Writing Feedback / The percentage of national expenditure on five different countries [2]

The table gives information regarding the percentage of national expenditure on different items in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey in 2002. Overall, what stands out from the table shows that the highest percentage of food/drink/tobacco and leisure/education was in Turkey. While Italy was the highest percentage of clothing/footwear, Sweden was the lowest percentage of food/drink/tobacco and clothing/footwear.

According to the table, at 32.14% Turkey was the highest percentage among others in the expenditure for food/drink/tobacco, it was followed by Ireland at 28.91% which was around 10% higher than Spain at 18.80%. Next, Italy and Sweden had similar percentages of food/drink/tobacco at 16.36% and 15.77% approximately.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the table reveals that Italy had the highest figure of clothing/footwear at 9.00%, whereas the percentage of the same categories as Italy are Turkey, Spain and Ireland having similar percentages at each 6.63%, 6.51% and 6.43%.

In addition, of all countries was under 5% The highest of leisure/education category was Turkey at 4.35%, while Sweden was at 3.32% as the second highest. Then, following this trend was Italy (3.20%), Ireland (2.21%) and Spain (1.98%).

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Writing Feedback / The number electricity production by fuel resource [2]

The charts give information regarding the number electricity production by fuel resource in two different countries between 1980 and 2000. Overall, what stands out from the charts describes that Australia had the highest of electricity unit by fuel source for Coal, whereas Nuclear Power was the most dominant of electricity production by fuel resource in France in 2000.

In 1980, from 100 unit of the total of electricity production by fuel resource, Coal in Australia was the highest unit of fuel resource amongst others at 50%, which was half higher than France's Coal. It was followed by Hydro Power as the second highest of electricity production at 20 units. While Australian's Natural Gas had the same number as Hydro Power, Oil was the lowest of electricity production in Australia. In contrast, France had more Natural Gas and Oil than Australia, although France's Hydro Power was lower than Australia's.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the chart reveals that noticeable changes of electricity production was Nuclear Power in France. It experiences a dramatic rise over the next twenty years at 120 of 180 units of electricity production in 2000. Likewise France, Australia's Coal increased significantly in 2000 at 130 units. Next, Hydro Power, Natural Gas, and Oil in Australia were not more dominant than France's.

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Writing Feedback / The percentage of reasons for study and employer support based on different ages of people [NEW]

The charts give information regarding the reasons for study according to age of students and the number of employer support by age group and both are measured in percentages. Overall, what stands out from the charts show that the percentage of people under 26 is the highest of percentage in both charts and the lowest percentage of employer support is people's aged 30-39.

With regard to the first chart, the highest percentage reason for study is students' under 26 for career at 80% which is 70% higher than for interest at the same aged categories. It is followed by people aged 26-29 at approximately at 69% for career compare with some 25% for interest. Next, people's aged 40 to 49 have the same figures at 40% whereas, the percentage for interest of people's over the age of 49 is higher than for career at 70% and 18% respectively.

Moving to a more detailed analysis reveals that people's aged under 26 is the highest of percentage of employer support at some 65%. Whereas people in the age of 26-29 have 50% of employer support as the second highest percentage, elderly people follow this trend at approximately 45%. In addition, with about 38% people in the 40-49 age group are fairly low, it is nearly similar pattern with people of 30-34 ages at 35%.

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Writing Feedback / Increasing wider horizons by working or travelling before learning at university [NEW]

Good preparation before starting university studies is considered as an important activity for students. As such, lots of countries around world encourage young people to work or travel after finishing in high school to improve their knowledge. Therefore, I believe that this trend can add young people's experience which is probably useful for their studies at university, although this can cause young people to forget some lessons which are ever learned in high school.

According to this topic, working or travelling improves young people's knowledge. For example, some graduated students work in factory. This can make them to know concerning the real life of adult. Also, if young people prefer traveling, they can learn different languages and cultures. As a result, young people can increase their wider horizons which can develop students' abilities before beginning to learn at university.

However, young people can lose some material of subject in their high school. The result shows that 75 % of students in first year at university are difficult to follow what they study in class since they forget some knowledge of subjects in high school. They also have to learn repeatedly about the materials which they forget. As a sequence, people are worry to their studies at university.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although working or travelling gives negative impact for young people, it will not outshine benefits of working and travelling after graduation in high school. Therefore, I believe that young people should explore their abilities to have considerable experience of working and traveling to prepare their studies.

Writing Feedback / Exerting consumers' interest to purchase over products by advertisements [2]

Today, the high sales of popular consumers goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, advertisement plays an important role in business marketing, even it can decide what a company will survive or close from business world. As such, many companies are popular to use good advertisement for promoting their products to consumer, although consumers do not really need these products. Therefore, I believe that advertisement is key factor to sell more products of companies. However, consumers should be selective in purchasing the products on advertising to avoid more disadvantages.

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Writing Feedback / Changing children's unhealthy lifestyle by parents', schools' and government's active role [NEW]

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?

A healthy lifestyle is an essential aspect in human life. For this reason, many children today have unhealthy lifestyle as they spend much time regularly to play online games or to watch movie. As such, some people say that schools and parents have to be responsible to solve this problem. Whilst it is true to some reasonable, I strongly argue that this needs an active role from government and health authorities to raise the awareness of children in changing their lifestyle.

With regard to an unhealthy lifestyle of children, lots of people encourage that schools and parents must contribute to maintain children's healthy style. For example, parents should restrict playing times for their children like just allowing the children to play games in holiday times and also can be selective in providing variety of foods at home, whereas schools can make one particular subject in their studies which socialize how important healthy style for human life. As a result, children can change their way of life after they have new knowledge about perfect lifestyle.

However, government and health authorities play more significant role to measure this problem. To illustrate, they make a strict regulation to protect companies' products which can lead children to have poor quality of health. Meanwhile, a massive campaign of perfect lifestyle can become health stakeholders' duties. As a consequence, children will be aware that having perfect health and changing behavior are an important action.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although responsibility of schools and parents is needed to solve the problem of children's unhealthy style, government's action to tackle the problem is more effective. Undoubtedly, I believe that good cooperation among schools, parents and government is a vital aspect to solve this problem.

Writing Feedback / The stages of a wind turbine works and the output resulted [NEW]

The two diagrams give information regarding how a wind turbine is adjusted in different locations. Overall, what stands out from the diagram describes how a wind turbine works and the output which is resulted is in some areas.

In the first stage of the turbine, it starts when a wind come across turbine. Automatically, wind sensor operates speed and direction of turbine by using generator to turn blades fiberglass at the same time which can produce output 1.5 megawatts. Meanwhile, computer around locations is connected to blades for setting direction and angle of turbine.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the diagram reveals that a wind turbine is putted in three different locations. Firstly, in high landmark, it is better as turbine can get maximum wind strengths. Then, another location is in the sea. Although this may result less output, this does not spoil landscape. Surprisingly, if turbine is around accommodation, it just can produce output 100 kilowatts.

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Writing Feedback / The percentage of teacher recruitments in Ontario [2]

The line graph gives information regarding the percentage of teacher recruitments for teaching in two different languages in Ontario from 2001 to 2007. Overall, what stands out from the line graph describes the proportion of French teachers experiencing a gradual increase compared with the recruitments of English teachers' over the timeframe.

With regard to this trend, in 2001, the percentage of people in job recruited as English teachers stood at approximately 73%, it was 3% higher than French teachers. Then, both figures saw a significant fall of remaining pattern at around 58% and 52% respectively in the next year, whilst the percentage of French teachers' recruitment rebounded at about 67% in 2003 to reach a short peak at 70% over the next two years.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the line graph reveals that People recruited as English teachers had the percentage at 70% in the first year, and then over the next two years, the figure of English teachers fell significantly by more than 30%. However, the total of English language teachers witnessed a sharp drop in the end of period at under 30%, after it remained at interval rates by 40% of people who teach English language from 2003 to 2005.

Writing Feedback / Getting into dept by buying goods which do not needed [2]

Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

Nowadays, more and more people loan money from banks to buy many goods which they interest although the goods are not really needed or have a significant value in their life. Therefore, I would argue that following lifestyle trend is one of key factors which encourage people to buy any companies' products regularly. However, a strict regulation from government to prevent advertisement of companies' goods which truly hypnotize people to buy any product is viable solution this problem.

With regard to the following lifestyle trend, people often tend to show up how many goods they have and how expensive they are. Result shows that 70% of people in some developed countries feel being as new richer man or woman if they can buy the most luxury goods. As a result, for filling lifestyle demands, many people are really keen on getting into debt from the banks.

As such, government has a significant role to solve the problem of people who like overbuying things with loaning money from the banks. To illustrate, formulating a strict rule about advertisement attitudes of companies is obvious solution. This can restrict activities of companies in promoting their products that tend to manipulate many consumers. Consequently, people have bad habit such as hunting money with dept for buying the product in advertisement though it is not needed for them.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that a serious effort of government in implementing the regulation can arouse awareness of people to change their habit.

Writing Feedback / International tourist arrivals around parts of the world [4]

The graph provides information regarding the number of international tourist arrivals around parts of the world throughout the whole periods in question. Overall, the most striking point from the graph is North America and Central and Eastern Europe as the majority of international visitors over the timeframe. Whereas, the figure of South-East Asia's foreigner travelers doubled an increase, another did not experience a significant change as the whole of the period in the graph.

According to graph, North America started as the highest number of people visiting amongst others. Their number stood at over 70 million visitors in 1990, and then experienced a gradual fall by approximately 3 million travelers, after the trend peaked at 90 million individuals travelling in their countries in 2000. Following this, there was a dramatic rise in the figure of Central and Eastern Europe over the period in the question from 30 million in the first year to at just under 90 million tourists at the end of the period.

Moving to a more detailed analysis form the chart reveals that Sub-Saharan Africa and South America had a similar point of foreigner visitors. Between 1990 and 2000, their figure had virtually pattern, but in 2005 for Sub-Saharan Africa, they had number travelers more than South America's figure at around 22 and 18 million visitors respectively. However, South-East Asia could be considered as the figure who witnessed a significant growth from juts 20 million to nearly 50 million foreigners visiting in the last year in the question.

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Writing Feedback / Globalization will lead to culture identity loss, do you agree? [3]

As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon know as globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Mass media and transportation todays experience a dramatic increase. What this happens is a phenomenon leading people to live in globalization era. For some individuals, this change is considered as awful tragedy which will break culture identity of people. Therefore, I would argue that although globalization era enables to lose some originally culture, to respect to this for moral reason is key factor to preserve the culture.

With regard to the globalization changes, individuals now live on modern technology in which influences strongly their life. Take mass media and transportation as an example, virtually all of media contents persuade people with new information or knowledge like how important dance culture in family party. Not only this, advanced transportation also make people easily to travel to somewhere and of course, this can distract their culture identity after they have wider horizon of different cultures. Consequently, what people do nowadays with influencing massive media will make culture identity to be blur.

However, others said that people had to respect with their own culture to prevent globalization impacts. According to some experience in my country, government makes regulation which appoints culture as one of important subject in school. As a result, people since they was still child, they have studied how significant preserve own culture and can be moderate to behave with new culture; globalization.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that though globalization effects influence native culture, I strongly disagree with the argument saying globalization interrupt identity of culture as there are always ways to preserve local culture such as education student at school about their own culture.

Writing Feedback / Information about changes in the developement of the Stokeford village during 80 years (1930-2010) [2]

The two maps provide information regarding the noticeable change of the village in Stokeford between 1930 and 2010. Overall, what stands out from the maps describes that some new residence areas have been built in 2010. Meanwhile, in a particular location some building experienced renovation and footpath accesses have also been added.

According to maps, clearly, we can see that the village of Stokeford saw a profound transform in 2010. First, in a wide farm area in the village has developed many houses. In addition, there added some highway connecting house with each other houses, and then retirement home in apposite of east in the maps has also altered in 2010 such as garden was destroyed and retirement home replaced large house with decreasing a wide area of garden.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the maps reveals that a change considerably also happened in public building. In 1930 there was one school building only but it has expanded in 2010. However, two buildings for shopping were demolished in 2010.

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Writing Feedback / Wealthier modern artist than others lead government to solve the gap of both [3]

Some modern artists receive sums of money for the things they center, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Life is sometimes unfair. On the whole, the majority of individuals who have career in art industry are likely easily to charge the amount of money from whatever they produce. However, this is completely different from others have to pain to earn. As such, government is suggested to carry out measurement to overcome this case as what the main function of them is makes balanced welfare for all of people. Meanwhile, I personally have a tendency that this is hard for government to restrict artist's creativity since it is right for whoever can explore and show up their sense or ability of art.

First of all, government has no moral right to protect creativity of individuals. Clearly, every person lives on the liberty to explore artistic ability. A significant study revealed that the principal reason why the most artists could reach in gigantic financial matter is since they have hard work and spend much hour at their work. Consequently, there are different amount of income with others who have different occupation with low salary.

Furthermore, creativity is highly gifted to reach high income. Take Leonardo da vinci, pointed legendary masterpiece portrait "Monalisa" as an example, he took more than two billion dollars for selling his great painting though he had to finish his product more than a year. As a result, there is no doubt that artistic skill is right job of art to obtain the worth appreciate from their creation like money or popularity.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that though government probably to tackle this problem, as far as I am concerned, the large income which artists obtain is result from their own effort and loyalty of their job of art so as to there is no reason for government to involve in this circle.

Writing Feedback / Seeking perfect work for one or different communities [3]

Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work different organisations.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Working is a vital aspect to support people needs. As such, some people prepare to do jobs with their own colleagues in the same organization in lifetime so that they can know with each other characters. Having said that, for others, this is greater to work in different people from many organizations since they can develop new relationship to plenty of people. Meanwhile, as far as I am concerned, people can feel enjoyable working is the main reason why they are very fond of working in the same community, whilst having new close relation is benefit of work in different people.

Broadly speaking, workers tend to think that having the same friends in working is going to obtain more enjoyable. To illustrate, when you work in one company only in long run, you can be easy to ask helping from others for your problem suddenly. Not only this, you also have no doubt to communicate with your partners of work because you know them well. As a result, doing job with partners of one organization ensures people to survive in their career.

On the other hand, laborers have many relations if they work in different communities. For instance, in different companies you can meet many people from some backgrounds and places. From this, you can develop new close relationship to make you easily to adapt in doing your work. As a consequence, Having experiences of work in some organizations leads you to improve your wider horizons and relations for life.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that both situations of working have the same merits. Therefore, I strongly suggest that all of this depends on people's characters to choose which one is better based on their life needs.

Writing Feedback / Information technology changes the way how people work today [2]

Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

Information technology improves people's activities in all parts of the world. In most cases, this change leads plenty of individuals to finish their works in workplace from their home or while travelling. As such, I personally believe that advanced technology ensures some people to be more flexible and enjoyable working although being unhealthy lifestyle is considerable challenge for lots of persons.

First of all, people become more flexible to conduct their jobs at home. To illustrate, a virtual learning provides more comfortable learning for some scholars at university than a traditional classroom in which lecturers can explain their materials of subjects outside campus such as lecturers' home. Not only this, it is also a viable solution to teach students who prefer not attended at class of lecturers whilst students are able to report their research by email. As a result, because of technology persons now have many alternative ways to do any activity well.

In addition, modern technology enables some individuals to have enjoyable jobs. Result reveals that, today, more and more persons establish online shopping as their main work. The principal reason of this is because they can serve their consumers from wherever and whenever they want. As a consequence, surprisingly, only by staying at home many people have a good job and take high income.

Having said that, opponents of such this opinion argued that modern technology leads people to have sedentary lifestyle. For instance, many individuals now spend length of their times just sitting in front of computer to browse the internet or using their smart phones from day to day. Consequently, some suffer the rare disease from their habits which are poor exercise throughout the whole period of their life.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although sophisticated technology bring negative impacts for people but it will not outshine the advantages of mobility due to modern information technology. Therefore, I would suggest that people should maximize technology resources to make better life.

Writing Feedback / Colour is a great instrument which influence more and more consumers [3]

Colour is a powerful of tools that is used to great effect by manufacturers and retail companies when they try to sell us something. In fact, many of the purchasing decisions we make are partly or largely influenced by colour.

How true is this statement?
How much does colour influence us when we buy something?

Attractive colour plays an important role in manufacturing company especially to attract more consumers to buy company's product. Clearly, this can be seen from how decisions individuals make to purchase some goods appears that it is highly likely influenced by colours they are interested. Therefore, from my point of view, this statement is mainly true since powerful colours of retail company likely hypnotize people. Furthermore, bright colours and pattern surrounding market are going to affect youngsters to have a tendency to buy cloth with a particular colour.

First of all, lovely colorful product of company persuades people's interest. To illustrate, when persons go to shopping to buy some vegetables and fruits, they tend to inevitably to choice them which have glow colours. The possible reason of this is as the ones look more ripe than darker foods. As a consequence, vibrant goods bring more convenience for plenty of people.

Having said that, it is arguably that the youngest people are liable to be more interested to buy clothes in strong colours. Result from one of garment companies in Indonesia found that 70% of their products with glowing colour designs to be sold progressively which the majority of consumers are youngsters under 25 old. As a results, more creative colour designs of products company produce more persons have a tendency to buy.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that though other factors can influence people in buying things, obviously a bright colour is predominant to lead lots of individuals to choose perfect goods at the first glance. Therefore, my personal opinion is that a powerful colour of any product influence people considerably when they buy the products.

Writing Feedback / Information crime rates in Newport city center in 2003 and 2010 [2]

The chart gives information regarding the number of incidents in Newport city center between 2003 and 2010. Overall, the most striking point is that all of areas experienced a downward trend throughout the whole period in the question. However, the crime rate of burglary decreased dramatically after peaking at the second year.

According to the chart, burglary had the highest number of crime rate at the starting period. It stood at 3,500 in 2003 and increased gradually in the next year before their figures saw a dramatic fell by about 2,500 in 2008 to finish at just under 2,000 at the end of the period in question. Following this, between 2003 and 2005, the figure of incident for car theft remained stable. After dropping in 2006, this rose back to the same figure at the beginning of the period.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the chart reveals that the figure of robbery war far lower than another. Standing at over 500 in 2003, the trend fluctuated from 2004 to 2010 before coming back to the first number in the last year in the chart.

Clearly, in 2012, if we analyze the data we can see that the gap between the three areas had narrowed considerately after the number of car theft overtook between 2006 and 2007.

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Writing Feedback / Trends in childrens early formal education [3]

In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of these views?

Children starting to study since early ages are becoming a program trend in some countries to know the children with environmental academic soon. However, others argue that children should know school if they have aged seven or eight. For this reason, I would contend that although allowing children to study at school in aged 7 or 8 would make them more independent, it is golden aged to bring children in school in early ages.

First of all, no one can avoid that early ages is golden ages to know more knowledge. A significant study in one country reported that the country provides some alternative school for children less than ten years. Surprisingly, students in early ages (4-5 years old) can memorize faster and more animal and plant names than older students in the same period when they start study. As a result, it is inevitable that early ages have golden time to have faster progress of improving knowledge in studying of formal education.

Conversely, opponents of this opinion said that aged 7 or 8 years to begin study enable children to be more independent. For example, children in this age generally can go to school alone without brought by their parents. Not only this, they also are believed to be able to face their own challenges of environmental academic. As a consequence, there is no doubt that children starting to go to school in aged 7 or 8 can be more survive with their own problems.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that even though both opinions bring benefit to children from all of ages, starting study in four years is better as golden ages ensure the children to take easily wider horizon of academic subject. Therefore, I strongly agree with the first opinion to encourage children to have a greater quality of education so as to make better life of children in the future.

Writing Feedback / Advanced medical treatment brings longer life of human expectancy [3]

One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, advanced medical treatment plays an important role in medical practice. The impact of this is that humans have a tendency to live longer so that this increase life expectancy from many people. As far as I am concerned, development of medical care brings convenience for people to cope with rare disease and have more alternative ways to maintain human health. Meanwhile, that this encourages more individuals to avoid some traditional medication is negative impact of this.

Clearly, it is inevitable that advanced medical care make easily to deal with dangerous disease. Take some medical expert in America as an example, with improving medical treatment they can find new medicine to cope with a rare disease in South Africa, ebola in 2015, which kill many persons there. As a result, we can see that development of this tool helps so much in medical practice to save human.

In addition, sophisticated technology of medical treatment also provides more alternative of maintaining people's health. Result finds that more than 30% of elderly people in some developed countries can keep fit since they check-up regularly in high quality of modern hospital using those. As a consequence, there is no doubt that some developed technology of medication care are liable for people to have expectancy to longer life.

However, opponents of this opinion said that improvements to medical care can enable people to leave alternative treatments. A significant study showed that today more and more people prefer to go to modern hospitals providing advanced service. Consequently, this causes some therapist of traditional treatments will lose their jobs.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although the development of medical care has negative effect, but it will not outshine the benefit of advanced technology in modern medication. Therefore, I would argue that by improving some tools of medication people now can make better life.