TV program gives fresh performance from gifted people and entertaining most people that see it. For example, talented performance shows many different ability, that the viewers have not seen before. It brings every person to enjoy the performance with favoring some participants.

However, aptitude competition in TV is the best way to find the people who have unexpected ability. I think, talented people have opportunity to succeed more than the others, but they do not have manner to get their dreams. For example the singing competition in TV, many gifted people have great skill to sing a song. Also we can find them by talented television program and it helps them to succeed.

In conclusion, I do not think if talented competition in TV just entertainment show. I think, it is not only popular program in society, but also it is a way to demonstrate unexpected skill, how to find the people who have natural ability in something. I strongly believe, talented television gives an opportunity to point out their ordinary skill around the world.

Writing Feedback / TED talk: Non-violence struggle by Jamila Raqiib. [2]

War and conflict are the big problems in the world. Wars and conflicts happened in many countries in the world. Many people care about humanity, but they encourage wars around the world. On the other hand, others who worried about the high rate of violence, but they cannot stop it only by admonishing the people if their ethics is incorrect. Therefore, we should introduce a simple, powerful method to stop the ferocity.

Actually, most people did not used non-violence action to accomplish the conflict. As the result, it improves conflicts between women, minorities, workers and people of different sexual orientation. Non-violence struggle is a technique to reduce misunderstanding among community. Some techniques used to end the problem without battle, such as protest can show what people want, but it does not make a change signicantly.

Non-violence works by dilapidating components, not physically, but it identifies the organization on the opponent what they need to survive. Also, we denied resources of the power such as destructed economy by boycott and challenge propaganda by media. The non-violence activist discovered there are 198 methods for non-violence struggle. For example making protests by extend emblematic to social media. It is not war, but it is a manner to get something more objectively. The greatest hope for humanity is not to condemned violence but making non-violence obsolutely.

Writing Feedback / Summary: Herpes infections are worse if contracted at the end of the day [2]

Herpes is a decease that it causes by virus contagion. The cicardian rhythms research has found that mice is vulnerable to contaminate every time. Akhilesh Reddy from the University of Cambridge with his team explored the mice to the herpes virus. They obtained that the virus has been powers to duplicate 10 times as long as mice has infected from the start to the end of their day. The time of infection can be an important thing to contaminate people by virus. Also, virus activity of these mice has been high constancy level in the time of contamination.

The result of their experiment can be concluded that people who have been body clock, has been risker than the others. Reddy and team have been developing virus vaccines to the risk people. Finally, every worker must care about their healthy, reaching from the infection of dangerous illness.

Writing Feedback / We need to recognize problems in this technological era to minimize bad influence on our social life [3]

Modern forms communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social life.

Technology era has been influenced interaction of people in the world. The internet helps people to communicate with other by smart phone, e-mail, social media, etc. But, there some negative effect for their social life. Actually, I strongly agree if modern communication give some bad consequence in human communication.

As far as people interact, they have always communicated each other without seeing their friends such using phone. It has a low of affection, less of eye contact and less of emphatic. It can be say that, has a high quantity but less of quality. For example many people always communicate with their friend by smart phone. But, when they know their friend is sick, they do not come to give support directly. Many people just say "get well soon" via short message or chat. However, modern technology gives some positive effect, such as every people can find their old friends that away. It can help to get connection again.

On the other hand, the modern communication has bringing many people to low of affection. For example, we always have seen many people feel alone, when they are in busy area or they give a status on social media, if they are alone in the world. Actually, it is very uncommon thing. Because, it should be make every people enjoyable than before. But, in fact many people feel alone.

In conclusion, modern communication has bringing bad impact for human communication. However, there some positive aspect for quantity of communication. Finally we must thinking again, what the communication problem actually in information and technology era.

Writing Feedback / TED talk: Under water explorer - cave diver [4]

Jill Heinerth is an underwater explorer, most specific in cave divers. There are many people imagine that diving in underwater most dangerous and imagine cave in black space. But, it is not true. She is the first cave diver that explored inside the mother earth. She dived into the iceberg, and explored in the ice form live in the ice. Jill said that all the sea world is not solid rock but it smooth like sponge. There some earth life forms and other material that the human needed.

The divers using sophisticated technology about re-breathers and 3D camera. Re-breathers is equipment to recycling and custom mixing exotic life support gases, it can helps to breath, when they dive into mother earth for 21 hours. Also, 3D camera is equipment to making map with 3D model by using high radioactive frequency until the surface. Jill discovered endemic species or animals ancient for biologist research. It is unusual species that can be live without pigment and eyes in some cases. Also they have a long life based on the vassal records in extinction in dinosaurs. It help the biologist to study about evolution and survival life.

In other that, discovering the underwater help the archeologist and paleontologist to preserve cultural history, such as culture remains and human remains. And it helps the physicist to track the global clime. Finally, understand human connection between underwater and all resources in the planet, it helps to making solutions from problem issue in this century.

Writing Feedback / Transportation network after improvement - how much time is needed to repair transportation system? [3]

The table give informations about how much time to need in the center of city after transportation system had repaired. The fastest vehicles after the system of transportation improved by taxi. And the bar chart present informations about ordinary cost per kilometer by using vehicles. The most expensive cost is using the taxi. The most significant fact to emerge from the table and the chart are that using the taxi is the fastest vehicle to city center. Although, it is the most expensive charge.

The important to know that after transportation network has repaired, it decreasing the time it needed to downtown when using the tram. It needed 16 minutes to downtown. Although, the taxy has increase of time to city center. But, it still the fastest vehicles in the city.

In other hand, the chart shows the normally cost in every transport method to downtown. The most expensive cost by using taxi, and the cheapest is bus. Also, using the tram to travel in city center is the cheaper than using the car

Writing Feedback / Summary an article III: First wearable brain scanner to probe people with amazing gifts [2]

Positron emission tomography scanners (PET scanner) is an instrument to reads brain processes when a person is doing an activity. The scientists use PET scanner to capture brains capacity of scholars, such as their remembrance and excellent ability in math. PET works by skimming the brain's working. Although, it allow in the brain of the average people. But, it helps the researchers to understand Parkinson's syndrome and find the best approach for stroke.

PET scanner follow by radioactive tracer, and it vaccinated in the blood, especially in glucose. When the molecule in the cells use for vigor. The scanner establish 3D picture in our body, chiefly in the brain's part that working. Although the scanner work by radioactive, but it uses in tiny doses. For safety, the scanner can be work per person once for a year. The benefit of the scanner is capturing a picture of the brain's activity. It helps the doctor to get the best treatment for stroke diseases, traumatic disorder and finding the extraordinary skills from the autism savants that they didn't know.

Writing Feedback / TED Video 3: Reduce Pancreatic Cancer Diseases [2]

Pancreas cancer is disease which make many people died. The result of survey in 2016 obtained, that pancreatic cancer is the third high rate to make people died. The other survey found the percentage of people who can survive with cancer disease shows tiny percentage at 8% than breast cancer at 89%. Also, the average of died caused pancreatic cancer has not difference as long as 49 years ago.

Many doctors establish pancreatic cancer treatment to be more effective. But, they didn't find positive solution for it. Many doctors give pancreatic cancer treatment by chemotherapy, it is routine treatment that same approach for the breast cancer. But, that treatment has a few progress to stop pancreatic cancer growth. Because, pancreatic cancer in the middle vital organs such us stomach, liver, and bile duck. Also, drugs injected in the vain to navigate in our body, until the tumor center. However, navigate drugs by bloods so limited reduce pancreatic cancer system.

New treatment was establish by collaboration clinical center in Boston found the pancreatic cancer can be effective by localize it with the panther matrix. The panther matrix is a drug that flexible to implant directly by the doctor. Pre-clinical study obtained the panther matrix reduce the systemic toxic effect of body.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: Source of table by IELTS Cambridge, Test 1 - travel destinations [2]

The first table gives information about the number of holidaymakers from United Kingdom to travel abroad and their reasons between 1994 and 1998, a five-year period, and the second table presents information about their destinations in the same period. Overall, it can be seen that most people went abroad every year due to holiday. What is more, the most popular destination is Western Europe.

The largest number of people went to holiday is in 1998 with 20,700 visitors. In comparison, the least figure is in 1995, with 14,489 persons. The traveler's reasons to go abroad with other reason is the least with 990 people, particularly in 1998. The popular destination that people traveled is Western Europe and the unpopular is North America.

In conclusion, there are many people go on holiday abroad in every year. Their destination is Western Europe, North America, and other destinations. Also, Western Europe is the most popular destination to travel.

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Writing Feedback / Nowadays, many adolescent choose to be a worker or a traveler for a one year [3]

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Nowadays, many adolescent choose to be a worker or a traveler for a one year, after finished their high school or continuing education in bachelor degree. Actually, there are there are advantages and disadvantages about their choice.

Firstly, the benefit when they encourage to work or trip is that they have more experience. Young people need to know about their passion. As adolescent, they want to try other things that they never found before in the formal education such as trip, find new destination, exploring other place or working. Working for a year indoctrinate adolescent to be more responsible and how to manage their money. Secondly, after acquiring experience as long as a year, they can choose what they like and dislike. It helps the young people to specify their career choice in the future, before they study in the university.

On the other hand, there are two disadvantages when adolescents encourage to work or travel for a year. Firstly, the young people who choose to work or trip automatically they need to memorize their lessons before continuing to study in the university. There are many lessons forgotten, when they work or trip. The impact is hard to recall it again. Secondly, the young people will be late to get their bachelor degree. In comparison with their friends who continue their study earlier in the university without work or trip.

Overall, there are two advantages and two disadvantages when people choose to be a worker or traveler for a year, after they finished high school and starting university. But, all decisions depend on their choice.

Writing Feedback / The percentage of transportation access by people who come to New Zealand [2]

The chart gives information about the percentage of transportation access by people who come to New Zealand. Overall, the most popular method of people, when they are traveled in New Zealand by public transportation, more than 80 percent. The visitor who choose traveled by public transportation bigger than by using private transportation.

There are five kind of transportation that people used when they are traveled in New Zealand, by car, plane, coach, train and boat. The most common people traveled by car, at under 70 percent. And two kind of transportation that visitor used almost the same amount by plane and coach, more than 30 percent. It is bigger than using by train at 20 percent. The least transportation who people used when they are traveled in New Zealand by boat, at less than 10 percent.

Writing Feedback / Few years ago, many inhabitants lived in big community in the small area. But now it's different. [2]

In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in the large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?.

Nowadays, there are many different lifestyles of urban people than in the past. Few years ago, many inhabitants lived in big community in the small area. But now, the citizen living in the large area with small community. I think, there are advantages and disadvantages to living in small community.

I think, there are three main benefit. Firstly, the citizen has a private area for living. Private area for urban community is primary needed when they choose area of living. Secondly, every people has comfortable area to alive, such as peace, quite space, clean zone for living. The third, they have good facilities in area of living, such as garden for their children, big street, sport area, and jogging area.

However, I believe that many disadvantages about the interaction of people to others. Firstly, the citizen will be unknown everything to other people. They lost to communicate in their community. Also make unfriendly inhabitants. They ignore to help the other. This condition establish individualistic lifestyle.

In my view, individualistic life style is manner which person to alive, that can influence to high anxiety, competition, and the impact is cultivate large of depresople.