Writing Feedback / International Visitors to New Zealand: Country of Origin [4]

The pie chart explains the homeland of international tourists visiting New Zealand and is measured in percent. It shows three groups of the origin of the international visitors; those are the English speaking nations, the East Asian, and the other. Overall, the majority of international tourists homeland comes from the English speaking countries.

The English speaking nations that have travelers often visited New Zealand contain Australia, United Stated of America, and United Kingdom. Australia has almost a half of the total percentage, while respectively United Kingdom has 12 percent and United State of America has 9 percent.

The East Asian countries mentioned by the chart are China, Japan, and South Korea. However, the East Asian percentage is lower than 15 percent. It shows China has the highest tourists visited New Zealand among other East Asian nations. Meanwhile, South Korea has smaller percentage than Japan. In addition, there are several other countries as much as 27 percent mentioned.

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Writing Feedback / The result from a recent survey revealed the lack of geopolitical skills among American youth [2]

Most Young Americans Can't Pass a Test on Global Affairs-Can You?

A surprising result comes from a recent survey on American youth nowadays revealed the lack of geopolitical skill that they have. Even though they can answer the primary geographic questioned, they failed to respond on the currently fundamental issues; such as the impact of US dollar on today's economic, the United Nations structure, and the US current politics. Generally, they are unable to associate both cultural and demographic content in a comprehensive statement.

A total of 75 questions the survey given to 1,203 American young adults shows only among 18-to-26-year-olds youth who once took college which has average score, about 55 percent. It turned out that a failure to acknowledge the economics and trade, demographic, and cultural issues have an impact on a person's political choice. This also happened in the Brexit vote case. However, Richard Haass, president of the Council on Foreign Relations, argues that the inability to understand this geopolitical issue as an open door to give a proper education regarding the geopolitical current issues because the American young adults were eventually understand how important it is to know these things.

Writing Feedback / The relationship between sovereignty and the law is relatively straightforward. When it comes to pol [2]

Issue appeared in Britain politics these days is dominated by the way to withdraw the control the sovereignty which is addressing to the relationship between the United Kingdom and the European Union (EU). For more than decades, the United Kingdom has become an important member of the European Union (EU). Conversely, Britain is not feel the same way in which they think they have lost their power as a sovereign European Country so that the Brexit agenda that want to leave European Union comes up. Unfortunately, there are misconceptions in analyzing the idea of not having control of their own country as well. As Jean Bodin, the French political thinker, says sovereignty can be shared in this modern political days. In addition, his idea supported by others political analyst such as Hobbes and Rousseau. However, on the whole, what we need to underline is the whole sovereignty misunderstanding caused by the complicated political events happened yet cannot be determine.

Writing Feedback / Al Gore stressed the importance of being aware of the climate change [2]

AL-GORE: New thinking on the climate crisis

Al Gore points are to stress the importance of being aware of the climate change. According to his speech the main environment challenges currently emerging is divided into two areas which are global and regional problems. First, the global problems contain air pollution, water pollution, and hazardous waste dumps which are a problem for almost all countries nowadays. Second, the regional problem is the appearance of acid rain happened from Midwest to the Northeast, and from Western Europe to the Arctic, and from the Midwest out the Mississippi into the dead zone of the Gulf of Mexico. Under these circumstances, one of the biggest climate change impacts that he gave as an example is the fact that after over 28 years the melting ice of the Arctic has threatened Greenland. Overall, in his opinion, global warming has an impact on all aspects of life. So in respond to these issues, Al-Gore urges us to build a worldwide, global mobilization for renewable energy, conservation, efficiency and a global transition to a low-carbon economy mobilized by politics. On the whole, his speech is stating that politics nowadays can tackle the climate change issues.

Writing Feedback / Multiple outdoor and indoor activities - The purpose of all tourists visiting New Zealand [2]

International Visitors to New Zealand - Reason for visit - IELTS Task 1

The bar chart provides information about the purposes of all tourists visiting New Zealand and is measured in percent. There are two types of holidaymaker reasons visiting New Zealand those are to do some outdoor and indoor activities. On the whole, the data shows the most reason of the holidaymaker came to New Zealand is for doing the outdoor activities.

The chart gives several outdoor activities as the tourists' purposes those are walking around the New Zealand, enjoying the sightseeing, visiting volcanos, and riding boat. Walking around is appeared on the top of the list of the outdoor activity and at once is the most reason of traveler visiting New Zealand. Second, as much as 75 percent traveler aims to enjoy the New Zealand view. Having an experiment to ride boat is the third reason appeared on the chart and has a 5 percent margin different with paying a visit to the volcanos mountain which has 50 percent. However, the indoor traveler purposes is commonly to visit the historical building such as museum and it has 40 percent.

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Writing Feedback / Most Americans Think Burgers Are Healthy [3]

Surprisingly depressed news comes from nutritionist examining 1.767 Americans who had ordered a tasty burger instead of healthful sandwich from a restaurant in the last three months. As much as 62 percent from the respondents of the survey obviously choose fatty burger than fresh sandwich, while 82 percent realize that sandwich is healthier. Moreover, their reason appeared because they think burger is not only a delicious glut meal but also cooked and served with an amount of vegetables, meat, and bread contains good sources needed by the human body; such as protein, iron and vitamin B12. However, it comes with a lot of problems than it seems which made of fatty meat, sugary ketchup and refined grain buns. Therefore, the World Health Organization (WHO) just proclaims the processed meat is a carcinogen and red meat likely causes cancer which all contained in the burger instead of healthy sandwich.

Sources : time/4345052/burgers-healthy-red-meat/?iid=sr-link1

Writing Feedback / The least popular transportation chosen by the workers is cycling or walking [4]

The CO2 Emissions from Different Forms of Transport

The following table and the bar chart give data about travelling to work in Houston, Texas. To begin, the table provides information about the percentage of travelers per form transport to work and average age of them based on four transportation's; car for one person, car contains more than one person, cycling or walking, and train or bus. Meanwhile the bar chart shows the CO2 Emissions from different forms of transport. Eventually, there is connection between both the table and the chart.

The last popular transportation chosen by the workers is cycling or walking which is only four percent aged 44 of travelers have courage to choose them. However, it is totally use no CO2 Emission. Furthermore, catching bus or train is in the second used by 37 percent of the commuters aged 47, but the CO2 Emission consumed is just over the percentage of the last popular one. Having about 0.07 kilograms per person per kilometer of CO2 Emission, the third popular transport taken is car rode by four people which only 11 percent of the workers aged 44 took it.

The most common transportation used by the commuters to work in Houston, Texas is car for one person. As much as 48 percent aged 43 in average choose this way. Unfortunately, this way of travel is not worth at all when it comes to the CO2 Emission issue. It drains 0.31 kilograms per person per kilometer of CO2 Emission. In this case, all of the commuters riding car alone eventually consumed 24 kilograms per person per kilometer of CO2 Emission. In conclusion, people is tend to ride car alone instead of use the zero emissions transportation.

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Writing Feedback / The number of books read by the boys and girls - a fluctuating trend between the two variables [2]

The Number of Books Read at the Starmouth School Library

The line graph gives information about the comparison number of books read by the boys and girls over four-year period at the Starmouth School Library. There are fluctuating trend between the two variables. On the whole, contrary to the girls, the boys had had a derivation graphic towards this issue.

According to the graph, during the first two years, the number of books read by the boys was steadily increased. It achieves the peak at 2011 with over a hundred books have read. Unfortunately it was experienced a sharply decreasing trend to the 2012 and the books read by the boys had become 80 books.

Meanwhile, reverse to the boys, the trend of books read by the girls from 2009 to 2010 was slowly increased and rose sharply for the next two years. There are only 30 books read by the girls at 2009 and incline over 140 books at 2012. It follows that the gap between the boys and girl read books was narrowed down from 20 to zero over the three-year period and the variable of the girls had intersected the boys at 2011.

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Writing Feedback / 9 Things You Can Do Right Now for a Frugal Holiday Season [2]

We may ever think that we desperately need a vacation. Hence, start our holiday plan early can be the best answer. There are nine money-saving ways to prepare our picnic. First, plan our budget by using last year's spending as the guide and establish limits for gift-giving this year. Then, save up more cash by skipping lunches out once or twice a week. Third, make sure we can control the limits of our credit card. Furthermore, we should make the lists of things we wanted to purchase. Fifth, make crafting DIY gifts. After that, this is the time for us to hunt for great deals online. Seventh, this is the time to start shop strategically. Besides, do not forget to save the extras of things. The last one is start to give back by participating charitable activity.

Writing Feedback / 1.Swing basket method to fetch water from the soil 2.The roller bucket to reap water for irrigation [2]

The two diagrams below give information about the different methods of collecting water for irrigation purposes.

The first diagram is using swing basket method to fetch water from the soil. The material needed are the basket made from bamboo, the digging soil extracted up to 2 meters near the irrigation channels, four meters ropes which will be used as much as two meters for each side. To begin, the ropes should be tied to each side of bamboo basket which is will be put to the hole of digging soil. After that, the bamboo basket that has been filled by the water can slowly lifted by pulling the ropes. Finally, the irrigation channels can be filled by water using this method until it's full.

The second diagram is utilizing the roller bucket to reap water for irrigation purposes. The material needed are the plastic bucket, a 50 meters stagnant pit near the irrigation tunnels, a pulley, two rollers, and a cow standing at downhill. Firstly, the rope is needed to be tied to the each roller and the bucket handle. The pulley is plugged to the ground near the irrigation tunnels while the other side of the rope that has been bound to the basket handle is wound to the cow body. At the end of this method, the bucket should be entered the stagnant pit and the cow might be pulled the rope until the basket reach the top of the stagnant pit. The full of water bucket will be automatically filled the irrigation tunnels as the pulley plugged near the irrigation tunnels.

Overall, both of the diagrams explain the way to collect water for irrigation purposes. However, the second method is more effective and efficient to be practiced eventough the materials of it is more complicated.

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Writing Feedback / Invented at 1934 by Leonard Kleinrock, the Internet has become a global system [2]

The Internet is probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be completely different. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Invented at 1934 by Leonard Kleinrock, the Internet is become a global system connecting each computer had network through online. Some people may think that internet have advantages while other think the reserve. On the other hand, apart from the controversy existed; the internet is the media enabling people not only to exchange the information but also to do communication.

The internet is not only the most important invention but also the most valuable thing nowadays. The rising of internet as the substantial aspect of modern way to exchange the information and communicate each other, have helped people to simplify the life. The latter-day communication by internet can be seen from the existence of several media socials such as email and facebook where people can share their position and make an appointment from long distance. Another advantage is a lot of community of particular hobby existed through them. However, the cutting-age information from internet can be reached by some search engine and online media. Everyone from worldwide will have the same opportunity to share and to get the information and opinion by internet.

Meanwhile, before the internet existed, it is hard for people not only to make or reject an appointment but also to learn and share the knowledge. The old way to communicate is only by mail needed some time to arrive to the recipients and the old-fashioned treatment to reach information is by newspaper or rumored. Overall, the internet brings many advantages than the disadvantages and without the internet the way of humankind life will be the same as the past; there will be no one from Asia or Africa read the news from America of Europe. Overall, the internet has simplifying our lives by changing the way to get information and communicate each other that is expensive and lengthy become cheap, easy, and free.

Writing Feedback / Having a job that we love can be simply called as enjoying our hobby and get paid for it. [2]

Some people say that in order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing. Others say that other factors are more important. Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job really enjoy?

There are a lot of reasons of people to be happy. Some people believe one of the factors is to have a job you love doing while the other think it is a well-paid job made you happy. However, the rest of the people mention a lot of reason to be happy for adults; for instance having a quality time of vacation, getting monthly bonuses, and having less time to work. In my view, every single statement comes up in people head as the reason to be happy, is part of being have fun doing job that you work for.

People having a job that they love can be simply called as people who do their hobby and get paid for that. It is very important to love your job because people who do not love their job will easily get bored. Meanwhile, people who run their hobby as the job will enjoy the moment of doing it, they will not care of the monthly bonuses or even the time they spend to work. However, the more enjoy people doing their job, the more experience they will get. People run their hobby as job is achieving money bigger than people who do not, setting the working time freely, and also deciding time to go on vacation.

In conclusion, it is having job you love doing is the important reason to be happy. Not only for getting well-paid of the hobby you run into, but also for the enjoyment you feel.

Writing Feedback / The issue of what should young people do directly after graduation from high school. [NEW]

Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

There are several pros and cons toward the issue of what should young people do directly after graduated from high school. Some people prompt adolescent to take a job for a few years before applying university. In my point of view, it is better for the youth graduated recently to focus on their education rather than to get a job.

The viewpoints that agree to the statement think the experience that adolescent obtained by working before continuing study is greater. However, the only good impact comes from this stand are the experience of earning money. In addition, there is another possibility advantage by working before continuing college is the salary can be used to fund their education if they can manage it well.

Meanwhile, there are several drawbacks for adolescent obtained by working before continuing study. First, they will potentially become lazy to continue their education because they already earn money. Second, they waste their time by working at young age and having small income. The objective of getting higher education is to earn more money. The lower the education they have, the lower the salary they get. Third, it will be very pity for them to attain inappropriate job because their high school academic title will not fit to run some fancy positions. It is a general fact that almost every company looking for the employees who have degree.

All in all, I completely disagree to the stand who suggests young people should take a job for a few years between school and university because the disadvantage of taking this option is preponderant. However, the adolescent can reach more experiences and potentially get reasonable income after having a degree.

Writing Feedback / Ghosts and Poltergeists: more common than you think? [2]

Some people think the presence of ghost appears after the 20th century as the product of human trauma experienced by some people causing the negative energies phenomenon; such as heard untraceable noises, saw strange lights or shadow, and noticed some strange objects coming. However, the ghost cases already appear since the early 19th century and the story told with every single clear detail. For example the story of the haunted ship named HMS Asp sailed between 1850 and 1857 and be told by Captain G.M. Alldridge writing a long letter at February 1868. His letter reports about their sailing crew feared at night and facing died. In addition, it also tells about the ability of spirit to haunt particular location rather than a person. Meanwhile, the 20th spirit seems to have common quality of manifestation; such as noises, vague shape, and clear image of a person. The urban legend involves some common places haunting people, for example at the museum and the hotel. Moreover, people nowadays tend to talk about it more often even they are not experiencing it directly.

Writing Feedback / A Day in the Life of Hollywood Paparazzi [2]

It cannot be denied that famous people surrounded by paparazzi who often take such photographs and video recordings for money purposes. Some people believe their action is really disturbing celebrity's daily routine and it is violating the human right because they tend to ignore the privacy of celebrities. However, the paparazzi itself think that it is nonsense because once they choose their job to be widely known by people then their privacy is sharply gone as it become public consumption. What is become more negative is when the paparazzi are not having the license to take such daily documentation because they belong to none of company but they do capturing famous people as a freelancer to get paid. The freelancer paparazzi is not only have the chance to spread rotten news but also have lack of knowledge of the journalist ethics as they are frequently capturing famous people going out with their children without even thinking whether such action would be affecting the psychology of their children or not.

Sources: readitenglish..../read/acgAc9#