Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: the arguments about living in apartment building [3]

Q: Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. others say that people who live in high-rise apartmentd have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Living individually in a high-rise apartment is one of the characteristic of modern people in huge cities. They believe that the flat has a much higher sense in community than the people, who live in houses, and the others consider that living in apartment demolishes all community spirit. In this case, I strongly believe that being an inhabitant of a condominium not bring excessive drawbacks for societies' live, because they can merely keep in touch among the dwellers with different circumstances. This essay will discuss both points of views.

In fact, the majority of people claim that the reason why people live in high-rise condominium lonely is to avoid disruption from their relatives and neighbours. It is because many apartment providers guarantee private life for citizens through the limited access to others, who are not interesting. For instance, many apartment dwellers communicate and interact with their neighbour, even they do not know anyone who rents the room next to their flat. Finally, the lack of community's interaction occurs and the communities are more individual.

On the other hand, the reason why living in apartment reduces all community spirit is too excessive because many of them can interact with their neighbours in other ways. For example, when they use the facilities, provided such as swimming pool, jogging track, and fitness center, they can build relationships and have friends to exercise together in similar condition. It proves that they do not leave the communication at all and the argument, saying that matter is not true everlasting.

To sum up, it is evident that being the apartment occupants does not demolish interaction among human beings at all. I think that it is better for societies to communicate with the others in many ways and circumtances.

Writing Feedback / The amount of money spent on buying books in four European countries, measured in millions US $ [2]

The given line graph reveals the amount of money spent on buying books in four European countries, measured in millions US$ from 1995 to 2005. It was obviously seen that the trend to purchase books in Germany, France, Italia, and Austria was upward over ten-years.

According to the data, German spent much more their money to buy the books than the other countries. Firstly, 80 million of the German' income was spent in 1995, and the rise tend occurred in the next two years to 90 m. Even though, it experienced a slight decline two years later, the increased trend continued and it hit the highest data at almost 100 million in the end of the period.

In addition, the amount of money, which was spent by French to books stood at roughly 55, and the gradual increase happened up to reaching 75 m in 2005. Though Italy had an almost similar point with France in the beginning of the period, the slight decrease during the period could not give the significant alteration. Interestingly, Austria, which was in 1995 became the lowest data, rocketed to 60 m and replaced Italy as the third position. Finally, the gap among three trends of expense money to book had become lower and lower over a decade.

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Writing Feedback / Hybrid cars sale trend in Japan increased significantly from 2006-2009 [3]

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009.
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The given line graph describes the number of hybrid vehicle sales worldwide from 2006 to 2009. It is obviously seen that Japan sale trend increased significantly, whilst the United States sales rose with some fluctuations.

According to the data, the hybrid vehicle sales in Japan started at just around 50,000 at the beginning of period. Next, 2007 saw a slight rise to approximately 70,000, and then a moderate increase occurred in the next year. Interestingly, in 2009 the vehicle sales, using fuel and electricity energy rocketed to almost 350,000, but it did not peak the highest data over four-years.

On the other hand, the people of United States dominated the sales in the first year with 250,000. In addition, the unique feature witnessed in the next twelve months, and hit the greatest number at 350,000. Unfortunately, it decreased moderately by roughly 50,000 points, and these tend was closed at just under 300,000 at the end of the period. Next, the other country sales were a gradual rise, which started the similar point with Japan, and ended at 120,000 in 2009.

Writing Feedback / Task 2 IELTS - INVENTORS and DOCTORS' significant role for human being [2]

Q: Inventors are not important to society as doctor.
To what extent do you agree about this statement?
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Nowadays, the advance of technology occurs due to numerous inventions, which are founded by scientists worldwide. In this case, however, discoveries are considered as uncrucial factor to society unlike doctors. I strongly disagree about this statement, because doctors and inventors are of important role for societies' live. In this essay, I will describe the reason why people agree and disagree about this case.

Many people believe that the inventors are not essential for human's life, because most of their inventions do not influence the societies directly and sometimes their discoveries are made to commercial industry interest. For example, the discovery about the household furniture which is similar with the inventions in the past do not make the communities helped, but by seeing that product, they want to purchase it without considering about the real function about the item. Finally, many people are not satisfied about some inventions and they became lazier and lazier because of that invention. Consequently, the people consider that the discoveries are not much important to people's lives.

On the other hand, the inventors and doctors have a similar function, because they give a better life for communities. For instance, the inventors which find the medical equipment can support the doctor's job to cure people. The doctors feel that their job's easier than before with the inventions of surgical tools. Therefore, it proves that the position of doctors and inventors are equal to societies' life.

To sum up, it is evident that the inventors and the doctors have significant roles to human beings. In this case, people have to realize about the functions of both jobs, and the inventors should find the novel discoveries which are useful for human's life, instead of the companies will.

Writing Feedback / Crimes among numerous teens in several countries. Causes and solutions of Juvenile Delinquency. [2]

The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries.
Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.
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Teenagers in the 21st century have to face a more challenging in their lives. They must stand on a right position in order that they do not fall into crimes like numerous teens in several countries. In fact, recent years have occurred a significant rise of juvenile delinquency and it becomes a serious problem worldwide. This essay will discuss some reasons why this problem happens and solutions to overcome it.

The main cause of the Juvenile offending is a failure of family's function. It is because family is the first socialization agent which can early make or break the personality of children. When parents do not know their role and cannot give firm societies' values for their children thanks to divorce, the majority of children will grow as teenagers which are capable committing criminal acts. Statistics show that 73.53 % of the delinquency teenagers is caused by parental disobedient, and it turns the greatest proportion than other factors.

In addition, the adolescences also commit the crime due to worse influence of schools, peer groups, and mass media. For instance, many of them engage in a gang or school fight because they imitate their surroundings, including bullying action in a school environment and a program of violence in television.

However, there are several ways to solve this trouble, related to the socialization agents. Firstly, the parents have to realize about their role to educate and could also prevent their children's behaviour, which deviate since they were three-years old. Moreover, other agents could give good surroundings and give a good role model.

To sum up, it is evident that the juvenile delinquency happens because of the failure of the socialization agents, consisting of family (parents), schools, peer groups, and mass media. In this case, I believe that these agents have to be responsible to tackle by full awareness to provide better environments for the young generation.

Writing Feedback / Good health is one of the crucial life components. Pros and cons of the medical care improvement. [2]

Q:One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expetancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweight the disadvantages.

Good health is one of the crucial components that must be owned by everybody. In this case, many developed countries prove that the advance of medical care gives a significant increase of living longer and life expectancy to the citizens, and vice versa in the developing world. I personally believe that the improvement of this has many benefits for the societies than the drawbacks which are shown.

Commonly, an effort to raise the medical care makes the societies more productive in older age, because they are still healthy and can work up to 60-70 years old. To illustrate this, most of elderly citizens in developed countries can create handy crafts, such as sewing as well as knitting clothes. Consequently, this adds the income to their nuclear families and the tax to their own countries. There is no doubt that the old societies are more creative because of good medical support.

In addition, the elderly people in the first world nations are more independent than the older once in developing countries. It is because they can live without full physical support from the younger. For instance, in Japan, the grandmother and grandfather do not become the burden to their families, even they can precisely help and play with their grandchildren. Finally, it can reduce the money, which has to be spent to employ a baby sitter. All in all, it argues that more autonomous dwellers can be found in industrial nations.

On the other hand, it can affect over population of the citizens. It is because the number of old people increase, whereas the rise of fertility rate has turned the highest problem. In China, for instance, the density trouble cannot be solved thanks to this improvement. Finally, the government's policy to reduce the trend of over population is merely stagnant. In brief, the elderly societies cause the rise of the number of inhabitants.

Overall, it is evident that the pros about the developing medical care are much more than the cons. I strongly believe that the policy about this improvement has to be applied by the governments in all nations because older people are the humans who have ever given contribution to the country and the countries have to guarantee their quality of life.

Writing Feedback / The mass media makes the sensational issue from celebrities, eg. actors, singers and footballers [5]

Q: The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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The life of extraordinary people always attracts to be reported. In fact, mass media makes the sensational issue from celebrities, including actors, singers and footballers. Meanwhile, news about ordinary people, having achievement, has to be informed also to encourage societies to be more creative and innovative like them. In this case, I personally believe that the media have to provide information about the behaviour of ordinary and extraordinary people in similar proportion.

Commonly, lifestyles of celebrities are more attractive to be reported. It is because everybody wants to know their behaviour and private life much more, and it also requires more profit to the media mass which publish it. To illustrate this, the report of newspaper and television programs towards the achievement and private life of Cristiano Ronaldo as a football player encourages people to read and watch these media. Finally, the news about him and other impressive persons gives more benefit to the media. There is no doubt that the tidings of impressive people, consisting of celebrities and footballers are more interesting to be published.

On the other hand, the achievement of the average people has to be reported too. It is because they do the same accomplishment as the famous ones in different sectors and give the pros to the societies also. For instance, the scientist who finds the equipment to help societies' job has to be appreciated through the news from mass media. Consequently, everybody knows about his invention and it encourages citizens to do something which includes a benefit to the societies' living.

To sum up, it is evident that the equal news about the famous and average people must be applied by the media in order that people are motivated to be more creative to invent something new which is useful for dwellers.

Writing Feedback / Artefacts, having artistical and historical value are objects attractive to be seen directly [2]

Q: Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Artefacts, having artistic and historical meanings are handmade objects which are attractive to be seen directly. For several centuries, these tools are immortalized by numerous people in museums and galleries as the evidence of human being's works, but the advance of technology, including computer is recently considered changing the position of those places to safe the artefacts. In this case, I personally believe that the computer development cannot replace the function of museums and galleries as the building, used showing human's works.

Commonly, visiting the art galleries and public museums directly offers aesthetic experience. It is because people can interact towards the artwork and interpret the feeling of the creators when they made it in those buildings. For instance, in Musee du Louvre, Paris which displays Leonardo da Vinci's work, Mona Lisa, the art communities can see the historical objects from middle age in the real shape. There is no doubt that the travellers obtain the artistic spirit in galleries and museums.

On the other hand, computer, consisting of internet can show the artworks anywhere and anytime. It is because the website provides the picture and photograph which can be accessed people worldwide. To illustrate this, in islamicartmagazine.com, people can download the picture of Islamic carpets without visiting to Iran (Persia) which needs much money. Finally, this is more effective and efficient to learn about art.

To sum up, it is evident that the position of public museums and art galleries cannot be substituted by the sophisticated computer. The government in each country has to maintain the construction of gallery and museum to be more artistic in order that the existence of these can represent the artefacts or artworks.

Writing Feedback / Line graph - spending much money on buying books [3]

The line graph highlights the percentage of citizens aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in three countries. In common, it is obviously seen that the proportion of elderly in Japan, USA, and Sweden will be upward during one century.

According to the data, Japan stood as the lowest percentage (5 %), though it was level down up to the next four decades. Next, the prediction is that it will gradually increase until 2030 even though it will be stable as the least trend. Surprisingly, the number of unproductive people in Japan is predicted enormous increase three times during a ten-year of periods and then becomes the highest data.

However, in 1940, USA began the greatest trend and experienced gradually increase, followed by Sweden which is almost equivalent. Interestingly, they had the same point in 2000, and then USA remained steady while Sweden experienced double. Equally important, both of them repeat similar tend in 2005. It is predicted that Sweden will be the second rate and USA to be the third.

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Writing Feedback / Table task 1 about the route of underground railway system [2]

The breakdown of the figure regarding the number of route kilometer of underground railway and the figure of passengers per year, counted in millions in six cities from the 1800s to 2000s is illustrated by the table. Overall, London was the first city which had tube transport system whilst Los Angeles became the metropolitan area which had recent subway scheme.

According to the data, the only one of subway system was built in London in 19th century. It also had the furthest route, though the number of passengers was 775. However, this was different from Paris which had almost 2000 passengers. Therefore, the railway of London was twice as many as that of Paris which had been built in 1900.

In other continents, the first underground railway was constructed in the capital city of Japan, Tokyo, which interestingly has the highest passengers at two thousands. Nevertheless, its route was less than a half as many as London. In the other city, Kyoto, railway line was constructed in 1981 and had the minimum of passengers as well as the shortest path. In addition, the US citizens had underground transport in 1927 and the newest railway system was built in Los Angeles in 21 century.

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Writing Feedback / Maintaining public library with computer or conventional way? IELTS Task 2 [2]

Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the advance of technology eases human beings' job in many sectors, including management of public libraries. Consequently, numerous people consider that computerization of book's database has to be applied to change the manual management once. In this case, I believe that computing is useful to manage the book systems in huge library, but the conventional way should be defended to reduce the risk, caused by malware though spending much more money.

Commonly, conventional way to maintain the books manually has to be applied to support the computerization because by this the librarian can effectively control the database of books without worrying about the virus in the computer. For instance, the National Library of Indonesia merely uses the management of book from professional staff to support the cybernation system. Finally, the harm, resulted when the data are attacked malware can be minimized. There is no doubt that the maintaining public library is useful to support computer system.

The computerization eases the public libraries' workers to organize library system which is more complicated. It is because this can easily classify the huge number of books effectively and efficiently. For instance, Senayan Library Management System (SLiMS) is software which can be used all librarians in Indonesia to manage the books online. Consequently, SLiMS can help the librarians to deal with the proportion of books' reference which is more and more increased.

To sum up, it is evident that the manual and computerized ways have to be applied together to hinder the possibility of virus attack in computer. In this sector, the government in each country should encourage the cybernation process as supporting manual management of public libraries and provides a certain budget to finance it.

Writing Feedback / University graduates as problem solvers, IELTS Task 2 [2]

Q: Some people believe that the aim of university education is to help graduates find better jobs while some others hold that there are wider benefits for the individual and the society. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion.

Education is one of the ways to reach success. Recently, numerous students have graduated from colleges and most of them try to obtain the prosperous job as the first expectation on their background, whilst the others consider that graduates will guarantee better life for wider societies. I personally believe that the university graduates many intellectuals who will get well-fixed job to provide the benefits for their communities.

Commonly, one of the university functions is a production of graduates who have certain abilities. It is because they are educated in many subjects by theory and practice about these. To illustrate this, the alumnus of State Islamic University of Jakarta in sociology subject can work as sociology teacher in Senior high school or as society's researcher after they have studied in that discipline for four years. Finally, it proves that the specific skills which are gained from university can increase the possibility to get better job.

However, the college can also result problem solvers in society's lives because the alumnus have been put to the test as a scholars which have knowledge in certain subject. For instance, doctor, who has graduated medical education, can solve the public-health problems. It proves that the university prepares the convergent thinker which is useful for the citizens.

To sum up, it is evident that higher education receives an academic degree for community who tackle the trouble in societies and has better job. In this case, the government should improve the quality of college in order that the graduates are more compatible.

Writing Feedback / I personally believe that governments should prioritize the public services rather than art sectors [2]

Q: Many countries spend a lot of money in art. Some people think investment in art is necessary, but others say money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Artwork is one of the measurements about the progress of a civilization. Consequently, numerous governments spend their budget to the improvement of art besides public service sectors. Some people argue that government should focus only in public services because this policy directly affects the quality of people' lives. In this case, I personally believe that it is better for the government to finance public services first before spending national budget in art.

Commonly, the improvement of public services drives to high quality of life, because the citizens can fulfill their basic needs. For example, in Singapore the government gives priority to finance hospital and school and it plays an important role to help people to be healthier and more intelligent. Consequently, their citizens are more wealth and have higher life expectancy than other countries.

On the other hand, the countries have to dispense the national income to the art sector. It is because the artworks and artists are needed by inhabitants as the entertainment. For instance, maintenance of Taman Ismail Marzuki theatre in Indonesia is required extra attention from the Indonesia government in order that the artists and artworks do not demolish by the sophisticated era.

To sum up, I personally believe that government in each country should prioritize the public services rather than art sector.

Writing Feedback / Healthcare, lack of money, school for kids - the percentage of problems facing by immigrants; IELTS1 [6]

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The bar chart reveals the percentage of problems, facing by immigrants, in three different groups based on the age. Overall, it is obviously seen that the majority of people, who decide living abroad, has to overcome the problems of healthcare and finances. Meanwhile, finding a school for the children merely becomes trouble for a small proportion people.

According to the data, more than a third of immigrants aged 35-54 has to classify healthcare trouble, while classifying of finances and determining schools for children are faced by less than a third and almost a fifth of people respectively. In addition, roughly 35% of elder immigrants (people over 55) feel difficult to sort out medical facilities, though it has quarrel five percent with sorting out finances. Interestingly, a very small number of older people must manage the education of children and it has the greatest gap with other problems.

On the other hand, classifying finances becomes the greatest trouble approximately 34 percent in the younger generations (people aged 18-34). It has the lowest gap as separating healthcare by two percent even though only 6% of immigrants in this group experiences difficulty to find an education institution for their children.

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Writing Feedback / It is evident that the parents and teachers have an essential key to manage the children's lifestyle [3]

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Q: Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In this globalization era, the young generation has to face the unhealthy lifestyle. In this case, the parents and teachers have a responsibility to maintain their children's lives. I personally agree with this argument and this essay will explain why the parents and teachers have an important role to keep the young generation's health.

The parents and the teachers are of an authority to educate the children about the healthy lifestyle. It is because they spend much time with the children, in the house and the school. To illustrate this, the parents can prepare the healthy food and try to habituate some exercises to the children in home and it can also be applied by schools by providing healthy canteen without fast food as well as socialization about healthy lifestyle. Finally, children can understand how crucial this matter. I think that the parents and teachers' role improve the children habits.

On the other hand, the wider societies, government, mass media, and surrounding have to support the children's good lifestyle by providing better environment. The reason why this should be done is the children can easily imitate the worse behavior from their environment though their family and school have educated the healthy lifestyle. For instance, the consumption of massive fast food can make the children want to follow it. Consequently, the pattern which has been thought parents and teachers becomes useless.

To sum up, it is evident that the parents and teachers have an essential key to manage the children's lifestyle. In my opinion, good environment should also support their roles as the good role model about healthy lives.

Writing Feedback / Number of graduated students hired as English and French teachers in Ontario City [2]

A breakdown of the percentage of teacher's recruitment in Ontario City according to year of graduation from 2001 to 2007 is illustrated by the line graph. Overall, it is obviously seen that students who got a job in teaching French-language had an upward trend. Meanwhile, the trend of English language teachers was slight upward with some fluctuations.

According to the data, both English and French language teachers had a similar proportion. In 2001, the percentage of English and French language teachers' recruitment started at roughly 70, but these trends declined to 58% and 53% respectively in the next year.

Interestingly, in the following year, these categories experienced difference trends. In 2003, the alteration of English teachers' point fell by 18%, whereas that of French rose by 15%. 2003 to 2005 witnessed slight rises of both teachers' languages by roughly three per cent. In addition, the decrease of English teachers tend continued to the lowest percentage at the end of the period. However, the percentage of French teachers' recruitment dropped in 2006, but it merely had a high proportion and rose again to 74% in 2007.

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Writing Feedback / Four crucial components of the wind turbine and how this machinery works in the optimum places [2]

A breakdown of a wind-turbine design and three different locations to be placed is illustrated in the diagrams. Overall, it is obviously seen that the first diagram highlights the construction of the wind turbine, consisting of four crucial components, whereas the second picture reveals how the wind turbine work in the optimum places.

Turning to the first picture, component which becomes most important part of the wind turbine is blades made by fiberglass or wood. In addition, a wind sensor acts to control speed and direction of the blades. A generator also has role as a power producer, resulting 1.5 megawatts of electricity. Therefore, other components are a steel tower and a computer to maintain the system and receive information from the sensor.

Behind the turbine structure, there are three places where the turbine can produce maximum energy. First, the turbine can be built by the sea with landscape position, secondly in the domestic location which can produce 100 kilowatts, and also the top of the hills which surprisingly becomes the most optimum location.

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Writing Feedback / A survey representing the people who are happy in the US (IELTS Task 1) [2]

The breakdown of a survey representing the people who are happy in the United States of America is illustrated by the bar chart. This survey is measured in percentages. Overall, the citizens who are married are happier than unmarried dwellers. It is also obvious that having a child has no significant impact on happiness of the family.

According to the first chart, the majority of couples feel happy with their lives. It is shown by more than two fifths of the 18-29 age groups which are satisfied. In addition, 44 percent of the 30-49 and 65 and over age groups is felicity with their lives, while only 40 % of citizens also have same feeling. However, this trend is different from the unmarried people who tend unhappy in three groups of age, whereas there are 34% of older people feeling satisfied.

Nevertheless, 44 % of married couples, having children under 18 is happy and then forty-one and forty-three percent of citizens, having children 18+ and no children respectively have been felicity with their condition.

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Writing Feedback / A breakdown of the education levels of Bulgarian citizens who went to live overseas in 2002-2008 [2]

Q: The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006, and 2008.

A breakdown of the education levels of Bulgarian citizens who want to go and live overseas in 2002, 2006, and 2008 is illustrated by the presented bar chart. Overall, it is obviously seen that among three levels, including (higher education, secondary education, and primary and lower education), the secondary education students tended to leave their nation, while the others saw low figure over six years.

According to the chart, in 2002, the rate of people with secondary education level stood at two-thirds and became the highest data. This trend declined slightly in the following four and six year to 61 % and 59 % respectively. In addition, at the beginning of the period, the higher education started at 17 percent and in the next four year experienced a marginal rise of three percent. Interestingly, 2008 witnessed a dramatic two-time decrease to nine percent in the end of the period.

However, the proportion of primary and lower education was eight teen per cent in 2002. Even though in 2008, the dramatic rise occurred up to reach 32 %, though this percentage was merely a half as many as the secondary education.

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Writing Feedback / A recent study in 1997 and 2006 representing the communication skills in work (IELTS Task 1) [3]

The breakdown of a recent study in 1997 and 2006 representing the communication skills are crucial at occupation is compared in the table. This survey is measured in percentages. Two types of communication in which the certain skills are needed are classified into the external and internal sectors. Overall, it is obviously seen that dealing with people and listening carefully to peers are the most significant factors that should be considered either 1997 or 2006.

According to the data in 1997, three-fifths of employees considered that they had to have the external capability to deal with people in their occupations, while 24 percent of employees had to selling a product or service. In addition, for internal interaction skills, there was 38 % of workers thought that listened their colleagues as the most important skill, though only seven per cent believed making speech and presentation as the crucial thing.

In the following nine years, two-thirds of employees thought that they had to be able to deal with people. 41 % and 39 percent also believed that they had to have knowledge of particular product as well as advising or caring for costumers respectively. Therefore almost a quarter considered listening carefully to colleagues as the most essential skill.

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Writing Feedback / Surveys representing the employees' relations with their supervisor and co-worker IELTS Task 1 [3]

The breakdown of a comparison of two surveys representing the employees' relations with their supervisor and co-workers from 2005 to 2009 is illustrated by the pie charts. This survey is measured in percentages. Overall, it is obviously seen that the most significant results in the charts show that the workers have 'very good' relationship with both partners.

According to the first chart, just over three fifths of occupants had 'very good' relation with their supervisor in 2005, and this trend changed better by 3% of increase. Although in the same year 26 % of workers, who had 'good' interaction, fell to 22 % in the next four years. In addition, a very small number of proportion and alteration occurred towards fair as well as poor relationship.

Turning to the next chart, 63 % of officers also had 'very good' relation with co-workers and it experienced increase to seven in ten. 2005 also saw that there was good relationship which was owned by 28 % of employees and then it declined of three percent in the end of period.

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Writing Feedback / The heat losing process occurs because the air always infiltrates into and out of the house; IELTS [2]

Q: The diagram below shows how heat is lost and energy wasted in a house because of air getting into and out of the house.

Summarise the information by reporting the main features and make comparisons where appropriate.

A breakdown of how air circulates in a house and it causes waste of energy thanks to heat losses is illustrated in presented picture. Overall, it is obviously seen that the heat is lost from a room via several equipment on plafond or ceiling. In any case, the heat is transmitted through some areas of rooms.

According to the diagram, the heat losing process occurs because the air always infiltrates into and out the house. Air leaking transmits into the first floor of the building through a dryer bent, window, and outdoor faucet. In addition, in the second floor, the air enters through the window and door, whereas a bathroom electrical outlet and kitchen fan vent add the air infiltration.

Furthermore, heat air releases out home through the ceiling. In the kitchen and bathroom, the air transmits via the recessed lights and fan vents. Next, it also leaks out through the attic hath in the living room.

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Writing Feedback / Starting a business, instead of trying to gain a job in an occupation (IELTS Task 2) [4]

Q: Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization.
Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

The huge number of unemployments is one of the crucial problems which have to be faced by numerous countries. In this case, many people think that everybody should have entrepreneur spirit to start a business, instead of trying to gain a job in an occupation. I personally believe that starting to be the entrepreneur has much more benefits to them rather than the drawbacks.

In fact, entrepreneurs have to face the huge risk that their own businesses can experience default anytime. It is because the world economic crisis can suddenly come and disturb the stabilization of their business as well as own company. For instance, 1998 witnessed global crisis and caused many private companies in Indonesia bankrupt. Finally, numerous entrepreneurs must let their profit and asset of their own company lost. Thus, I think that they have to overcome the possibility if their companies collapse into bankrupt.

On the other hand, the entrepreneurs are the people who are free to do something in their companies. It is because they do not work to other people. To illustrate this, the owner of shop can manage the time and income of their shop. Consequently, the entrepreneurs can be more creative to operate their own companies. There is no doubt that independency of entrepreneurs also support the government programs to deal with the number of jobless.

To sum up, it is evident that beginning to create the own business has more pros rather than cons. The successful businessman should encourage societies to start their own business and the government should support the spirit as entrepreneurs by financial aid.